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Jeff the Killer

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Estimated reading time — 23 minutes

Jeff the Killer Origins and History

Jeff The Killer

You wake at 3AM. Disturbed by some subtle shifting sound within the room, just on the edge of hearing. Propping up on one arm you survey the room looking for some source for the noise, hoping beyond hope that you won’t find one. At first, your hopes are raised, everything seems to be silent, everything seems to be still. But it isn’t. 

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From behind the long concealing drape of the curtain a voice, with flickering serpentine hiss whispers

“Go to sleep…”. Suddenly, you know what’s about to happen and exactly who is waiting to meet you.

As recognisable and widely known as he is feared, Jeff the Killer, the eponymous villain of numerous stories littering the internet is one of the best known and most widely referenced Creepypasta characters to have emerged from the shadowy corners of the web over the past  few decades.

But exactly who or what is this infamous denizen of the darkness? Where did the character come from, how has it evolved and from which horrific pit of hell or the internet did ‘that’ haunting image emerge? 

Overview and Synopsis at a Glance

Firstly, for those unfamiliar with the character ‘Jeff the Killler’  the most widely known Creepypasta on this character can be found here. The story is usually linked to a version of this image in which the character is shown to be noseless, with bleached white skin, a leering permanent grin and lank black hair. 

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For those wanting a quick overview, the story of Jeff Killer goes something like this:

At thirteen years old Jeff  ( Jeffery Alan Woods or Jeff C. Hodek depending upon who you ask, but more on that later) moves with his parents and brother Lui to a new town. Here, Jeff and his sibling encounter three bullies and are threatened with knives. 

Jeff beats these bullies badly, with Lui taking the blame for the assault and being carted off by the ever reliable police. Guilt ridden and depressed at having let Lui take the blame for his actions, Jeff’s day gets even worse when he meets the bullies again and is horribly burnt in an attack with alcohol and bleach. 

This burning results in Jeff being permanently disfigured, his skin bleached white,  physically whilst his mind ‘snaps’. 

Upon being discharged for some reason (his doctors apparently attributing Jeff’s insane behaviour to the painkillers he is taking) Jeff arrives home and proceeds to make a bad situation worse by purposely mutilating his already disfigured face, cutting a permanent smile into his mouth and cheeks and burning of his eyelids so that he can always see his face. 

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Jeff then goes on to kill both his parents and his brother Lui, meeting him with the instruction ‘Go to sleep’ before stabbing him and disappearing on a wider and less discriminating killing spree, which it would seem, continues to this day. 

Jeff The Killer Appearance and Origins

According to the Creepypasta explanations Jeff’s fixed grin is due to scarring he inflicted upon himself, his eyes stare widely because he burnt off his own eyelids and his skin is lilly white as a result of having been horribly burnt by bullies with a combination of alcohol and bleach.

The ‘photograph’ that accompanies the many Jeff the Killer stories and which looks like a cross between Micheal Jackson and a demented dolphin,  is widely known not only from the many derivative creepypastas using the character but die to its widespread use in screamer videos alongside Jeff’s famous catchphrase ‘Go to sleep’. However, it seems that the details of exactly how Jeff ended up with his hideous appearance corresponding as they do to this image, were retrofitted, the rationales being written to match the image, rather than the other way around…

Jeff Photos and Folklore

As with many creepypasta characters there seems to have been an ekphrastic element to Jeff the Killer’s Creation. What the hell does ekphrastic mean? Well, basically it means ‘based on or inspired by a work of art’. 

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Now, whilst most wouldn’t look at the image of Jeff the killer and regard it as ‘art’ it is commonly agreed the image upon which the story of Jeff the Killer is based actually predates the words making up his story, meaning that the creators began with the creepy image and went from there. The story was written to fit the picture,

Therefore to really get a handle on the the origins of Jeff the Killer it is first necessary to divide the investigation into two parts. First, we need to look at the origin of the image of Jeff that accompanied the original story, not to mention the many derivative stories and memes that have evolved from it and then look at where the story that grew out of the image came from.

Interestingly, the original ‘Jeff the Killer’ image and its origin has developed a mythology all of its own, with various competing theories and bogus explanations being put forward. Let’s have a go at unpicking them.

The first noted appearance of the famous image is from way back in 2005 on pya.cc a Japanese message board. 

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The image later appeared in a Japanese Youtube video NNN臨時放送”, a clip identified by some as scary film project, in which names and ages of future victims are listed. The video was uploaded  in August of 2007  and features a fleeting glimpse of the Jeff the Killer image which can be seen on screen at the 4 minutes eleven seconds mark followed by the words ‘good night’ which may be an early incarnation of, (or the inspiration for) the famous ‘Go to Sleep’ catchphrase with which Jeff is associated. 

That this video without a backstory or explanation existed before the story or even the name ‘Jeff the Killer’ surfaced seems to confirm that it was indeed the image that came first.  The  association of the image with the name ‘Jeff the Killer’ or any related title came in 2008 when a user on the forum Newgrounds uploaded the image using the name Killerjeff with the somewhat dubious claim that the image was a self portrait depicting him.

 Shortly following this first association of the photograph with the name, the first incarnation of anything resembling an actual  story for Jeff (and featuring the now famous image) was a video uploaded by Sesseur on October third 2008, with some sources claiming Sesseur and the previous Newgrounds uploader ‘Killerjeff’ to be the same person.

This original video which notably contained music by Pixies (which may have been the reason that the video was eventually removed) has been claimed by its creator as the original Jeff the Killer origin story and indeed does predate the more well known Creepypasta version of the tale.

Additionally it is worth noting that Sesseur ( consequently cited by most sources as Jeff’s creator)  has been critical of the details given in later incarnations of the story, insisting, presumably in reference to his original conception of the character, that bullies were not involved in the accident that led to Jeff’s  altered appearance, but rather that he slipped on some soap whilst carrying acid he intended to use to clean the drains in his bathroom. Sesseur has also pointed out in his version Jeff does not kill his parents and brother and even has different real name ( Jeff C. Hodek rather than Jeff Wood).

The later Creepypasta incarnations of Jeff The Killer, upon which the above synopsis is based, also have a somewhat convoluted history. 

Despite being very popular, the original version uploaded in 2011 was derided by many as being weakly told and of low quality with many insisting that the story did not meet the quality assurance standards of the site. 

It was eventually moved from creepypasta to a sister site dedicated to badly written Creepypastas. However, owing to the popularity of the character this removal  prompted many users to simply  reupload the story. In an attempt to placate these fans and to establish a ‘better’ version of Jeff’s story a competition was launched in 2015 to create a ‘re-make’. The winning story,  which exists in an uncut longer version and a shorter version (edited to  fit the constraints of the competitions word limit)  was written by K Banning Kellum is the version with which most people today are familiar. 

Jeff The Killer Creepypasta Story

Excerpt from a local newspaper: OMINOUS UNKNOWN KILLER IS STILL AT LARGE.

After weeks of unexplained murders, the ominous unknown killer is still on the rise. After little evidence has been found, a young boy states that he survived one of the killer’s attacks and bravely tells his story.

“I had a bad dream and I woke up in the middle of the night,” says the boy, “I saw that for some reason the window was open, even though I remember it being closed before I went to bed. I got up and shut it once more. Afterwards, I simply crawled under my covers and tried to get back to sleep. That’s when I had a strange feeling, like someone was watching me.

I looked up and nearly jumped out of my bed. There, in the little ray of light, illuminating from between my curtains, were a pair of two eyes. These weren’t regular eyes; they were dark, ominous eyes. They were bordered in black and… just plain out terrified me. That’s when I saw his mouth. A long, horrendous smile that made every hair on my body stand up. The figure stood there, watching me. Finally, after what seemed like forever, he said it. A simple phrase, but said in a way only a mad man could speak.

“He said, ‘Go To Sleep.’ I let out a scream, that’s what sent him at me. He pulled up a knife; aiming at my heart. He jumped on top of my bed. I fought him back; I kicked, I punched, I rolled around, trying to knock him off me. That’s when my dad busted in. The man threw the knife, it went into my dad’s shoulder. The man probably would’ve finished him off, if one of the neighbors hadn’t alerted the police.

“They drove into the parking lot and ran towards the door. The man turned and ran down the hallway. I heard a smash, like glass breaking. As I came out of my room, I saw the window that was pointing towards the back of my house was broken. I looked out it to see him vanish into the distance. I can tell you one thing, I will never forget that face. Those cold, evil eyes, and that psychotic smile. They will never leave my head.”

Police are still on the look for this man. If you see anyone that fits the description in this story, please contact your local police department.

Jeff and his family had just moved into a new neighborhood. His dad had gotten a promotion at work, and they thought it would be best to live in one of those “fancy” neighborhoods. Jeff and his brother Liu couldn’t complain though. A new, better house. What was not to love? As they were getting unpacked, one of their neighbors came by.

“Hello,” she said, “I’m Barbara; I live across the street from you. Well, I just wanted to introduce my self and to introduce my son.” She turns around and calls her son over. “Billy, these are our new neighbors.” Billy said hi and ran back to play in his yard.

“Well,” said Jeff’s mom, “I’m Margaret, and this is my husband Peter, and my two sons, Jeff and Liu.” They each introduced themselves, and then Barbara invited them to her son’s birthday. Jeff and his brother were about to object when their mother said that they would love to. When Jeff and his family are done packing, Jeff went up to his mom.

“Mom, why would you invite us to some kid’s party? If you haven’t noticed, I’m not some dumb kid.”

“Jeff,” said his mother, “We just moved here; we should show that we want to spend time with our neighbors. Now, we’re going to that party, and that’s final.” Jeff started to talk, but stopped himself, knowing that he couldn’t do anything. Whenever his mom said something, it was final. He walked up to his room and plopped down on his bed. He sat there looking at his ceiling when suddenly, he got a weird feeling. Not so much pain, but… a weird feeling. He dismissed it as just some random feeling. He heard his mother call him down to get his stuff, and he walked down to get it.

The next day, Jeff walked downstairs to get breakfast and got ready for school. As he sat there, eating his breakfast, he once again got that feeling. This time it was stronger. It gave him a slight tugging pain, but he once again dismissed it. As he and Liu finished breakfast, they walked down to the bus stop. They sat there waiting for the bus, and then, all of a sudden, some kid on a skateboard jumped over them, only inches above their laps. They both jumped back in surprise. “Hey, what the hell?”

The kid landed and turned back to them. He kicked his skateboard up and caught it with his hands. The kid seems to be about twelve; one year younger than Jeff. He wears an Aeropostale shirt and ripped blue jeans.

“Well, well, well. It looks like we got some new meat.” Suddenly, two other kids appeared. One was super skinny and the other was huge. “Well, since you’re new here, I’d like to introduce ourselves, over there is Keith.” Jeff and Liu looked over to the skinny kid. He had a dopey face that you would expect a sidekick to have. “And he’s Troy.” They looked over at the fat kid. Talk about a tub of lard. This kid looked like he hadn’t exercised since he was crawling.

“And I,” said the first kid, “am Randy. Now, for all the kids in this neighborhood, there is a small price for bus fare, if you catch my drift.” Liu stood up, ready to punch the lights out of the kid’s eyes when one of his friends pulled a knife on him. “Tsk, tsk, tsk, I had hoped you would be more cooperative, but it seems we must do this the hard way.” The kid walked up to Liu and took his wallet out of his pocket. Jeff got that feeling again. Now, it was truly strong; a burning sensation. He stood up, but Liu gestured him to sit down. Jeff ignored him and walked up to the kid.

“Listen here you little punk, give back my bro’s wallet or else.” Randy put the wallet in his pocket and pulled out his own knife.

“Oh? And what will you do?” Just as he finished the sentence, Jeff popped the kid in the nose. As Randy reached for his face, Jeff grabbed the kid’s wrist and broke it. Randy screamed and Jeff grabbed the knife from his hand. Troy and Keith rushed Jeff, but Jeff was too quick. He threw Randy to the ground. Keith lashed out at him, but Jeff ducked and stabbed him in the arm. Keith dropped his knife and fell to the ground screaming. Troy rushed him too, but Jeff didn’t even need the knife. He just punched Troy straight in the stomach and Troy went down. As he fell, he puked all over. Liu could do nothing but look in amazement at Jeff.

“Jeff how’d you?” was all he said. They saw the bus coming and knew they’d be blamed for the whole thing. So they started running as fast as they could. As they ran, they looked back and saw the bus driver rushing over to Randy and the others. As Jeff and Liu made it to school, they didn’t dare tell what happened. All they did was sit and listen. Liu just thought of that as his brother beating up a few kids, but Jeff knew it was more. It was something, scary. As he got that feeling he felt how powerful it was, the urge to just, hurt someone.

He didn’t like how it sounded, but he couldn’t help feeling happy. He felt that strange feeling go away, and stay away for the entire day of school. Even as he walked home due to the whole thing near the bus stop, and how now he probably wouldn’t be taking the bus anymore, he felt happy. When he got home his parents asked him how his day was, and he said, in a somewhat ominous voice, “It was a wonderful day.” Next morning, he heard a knock at his front door. He walked down to find two police officers at the door, his mother looking back at him with an angry look.

“Jeff, these officers tell me that you attacked three kids. That it wasn’t regular fighting, and that they were stabbed. Stabbed, son!” Jeff’s gaze fell to the floor, showing his mother that it was true.

“Mom, they were the ones who pulled the knives on me and Liu.”

“Son,” said one of the cops,” We found three kids, two stabbed, one having a bruise on his stomach, and we have witnesses proving that you fled the scene. Now, what does that tell us?” Jeff knew it was no use. He could say him and Liu had been attacked, but then there was no proof it was not them who attacked first. They couldn’t say that they weren’t fleeing, because truth be told they were. So Jeff couldn’t defend himself or Liu.

“Son, call down your brother.” Jeff couldn’t do it since it was he who beat up all the kids.

“Sir, it…it was me. I was the one who beat up the kids. Liu tried to hold me back, but he couldn’t stop me.” The cop looked at his partner and they both nod.

“Well, kid, looks like a year in juvie…”

“Wait!” says Liu. They all looked up to see him holding a knife. The officers pulled their guns and locked them on Liu.

“It was me, I beat up those little punks. Have the marks to prove it.” He lifted up his sleeves to reveal cuts and bruises, as if he was in a struggle.

“Son, just put the knife down,” said the officer. Liu held up the knife and dropped it to the ground. He put his hands up and walked over to the cops.

“No, Liu, it was me! I did it!” Jeff had tears running down his face.

“Huh, poor bro. Trying to take the blame for what I did. Well, take me away.” The police led Liu out to the patrol car.

“Liu, tell them it was me! Tell them! I was the one who beat up those kids!” Jeff’s mother put her hands on his shoulders.

“Jeff please, you don’t have to lie. We know it’s Liu, you can stop.” Jeff watched helplessly as the cop car speeds off with Liu inside. A few minutes later Jeff’s dad pulled into the driveway, seeing Jeff’s face and knowing something was wrong.

“Son, son what is it?” Jeff couldn’t answer. His vocal cords were strained from crying. Instead, Jeff’s mother walked his father inside to break the bad news to him as Jeff wept in the driveway. After an hour or so Jeff walked back into the house, seeing that his parents were both shocked, sad, and disappointed. He couldn’t look at them. He couldn’t see how they thought of Liu when it was his fault. He just went to sleep, trying to get the whole thing off his mind. Two days went by, with no word from Liu at JDC. No friends to hang out with. Nothing but sadness and guilt. That is until Saturday, when Jeff is woken up by his mother, with a happy, sunshiny face.

“Jeff, it’s the day,” she said as she opened up the curtains and let light flood into his room.

“What? What’s today?” asked Jeff as he stirs awake.

“Why, it’s Billy’s party.” He was now fully awake.

“Mom, you’re joking, right? You don’t expect me to go to some kid’s party after…” There was a long pause.

“Jeff, we both know what happened. I think this party could be the thing that brightens up the past days. Now, get dressed.” Jeff’s mother walked out of the room and downstairs to get ready herself. He fought himself to get up. He picked out a random shirt and pair of jeans and walked downstairs. He saw his mother and father all dressed up; his mother in a dress and his father in a suit. He thought, why they would ever wear such fancy clothes to a kid’s party?

“Son, is that all your going to wear?” said Jeff’s mom.

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“Better than wearing too much,” he said. His mother pushed down the feeling to yell at him and hid it with a smile.

“Now Jeff, we may be over-dressed, but this is how you go if you want to make an impression.” said his father. Jeff grunted and went back up to his room.

“I don’t have any fancy clothes!” he yelled downstairs.

“Just pick out something.” called his mother. He looked around in his closet for what he would call fancy. He found a pair of black dress pants he had for special occasions and an undershirt. He couldn’t find a shirt to go with it though. He looked around and found only striped and patterned shirts. None of which go with dress pants. Finally, he found a white hoodie and put it on.

“You’re wearing that?” they both said. His mother looked at her watch. “Oh, no time to change. Let’s just go.” She said as she herded Jeff and his father out the door. They crossed the street over to Barbara and Billy’s house. They knocked on the door and at it appeared that Barbara, just like his parents, way over-dressed. As they walked inside all Jeff could see were adults, no kids.

“The kids are out in the yard. Jeff, how about you go and meet some of them?” said Barbara.

Jeff walked outside to a yard full of kids. They were running around in weird cowboy costumes and shooting each other with plastic guns. He might as well be standing in a Toys R Us. Suddenly a kid came up to him and handed him a toy gun and hat.

“Hey. Wanna pway?” he said.

“Ah, no kid. I’m way too old for this stuff.” The kid looked at him with that weird puppy-dog face.

“Pwease?” said the kid. “Fine,” said Jeff. He put on the hat and started to pretend shoot at the kids. At first, he thought it was totally ridiculous, but then he started to actually have fun. It might not have been super cool, but it was the first time he had done something that took his mind off of Liu. So he played with the kids for a while, until he heard a noise. A weird rolling noise. Then it hit him. Randy, Troy, and Keith all jumped over the fence on their skateboards. Jeff dropped the fake gun and ripped off the hat. Randy looked at Jeff with a burning hatred.

“Hello, Jeff, is it?” he said. “We have some unfinished business.” Jeff saw his bruised nose.” I think we’re even. I beat the crap out of you, and you get my brother sent to JDC.”

Randy got an angry look in his eyes. “Oh no, I don’t go for even, I go for winning. You may have kicked our asses that one day, but not today.” As he said that Randy rushed at Jeff. They both fell to the ground. Randy punched Jeff in the nose, and Jeff grabbed him by the ears and head-butted him. Jeff pushed Randy off of him and both rose to their feet. Kids were screaming and parents were running out of the house. Troy and Keith both pulled guns out of their pockets.

“No one interrupts or guts will fly!” they said. Randy pulled a knife on Jeff and stabbed it into his shoulder.

Jeff screamed and fell to his knees. Randy started kicking him in the face. After three kicks Jeff grabs his foot and twists it, causing Randy to fall to the ground. Jeff stood up and walked towards the back door. Troy grabbed him.

“Need some help?” He picks Jeff up by the back of the collar and throws him through the patio door. As Jeff tries to stand he is kicked down to the ground. Randy repeatedly starts kicking Jeff, until he starts to cough up blood.

“Come on Jeff, fight me!” He picks Jeff up and throws him into the kitchen. Randy sees a bottle of vodka on the counter and smashes the glass over Jeff’s head.

“Fight!” He throws Jeff back into the living room.

“Come on Jeff, look at me!” Jeff glances up, his face riddled with blood. “I was the one who got your brother sent to JDC! And now you’re just gonna sit here and let him rot in there for a whole year! You should be ashamed!” Jeff starts to get up.

“Oh, finally! you stand and fight!” Jeff is now to his feet, blood and vodka on his face. Once again he gets that strange feeling, the one in which he hasn’t felt for a while. “Finally. He’s up!” says Randy as he runs at Jeff. That’s when it happens. Something inside Jeff snaps. His psyche is destroyed, all rational thinking is gone, all he can do is kill. He grabs Randy and pile drives him to the ground. He gets on top of him and punches him straight in the heart. The punch causes Randy’s heart to stop. As Randy gasps for breath. Jeff hammers down on him. Punch after punch, blood gushes from Randy’s body, until he takes one final breath, and dies.

Everyone is looking at Jeff now. The parents, the crying kids, even Troy and Keith. Although they easily break from their gaze and point their guns at Jeff. Jeff sees the guns trained on him and runs for the stairs. As he runs Troy and Keith let out fire on him, each shot missing. Jeff runs up the stairs. He hears Troy and Keith follow up behind. As they let out their final rounds of bullets Jeff ducks into the bathroom. He grabs the towel rack and rips it off the wall. Troy and Keith race in, knives ready.

Troy swings his knife at Jeff, who backs away and bangs the towel rack into Troy’s face. Troy goes down hard and now all that’s left is Keith. He is more agile than Troy though, and ducks when Jeff swings the towel rack. He dropped the knife and grabbed Jeff by the neck. He pushed him into the wall. A thing of bleach fell down on top of him from the top shelf. It burnt both of them and they both started to scream. Jeff wiped his eyes as best as he could. He pulled back the towel rack and swung it straight into Keith’s head. As he lay there, bleeding to death, he let out an ominous smile.

“What’s so funny?” asked Jeff. Keith pulled out a lighter and switched it on. “What’s funny,” he said, “Is that you’re covered in bleach and alcohol.” Jeff’s eyes widened as Keith threw the lighter at him. As soon as the flame made contact with him, the flames ignited the alcohol in the vodka. While the alcohol burned him, the bleach bleached his skin. Jeff let out a terrible screech as he caught on fire. He tried to roll out the fire but it was no use, the alcohol had made him a walking inferno. He ran down the hall and fell down the stairs. Everybody started screaming as they saw Jeff, now a man on fire, drop to the ground, nearly dead. The last thing Jeff saw was his mother and the other parents trying to extinguish the flame. That’s when he passed out.

When Jeff woke he had a cast wrapped around his face. He couldn’t see anything, but he felt a cast on his shoulder, and stitches all over his body. He tried to stand up, but he realized that there was some tube in his arm, and when he tried to get up it fell out, and a nurse rushed in.

“I don’t think you can get out of bed just yet,” she said as she put him back in his bed and re-inserted the tube. Jeff sat there, with no vision, no idea of what his surroundings were. Finally, after hours, he heard his mother.

“Honey, are you okay?” she asked. Jeff couldn’t answer though, his face was covered, and he was unable to speak. “Oh honey, I have great news. After all the witnesses told the police that Randy confessed of trying to attack you, they decided to let Liu go.” This made Jeff almost bolt up, stopping halfway, remembering the tube coming out of his arm. “He’ll be out by tomorrow, and then you two will be able to be together again.”

Jeff’s mother hugs Jeff and says her goodbyes. The next couple of weeks were those where Jeff was visited by his family. Then came the day where his bandages were to be removed. His family members were all there to see it, what he would look like. As the doctors unwrapped the bandages from Jeff’s face everyone was on the edge of their seats. They waited until the last bandage holding the cover over his face was almost removed.

“Let’s hope for the best,” said the doctor. He quickly pulls the cloth; letting the rest fall from Jeff’s face.

Jeff’s mother screams at the sight of his face. Liu and Jeff’s dad stare awe-struck at his face.

“What? What happened to my face?” Jeff said. He rushed out of bed and ran to the bathroom. He looked in the mirror and saw the cause of the distress. His face. It…it’s horrible. His lips were burnt to a deep shade of red. His face was turned into a pure white color, and his hair singed from brown to black. He slowly put his hand to his face. It had a sort of leathery feel to it now. He looked back at his family then back at the mirror.

“Jeff,” said Liu, “It’s not that bad….”

“Not that bad?” said Jeff,” It’s perfect!” His family was equally surprised. Jeff started laughing uncontrollably His parents noticed that his left eye and hand were twitching.

“Uh… Jeff, are you okay?”

“Okay? I’ve never felt more happy! Ha, ha, ha, ha, ha, haaaaaa, look at me! This face goes perfectly with me!” He couldn’t stop laughing. He stroked his face feeling it. Looking at it in the mirror. What caused this? Well, you may recall that when Jeff was fighting Randy something in his mind, his sanity, snapped. Now he was left as a crazy killing machine, that is, his parents didn’t know.

“Doctor,” said Jeff’s mom, “Is my son… alright, you know. In the head?”

“Oh yes, this behavior is typical for patients that have taken very large amounts of pain killers. If his behavior doesn’t change in a few weeks, bring him back here, and we’ll give him a psychological test.”

“Oh, thank you, doctor.” Jeff’s mother went over to Jeff. “Jeff, sweetie, it’s time to go.”

Jeff looks away from the mirror, his face still formed into a crazy smile. “Kay mommy, ha, ha, haaaaaaaaaaaa!” his mother took him by the shoulder and took him to get his clothes.

“This is what came in,” said the lady at the desk. Jeff’s mom looked down to see the black dress pants and white hoodie her son wore. Now they were clean of blood and now stitched together. Jeff’s mother led him to his room and made him put his clothes on. Then they left, not knowing that this was their final day of life.

Later that night, Jeff’s mother woke to a sound coming from the bathroom. It sounded as if someone was crying. She slowly walked over to see what it was. When she looked into the bathroom she saw a horrendous sight. Jeff had taken a knife and carved a smile into his cheeks.

“Jeff, what are you doing?” asked his mother.

Jeff looked over to his mother. “I couldn’t keep smiling, mommy. It hurt after awhile. Now I can smile forever.” Jeff’s mother noticed his eyes, ringed in black.

“Jeff, your eyes!” His eyes were seemingly never closing.

“I couldn’t see my face. I got tired and my eyes started to close. I burned out the eyelids so I could forever see myself; my new face.” Jeff’s mother slowly started to back away, seeing that her son was going insane. “What’s wrong mommy? Aren’t I beautiful?

“Yes son,” she said, “Yes you are. L-let me go get daddy, so he can see your face.” She ran into the room and shook Jeff’s dad from his sleep. “Honey, get the gun we…..” She stopped as she saw Jeff in the doorway, holding a knife.

“Mommy, you lied.” That’s the last thing they hear as Jeff rushes them with the knife, gutting both of them.

His brother Liu woke up, startled by some noise. He didn’t hear anything else, so he just shut his eyes and tried to go back to sleep. As he was on the border of slumber, he got the strangest feeling that someone was watching him. He looked up, before Jeff’s hand covered his mouth. He slowly raised the knife ready to plunge it into Liu. Liu thrashed here and there trying to escape Jeff’s grip.

“Shhhhhhh,” Jeff said. “Just go to sleep.”

Remember to check out the Jeff The Killer Reboot of this creepypasta classic.

Dark Images and Darker Stories

Whilst the above explains the backstory of the Creepypasta tale itself, the question remains, where did the image come from in the first place? Here is where fact and fiction begin to blur with even the photograph’s origins being obscured by half truth and myth. 

For some time it was believed the photograph was a photoshop manipulated image of a girl identified as Katy Robinson. The story went that this young girl, who was considered by some internet trolls to be overweight, was eventually driven to suicide by online bullies. Her image was then photoshopped and used as the basis for the most widely known Jeff the Killer image. 

It’s a tragic story which though it exists entirely separately from the Jeff the Killer Creepypasta lends Jeff’s image of the bleach skinned wide eyed smiler, an even more sinister aspect and a legitimate reason to find the image unnerving, depicting as it did not only a deceased girl, but a victim of the same species of bullying that the fictional character endures. Unfortunately, this story also turns out to be nonsense. 

The Katy Robinson story and the entire idea that the Jeff the Killer image used the photograph of a deceased girl as its basis has been debunked. The girl featured in the photograph alleged to belong to the unfortunate  Ms Robinson is actually a girl named Heather White, who has confirmed that the images alleged to have been manipulated have nothing to do with the famous image of Jeff the Killer. 

Another theory which has gained traction in recent years is that the original photograph was of an unnamed stickam girl. This girl, who is alleged to have been crying for attention, was said to have used images in which the flash from the camera or monitor illuminated and overexposed her face giving it the bleached out white appearance familiar from the Jeff Killer images. 

Her image was subsequently screenshotted and adopted by another anonymous user who then posed as her using her photograph to ask “Am I pretty?” 

Responding to what seemed to be naked self promotion or hunting for sympathy clicks, viewers of the image gradually added to a thread in which they manipulated the image, so that it gradually became more and more distorted. These photoshopped images are believed by some to have evolved into the original Jeff the Killer photographs. Well that’s one theory at least and currently the one that seems to be given the most creedence. 

Other theories as to the image’s origin are that the root image is in fact simply a manipulated photograph of Jeff The Killer’s original poster Susseur wearing a latex mask. This is actually what he claimed, though the fact that the image has been identified in videos and other sources a number of years before he posted his story makes this claim seem somewhat unreliable. 

As is the theory that the image is a manipulation of the ‘overly attached girlfriend’ meme because of the similarly wide eyed and smiling pose. This theory can be debunked almost immediately owing to the fact that the meme in question (based on an image of Laina Morris) features an image from 2012, meaning that it came into existence long after the earliest known version of the Jeff image and indeed the original Jeff the Killer story.  

So far the farthest back anyone has been able to trace the image is to a Japanese site called pya.cc where two versions of the image were found, both faces are noseless, though one has added contour shading around the eyes and the area where the nose would be. It has also been noted that the two images have different eye shapes, with one looking more like the eyes from a stuffed toy or cartoon character.

Other Possible Jeff Influences. 

Though they seem to be less widely acknowledged a number of other pop culture characters have clearly influenced the evolution of Jeff the Killer 

Most prominent amongst these is the DC villain and Batman arch nemesis The Joker. Not only does this character share the clown-like combination of a white face and maniacal smile, but in Tim Burton’s version  (as played by Jack Nicholson) his face is disfigured by an accident with chemicals, a trope which is also present in various versions of the Jeff the Killer story.

In Christopher Nolan’s version meanwhile, the noticeably scarred Joker (played by Heath Ledger) is thought to have deliberately mutilated his own face in order to create the fixed grin, telling various conflicting stories throughout the film as to how he was scarred in the first place. Again this is a  trope employed in the Jeff the Killer stories. 

Both The Joker  and Jeff can trace their origins further back to the early black and white classic The Man who Laughed in which the tragic hero has a fixed maniacal smile throughout. 

Even less discussed is the obvious influence of Japanese manga (and later movie) character Ichi the Killer who not only shares virtually the same name as Jeff but has a fondness for knives and homicide and also sports a badly scarred mouth twisted into a permanent smile.  

Why is Jeff The Killer So Popular?

Credit for the Jeff the Killer character: Sesseur (DeviantArt)

Publisher’s Note: According to the character’s original creator, Sesseur, he is not the author of the tale featured here, and claims this popular version of the Jeff story is “fan-fiction” written by a follower of his earlier work, which has since been lost. For the original story of Jeffrey Hodek, per the vision of the character’s original creator, you can visit Sesseur’s DeviantArt post here.

Remember to check out the Jeff The Killer Reboot of this creepypasta classic.

More classic Creepypasta stories can be found here:
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Ben Drowned
Jeff The Killer vs Slenderman

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2,651 thoughts on “Jeff the Killer”

  1. I hear a lot of complaining I think your just jealous that you can’t tell a story better than this guy/girl whatever there gender is the point is start thinking about the good side of the story which is most of it and stop thinking about the bad side

  2. I remember hearing this for the first time! I fell in love with the story, and I read every once in a while.

  3. So two kids have a brawl to the death in front of a neighborhood party being held hostage by two kids with guns… yeah. Let’s not forget they entered the party by jumping the over the fence on their skateboards because this kind of stuff happens.

  4. Okay to all of those who are dissing this story i just want to say that just because you don’t like it doesn’t mean others don’t. The writer worked hard on this. SO don’t make them feel bad just because of you opinion. Just because you have an opinion doesn’t mean that you have to share it.

    1. Oh, so is that why you are sharing your opinion about people not sharing their opinion? In my opinion, critisism is nothing but healty

    1. no the photo is scary but through the story you start to feel sorry so after you read it all the picture just looks sad

  5. You know whats funny? I hear a lot of complaining, but let’s not forget, Jeff is one of the most popular pastas of all time. That’s impressive for having a “Crap” story.

  6. You broke the biggest rule of writing: show, don’t tell. “What caused this? Well, you may recall that when Jeff was fighting Randy something in his mind, his sanity, snapped. Now he was left as a crazy killing machine, that is, his parents didn’t know.”
    Just awful. You could let these things play out through events, and then the audience could tell for themselves that Jeff lost it.

  7. This is the worst story I have ever read in my entire life. I do not understand how this got so populair. I get scared easily, like some of the stories here make me cry bc they r that scary. But this, this was hilarious, ridiculous, a pathetic attempt at writing horror. I do not understand how anyone can find this even the slightest bit creepy. This is crap.

  8. i was listening to a jeff the killer theme song while reading this listen to painted smile and read this totally fucking creepy

  9. The fact that he was immediately sent to juvie is very unrealistic. The cops don’t decide who goes to juvie, the court does

  10. I actually like that this child at the beginning used such advanced language, contrary to popular beliefs, children actually do use such vocabulary.
    I am proof.

  11. the picture at the end freaked me out even though the story was not that very scary . but i liked the story. it was fun to read

  12. I honestly feel bad for Jeff. it wasn’t his fault and if someone had stepped in to help him he would have been fine. I know it’s just a story but still.

  13. Why isin’t This on a book so I can buy it? I mean this story is perfect I have a fictional crush on Jeff and it’s enough to scare someone. I also have images to kill someone me it actually makes me happy but I wouldn’t❤️

  14. I’ve FINALLY gotten around to reading this story, and I can’t believe the praise this shit gets.
    You know that horrible, disfiguring burns don’t make people’s hair, skin, and lips magically transform into emo versions of the Joker, right?
    The lips and hair are the first thing to go. About the only thing that would have changed color would be the skin, and it sure as fuck wouldn’t turn white. It’d go from a sickly brown, almost like cooking meat, to horribly blistered, and maybe one day something that resembles flesh again, albeit stretched taught over the effected areas depending on skin grafts and any other necessary reconstructive surgery.

    This is so stupid I can’t even begin to describe the potential YEARS of physical therapy, mental testing, and rehabilitation someone would require before being released back into the world.

    I’m assuming you probably saw that one scene in “Batman”.
    You know. The “give me the mirror” scene everyone under the age of like 25 just pretends they remember, and figured it would make a cool story to have someone get horribly disfigured and become insane.
    Only that story already existed. For the better part of a century at this point…and it wasn’t even original then.

    Not that any of this matters. Even if this comment gets posted, criticism isn’t something these “authors” take very well and I’m sure people half my fucking age will tell me what a hipster I am for hating the saddest excuse for a new horror icon.
    An icon and origin that wouldn’t be worse unless you just decided Jeff was the fucking demon lovechild of Freddy Kreuger and the Joker.
    Who knows! Freddy could have appeared as a woman in the Jokers dream, fucked Joker, and got dream pregnant!

    Sorry. I just have honestly no clue what I’m supposed to think here.

  15. i am sorry it was a very good pasta and all, but every picture i find of Jeff has no nose but yet they never say anything about him doing anything to his nose

  16. Oh my gosh.
    How is this number 1 on the website?
    This is so trash…
    I feel like a 4th grader wrote this.

    Please someone explain how this is number one.
    It’s just sad.

  17. That was absolutely AMAZING! Anonymous, the use of such brilliant words that were used would be a dream, if in reality. The storyline as well. Thanks for the link Sir Spooks!

  18. The ending was the only cool part, the rest was drawn out,unrealistic and overly reminiscent of every super human based movie ever created. More action/thriller than creepy if you ask me.

  19. I have an idea of another Jeff the Killer story. After a few years, when he killed his family and burned down his house, he’s been going throughout the country, killing anybody he sees doing something “horrible”. However, one day, painful memories of his past life start flooding back in his mind and he starts to realize what he’s been doing after his first murders.

  20. Does anyone friends with jeff and slender man because i
    am i really have proof on my phone they come and see me at midnight so i can tell them who i want them to kill :) i miss them the have gone back to there home placec

  21. I liked the story but it didn’t really scare me. Then I scroll down to read the comment and I get the shoot scared out of me by that picture. *Heart flipping stopped*

  22. Could be a good story, but needs rewriting in my opinion. I know its supposed to be a short story, but things escalated way too quickly. In fact, this seems like the idea of a good novel, but completedly rushed to fit a short story.

  23. I am so disgusted. this story is so forced, SO CONTRIVED! I cannot believe this was loved by many people. speaking of being forced. I spotted some bad spelling. here’s an example. there was one i saw. it said Rushd, rushd… WTF. and Jeff would be dead. burning would kill you and have your skin look like Freddy Kreuger! How did he burn his eyelids without burning his eyes?? and he gets the powers of a superman. don’t give me an excuse that he is a psychopath, here, listen to this! ” You are rather born a psychopath, or become one after traumatic events. “. Jesus. this is worse than everyday people.

  24. Luka Skočibušić

    I actuallly felt sorry for Jeff while reading the story and listening to “Sweet dreams are made of screams”. Check it out on youtube.

  25. Anonymous_Critique

    This story is unrealistic.

    A 12-year-old with a knife or a gun? They just happened to have the weapons on them? Most of all, 12-year-old with a gun. Where would they get that? Nobody has common sense! Cliches are used way to much.

  26. BOI it’s night for me and I’m reading this like what am I doing god damn it how am I gonna sleep now and the picture oh yeah I covered them cause HELL NAH BISH

  27. GardenOfNightmares

    I’m trying to figure out why the hell this bag grammar short story is so popular. It’s not scary at all. And also kinda bad written. BUT, good character development. Good idea, bad way of portraying it. Honestly, I think Jeff’s a bit overrated

  28. For the most part i can agree. But jeff did not however do that to Liu. And what about their sister Rika? No ackowledge ments of her either. In fact, liu changed dramatically from juvy, he himself was like jeff when he came home. And Rika was like jeff from witnising her brother be dragged away by police and the other kill people.

  29. I love jeff he is the best and I love Nina they seriously need to set a date I mean there made for each other.

  30. Other than the obviously too big of words for a small child in the beginning of the story, I still enjoyed this. I had heard of Jeff the killer but didn’t know anything about it. Now that I’ve read your story, I love it. I might even have nightmares tonight, but whether I do or not I enjoyed this thank you for this.

  31. I love this story but I wish I could draw jeff it’s the same problem I have with the joker I can’t draw the smile

  32. A lot of people have said that they were terrified by the picture of Jeff’s face when they got to the end of the picture, I thought it was Uncanny Valley, creepy, but not horrifying.

    I have seen real pictures of burnt victims. Both from accidents, and from girls who have been attacked with acid for perceived crime against honour, nothing is more horrifying.

  33. It is unfortunate to me that people can’t be somewhat nice — or at least not super rude — with their criticism.

    Anyways, this was an overall solid story.

  34. I was actually listening to ‘Painted Smile’ while reading this for the first time. Truly, this is one of my favorites.

  35. Wait, so a rich neighborhood has children going around mugging/assaulting people in front of adults? What!?

    (Also sorry for how incredibly late I am to comment on this piece of crap.)

  36. I loved this story! I have never heard of anything like it, however the gore (if you would call it), and the wording was very descriptive and made me feel like i was in this horrifying tale! Regardless I enjoyed the story nonetheless, and I rate this a 10/10!

  37. Wow, you put in every single detail great. It takes a sick-minded genius to describe every moment of the fight, with enough creativity to make seemingly pointless violent choices so crucial to the story, capture every moment of Jeff’s sick and twisted mind. But not only did you capture every sick and insane moment with perfection, you left enough for the imagination to make this story move to a new level of true terror.

  38. Geometry Dash Utopia

    So that’s how. He went nuts. He was insane…because of the nurse. The nurse gave them too much medicine. Now he is a mad killer out of loose. Everyone Run. We have a psychopathic criminal out there…possibly watching you in your sleep.

  39. My favorite thing is the 12-year-old, whom you might remember was just doused in bleach and struck in the head with a towel rack, bleeding to death, smiling and saying “(…) you’re covered in bleach and alcohol.”, followed by the ceremonial throwing of the lighter. This kid is clearly more badass than Jeff, or Rambo, Marv or fucking John Mcclane put together for that matter.

    This story should be called “Keith, the Bad Motherfucker (and some guy named Jeff).”

  40. I can officially say this is one of my favorite pastas.The ending was surprising and not something you would predict.He fought for his brother and then became the murderer of his brother.

  41. How is this story so popular??? Not trying to bash the writer, but I wasn’t impressed at all. I understand a lot of stories out there get a little out there… but this took “absurd” and ran with it. There is a much more detailed process in indicting children for juvenile prison that would involve courts and lots of people (not the police FYI). This whole story was completely bizarre, no parents would be as passive as the parents in this story. Never in the history of man have a few kids “jumped” into a yard party with their skate boards (including a very fat one…) and begin fighting a kid and get to the point of breaking vodka bottles on each others heads while the parents just stood and watched. I’m imagining these kids all being around 10 years of age or so and they start pulling out guns and the parents just watch? This story was a waste of time honestly. I can’t believe it has such a high rating, are a bunch of 12 year olds rating this or what???

    1. Depends on what you mean by normally and where the damage occurs. One very famous case that is relevant is Phineas Gage (other people have also had nails and other things though their skulls, including stabbing injuries). He had a railroad iron driven through his skull during an accident. He survived and lived independently for a while, but had (according to reports) major personality changes and impulse control issues. So yes, someone can survive and function independently depending on where the injury occurs. Also depending on the location/severity of the injury, they may have anything from no significant issues to personality/behavior changes to functional impairments to death.

  42. “Honey Jeff’s gone insane!” “Should we take him to a mental hospital?” “Nah let’s just kill him” #mlgmom

  43. Wassil Sharifzad

    Omg I read the whole thing and one question what happens to lui ? Anyway I read the STORIE in my room wit lights off and doors locked and I’m now scared

  44. Bob the Friendly Titan

    The tug that he has in the beginning and middle of the story, does that mean he was always ment to be a pycopath because the first “pull” came before he hurt any one. Jeff was…relaxed when he first felt the itch to kill but what was the trigger? Not getting what he want? It was very unreallistic but I think it gave it more humor, its when u giggle at a horror story that u know its good.

  45. Eh…honestly not one to go on my top ten list. Very unrealistic and frankly unbelievable. For me the whole frighr factor comes from a touch of realism; being able to believe that the events maybe, just maybe, could have really happened (ignoring the fact that obviously everything on the site is fiction). This story didn’t hold that for me. Sorry but this one is a loss in my books.

  46. After re-visiting this pasta, I realized how AWFUL it really is. Several reasons:

    1: He has no motivation to kill his parents. “He’s insane” is not an excuse. Because not everyone who is insane just randomly kills people.

    2. This work is a swirling storm of angry flaming cliches.

    3. The picture is kinda crappy.

    4. Nothing about it is really scary. The story loses all traction when a young kid preforms expert level break-ins and murders. Once I locked myself out of my house on accident. I could not break into my own house with anything I tried.

    5. The police would easily be able to take this kid down. They have GUNS.

    Anyway, because of those reasons… I find this story to be COMPLETELY RIDICULOUS!

  47. i thought it was interesting and the fact that i have not read it before hand made it a creepy felling in my spine the creepypasta it self was ok but everyone already knows the infamous jeff the killer and what is face looks like but not knowing how it looks like that its diffrent which is what i like and i thought that i already knew who jeff was but now i have a new site on him.

  48. Honestly, if I were to say anything is that this is the least scary creepypasta. I know where the people got the image from as well, I hope that these people are proud. ._.

  49. In the picture it looks as if he has no nose, but it never said anything about his nose. What it burned off or what happened? I also like this story a lot!

  50. Well… This turned out to become standard level. Still an good creppypasta. But also Jeff is immortal.

  51. That picture makes Jeff look terrible. I loathe that picture but I think I’m in love with the anime version of Jeff the killer. Makes him looks intriguing and mysterious like a serial killer should be and not some creature from another reality as the picture above looks like

    1. “Intriguing and mysterious like a serial killer should be”? Brief reality check. Let’s all take a moment to remember that actual serial killers are scary and dangerous. Because they kill people. Lots of people. They are cruel and violent. That is the definition of a serial killer. You may now return to your normally scheduled bizarre romanticization of a fictional character.

      1. I’m not talking about real serial killers, plus a mojority of people who read creepy pasta’s or watch anime are free to romantacise with the characters so it wouldn’t be ‘Bizarre’?

        1. Glad you understand the difference, but there are so many misconceptions about serial killers out there (and in this community) that I like to spread accurate information whenever possible. But, remember, just because a lot of people do something (I’d argue the majority, but will give you many), that does not make it any less bizarre! It is still a strange feature of certain humans’ natures. Cheers!

        2. I guess it’s websites like this where most people can come to express their hidden desires no matter how bizarre it may be. It would be a place where no one could easily judge them because there may be others who share the same views

  52. Blissful Terror

    I really enjoyed this pasta although I found the fight scenes, especially the second one, to be highly unbelievable. I can’t imagine a fight between teenagers with young children watching without any adult intervening. Great story though.

  53. When I see the picture suddenly appear, I jump, but, when I look at it closely, I laugh at how shoddy the picture is zD

  54. In a house filled with adults, that fight scene went a little too balls to the wall lol. Sounds like a story written by a kid, bc an adult would never have written that scene that way. Kids with guns, getting revenge to Save their egos, at a young child’s bday party, while all the parents did what? Hid in the other room out of fear of some tween juvenile delinquents? Ridiculous

  55. Honestly. This is a pasta that is praised by most. But it kind of… sucks. Poorly written, totally unlogical behaviour by the adults and so on and so on. Seriously, since when do cops take a child to juvenile detention simply by a confession, and leave the second suspect at home? Arresting, interrogations, eventually courthearings, a sentencing. Kind of missed bits. Jeff would have been taken in to custody, interrogated, both kids would have had physical examinations. And the parents. No, this really sucks. A lot.

  56. Damian the Reaper

    i loved this story personally it inspired me to make some work of my own good job and keep at it ive read all the spin offs of this as well absolutely amazing

  57. Kayleigh Hawley

    This is absolutely terrible ? the lack of research is dumbfounding. I have never read a short story that was so horrendous, I couldn’t even make it to the end. Oh my god, I figures it would be good considering I’m still hearing about it years later, but no it’s not.

  58. How can he pronounce consonants without any lips?! Never mind, that’s the least of this story’s problems.

  59. Ohhh boy I completely died when he wrote “Troy and Keith both pulled guns out of their pockets” I was like “how the fuck can they just pull out guns like that! wtf man!” and the thing is, how are adults ain’t doing shit are they just standing there like nothing is happening, like there just a coulpe of fucking kids man wtf! I don’t know man I know I’m a couple years late but how is this pasta still up why didn’t he just rewrote I mean im pretty interested in this man come on.

  60. .Ryan.The.Human.

    This pasta is bad, but Jeff is the reason this got popular, no on cares about the story.

    im giving this pasta an -3/10

  61. Just a terribly told story. There were whole paragraphs that did nothing to further the story along. The dialogue was unrealistic. The characters actions were unrealistic. Even the part where his hair was singed black was unrealistic. In what world does hair burn but remain intact? This seems like it was written by a tween.

  62. I’ve been hearing about this story for ages and finally decided to give it a go. Its very well written for a non published author (which I’ve been attempting to achieve ) and I think more credit should be given to this author. The story is great, yes there are some plot flaws and characters need slight enhancing, such as the young boy using such adult vocabulary when describing his assailant to police.

    Remember ppl, plot base and character enhancement is tricky with the word limit in here.

    But overall, for an amateur author i was thoroughly impressed. I read 1000s of short horror story anthologies by published authors and this is waaaaayyyy better than a great deal of those.
    From what I can tell, this story has become a legand on the net.

    So…to the author Sesseur, ignore ALL NEGATIVE COMMENTS in this discussion and please keep writing.

    Im a 40 yr old Literature teacher and i fully believe you’re a beginning YET, very talented writer. I’d certainly like to read more of your writing. In a situation where word limit is vital, such on this site, you did remarkably well to develop the main character. Given time and a longer word limit, this story could become even more popular than it is.
    WELL DONE !! And KEEP WRITING Sesseur.
    Remember self publication is quite easy on Amazon OR send your stories into online short story based horror anthology magazines. I think you’ve got what it takes.

    1. This has got to be the most head-scratching comment I’ve ever seen on this site. I simply can’t imagine any true literature teacher making some of the grammatical/spelling mistakes that you’ve made, and that’s before your glowing praise of this POS is factored in. Anyway, where did you get the idea that there’s a word limit on this site? There’s not.

      1. I’m afraid to tell you, but there IS a word limit to some extent on lists included on this site.
        Also, considering that this is merely a comment section on the internet, I do not;
        A. Really put that much effort into ensuring my comments be perfectly written using precise language, grammer etc. I wasn’t aware that comments here by considered not need by considered at an academic thesis level.
        B. A complete strangers opinion on what I do or do not enjoy reading on this site, is of absolutely no consequence to me.
        Nor do I give one care in the world what you, (again, a perfect stranger) think of my literary prowess.
        This is an Internet comment section. If you think I or many others, give much thought or a rats arse, to the content of my comments, you take life way too seriously. Lighten the f**k up and allow others to simply enjoy the banter we post in here. These comments will not be reviewed by those who actually buy and publish my short stories. Those publishers seem quite happy with my use of language. Happy enough to pay me to continue to send them my work. I doubt a comment section, where enjoyable debate and fun banter occurs, will be make or break or break for myself as a published author.
        Seriously…lighten up and enjoy these lists rather than thrust your negative opinions upon those who simply don’t give a flying f**k on what random trolls think of them :D

  63. The idea is good but the plot is so dumb xD first of all, they’re all 12. Also, it makes no how he became a ninja or went insane. Someone needs to do a rewrite

  64. The context of this is very unrealistic. Although the events in the story are ridiculous alone, where you are mainly let down is by the fact you’ve attempted to write in the style of a newspaper. If the newspaper article writer knew the story in this much detail, then surely the police would too, because the article writer would get his information from what has been discovered, most of which probably by the police, because the police investigate murders. If not, then it’s extremely likely the police were informed, and by knowing this much information, Jeff would’ve been found and jailed or killed. The information itself highly consists of dialogue, so it would be impossible for anyone to know every single event in the story anyway (particularly at the end where everyone in his house was killed by him, who was witnessing and knew everything that was said?) Although I understand it would make a boring ending because Jeff still isn’t “out there”, it would wrap the story up and make it more realistic. You could’ve ended on the same cliffhanger but more vaguely with less dialogue provided in the style of a legitimate newspaper article.

    Also, the young boy at the beginning makes this excerpt unrealistic, If a young boy had gone through this trauma, he would require years of therapy before being able to talk about what happened without some sort of panic attack, hallucination or other mentally unstable occurrence (considering his dad got stabbed in particular, but Jeff himself would’ve also traumatized him hugely). Especially since he uses such complex vocabulary when he is talking – someone of such a young age wouldn’t know those words or their meaning. The actual experience itself is also impossible, because a young boy would not be able to fight back from a viscous killer, The length of the newspaper was also unrealistic, but this is a creepy-pasta so I don’t really see much of an issue with it’s length.

    Overall, even though the idea of a serial killer is overrated, you could’ve pulled this off if it was more realistic and better or more appropriate vocabulary was used. You were let down by your execution and writing style.

  65. Gaby Estabrooks

    Good storyline, obviously Jeff the killer has gotten pretty famous. It was a good plot but one of my biggest pet peeves is the tense changes. Some of the grammar could use a little editing, and it was slightly unrealistic. Other than that, pretty good.

  66. I just wanna know how in in hell the kids know how to use guns or maybe more how a few 13 year olds have fucking guns!!!

  67. Am I the only one here who thinks the author needs to take lessons in writing? In my opinion, this story was awful. There are actions and words that don’t fall into character, there are loose ends in the story that don’t make sense. On a lighter note, it is intricate, however, a bag of garbage can be as well.

  68. Omg so freaky and if he was my son I would probably run out the house into the car TO GO TO FRANCE but that could be a bad idea cause he could sneak into the car and kill me and even if he did try I would grab my shotgun and shoot him lol

  69. Absolutely horrendous. How did this get so popular. An incompetent, poorly written story over shadowing other better stories.

  70. The main problem I have with this Pasta is that none of it makes any sense. Like, at all. Yes, CreepyPastas are unrealistic, but why on earth would kids coincidentally have knives? Why on EARTH would parents threaten to kill people, at a party (that’s meant to be family friendly), over scuffle? Why would Keith go to the absolute extremes of throwing bleach and alcohol on Jeff? How could Jeff suddenly turn insane, just because Keith burnt his face? It does not make sense.

    And one more question; why is it portrayed that Jeff has inhuman superpowers? That he suddenly knows how to fight like Liam Neeson? It’s just a pathetic Pasta. It really is. Fangirls will tear me a new one, but I don’t care. I am speaking my opinion on this overrated Pasta.

  71. 8.7 out of 10

    I want you all to just absorb that…

    8 point 7…

    Jesus

    That’s actually more disturbing than anything in this story

  72. Cheyenne Harris (cheytownUSA)

    I agree! This made me sit on the edge of my sit through the whole thing,thanks to this story,I now know the background of Jeff.

  73. Heard about Jeff the Killer from all over the internet. I’m disappointed, is this fanmade or is this the original piece?

  74. Natalija Pajevic

    it was actually really goos, except of the start were the little boy uses such big adjectives… but the story literally mad me cry… thats why i HATE bullies

  75. I don’t get it. Isn’t he gonna go blind without his eyelids? And how is he gonna eat or drink? Wouldn’t the food just fall out of his cheeks? Unless he’s some kinda wizard or something…

  76. This is a kinda decent story. The plot is good. But scary?? No. This has nothing to do with the writer, but it’s sad this is suppose to the scariest story on the web by readers. The concept of this story is great. I give the writer kudos for writing what could be an even greater story if re-done when the writer gets more experience and develops more creatively. Sorry, but I was expecting something as good as Stephen King or something the trumps him. I’m disappointed.

  77. The Plague Doctor

    I don’t understand this story nor how it became so popular. Fuck this story man. Nothing can fix this story unless you change the whole concept. A teen who out of nowhere and for no good reason gains SUPAH POWAHS! Seriously. No revisions will change this story.

  78. This story is bad in so many ways, First who are the Bullies and why do they have knives? The Pasta does not explain nor give any character backstory into why these characters became the people who they’re today, not only do they unholster their knives in front of people twice but did not get arrested that’s a plot hole.

    And also what’s this “burning sensation” Jeff’s having? it just comes out of nowhere and it’s never explained.

    There are other reasons why this story is shit but i will just leave it at that if anyone wants to know more why this story is horse shit you need to read it yourself.

    3.1/10

  79. i really wonder if i can use the character (or at least get a permission) for my second book, i find this character really interesting, but want to add some paranormal additions.

  80. Shall we talk about the bearlluminati AKA Berenstein Bears and Berenstain Bears argument because the first time I saw BearenSTAIN Bears was in September 8th 2011 but most people saw it change after august 7th 2001 … also the first saying of jeff the killer was on newgrounds

  81. I have a question. How old is Jeff? I don’t think it’s verified, and I’m just curious. Most of the Creepypasta fandom seems to think he’s 17, but I got into a fight with someone on YouTube who seems to thinks he’s 14.To me, I’m stuck in the middle, because he seems like he would be, but the fandom also seems to think Toby loves waffles, and if you’ve watched Ask Ticci Toby, you’d see he doesn’t. That’s only because Toby is an OC. A very, very popular OC. But Jeff isn’t an OC, he’s just Jeff. So if any one knows, can you please tell me?

  82. I loved this so much, Jeff is my favorite creepypasta. I was listening to scary music the whole time which made me even more scared. It was mostly Halloween sounds that was named killer on the loose which reminded me of him

  83. OK this in my head makes no sense for some reason but I am reading this around 12 ish and it might be that I’m a bit tired so I’ll probably read it tomorrow morning

  84. I ENJOY Jeff the Killer! I just wish the story was better written! The concept of Jeff is really good though. He’s one of my favorites.

  85. please tell me im not the only one who doesnt find this scary at all… i mean its hard to take a story seriously with so many errors; then on top of that it just seemed like a typical psycho story. smh.

  86. I dare anyone to stare into Jeff’s eyes for a good 30 seconds. Lets see how quickly you start to shiver, and if you don’t feel a chill down your spine after 30 seconds than that is an accomplishment

  87. This was the worst creepy pasta that I have ever read! The grammar, the spelling, the plot, everything. I don’t know why this is such a famous creepy pasta because it sucked. It was hard to follow. 90% of a paragraph would be written in past tense & then the last 2 sentences would be written in present tense. I was really excited to read this one because of it’s rating & that it is one of the most talked about creepy pastas ever but it was disappointing. And seriously, don’t call me a hater because I didn’t like this creepy pasta, that’s ridiculous. I like a lot of the creepy pastas I have read but this one does not hold a flame to most that I have read. When I read, I like to read stuff that has style, that flows, that is put together nicely and has correct grammar. & I’ve seen some of you “Jeff lovers” go off on people who have a different opinion of the story, always defending the story & usually saying “it’s just a story.” Well this “just” my comment. And FYI – I do write (just not this genre) so I do know it’s hard but I also don’t just put whatever I write out there, I check it, recheck it, get an opinion or two, have others edit it & run spell/grammar check beforehand.

  88. I love this story its great I have been a fan sens 2013 can you make another and remember he needs to be even more crazy please.

  89. So Jeff punches this Randy in the chest till his heart stops beating and he dies. And when Jeff comes out of the body cast Randy has gone tI the police and confessed ? The dead guy. This pasta is shit. Badly written. Not creepy at all 0/10

  90. When the story starts, my first thought was “This might be real.” then, when i finished, it was visibly fake.
    To all the people that think he’s real, read it 50 times, then you’ll get it.
    P.S. Nice work Dylan Roberts.
    Just one mistake.
    When you burn your hair with bleach, even when its your official color, and burn it, it wont turn black.
    Just saying
    badass story
    Love et.

  91. How did this get an 8.7 rating. I just don’t understand.

    Hey fangirls! Jeff the Killer is a bad pasta! A very bad pasta!

    1. How many times did you use the word ominous in the story?
    2. What kind of kid (the boy from the interview) talks like that?
    3. He was mugged once and went insane. Wow.
    4. Not creepy.
    5. When you catch fire, you don’t turn white. Your hair doesn’t turn black. Google it.
    6. Wouldn’t he go blind? that kind of defeats the purpose…. Jeff is dumb.
    7. Why do you people fawn over him? He’s 13 years old. He’s insane. He’s fictional. Jeff could never love you people.
    8. Why did he kill his brother?
    9. Some background information on his brother would have been nice.
    10. His parents are wonderful. “Honey, get the gun….”
    11. Did anyone call the cops when the fight was taking place (the birthday)?

    Fangirls: what are you talking about? The story was posted several years ago. Jeff is older now.
    Me: I can let that one slide, but-
    Fangirls: He IS creepy.
    Me: No, not really. A three year old could-
    Fangirls: These people attempted to kill Jeff. That’s why he went insane
    Me: He went insane right after he met them! Wow, 12 year olds are SO SCARY.
    Fangirls: They could be.
    Me: Are you scared of 12 year olds?
    Fangirls: His parents were scared of him.
    Me: You didn’t answer my last question!!!

    Fangirls. Irrational. Can’t be reasoned with. If Jeff was real, he’d probably be scared of his own fangirls.

  92. whoa pretty cool story but i agree with them v but i would have liked to continue because ive seen pics showing that he regretted wht he did afterwards and he kept apologizeing cause i mean he kills his only brother who has always been there for him so pretty crazy ending.

  93. MenFearTheUnknown

    I just looked at the pic and I said “hey” in my mind and nodded at the same time. I was like what da fuck did i just do.

  94. awesome literally sent chills up my spine and my annoying little brother is freaked out (he may be a little annoying but I still love him)
    :)

  95. interesting topic. Especially for a parent. This shows the extremes of bullying and the effects if can have on the kids that are getting picked on. People don’t like talking about that, but I think this story embraces it and does rather well. I do agree some of the dialog seems unnatural, however very well done over all. 8/10 from me.

  96. the jeff the killer photo is actualy a photoshopped picture of an obese girl who killed herself cuz she was bullied on 4chan, so he made her soul live on known as something terrifying. how does anyone feel about that

  97. What I want to know is why the internet has 500 tonnes of anime-fied fan art of this character, and enough self-insert fan fictions to last a lifetime. Why is this story so popular? What makes people so drawn to Jeff? I wasn’t into CP at the time this story was originally posted, so was it just something ‘new’ at the time? Was it this bizarre new concept of story that somehow dives deep into the realm of twisted psyche? Eh..

    Excluding all possible grammar flaws, he-said-she-said or whatnot for a second, I’m taking a look at the actual story, pointing out one of my worst peeves for this: Code: PLOT DEVICE – INSANITY.
    The structure for whatever reason he actually went insane for is weak.
    We know he ‘slowly’ starts to go insane, the first hint being the “feeling” he gets when he goes up to his bedroom.. Okay. Why does he get this? This is my problem because it’s not even explained in the end. Just a random thing that happens huh..? We don’t get a backstory, possibly leading or connecting to some traumatizing event that happened in the past that could’ve triggered the “feeling” and made this more interesting? Nope! Well then, our reason?

    After a day or two at his new house, he and his bro beat up some (apparently) kid versions of every 21 jump street criminal ever, the cops come to take his bro away, his parents send him to the party, he gets beat up by the 21 jump street kids and set on fire. He’s hospitalized for a couple of weeks, aaand then.. BOOM. Instant insanity! Yay!

    Looking at this from a different POV, most people (the jeff fangirls ahem) wouldn’t necessarily CARE about fact, and reality, and REALISTIC OUTCOMES. No, they come for a juicy story and a cool character that they can somehow feel “connected” to. Ok.
    But there’s some of us who just can’t enjoy this type of story. Why? Some of my nit-pick reasons:

    *The parents have no personality and may as well be cardboard cutouts. They don’t even give a damn when their son gets taken away. It’s basically just a, “oh, well, time to get Jeff ready for the party~~”
    *The most stereotypical bad-guy-criminalized 21-jump-street ganged-up prepubescent teens carrying knives and guns around. yeahh..
    *Grown adults with children. At a children’s party. Sit there silently watching a defenseless kid get beaten up by 3 other kids with knives. And a gun…. just. stop.
    Reality things that are real:
    *When you get burned that much, they literally need to REPLACE YOUR SKIN. They don’t LEAVE the burnt skin on you because that part of your body is just welcoming all incoming infections. It won’t heal on its own. Look it up.
    *His mom makes him put on the clothes he almost died in… yeahh i bet THAT was nice.
    *Prepubescent kid with burnt skin takes on 2 adults with a knife. KiIlls them both.
    *ayeeee lez go kill muh brotha that i luv so damn much and even got in a fight for cuuuuuuuz…… ??????????????
    *Burning your eyelids off and not being able to blink – Within a day your conjunctiva would dry up and die. Your cornea would also dry up and start to shrink – leading to some serious loss of vision. Dust and grit would cloud your eye – even more vision loss. Bacteria would cause inflammation to the rest of the eye. So his eyeballs would literally get eaten away and rot.
    Unless he stops to use eyedrops every.. 20 minutes? Seriously, these skips and loopholes just destroyed all enjoyment I could’ve had for this story.

  98. Hello there,not looking for a fight or anything :3
    Being The first Cp I have read I have looked into many different things
    But I have some things to say…
    1)When did Jeff become a professional Eye Lid Burn-Offer?
    2)Shouldn’t Jeff be blind from the dust particles in his eye?
    3)His cut will most likely be infected,and he would look like a clicker from the last of us
    4)What Mother would shoot her own son?
    5)No Bullies act like that,I’ve been bullied since 1st grade and the closest I got to that was this one guy who didn’t shoot me infront of people or anything
    6)Adults would call the police and stop the fight…
    7)Fire doesn’t work like it does in the story,and his hair should be gone not singed.
    8)Newsflash,You don’t randomly get the power to beat kids,I can’t break or twist anyone’s wrist!My frienew cant,my bullied cant,and my parents can’t…
    I’m just staying a few flaws.I’m not relying to be rude but I want to give my OPIONION .-.
    Fyi That Picture Of Jeff is a Photoshop of a girl who uhh,died.Sick sick people….
    Also My Texting Skills Suuuck ;-;

  99. I still love this pasta, it’s perfect. Love jeff. I can relate to a weird feeling and suddenly becoming oblivious to everything except hurting my opposer

  100. I rate this story 3 stars out of 10. But before I get into why – I would like to start by saying that that the overall story-line for this… is not bad. And obviously Jeff the Killer is pretty huge on the internet, so I know i’m not the only one who thinks so. “A bullied kid who starts to feel strange urges to hurt people, he doesn’t understand the urges and they scare him. One day he snaps and he can no longer suppress the urges, and he kills. He deforms himself, cutting off his eyelids, carving a smile into his face because he can’t control the disturbing thoughts in his own head. The young kid turns into a killer.” It really isn’t bad. I like the idea, it’s just that the delivery of the idea could have been done much better. And i’m going to assume that you are a young writer ( around Jeff’s age), and so a lot of these mistakes are totally understandable and you just need some feedback from others so that you can improve your writing abilities :) and all the people in this comment section being super rude and saying “This story is shit!” and then not providing any sort of constructive criticism… are assholes. Ignore them. Now…

    There are a lot of issues with this story, but probably my biggest issues are the parts when Jeff gets lit on fire and doused with bleach; because science. If you were drenched in flammable fluids and were then ignited… you would not be running around for several minutes and going down the stairs. You would actually die in less than 2-3 minutes, and you would pass out long before that (after only a few seconds). Even if Jeff managed to survive – his hair would not turn black; his hair would be gone. His hair would have been burnt off pretty much instantly.

    I still don’t understand how he has turned white. If you poured bleach on yourself, it would have a similar effect to burning yourself with something hot. The skin would get itchy/painful, irritated, It would turn RED, and cause chemical burns. You would not turn white.
    I wish the author would have done some research on these things before writing/posting.

    NEXT. Pretty much everyone else has already mentioned this – but a lot of the dialogue in this story just feels very forced and unnatural. The parents calling their children “son” instead of using their names. (My parents have never once said “daughter” to me, and I don’t know of any other parents who have), When Jeff and Liu first meet the bully’s and they call them “fresh meat” – I was bullied in school and have never heard anyone say that outside of cheesy movies.

    The fight at the party when NOBODY did anything. No one called the cops, no one tried to stop it, no one even said anything. If a kid was getting hurt (especially my child), I would not be afraid of some 12 year old with a gun. Little shit probably doesn’t even know how to use that thing, let alone aim correctly and hit a moving target. (which was proven by their inability to hit Jeff after several shots – fucking fail)

    The newspaper article at the beginning – my first issue (which others have already mentioned) is the little kid who has the greatest vocabulary in the world. A child does not use words like that, someone being interviewed does not speak in such detail as “there, in the little ray of light, illuminating from between my curtains.” If you want that level of detail given, then don’t make it a newspaper interview – I would just narrate that like the rest of the story. I also would have put the article at the end of the story instead of the beginning.

  101. In a way it does help clear up SOME things, but it doesn’t even fit his character. He is somwhat bipolar and just flat out crazy. And what is with the neighbor? A neigbor dosn’t just get up one night and say “there is a killer next door, im going to call the cops” it does not work like that! I cant even express how many things are wrong with this. And who has vodka at a kids party? I mean sereasly (sp)?

  102. This is bad because why wold he were something destroyed and stitched when he has other cholthes but I like the story. Thx for the scare

  103. No problem. That really was one of the few things I’ve read on the net lately that just made me laugh. The end of that comment was so unexpected and masterfully written.

  104. i literally laughed out loud when jeff admits to starting the fight and the cops just go “welp 1 year in juvy it is!!!” like what????? WHAT?? what? ugh and not to mention them pulling guns on him, literally what the fuck, they can’t defend themselves against a small boy with a knife without guns? THEY’RE GROWN MEN!! GROWN MEN TRAINED IN HOW TO HANDLE THESE SITUATIONS, WHERES THE DANGER?! and then the mom just lets them take liu (stupid spelling) without fighting back or questioning or going down to the station with them? i know my mom would fight like HELL to defend me, but then again she’s not a horrible idiot. and where was his trial? what were his charges?

    absolutely horrible, horrible story, after the cop visit i just laughed the whole time at how ridiculous it all was.

  105. i like the story anyone who goes there being burned like that would never be the same anyone put threw something that horrific would have ptsd and they most likely have a change in personalty/character a lot of people would become insane

  106. I’ll be honest with you, if you’re going to use those already established characters, then you’re facing an uphill climb. If you search through the stories on this particular site, you’ll find that a VERY small percentage of them feature Slenderman/JTK/Freddy. Of those that you do find, half of them will be parody pastas. I don’t think those characters even make it onto Crappypasta anymore. The creation of new characters and new ideas is what gets you noticed on this site. I encourage you to try writing your story using completely original personalities. Let’s say Leon is reading a creepy book that has entirely fresh characters, then he gets sucked into that creepy world after someone grants his wish… go with that and see where your mind takes it. That said, if you’re still hellbent on writing about already overused villains, my guess is that it won’t be approved for this site unless it’s pretty much the best thing ever written. That’s not meant to be an insult, just the honest truth based on my observations over the past two years. Spinpastawiki would probably accept a story based on your original idea, btw.

  107. Nicola Marie Jackson

    Good idea! But let’s stick with the shitty badly written characters and then when they are in one place, we can send in a drone strike and save the world from Fangirls and boy who think JTK is THE last word in horror.

  108. Nicola Marie Jackson

    You have got to be shitting me? I totally thought Mr Mental McBleachface was real. You should use your deductive skills to solve crimes, Sherlock who? they will say. Proud of you xxx

  109. It’s not the first time I read this creepypasta and I really like it. After all Jeff the killer is one of my favorite creepypastas. The only thing I don’t understand is the fact that Jeff’s face lacks of nose in the picture which is super weird. other than that it is a great story.

  110. Easily the most overrated creepypasta out there. The plot has no arch; the characters have no dimension. The story is poorly executed and doesn’t grip the reader. It’s medically inaccurate, as well. Your face wouldn’t turn white, your hair would singe off instead of turning black, the ‘smile’ would get infected without treatment, and you would go blind without eyelids. The only appealing thing about this is the depiction of how someone can very easily turn into a monster. Maybe if it was developed more, it’d be better. Otherwise it’s just a half-baked cliché. 2/10

  111. Yeah, I’m sorry, but I just don’t get the hype on this story. Maybe its aimed at a younger audience, but the glaring plot holes and lack of continuity just make it borderline unreadable for me.

    If some genuinely enjoy it then I’m glad, but its a long way off the standard of a lot of the tales on here.

  112. Wow, this is really it? This is really where Jeff the killer comes from? I’m so confused, why is this famous? There’s really nothing about this that’s interesting, creative, original, scary, or fucking anything. What the fuck?

  113. This story……this isn’t a story, this is terrible self-insert fan fiction for psychopathic teenagers.

    1/10

  114. I’ve tried writing a lot of stories. I fancy myself a decent writer, but many times, the stories don’t make sense, sound ugly, or fall apart due to their flaws. So, I would never post anything like that on here, my own self, unless it was good. This really wasn’t good. It was over-simplified and silly, and the way it was put together just sounded ugly. If it’s someone’s first story, or their 50th, I’d say put the same effort into it all of it. Don’t excuse lazy writing because it’s as popular as this or because it did an ok job at freaking people out. The reason to write on here would be to create something new, cleverly written, and above all, interesting. And that is genuinely hard. But that doesn’t mean you sigh and push something mediocre out.

  115. Wait didn’t the story say that jeff killed randy before jeff was in the hospital? How would Randy have confessed to attacking jeff and lou or however you spell his name if he was dead? Lol that doesnt make sense. There are some things in the story that make no sense, but i did enjoy reading it.

  116. Still think that ‘the Jeff the killer series’ are a little better than this…less cliché more creepy and I tried to put the stories together but…I can’t.

  117. This is my favorite story Jeff the killer has always been my favorite creepy pasta and forever will be come on who with this is a very great story who would not like this story……❤

  118. The reason this is so popular is because this story is not written in a creepy way, it’s written in a way to make people feel sorry for jeff. As much as I hate this creepy pasta, I hate the fangirls even more.

  119. I resent the ten minutes I spent reading this poorly written drivel. I can never get it back and time is precious. If I should happen to die today, I will come and haunt you as punishment for depriving me of my time.

  120. BriBris_Beauty101

    I love jeff, i kinda feel bad cause the only reason this happened to him was because of jerry and btw that doctor is a sure idiot, i mean jeff saying “my face its beautiful hahahaaaaaaaaa” if that doesnt sound sicotic to u then idk what does???

  121. Didn’t jeff did something to jane too? and at school jane left a note to jeff… why didn’t you add that? i have read jane the killer’s story. Don’t go to sleep liu

  122. That totally creeped me out I was up almost all night checking the side of my bed it gave me nightmares for a whole week. Jeff is coming for me???

  123. This might have been the stupidest creepypasta i have read yet. How is this popular? The story… I’ve read fanfiction better than this. I’m sorry to be harsh, but i was hoping for more from a creepypasta that is so well loved. It wasn’t creepy. It wasn’t even believable, which is part of what makes creepypasta well… creepy. If there hadn’t been random thug children with knives and maybe some real look into mental illnesd that do cause people to do horrible things, then maybe i could have gotten behind it. But the continuity… horrible. HE WAS ON FIRE. HOW DID HE HAVE CLEAN, SEWED UP CLOTHES? I can’t believe this is popular. And the photo… just a photoshopped lookalike of Marilyn Mason. Lol. I laughed.

  124. I know it’s probably been said a hundred times over, but this pasta is so overrated. So much. The beginning of the story sounds like a fanfiction. None of the key ‘scary’ (if you could even call it that) aspects of the story are not only unrealistic, but they’re cliche, overused and over-done. The family was too unnatural, the bullies were unrealistic in the way that they were some 12 year old boys who somehow were able to have access to weapons, and they used those weapons to kill a kid in front of an entire party of adults who somehow were unable to stop them. The whole story was just so… meh. Maybe it would’ve been better if it were more about Jeff being a murderer from the beginning instead of making 90% of the story about his development as a psychotic killer. Maybe. But even then, it needs more aspects of realism.

  125. OMG, I always though “Jeff The Killer” was a really good creepypasta, it’s one of the most popular ones. But reading this is dissapointing, I mean, nothing of this is something you can believe (especially the fight on the party -full of adults-) So bad at so many levels… Just so dissapointing…

  126. It was amazing I love everything about it great word writing I’m also creepy pasta author to keep writing.?

  127. Irene Washington

    I like the story. But I’m wondering, did he become the killer that tried to kill him in the beginning? What was the connection there? I could see one but it wasn’t clear.

  128. The story of ‘Jeff’ is truly horrifying…but the plot of it was so…suspense that I couldn’t stop. Wow. Also the pic is not the right one. He does not look like that….he looks different. His face is more normal and he’s alot more….handsome (accept not really….if you get what I mean)

  129. I loved it!! Guys stop with the hate it is really thoght abot so what!! If you hate it……..GO TO SLEEP!!!

  130. I really liked this one!!! You had me caught the whole time and I constantly wanted to see what happens next!!! I like the way the characters talk, it gives a feeling that the family is a very fancy family exactly how they are supposed to be perceived!!! I love everything about it and I can’t find anything wrong with it, so I am giving it 10 stars!!! Honestly one of the best I’ve read.

  131. Jaedyn English

    I really love this story. Jeff has always been my favorite CP, and I haven’t read this in so long, it was like I’ve never read it before, and it was nice to see it again. I really love in the beginning, the young boy describing the face he saw, was as detailed as it was for a young child. All in all, I love this story, and I love Jeff, and I love CreepyPasta

  132. i still don’t get why he killed his brother, wasn’t he trying to protect/save him in the first place?

  133. Nonofurbusiness

    It’s impossible for jeff to see without he’s eyelids but he burnt them , hundred % he is blind
    Plus he cut hes lips to a wider smile like he will bleed that he will pass out this story isnt real

  134. disqus_Iu8EdYBSlH

    I’ve read many fantastic horror stories on creepypasta and reddit so naturally i’ve heard of Jeff the Killer but never got around to reading it. I finally did and I seriously don’t understand how it got so popular. I’m sorry but I thought it was poorly written.

  135. Izel Montano-cole

    When my kid starts bullying I’m gonna tell them this story and tell them it’s a true story. lol

  136. How does any of this make logical sense. Isn’t Jeff the one who wanted his brother out of JDC and then he kills him at the end. I would rate it 10/10 if it weren’t for that.

  137. shauneemarrero

    Keith and troy had guns. … went up stairs and had knives…… and Randy died. …..then confesses? I didn’t even read the rest of the story

  138. Wait… This is the highest rated pasta on the site? You’ve got to be kidding me. From beginning to end I thought this was a parody pasta, but once I read the comments I’m not so sure anymore. I mean, I literally laughed at certain spots because of how ridiculous some of it was. I just… I just don’t know anymore.

  139. The Creepypasta complainer

    You better hope that Jeff Mhannass’ Ambruillus makes this story shine a bit brighter.

  140. The Creepypasta complainer

    Lets just start by saying one thing, SONIC.EXE WAS BETTER THAN THIS CRAP!

    1.This is one of the best. For Christ sake people The Harbinger Experiment everyone, that story was incredible and you don’t pay attention to that?

    2. Jeff killed all three kids and the police didn’t do jack about that?

    3. His mum told his dad to get the fucking shotty? Really? Did they not think they should call a doctor because he might be insane?

    4. Jeff was trying to defend Liu, why the fuck did he kill him?

    5. These turds that are about 9 to 10 and they pulled out guns. Where the fuck did they get guns from?

    6. Jeff piledrives Randy to the group, who does this kid think he is, Owen Hart?

    7. Fire doesn’t dye your hair that’s like saying water makes you dry!

    8. That picture you have at the end of the story is fucking terrible, also why would Jeff take a picture of him self? #Justfinishedmurderingmyfamily

    9. Cutting your mouth, would result in it getting infected, and burning your eyelids will make you blind almost instantly, but Jeff must have been born with the gift from god.

    10. I put this at number 10 because I personally think this is seriously fucking stupid. The first ever Jeff the killer picture was actually a photoshopped picture of a girl called Katy Robinson who killed herself, after being bullied on 4chan.

    1. I agree. As I already said, I honestly though this was a parody pasta. Somebody please tell me that it is…

      I mean, punching a kid in the heart so hard it stops it? Bunch of kids with guns, throwing and pile driving each other, snapping wrists and ripping fixtures from walls…? Hilarious stuff.

  141. This story is just SO forced, and overrated, that I hardly believe anyone enjoys it. I mean, who can make sense into a boy, a NORMAL boy, randomly gets a murderous feel?!

  142. this is sooo good i also loved Jane the killer as well.This is the second time i have read this and it took me less than an hour soo good tho =^-^=

  143. What the crap is wrong with you? Why did you make such a graphic story? Get a life! and don’t spend your time writing such crap.

  144. yeah I agree no kid speaks like that but it is a horror story you know you haft to think about that to you know , just saying. And Jeff actually sounded like a good kid at the begining but “the fealling” took him over.I see your argument about the story and all the over the top things they put in the story.

  145. Asia The Magic Giraffe

    I believe this all, and its because there if proof about creepypasta, slenderman, everything

  146. CreepyPastaMan5563

    OMG that is creepy I didn’t know the story about Jeff but now I do Im friggin scared man HOLY CRAP!!!!! Im scared

  147. Nathan Kincaid

    Personally, I think that the story has a lot of potential, but was executed very poorly. The characters seem very cliché, which in and of itself wouldn’t be a problem if it hadn’t been every character. The bullies, the parents, Liu, even Jeff himself, they were undoubtedly the most stereotypical lot of characters I’ve ever encountered. Yes, kids are violent, but this takes it to an absurd height. I won’t trash the vocabulary of the kid at the beginning other than it sounds more like an author’s description, from the third person with a clear head, rather than the memoir of a young boy who was attacked late at night, and surely deeply disturbed. I don’t doubt that he knew those words, only that he could remember a traumatic event that happened only a minute or two after he woke up so vividly. My major issue with the story was the lack of grammar and mechanics. There was a boon of spelling errors, and the tense changed from sentence to sentence at times. Overall, the story was unbelievable to the point where it’s almost ridiculous. Before I get jumped on, I know that creepypasta doesn’t have to be realistic, given that it’s fiction and all, but this wasn’t a sci-fi or fantasy story; it was set in the real, modern-day world. Even fiction has to maintain a realm of believability based on the setting. I give it a 4/10, because it wasn’t an utter atrocity. I recommend that the author revise the story, improve the spelling, grammar, etc., and resubmit. I think Jeff the Killer has some serious promise, and given some TLC he could rightfully be one of the scariest and most well-known pastas out there. Additionally, to the attackers I will undoubtedly get, just as you have the right to like this pasta, praise it, and express your high opinion of it, I have the right to dislike it and address what I think needs improved. No one here has the right to curse at someone or ridicule them just because they have different opinions. This is a site for mature stories, so let’s be a mature audience, fanbase, and community, shall we?

  148. how did this ever get popular??? the author couldnt even be bothered to make a character thats apparently supposed to be mentally ill seem… actually mentally ill. they went the lazy, boring “this character just randomly went CrAzY!!!1!11!” with no type of explanation besides some weird feeling he got when some dumbass kids pick fights with him. congrats on showing absolutely no understanding on any mental illness of any kind. this thing is riddled with plot holes. everyones tone was horrible and made no sense, especially the cops who obviously put no effort into any kind of investigation, and some kids who repeatedly stole from people trying to use the bus (????) managed to skew the whole situation to the police? its complete bs and i dont even know how i got to this point. got to this point where i read one of the absolutely worst pieces of fiction ive ever had the displeasure of encountering. how am i ever supposed to be able to trust again when out of 15,683 people, enough gave a high vote for it to reach an 8.7/10

  149. really people? Really? You’re going to actually judge this story so badly that you don’t get the storyline? Jeff got a “feeling”, which probably meant that it’s not him feeling this. It’s something else. I honestly wish people would overlook any mistakes and just get to the bottom of the story. Jesus Christ. Plus, this story is now acclaimed and honorably placed in the Metaphorical Book of the Greatest Creepypastas ever created.

  150. Jeff the killer is my favorite, I liked the story to it. I didn’t get the stuff before the story but after I got it.

  151. TheFemaleSniper

    This is the worst creepypasta I’ve ever seen.

    Horrible grammar, unbelievable characters, a stupid story, and the least sense and worst logic I’ve ever seen.

    Also, you see that picture of Jeff? That’s a Photoshopped picture. Of a girl who killed herself because of bullying.

    So many people apparently love this. I don’t understand it. I don’t intend
    on ever praising Jeff the Killer on anything, there are literally no redeeming
    factors in this story. Its not scary, even. Its fucking ridiculous.

  152. meow meow kitty

    well jeffary ( his full name ) had no choice to hurt those guy because they would have ether kill jeffary and lui or would have hurt them badly so jeff did the right thing, and i have alot of respect for jeffary cuz he loves his brother so very much. and he protected lui from those mean guyz so jeffary get all of my reapect and please dont kill meh jeffary :D

  153. They would have found Liu’s wallet in Randy’s pocket proving that Jeff and Liu were the victims. Also, as a mother…I find it hard to believe that Jeff’s mother would not have put up a fight when they took Liu. Correct me, but are half of these story’s written by children? If so, props on being so young, and maybe I need to find a more mature website.

  154. “OMINOUS UNKNOWN KILLER IS STILL AT LARGE.”

    Who puts full stops on headlines? Why would use the word “Ominous” in a headline?

    “the ominous unknown killer is still on the rise.”

    Literally he was JUST described as an ominous unknown killer.

    The newspaper doesn’t mention any of the people’s names, which seems like a pretty important detail.

    “they were dark, ominous eyes.”

    We get it! He’s fucking ominous! Literally the third time that word’s been used to described him and it’s the second paragraph.

    “He pulled up a knife; aiming at my heart.”

    Semi colons don’t work like that; it would have worked if it said “he aimed it at my heart”, but you didn’t, so it doesn’t.

    “The man probably would’ve finished him off, if one of the neighbors hadn’t alerted the police.”

    Incredibly contrived, seeing as there was no way for the neighbours to notice any of this and Jeff only just turned up a minute ago anyway. Yet the police are already there!

    ““Hello,” she said, “I’m Barbara; I live across the street from you. Well, I just wanted to introduce my self and to introduce my son.” She turns around and calls her son over. “Billy, these are our new neighbors.” Billy said hi and ran back to play in his yard.”

    Exposition, exposition, exposition, rush it out ASAP.

    ” he got a weird feeling. Not so much a pain, but… a weird feeling. He dismissed it as just some random feeling.”

    Literally the worst prose ever; the word “Feeling” is used three times in as many sentences.

    ” It gave him a slight tugging pain”

    Sounds like he was in pain while having a wank.

    ” As he and Liu finished breakfast, they walked down to the bus stop.”

    No new paragraph for new location, which is just sloppy.

    ““Well, well, well. It looks like we got some new meat.””

    Terrible cliches and awful dialogue. I thought this was meant to be a well of area anyway? And if these three goons steal the kids’ money every day, where the hell is everybody else? Why has nobody grassed on them? Like, literally no kid is stupid enough not to grass on being mugged.

    “The kid walked up to Liu and took his wallet out of his pocket.”

    Which he had on him, apparently, for no goddamn reason.

    “Troy rushd him too”

    Rushd?

    ““Jeff how’d you?” that was all he said.”

    Nobody has ever spoken like that.

    “They saw the bus coming and knew they’d be blamed for the whole thing. So they started running as fast as they could.”

    Wow, this couldn’t be any more contrived. They have NO reason to run except to advanced the plot.

    “As Jeff and Liu made it to school, they didn’t dare tell what happened.”

    Made it all the way to school without the bus? Wha? Why didn’t the school do anything about the fight?

    ” It was something, scary.”

    It was, unnecessary commas.

    “in a somewhat ominous voice,”

    Why is everything he does described as ominous? Use a different word for fuck’s sake.

    “Jeff knew it was no use. He could say him and Liu had been attacked, but then there was no proof it was not them who attacked first. They couldn’t say that they weren’t fleeing, because truth be told they were. So Jeff couldn’t defend himself or Liu.”

    You know, normally I’d give this negative points for handholding, but frankly this plot device is so confusing that it doesn’t make sense anyway. Why can’t he just tell them what actually happened?

    “The cop looked at his partner and they both nod.”

    Self explanatory, really,

    “They all looked up to see him holding a knife. The officers pulled their guns and locked them on Liu.”

    Where the hell did they get that from?

    ““Jeff please, you don’t have to lie. We know it’s Liu, you can stop.” Jeff watched helplessly as the cop car speeds off with Liu inside. A few minutes later Jeff’s dad pulled into the driveway, seeing Jeff’s face and knowing something was wrong.”

    Yeah, they instantly arrest him and don’t bother even contacting the dad at all. This makes no sense.

    “Son, is that all your going to wear?” said Jeff’s mom.”

    *Sighs*

    “Randy, Troy, and Keith all jumped over the fence on their skateboards.”

    Having all magically healed from their injuries, they proceeded to magically know where Jeff was.

    “As he said that Randy rushed at Jeff.”

    Literally the third time he’s been attacked by “rushing”

    “Troy and Keith both pulled guns out of their pockets.”

    What? Where’d they get those from? Why are they murdering someone in broad daylight?

    ““No one interrupts or guts will fly!” they said. Randy pulled a knife on Jeff and stabbed it into his shoulder.”

    Terrible dialogue. Why does everybody get stabbed in the shoulder and turn out to be perfectly okay?

    ““Need some help?” He picks Jeff up by the back of the collar and throws him through the patio door. As Jeff tries to stand he is kicked down to the ground. Randy repeatedly starts kicking Jeff, until he starts to cough up blood.”

    Why are we suddenly in present tense? Why isn’t anyone else doing anything?

    ““Come on Jeff, fight me!””

    How does he know his name?

    “His psyche is destroyed, all rational thinking is gone, all he can do, is kill.”

    See, I can believe this can happen to people in the spur of the moment, but not permanently. That makes no sense.

    “Troy goes down hard”

    THAT’S WHAT SHE SAID- But seriously, he never turns up again. What, did he die in the fire or survive? We never know.

    “A thing of bleach”

    You’re not even trying at this point.

    “As he lay there, bleeding to death, he let out an ominous smile.”

    How is he bleeding to death from being smacked in the head with a towel rack? Concussion or fracture skull perhaps, but not bleeding to death. Also, fucking ominous. AGAIN.

    “While the alcohol burned him, the bleach bleached his skin.”

    Okay, the prose has somehow gotten worse.

    ““Oh yes, this behavior is typical for patients that have taken very large amounts of pain killers. If his behavior doesn’t change in a few weeks, bring him back here, and we’ll give him a psychological test.””

    I give up. This doctor is a total fucking idiot.

    ” “Honey, get the gun we…..”

    They’re awful quick to murder their son.

    “That’s the last thing they hear as Jeff rushes them with the knife, gutting both of them.”

    This pretty much sums up the whole thing. Constant changes of tense, terrible prose, people getting “rushed” AGAIN, and the level of description is so low and terrible it might as well be off screen.

    “His brother Liu woke up, startled by some noise. He didn’t hear anything else, so he just shut his eyes and tried to go back to sleep.”

    “Screams from the next room? Probably nothing, back to bed.”

    ” He slowly raised the knife ready to plunge it into Liu. Liu thrashed here and there trying to escape Jeff’s grip.”

    Literally put a hand over his mouth and now he can’t move? Makes no sense.

    Story: A convoluted mess with a lot of holes.

    Grammar: Terrible. Constant tense changes, speech marks missing, and just all around awful grammar.

    Prose: It’s basically just a running commentary of events rather than prose. It sounds awful and clunky.

    0.1/10

  155. THIS IS THE SPOOKIEST STORY EVER.

    I SAY THAT SCIENTIFICALLY. I READ THIS STORY TO A SKELETON WEARING A JACK O’LANTERN HELMET AND THE SKELETON SCREAMED SO LOUD HIS GHOST MELTED.

    I AM TYPING IN ALL CAPS BECAUSE I, MYSELF, CANNOT STOP SCREAMING AT ALL THE TERROR

  156. This was amazing. I like the way that it flicks. You know, Jeff, starting out being all normal, but then turns to be the famous Serialkiller From Milwaukee. its amazing. The real story is a bit diffrent though.. But this is way better! THUMS UP FOR YOU!!

  157. Wow, I can’t believe this has such a high rating. Is it just because of the picture? Because the weiting style is bad. Like really bad. Nobody talks that way, the scenes don’t make any sense at all or progress in any logical way. I can only assume the writer is very young and inexperienced, and doesn’t know how things work- like fights, and the legal system, and hospitals… writing…

    I see a lot of overly defensive comments, too. If you can’t handle critique, don’t post it online. Also, ‘let’s see you write a story and post it!’ is a really stupid defense. Thousands of people do that everyday without getting comments about how bad the writing is; if your work doesnt hold its own against those, that’s not the readers’ fault.

    If you do revise, please rewrite from a blank screen, don’t try to edit this one. You need a freash start. And really think about things, like why on earth the adults would let this happen, or wtf would they pull a gun and then go back to knives? I also recommend waiting at least ten years, so you know more about the word.

  158. nightmare moon

    its amazing that jeff killed his brother after liu got send to jail but it was really good to know that HE had not been killed but who was the person jeff saw as a kid?

  159. creepy emo girl

    OMG!!!!what a realy cool story! why did he killed his parents? what happened to liu? can someone awnser me?

    1. LemonLimeLord`

      he killed his parents becuase they lied about saying he was beautiful, and that they were gonna ‘put him down’ and whenever he tells someone to go to sleep, that means he is about to kill them – so u can now guess what happend to liu

  160. One of the worst pastas I’ve read… I don’t see how it’s so popular. It’s terribly written and unbelievable.

  161. jeff the killer

    why do yal care about what the little boy says? yal should care that yal might be next to go to sleep! oh and you see this photo? look at liu put him in real life vision and look for him for me ok thx now go to sleep!

  162. Seriously? This is the most popular pasta on the Internet? Fuck. You didn’t do this picture justice. I wrote better stories than this in 4th grade.

  163. Ok, here is the thing, I read a LOT of creepypasta’s, and to be honest this is literally the WORST one I have read. The beginning was descriptive, the one where the kid is describing Jeff, but then the rest is just lazy. It sounds like the writer took time at the beginning then just let it all fall down. The writer gets the first person and third person mixed up, and everything is just SO unrealistic! I mean, I know the stories here aren’t supposed to be real, but you can at least make them seem real. 12 year old kids having knifes and guns? I really dislike this story, I’m probably going to get a LOT of hate, but I don’t care, people who think the same as me need to see that there is someone who has the same mind set.

  164. I think it was a pretty good story. Not the best but it’s way better than I could do so no one to judge anything

  165. This is just my two cents worth, but I think, for the length of the story, it was a bit rushed, Perhaps if it had a slower pace to it, it would be much more enjoyable. Don’t take my opinion the wrong way, it was a very good read for me, Just a bit rushed in some parts.

  166. I’ve heard a lot about Jeff the Killer over the past couple years, and finding myself on creepypasta I was looking forward to reading what all the fuss was about. It was a complete let-down, I don’t understand how such a poorly written horror (?) story could even be enjoyed or considered popular when there are so many better stories on here. I have yet to find one that really gives me chills but this one just felt like I was reading the tryhard ramblings of a 14 year old.

  167. totally agree with you dude, like the fighting, what is this… Mortal Combat? His mind is full of killing and fighting so much it is kind of ridiculous.

  168. Amelia the Killer

    I think that you made the kid at the start say too many complex words. Also, I don’t know about you, but I have never met a twelve year old with a gun, knife and lighter. And who would pull a knife on somebody that quickly, never mind kids. Nevertheless, I quite enjoyed it.

  169. this is demented so many illogical sequences… someone needs their own psych eval. Some girl obsessed with this site read this as a report to her fifth grade class and my kid hasn’t slept in his bed for a week, he wakes up every night shaking and terrified… why do you guys thrive on this dark stuff. Althought they have a “age content disclaimer” it doesn’t cut it,,, not a healthy site for undeveloped minds. It is irresponsible not to turn back on their block for under aged audiences.

    1. Nicola Marie Jackson

      I think it just blocked everyone, no what age they typed. Even with the age block kids can get on it by lying about how old they are, I doubt any child who saw the age blocker thought Oh No, I’m Too Young. The people who run this site can only do so much. I hope your kid is ok now and I’m sorry that they were so upset xxx

  170. How could Randy confess to attacking them after jeff is in the hospital if he died at the party? Loophole

  171. This story has SO MANY FLAWS. Also, COME AT ME JEFF THE KILLER FANS!

    1: Grammatical Issues

    2: Flat Characters

    3: No Motivation (e.g. Why does he get this random feeling? Why does he burn his eyelids? Why does he get superpowers to be able to kill people? Why does he turn clinically insane? Why does he clit his mouth, ear to ear?)

    4: Nothing is logical (e.g. If he burned his eyelids, his eyes would burn with them. When one of the three “Bullies” (At the second attack AKA the party) Throws a lighter, IT WOULDN’T STAY LIT! The three skateboarders wouldn’t be able to jump a fence that was most likely 4+ feet, They also wouldn’t be able to make a ramp in over a week, The bullies didn’t even know that Jeff was going to the party! A bathroom rack wouldn’t be able to knock out someone in one hit by a 13 year old. Burning your eyelids would cause in dust and particles getting into your eyes causing almost instant blindness. Cutting your mouth would cause in infections. Fire doesn’t make your skin turn white nor does it turn your hair from brown to black, it would burn the hair off if anything.)

    5: Jeff gets into two fights with three bullies and his brother gets locked up in jail, is that what makes him turn insane? That is fucking inexcusable.

    6: A 13 year old is most likely not going to be able to hold a gun.

    7: You went over the top with the bullies personalities, I am pretty sure that all three bullies don’t have shitty personalities.

    8: No adults get in between a fight happening right in front of them with knives and guns? Not likely, It is VERY Unbelievable.

    9: Worst parents ever. Instead of getting help for your obviously insane child, ask for a gun instead right in front of him. Also, it sounds as if when Jeff attacked his parents, they didn’t restrain AT ALL. Liu at least restrained a tiny bit…..

    10: The stupid decisions the characters made.

    11: Not creepy at all.

    12: Too many cliches.

    13: Too much unoriginality.

    14: The characters speak unnaturally.

    15: At the beginning of the story where the cops got to Jeff’s house, The cops and the parents (As soon as Liu said that he did the stabbings) sounded as if they KNEW that Liu did it.

    All in all, this story is VERY poorly written.

  172. It bothers me on how people think Jeff’s such a douche. Like, no… Does “Kay mommy” sound like a douche? No. His actions he does not know are mean, obviously since he’s insane, and he didn’t say anything rude after the incident. Maybe you’ll say “But before the incident he was mean!!”
    Okay, well every teenager boy may act like that. A lot do. Plus he obviously wasn’t happy with moving.

    I’m just asking, why do people think Jeff’s a douche?

  173. I finally read this and I am like “No way! Why Jeff, why?” I love the anime pictures that people draw for Jeff, but the picture the person added was really interesting.

  174. Dane DeHaan is bae

    OMG I feel exactly like Jeff. I have been feeling like this for a while and I found this and I was like “same!” Should I be worried?

  175. This was sad and at the same time very great. I felt bad for Jeff when those bullies were picking on him and his brother, but I just couldn’t stop reading. This is very well written. I love it.

  176. i know it is so creepy like who would do that i mean i would if i was mad at that person id do the same cause i would kill that person for saying stuff about me and spreading rumors

    1. Rochester Hills is not in Detroit. It’s a completely different county!! It’s 30 minutes north of Detroit. There are no fancy neighborhoods in Detroit except for maybe a few apartment buildings downtown. Other than that, we all live in a different county so we can live in the nice neighborhoods & drive to work in Detroit.

  177. This is THE worst thing I have ever read, unless it was set in opposite land…..
    for all the people that rated this above 1 star I would like you to ask yourself why?
    When the cops came the day after (the day after….lol mmmkay) and pointed the gun at the kid with the knife, why wouldn’t they take both of them for questioning instead of taking the word of one of the suspects and totally rejecting a confession? (Cops are lovely people aren’t they)
    why would his mother be smiling and happy both on party day (shortly after her son had been taken away) and in the hospital when she tells jeff that his brother is coming home (the son she is talking to has been mutilated beyond recognition by fire and she is smiling because the other son is coming home? Does she even like jeff?) And it says the hospital washed and stitched his clothes (so they washed all the blood out of the burned and melted white hoody with magic detergent)
    and he killed his brother (his supposed “feelings” started when his brother was in danger so surely protecting his family was imortant to him, why kill the family?)
    there are plenty more things I could pick on within this story but other people have already commented on them and this dreadful tale has taken enough of my time already.
    if I could give this zero stars I would, it reads like a 10 year old wrote it.

  178. I’ve seen alot of pictures/cosplays of Jeff The Killer but i’ve never actually read it and its a really interesting Creepy Pasta – … Well, very creepy :) – I have one question though, How did the Bullies (Troy,Keith and Randy) Know he was going to Billy’s Party ? – If anyone can tell me please ? :)

  179. This story requires far too much suspension of disbelief to really be called a good story. As another person commented, many of the characters do not come across as realistic at all. Most children do not have an extensive vocabulary as is portrayed by the introduction, and the bullies were reminiscent of comic book villains, so much so that they were far more humorous than frightening.

    I would also like to point out that psychopathy and other mental disorders do not lend its victims the skill of a professional boxer or black belt, so having Jeff fight three other boys – who are armed with knives, mind you – and winning with naught a scratch is quite frankly ridiculous. Liu being sent to Juvy just like that is a stretch as well, as Jeff – being a “witness” – was involved in the fight and would most likely be questioned, as well as the bullies. I don’t see why neither boy claimed self-defense, either.

    When the bullies tried to get revenge on Jeff during the party I laughed. It seemed so strange and unrealistic that they would care that much; wouldn’t sending Liu to prison for years mean they won? Besides, they sure recovered quickly from their supposedly grievous wounds.

    Now, I’m no medical expert, but Jeff would not turn out looking anything like he does in the picture. One, his hair would have been burnt off and two, he would not be so white; he would be covered in burn scars. After he burns off his eyelids (Why didn’t that happen when he was set fully on fire?) he’d have to find or steal a lot of eye-drops, and I doubt even that would be enough to stop eye irritation and drying. How is he, a thirteen year old boy on the run, know how to properly prevent infection from his Glasgow Grin? I would say he would need proper medical examination at some point.

    Also, his parents are questionable. Jeff’s mother sees that her son is off his rocker, and rather than try and help him through it and get psychological help she asks her husband to kill him. Wow. She didn’t know he would try to kill them; all she knew was he was mutilating himself.

    The idea of Jeff is neat in a horror kind of way, but this story does not deliver and could be improved. It’s not the worst story I’ve read, but I’ve also seen some more believable stories on Crappypasta.

  180. As an English major and sometime writer, I would advise choosing past or present tense and sticking with it throughout. Going back and forth in tense, especially within a single paragraph, is poor writing and should generally be avoided, unless you are moving back/forward in time (in flashbacks) and using present tense in the present and past tense in the past.

  181. xXAnn The ProxyXx

    I believe this is a very good pasta, it just needs a bit of work. It seems Jeffs blood lust is fueled by lying which is actually very realistic. Though I don’t think you would still have your hair after getting burnt like that, even with bleach.

  182. I don’t know if anyone posted anything about this but this story reminds me of the Joker from Batman. Mainly the one from the Dark Knight, especially with that creepy picture.

  183. Nicola Marie Jackson

    He isn’t real. Why make a deal with the devil when you can just get some good eye spray? Keeps his eyes hydrated without having an eternity in hell. Just a suggestion xx

  184. I love this story of jeff the killer although when I first read the story I did get really bad dreams to the point that I would not sleep. I got over that and now i love creepypasta. So… GO… TO… SLEEP. :-] sweet dreams

  185. i thought that you said that they moved into one of those nice neighbourhoods. like where people don’t bring knives to school?

  186. Best story I’ve ever read (apart from Eyeless Jack.) Even though there are some flaws helpfully pointed out by the people down below, this story still makes me fear the night

  187. I LOVE THIS STORY BUT THE MOM WAS MESS UP,I WOUNLD KELPT JEFF ALIVE WHITH IS WEIRD FACE OR BEATIFUL FACE LOL BUT THE MOM IS SO MESS UP

  188. Nicola Marie Jackson

    Yes Hon, I agree with you, Creepypastas can be very unrealistic but with a good author, they can still be a great story. I think a lot of people who have a problem, including me, with this one, is not just the premise but the dialogue, the police being the arresting officer, judge and jury without hearing any evidence and take Lui off for a year in juvie, the unrealistic child bullies who act like gang members Columbia and the parents who stand by, doing Jack shit as the hail of bullets fly over thier own kidneys, the flammable bleach, hair dyed black with fire, the hospital performing surgery on Jeff’s clothes (he was burning like a touch and his clothes were cut off him and yet the hospital staff washed and stitched back together again. Considerate! The way his mum, his MUM! wanted his Dad to shoot him after seeing his attempts at facial reconstruction. I’ve recently read one about a Helium miner in outer space that was unlikely as JTK and yet it was beautifully written with characters acting like you would expect, even in that unlikely situation. But what really gets me ate JTK fangirls and thier stories were they hook up with Jeff and go on a romantic killing spree. I worry for the world, I really do Xx

  189. well.. i found it pretty awesome.. except.. i love the anime version of Jeff the killer.. since this one is scary, if you were to see it in real.. :P i think he’s kinda cool but yet a creepy psychopath.. ~

      1. Probably but he didnt have to kill his family like that its harsh if i went crazy like that i wouldnt kill my family cause what did they ever do to ne?

  190. This Creepypasta was ironically bad if it was to be considered a Creepypasta. However stories are just stories, and this was meant for pure entertainment. Knowing first hand how difficult writing any story is – the time it takes to plan all the characters, to plan the plot, to imagine the setting, even finding a voice – the asshole comments critiquing this piece of WORK even hurt me slightly. If all the authors in the world didn’t write one piece of shit work, they wouldn’t be accomplished because no one is perfect, and no one writes a bestseller the first time they are in the rodeo. Every author has a couple hundred, or dozen in some cases, pieces of paper they throw in the trash because they know it’s just simply not a good story. But the fact of the matter is we try, very hard to entertain individuals, and we get shit for it. It’s just not okay, constructive criticism is the way to go. If the story is bad don’t complain about the shitty parts, take part in trying to make it better and fucking give ideas or hell even edit it yourself and send it to the person who wrote it (I have had that happen to me it’s HELPFUL in every aspect of the word) so that they can better their own story and make it just its cause. Long story short, you don’t have to be a dick about it.

  191. I only read this because one of my friends kept making references to it. I now regret it as it was a waste of my time. It could have been better but the writing and cheesyness of it all… it shoulf come with crackers

  192. *Reads two comments then looks away* …Omg, okai sorry if it’s nor that realistic but it’s a story! I mean hello, take Holly Black’s The Tale Of A Modern Faerie for example, you don’t see tiny winged faeries, green pixies, kelpies, or trolls roaming the towns and cities do you? No. Do you want to know why? Because it’s a story!! And another thing, I do understand the whole forced phrases thing but really…the person who made this story ((And sorry if it’s not original thread, I think it is…but I’m most likely wrong)) is amazing. Whenever you look up ‘Creepypasta’ on Google there are five main ones that come up.
    1)Slenderman
    2) Eyeless Jack
    3) BEN Drowned
    4) Smiled dog

    and five, oh wait. Who is this, that’s right JEFF THE KILLER!!

    I apologize for this short rant, but I had to defend one of the most iconic pasta’s there is…that’s all for now…

    ~Kiljoy

  193. I was keen to read this after hearing about Jeff on sites like Listverse. I am so disappointed. It was just awkward. It just sounded like a poor budget slasher film. It jumped from one scene to the next, at times went into details that didn’t even matter. Why did I have to read about his mother telling him to change for a party, then read about his selection of choosing pants. Like, why. If there were so many adults around how did the fight escalate to that level. I imagined Jeff having a much better legend then this.

  194. The end is nearly flawless, as is the picture…but everything leading up to that needs to be re-worked – especially the dialog. 5/10

  195. This story isn’t creepy, nor is the writing any good (which adds to the fact that it isn’t creepy). I wouldn’t wipe my ass with this fucking story its so bad. The writing fluctuates between tenses and is immature and awkward, the writer uses phrases and words that seem to try to hard, the plot is gimmicky and unrealistic (It’s possibly the worst plot based around this picture I’ve ever read.) The mediocre dialogue makes me want to print this thing out and piss on it. I’m sorry was this written by someone with English as a second language or a 10 year old? Because that’s what I thought. Or just someone who never refined their writing skills or realised that proof reading is key. Get this shit off of this website ffs.

  196. Elizabeth Garnet

    Although a few phrases are impractical, as already mentioned in other comments, I can at least follow the story. I, for one, am greatful that someone presented it in a way that was easy to read, and near riveting. The story is an interesting one.

  197. I disagree with Anonymos. I use such terms all the time. Expanding your vocabulary is good. The younger you start; the better you become.

  198. I tried, I really tried to read it but I had to skim. This is the only story I have read where I was editing it in my head as I went. It reads like a jr high kids revenge fantasy on bullies. how is this not a 2 star. even Mcdonalds was better than this.