Photoslash
| Published on Creepypasta.com | March 2009 |
|---|---|
| Length | 379 words · about 2 minutes to read |
| Story level | Micro |
| Reader rating | 4.2/10 from 322 votes |
| Category | Deaths, Murders, and Disappearances |
Sean’s house was covered from head to toe in family photographs. Some from family retreats to Ireland, others showing lost family relatives. Most of these photographs would include Sean in them, so it was only natural that he would look at them from time to time. However, one day he noticed something rather strange about the pictures: His mother seemed to have a red face in all of the photos. Rather shocked by this, he immediately ran downstairs to ask if anyone had done something to the pictures. They all answered no; even his mother, whom was quite worried. Later that day Sean’s mother went to the hospital due to horrific 3rd degree burns caused by a grill catching fire for an unknown reason.
Sean’s father decided to stay at the hospital that night and thought it best to send Sean home with his big brother Thomas and little sister Maria. As Sean walked into the house he caught glance of the family photograph in which he noticed the change to his mother’s face, and found that Maria was not in the picture.
He ran upstairs to her bedroom only to find that she was nowhere to be seen. Alarmed by these strange events Sean called the police. Sean informed them that his sister had been kidnapped and that someone was in his house, possibly vandalising his family’s belongings. The phone immediately went dead, and as Sean went to put the phone down he caught a glimpse of an animal in the corner of his eye. He rushed out of the safety of his room to go and find the beast, but what he found was far worse.
The mangled bodies of his family lie in the corridor in front of his room, their faces frozen in a state that almost makes him vomit. And then it struck him. All the photographs had been removed from the walls, except for one which was a picture of Sean, with his face scribbled out.
The next day his two best friends went to visit him, because he was not answering his phone and was not at school all week. As they arrived, they noticed that the door had been left open. So they let themselves in, and were never seen again.
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the ending was too rushed.
Why aren’t any pastas here ever rated more than two or three stars?
plagiarism pasta is fail
@L: looool, you’re right. That and kinda.. that boy from The Omen who takes that picture of that dude where there’s a black line over his throat and then he gets his head chopped off?
If you ask me, it’s a knock-off of “Say Cheese and Die” from the Goosebumps series. :/ Not really all that creepy. I give it a 5/10.
Euhh… no.
The beginning was great, and I liked the idea with the pictures, but then it lost it’s well, everything.
Not only did the plot disintegrate, but it went back & forth from past tense, to present. There were a helluva lot of loop holes in it also, like Ellie mentioned.
Hotaru… you do know that this entire site is a 4chan meme, right? So of course it reads like something from 4chan, because it probably is…
“The next day his two best friends went to visit him, because he was not answering his phone and was not at school all week.”
He was only dead for a day, not a whole week.
Didn’t really like this pasta.
It started off pretty good, but again, unseen mass murder (especially when sudden) just kills any horror story, whether on text or on a movie.
The concept could have been worked much more better.
D:
I didn’t like it twards the end.
It went from really good to terriable. I wish the story would give more information about the incidents…
reminds me of R.L. Stine’s “Say Cheese and Die” good, but it was not very original.
Agree with general consensus, great idea bad execution. Should have went different path.
Also, last comment! woooo :D
The ending wasn’t good.
Meh.
So-so.
“…and were never seen again.”?
Please.
Are we letting ten-year-olds on the site now?
Someone take a writing class and save us. I’ve seen posts on 4chan better than this.
It just seems too flat, fast, and unexplained.
One of the worst pastas I’ve read.
Felt like every line was throwing a cliche at me.
I think I’ve read a simmilar old copypasta in this site.
The ending could definitely be changed to something better. Never seen again is just too blunt and unoriginal.
But I do, indeed, like the rest. Nice work, whoever you are.
The concept was really good, but the execution…not so impressive. Too many things going on, whats with the beast? What’s with the scribbled face? and the friends?
Didn’t like it.
“He would look at them from time to time” understatement
Pretty cool and kind of creepy.
It reminds me of the Pasta about the wierd cat like creature that stalked you and listened to you opening your door so that it could create a key to kill you in your house.
Ugh, this pasta moved far too fast and the altered photograph theme has been overdone. And what the fuck was up with the “animal?” The outrageous amount of cliches really brought down the quality of this level. The pictures, the sequential destruction of the family, the phone being cut, the unidentifiable creature. And the ending blew. All of his family members were assembled outside of his room? How the hell did his mom suddenly get from the hospital to his house? I thought his sister was kidnapped? And seriously, the rather ominous grill fire seems a bit unrelated to the family being mutilated. L2 creepypasta.
…Really?
Concept was okay, but the mixed tense towards the end was off-putting. The style is almost childish, though that might be deliberate, but doesn’t particularly do it for me.
Also, “Head to toe” descriptive of a house doesn’t work.
Overall… interesting at least, and reworked has potential for awesome.
I didn’t like it that much.
Kinda lame
It had a nice tension throughout the middle, but the ending needs some work.
It was promising, but ended rather abruptly.