Vile Designs

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Greetings, reader.

It’s a strange fact about the modern age, that in order for a thing’s existence to be confirmed, you cannot trust to your own five senses anymore. In order for reality to be ‘real’, it must be confirmed so by the greater populace. Television, and the internet, have changed our way of life whether for good or ill. Events in my life over the past few weeks seem…so odd, even now, that the act of writing them down and…’publish’ it online may be the only way for it all too feel like more than a slide into delirium.

In my living room, near the door that leads to my bedroom, there once hung a 3 1/2’ by 5’ oil painting. The artist was one William Cartwright, an obscure Wolverhampton native who, the owner told me, had died mysteriously in the early 1950’s. I made the purchase at a garage sale for a princely sum of £10 – the owner, a middle-aged man called Charles Franklin, must’ve been desperate to sell, considering the dilapidation of both his house and himself. The picture itself is a bucolic scene, as wholesome as a Rockwell, and as verdant as a Matisse. It depicts a family picnic within a lush meadow, buttercups blooming around the gathering, a small copse of trees to the left, and rolling hills in the background. The weather is fair, and the subjects – mother, father, three rosy-cheeked children – are accoutred in post-war attire. On careful inspection, however, one can see a rather less cheerful detail. Partially hidden behind the foremost tree is another person, a drably clothed young man with a sour expression on his face. I only really saw it after I’d made the purchase, and it rather ruined the painting’s main mood for me…though not enough that I didn’t end up hanging it anyway.

I bought it six weeks ago, and it was one week after that all this started. It was 6:30 in the evening, and I was returning to the living room from the bathroom when I noticed that the painting had been altered. Maybe it was set at a wrong angle? I inspected it, and found it was hung perfectly straight. Nothing had changed within the frame, either…the picnic still progressed merrily, and the dour youth still looked on with his back to the trees. I turned away, prepared and ate dinner, watched some fitfully funny sitcoms and went to bed.

I awoke in horror at 3:30 am that morning, shivering and soaked with sweat, the riddle of the painting answered. I knew what had changed…the stranger, once partially obscured only a few hours before, was completely visible. The still life had moved.

Over the next week, I kept a wary eye on the painting whenever I passed it. Sure enough, with each passing day the dark figure grew ever so slightly larger in comparison to the foregrounded figures. And, as his features became clearer, I saw that his face wasn’t so youthful, or so angry either…maybe it was a trick of the light, but sometimes his expression was more akin to a smile, albeit a sinister one. It wasn’t just the painting, either. Any horror movie I watched, whenever the monster leaped at the screen, it seemed more vivid and threatening than before. Maybe it was my eyes unfocusing, but it seemed to me that the edges of the screen warped outward each time it happened. Every time I listened to music, I heard occasional murmuring, like somebody…or something… whispering the apocrypha of the damned. The backyard of my house always played host to small animals and birds, most of them visibly sickening. And as for the dreams…the less said the better.

Two weeks ago, a loud thump on the back door woke me up in the early morning. Eyes barely open, I staggered out to the living room to investigate the noise. The noise had been made by a crow dashing itself against the door, and it’s crumpled form lay quite dead in the wan dawn light. With the aid of a plastic bag, and considerable reluctance, I brought the corpse inside, went out to the street and gave it a cursory burial in the nearest bin. I then changed and walked out to get that day’s newspaper and a coffee from the corner store.

Ensconced once more in my home, I received a mild shock several pages into my reading. An article, brief and embellished only with a grainy photograph, detailed the investigation of a suicide in the local area of one Charles Franklin. The picture was of a sunken eyed, somewhat unkempt man fast approaching sixty. The picture also matched the features of the previous owner of the Cartwright painting. An involuntary shiver spasmed between my shoulders, and I became ever more aware of the painting behind me. I had not inspected the progress of the dark figure yet, and so paced towards it, brackish dread filling my stomach with each step. I was right to dread…if anything, I wasn’t scared enough.

Nothing I’ve drunk since then can erase the image of that tranquil abomination contained within the frames. As usual, the menacing figure on the left had inched further, further into the foreground than the background now. And, as before, the family enjoyed a frozen repast in the heatless sunlight. The familiarity, even that of the unfamiliar, had been intruded on twice, though. A bird hovered above the meadow, a bird with the dusky feathers of a crow. And in the mother’s hands a baby, dark eyed and sombre, was cradled. Even with the weight of years and worry lifted, I knew I saw none other than the face of Charles Franklin.

I’ve since covered the painting and sealed it in a cupboard in the spare room – yet still I can sense it no matter where I am. It exudes a suffocating aura, instilling me with a leaden torpor no amount of caffeine can shake off. Many times I’ve thought of destroying the damn thing, yet whenever I endeavour to do so fatigue overwhelms me, and I am left unable to rise from the floor. I’ve advertised it for sale, but so far there hasn’t been so much as a single phone call. I can’t listen to music anymore…it’s drowned out by horrendous babbling, a cacophony of obscenities and hatred. I don’t watch movies either…or indeed, anything. I looked into my bathroom mirror for the last time five days ago, and what stared back at me was the dark man’s murderous leer. It took more courage than I care to admit just to switch this computer on. I do not know the nature of William Cartwright, or the nature of his painting, or the nature of the spectre that haunts me. What kind of man was Cartwright? What kind of monster? How many paintings did he create before consigning his flesh to rot? Did his soul follow? It doesn’t matter. Nothing matters now. All I know is that it has consumed me completely, like it consumed Charles and his family.

The sounds of faint hammering drift from the spare room. May the padlock hold out, at least until the pills have rendered me oblivious.

Farewell, dear reader.

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Credited to DarkDecapodian.

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113 Comments

  1. An ok story made WAY too complex with a superfluous vocabulary. I felt like you were trying to impress me with your hardcore thesaurus skills rather than telling me a creepy pasta. I’ve also heard similar stories and the ending was expected.

    Annoying pasta is annoying.

    2/10 for effort.

  2. It’s bad for me.

    For one… Well it wasn’t that scary.

    Now that no one has the painting, it’ll be long before someone gets the curse again. Also, no one would know that the current owner committed suicide I guess.

  3. This reads like someone was trying all too hard to come across as well written but they just don’t have the hang of it.

    It felt like flowery lines of prose, imitated from finer works, were hammered rather ham-handedly into the author’s normal flow.

    Be yourself.
    You seem to have a competent grasp of the English language.
    So just let your writing flow without trying so hard to make it pretty.

  4. Since when does Matisse paint verdantly? It’s a small detail, but art douches like myself are bothered by inconsistencies. If you’re going to include details about a piece of art, at least pick an artist to compliment the description. It was a good story I guess (don’t try so hard to sound smart), but the end was lacking a bit.

  5. Wow. Really good. All it needs is a photograph of the painting to display at the end. That’d be way better than the suicide ending.

  6. I was about to say it is similar to “The Road Virus Heads North” but there are differences, and the writer did say he took influence from several sources.

  7. wow, that’s awesome. I love this story…It wasn’t that scary, because I couldn’t really picture what he saw in the painting upon looking at it for the last time, but i like it anyway. ^-^

  8. I don’t know why but this makes me want to cry out of fear. It’s just so terrifying. Would never want again, 9/10.

  9. 9/10

    It was perfect and really fucking creepy. I can feel the picture of myself as a child staring at me. Classic Twilight Zone-esque.

    There’s just one problem: After the second or third time the man in the painting moved, I WOULD HAVE FUCKING BURNED THAT THING! The hell man? Who keeps a painting with a madman slowly moving in to kill a family?

  10. Not bad, but as with many pasta’s I have to wonder, why not throw the painting out? You got it for 10 pounds, it isn’t worth it.

  11. Overall the story was good 7/10 I’d give it but it just felt a bit Bourgeoisie and like a running monologue. And I am British and I know no-one who calls shops- stores!

    Also I dont think something of this style could possibly remind anyone of the superior writing quality of Oscar Wilde.

  12. It was only SLIGHTLY wordy in my mind. I would like to point out that you should have explained WHY the person didnt get rid of the painting when they first realized it had started changing. I would. Were they drawn to it inexplicably? Or maybe trash pickup was for another couple of days, and everytime they put the painting out for the trash, it mysteriously ended up back on the wall.(and they had NO money for a hotel, as they had just paid rent or some such thing). Also, a thought just occured to me. The man in the painting killed all of the family, one by one, until they were all in the painting? Explain that. Over all, it wasn’t too bad.

  13. 8/10

    The ending kinda brought it down a bit.
    But at the part where he realizes the man had moved, I actually had to light my lamp :X

  14. Was it just a complete coincidence that you picked the town I’m currently in as where Cartwright comes from, or is it some kind of IP Address trick?

  15. Not very creepy, sorry.

    I agree with Faceless.

    5/10 at most. I can’t really offer any crit right now, sorry. I can’t think of how this can be improved without overhauling your writing style to a degree.

    But keep trying! You have talent.

  16. The odd cylindrical shape protruding from my lower regions appears to have increased in size after reading this. Well done, sir.

  17. I like this kind of Poe-ish, cold style. Story isn’t whatnot fresh, but really nicely told. Good Job!

  18. Very good job. Although the language was needlessly complex in places, don’t listen to some of the comments here that exaggerate that fact. They were probably just upset because they had to go find a dictionary in order to understand it. “Dumbing down” your language isn’t the answer, just be careful not to make it so wordy that you’re left with no substance.

  19. ;_; I’m scared now cause while I was reading something started beeping in my headphones and I can’t find the source.
    Good pasta, I felt a bit freaked out, although I will agree with others that it was a bit overdone, but that doesn’t mean I didn’t enjoy it. :)

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