• Ryan

    Bravo. I thought the whole time that it was a poor effort to make it seem like there was something more to the story, but the ending really tied it all together so perfectly

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    • Alek Jinner

      i think the answer is sort of a loose bow, it seems simple but when you look into it you start to find other answer, like the docter is possesed by an alien, or maybe the human brain itself is controling the person and they are trapped inside the brain, explaining why that the guys insanity saved him from the brains influence

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      • Anonymous

        Am I the only one who eyed my webcam suspiciously after reading this story?

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        • Anonymous

          No, I did too. I thought about putting a band-aid over it or something too :/

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        • Anonymous

          no

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        • Anonymous

          I got rid of mine. its sitting in the closet all alone now.
          and at first i thought about whiteface….

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        • PedoBear

          No

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        • Babs

          I did too… Imma close my laptop every night from now on… Or put something over it… Or smash my laptop with a hammer…. Any of those options work for me.

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        • Lone

          No, i already had a sticker over mine. Funny thing is when it said ‘I got an email.” my oovoo thing went off saying someone messaged me >.>

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        • MadiYo

          I’m Skyping with my friend… so no..

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        • Anonymous

          No, youre not, im sorta creeped out too

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        • Garen J O

          I’ve never been the type to fall into such traps. however i am always very careful to guard my identity from strangers. i disconnect my webcam when im not using it, use false names on websites i dont trust; and finally never tell people whether Garen J O is actually my birth name etc. It gives me a sense of security

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        • Kourtney

          I use a pen name…. im DEFINITELY not a Kourtney lol

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        • Anonymous

          I already have a post-it taped over my webcam. The NSA stuff is already a little like this. ( I know, I know, if you aren’t doing anything wrong you have noting to hide but i still don’t agree. Please no hate comments)

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        • whadafudge

          I completely agree, I’m removing my webcam and avoiding all cameras, I already don’t trust people.

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        • Alien Bread

          Yeah, Like what if I’m changing my clothes in front of my computer? Don’t want some NSA guy seeing that. Creep.

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        • Anonymous

          I always do this anyway. And I always keep something over it, just a simple sticker maybe. You never know.

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        • Anonymous

          I have always had a sticker over my web cam for these very reasons

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        • The Hash Slinging Slasher

          What freak would want to watch us read scary stories for like an hour without saying a word?

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          Rating: +106 (from 116 votes)
        • Anonymous

          Oddly enough ever since I found out people can hack into your webcam an watch you, I’ve put a post-it over mine. It gets me really paranoid when it’s not there.

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        • Eddie

          Explain the ending please •_•

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        • http://warriorcatsrplay.webs.com/ Lenny

          I, thankfully, don’t own a webcam.

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        • http://www.lateniteramblings.wordpress.com marisamoe

          NO, I looked at my webcam too, and DID put a bandaid over it..:/

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        • Anonymous

          i don’t have a webcam….. thankfully.
          But i’ve never been truly paranoid, just kinda like, just in case…………

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        • Anonymous

          i feel like the only way not to freak out about the webcam is to make the party watching you freak out by staring at the webcam as long as possible, whenever possible. Though this does make you question your sanity when you wonder if there’s no one on the other side

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        • Maxey

          No, now I’m really creeped out… O.O

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        • ElectronicVOICES

          I have an old laptop that had it’s camera smashed in long ago. I rarely do anything involving electronics, other than Creepypasta and Amazon. And for that, I even use a different address and a fake name. (my friend is simpathetic to my paranoia)

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        • Heisenberg95

          I thankfully don’t have a webcam, but my paranoia is just as bad cuz I can’t bring myself to open my bedroom door, or even unlock it.

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        • tsubasa

          I’m reading this on my tablet….
          I’m covering the camera with my thumb…..I’m scared”0-0″

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        • Kristina Harper

          I did the exact same thing.

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        • WoodsenDragon

          i swear i saw a face on my webcam what wasnt mine…

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        • ScaryAdi

          I just realised I have a camera on my tablet… I won’t be able to sleep tonight…

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          Rating: +6 (from 14 votes)
        • Anonymous

          you people are crazy

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        • Owertire1

          hehe, I hate my webcam always done! :P

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        • Anonymous

          ppl can hack you webcam just put colored tape over it

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        • Artemis

          No. I resisted the urge for a few days, but I eventually put a red dot sticker over it.

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        • JoJo

          No I didn’t. But I really wanted to open up the door.

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        • Anonymous

          No, no you are not.

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        • bob

          i have already covered mine in tape bcuz im so paraniod :P

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        • Anonymous

          I keep electrical tape over my webcam at all times.

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        • Anonymous

          No don’t worry I did too lol

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        • Anonymous

          I would have, but I have been paranoid about being watched for years…There’s already tape on it.

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        • nikivenus

          Total win for me, I purposely bought a laptop without a built in webcam =)

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        • Freddy Fazbear

          I have a webcam but I actually am freaked out by it… I actually smashed my old pc because the webcam went static and made slenderish noises so i got really scared and just threw it across the room…Don’t worry it was a windows 6

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        • Anonymous

          I didn’t, but I used to be really paranoid about people watching me on my webcam, or paranoid in general. I thought it just had to do with the fact I have always had anxiety, but I got over he paranoia, but not over anxiety. Its still bad. I don’t know what changed.

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        • Nicole

          my sister texted towards the end of the story because she “forgot her keys” and wanted me to let her in and I almost didnt.

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        • Charlotte Studstill

          I always cover mine with a post-it note XD

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        • Don’t Look Back

          I duct taped mine, I swear it looked back at me like an eye with no soul.

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        • PrincessOf Norn

          Do any of you guys realize that if you have a light that turns on with your camera when it is active it can be used to let you know if someone is watching since the light would turn on with the camera. Iffffffffffffff it does turn on cover it as fast as possible or someone can snag ur identity with your face…. ya.

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        • Person.

          I’m resisting the urge to cover mine up with Blue Tack.

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      • Michael

        10/10

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        • ThisTechnoKid

          You know that thing about spreading this. Yeah this is about how you would do it. So thanks a lot for making people who read this slowly fall into insanity. ^.^

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        • http://ticcitoby.com Ticci Toby

          Yeah. This story was amazing and it all tied together so well at the end. The doctor had a valid explanation, but the main engineer guy had a good reason for why the stuff happened too. Of course it could just be a REALLY weird coincidence. Eitherway, this story was awesome. good job! *Internet fist bump*

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      • Anonymous

        Dude yes I love that comment and the story is well done as well really keep me reading, epic job

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      • Randi Dickeson

        so because he was intelligent he figured it out that everything is deceptive? \

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        • Anonymous

          Because he had paranoia he came to the conclusion that everything was deceptive. Unfortunately for the rest of the world he happened to be correct.

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      • Abbeh

        I’m always paranoid, haha.
        I always keep my door shut and locked, I always shut all doors when home alone, especially at night. I don’t talk on the phone much at all. I also cover my webcam when not skyping. When out in public, I tend to not talk to people and just nod and point to things. I always watch my surroundings when I’m alone and I tend to glance at the little things that move all the time, even if it’s a blanket moving from the fan being on.

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        • Anonymous

          your not the only one… trust me, im exactly the same

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        • ?

          i am also that way

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        • proxy

          what do u do in school, only nod and point to things? im actually the same only thing i dont do is uncover my web cam even when im skyping i keep it covered, except i know the person on the other side personally and very well god i hate that im so paranoid

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        • Tinkerbell

          Wierd. Have you ever tried making some friends. They surely make you feel good. :)

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      • RanceLandstrong

        I looked at my webcam and then the lights like went out for like second AND I ALMOST LOST MY SHIT CAUSE NOW IM THINKING LIEK THEY KNOW I KNOW OH MY GOD NOW WHAT?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!

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        • A Ninny Mouse

          Yeep. XD

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        • Person #72

          So who was webcam?!

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    • Mestr Rekkr

      I will make a better one.
      No, I can’t.
      Sh**! I have no match for this.

      Ok. You win dude.
      Still the best rated even after 3 years.
      Fvck.

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      • Angel

        This pasta was great!! I’m seriously freaked right now! *shivers*

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        • Anonymous

          maybe because is ttru

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    • Anonymous

      Buggi buggi

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      • thecreeps456

        all in all just be creepy, reach inside you to find that thing that could really happen in real life and start from there.

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    • http://www.gmail.com The WTFcrumpet

      Hey, any advice to a newcomer like me?

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      • http://creepypasta.com anonymous

        be creepy, be mysterious, get ideas from experiences like nightmares and don’t give yourself mass paranoia. :)

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        • http://www.memecenter.com/thorn-and-spec Thorn-and-spec

          Or on a side-note, give yourself mass paranoia, it’ll damn well inspire you!

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    • Anonymous

      Dont get it:(

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      • Anonymous

        Okay, so John has been locked in his house for a few days without talking to anyone. As he tries to contact others, he starts to believe that some entity has taken over and possessed everyone. Amy, his friend has him sent to an asylum where he still refuses to believe that he is wrong. The last few paragraphs reveal that he is right and that the fake doctor just needs him to believe nothing is out of the ordinary.

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        • anon

          so, basically, John was right the whole time and the doctor is trying to convince him hes still crazy?

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        • Anonymous

          Actually man i think the doctor was real and the thing had just put things in his brain and eyes to control him. Its weird.

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        • anonymous

          whatever’s controlling people seems to be able to do it by hijacking electrical signals. It gets into phones, the internet, webcams, and apparently eyes too. my understanding is that after the main character gouged his own eyes out, he could no longer be controlled.

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        • PrincessOf Norn

          Electronics can be hacked, the character knows this and gets psychosis, look it up. It is where the person is just way too paranoid for his own good.

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        • Anonymous

          Actually, I think that the guy was *just* crazy. There is no entity, he just went nuts and thought that the entity was SO good that it could recreate the entire world. Therefore, he thinks he’s living in this world, and then this entity comes and it slowly starts becoming everything, simulating everything, when in fact everything is normal.

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        • ThatAsianGuy

          So… Amy was visiting him since the doctor was real and was just being controlled. She must be so proud and doing this (>w<)b… mentally

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        • Dylan

          What happens, is that John in the end, after he has resisted everything he has went through, John was right the whole time. The doctor, psychiatrist, was all WANTING to tell him to resist the urge, that he was wright, but the entity had the “nerve felons”, which gives you the right to think for yourself, but the entity controlled you, your voice, movement, everything, which comes back to the phrase “He wanted to shout words of encouragement to the dilusional man(John), but the nerve phelons wrapped around his head and into his eyes did otherwise”, in other words, John was right and all, and the entity could see through the circuts of a camera, which is how he saw the playground thought when the camera on John’s laptop was pointed at his notebook, which concludes where his eyes were the same as a camera, that’s how the entity would control you, as it would be connected to your eyes and into your brain. When John poked his eyes out and blinded himself, they didn’t have nerves in them, his nerves were dead in his eyes so they could be connected, along with the bandages around his eyes. I maybe wrong about him poking out his eyes, but we know he DID blind himself. He was taken to an asylum/hospital type building, as he says his “padded cell”, and that’s how he could finally feel Amy and all other feelings like that. I do love this story, it makes me think logically, and personally this is my favorite story of all time, I listened to it literally 15 times.

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        • Dylan

          I typed what happened, but it made me go back to the site and admit I’m 18, so long story short, I love the story, watched it literally 15 times. The entity controls the doctor’s actions and speaking and everything like that, but the doctor’s mind he can still control himself, like how the narrator said “He WANTED to scream words of encouragement” but he couldn’t because the “nerve phelons” wrapped around his head and into his eyes wouldn’t let him. He was taken to a hospital/asylum type facility as it says in his “padded cell” and all, unless it’s just an asylum and all. The entity can control people through their eyes, which is why it couldn’t control John because he poked/tore his eyes out and blinded himself, so there was no nerves to connect too, so it couldn’t control John. The way you know John was right is because the narrator says “As the psychiatrist walks into the cell, like a puppet” because he was controlled by the entity that John was afraid of, and the fact that Amy knew what to say about the playground and all was because the entity could attach to the circuits of the camera and could see the notebook, as John’s camera on his laptop was pointed at it.

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      • A Ninny Mouse

        There’s some entity that has somehow taken over everything in the world. It knows nothing about John until he gives it out to the outside world. He doesn’t get calls because the entity doesn’t know his number. That is, until he made the call. Then it does know his number. Same thing with the webcam and email.

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    • Alfredo

      When u trick ur mind into tricking u what is fake and what is real when u cant distiguish the line and there is no bounders..

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    • Alfredo Lozoya

      When u trick ur mind into tricking u what is fake and what is real when u cant distiguish the line and there is no bounders..

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      • Anonymous

        Inception time!

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      • GaMzEe MaKaRa

        there is a line, it’s just very thin. :o)

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    • Anonymous

      this makes you think. what is sanity exactly? How can we ever know that we aren’t seeing illusions? only the healthiest of minds think these thought since we want to know. Insanity is a perfectly good mind running so fast that it overworks itself and destroys itself. Sanity is usually a dulled mind going to slow to harm itself.

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      • Random-Reader-Ren

        well said

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      • http://www.loko.com Annon

        “do you know the definioin of insanity…

        doing the exact fuking thing over and over and over again”

        Vaas Montenegro

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        • TheDarkFox

          and expecting a different outcome.

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        • Vtimpaler

          Doing the same thing over and over again expecting a different result – Albert Einstein’s definition of insanity.

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        • TheDarkFox

          Ya know whats really scary? I’ve never read this story before yet I commented on it and I don’t remember commenting on it…. But I literally finished the quote as I did in my comment, as I read this… O.O

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        • Heisenberg95

          No hate comments about this, but Robin Williams applied the Einstein quote “Insanity is repeating an action and expecting a different result” to the re-election of George Bush. I honestly thought it was freakin hilarious!!!!!

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        • Anonomous

          Bravo. I fucking love this comment.

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        • Anonymous

          bravo bravo best game ever

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      • Luis

        good point, only those whose minds are so effective at running efficiently are capable of pondering such deep thought to the point of losing themselves.

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      • Anonymous

        Logic says that the human brain is designed to work…
        However there is no proof that what we see is always what the brain interprets.

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        • Donkey Punch!

          This ^

          How can we tell what we are seeing is what everyone else is seeing.

          You can’t!

          Think about it without burning yourself out. How can you prove that the image someone else is seeing through their eyes is identical to yours? It would almost certainly be different in a few ways due to the way out brains are wired differently.

          But the really weird part is, they could explain exactly what they are seeing, but the actual image they see for one thing may be different through your eyes.

          For example: Color blind people. someone who is color blind may see a particular color as “grey” but because they’ve been told its “blue”, they then know it’s blue.

          But what if they are also color blind to grey? I could be fk’n orange colored in their mind for all we know.

          Lol this one always gets me.

          Great story, had me reading every single line literally with my face inches from the screen in apprehension :D

          Good Work 10/10

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      • The Hash Slinging Slasher

        We know because we can eat sandwiches without pooping out air two days later.

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        • A Ninny Mouse

          If I eat at all, or don’t eat at all, I tend to “poop out air”.

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      • Hellopeople9

        Well, I like Stephen King’s definition of insanity: insanity is the inability to accept an idea that is logical because of the evidence on it <- from the tommyknockers, creepy book feels a lot like this story :)

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    • http://creepypasta lol girl

      Good but it more to be scary if thats what trying to do.

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      • Anonymous

        Dude that was scary as hell that fricked the sh** out of me

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        • Admirer

          We would probably never get scared if we didn’t have an imagination because its our imagination that makes things scary, and incomplete thoughts get completed by paranoia powered by imagination

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        • fearless

          im a 12 yr old girl who isn’t even fazed, it was an interesting story, though.

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    • kiefer stewart

      omg this story is so me

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    • Anonymous

      The entire time I was thinking that it was just paranoia(though I wouldn’t have opened the door either) but the ending made me drop my iPod and my jaw

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    • The StickMan

      No, I think the ending was a cheesy last minute attempt to give a twist. He should have just left it at when he went crazy. That was good enough.

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      • Quagsire

        I’m totally into that, would have been much better, I’m still 50/50 on if their was actually a paranormal force or not? What’s the general consensus?

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    • DalekSecond

      So, blind men would be alright

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    • Angeline

      wait . so everyone is indeed are possessed ? The doctor is indeed the entity that the man feared ? or am I understanding it wrong ?

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  • http://drneko.com Dr. Neko

    Long but very enjoyable story. 9/10

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    Rating: +121 (from 155 votes)
    • jeffthfemkiller

      Neko! Ur a cat. I wnt nutz readin this story

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      Rating: -78 (from 106 votes)
    • http://nb27.org Bob

      10 out of 10!!!

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      Rating: +39 (from 55 votes)
      • Anonymous

        I don’t get it

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    • Savannah Phillips

      Can someone please explain the ending to me?

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      Rating: -9 (from 33 votes)
      • joshua gibson

        the whole story is meant to make you think that John is crazy, and has psychosic and is paranoid of the world around him, to where a normal person would think otherwise. but in reality, john is right, his delusions are true, its a twist ending, thinking he is crazy and then finding out he is right

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        • Anonymous

          *reads story*

          Lol wut?

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        • Anonymous

          Yeah the doctor wanted to tell him he was right but the “entity” wouldn’t let him it was using some kind of mind control

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        • Codex

          I though he was right the entire time…

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      • Anonymous

        It turns out that some kind of being really was trying to deceive him

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        Rating: +21 (from 33 votes)
      • http://creepypasta rake hunta

        he was wrong about the entity and went bonkers.

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        • http://creepypasta rake hunta

          i was wrong

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          Rating: +98 (from 104 votes)
      • Anonymous

        The patient went insane, revolving throughout the story and his eyes deceiving him, John had wrapped bandages around his head, life itself ingulfing into darkness. After the bandages he opened the door and went with the entity. My take on the ending is John is probably inside of an insane asylum, waiting for the the entity to give up or him waiting for death.

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        • Anonymous

          Actually I think he poked his eyes out
          Because he says “the pain is gone”

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        • Anonymous

          He lives in darkness

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        • Anonymous

          I think he did, because he said when they gave him a pen and paper, “What am I going to do? Poke my eyes out?”

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          Rating: +15 (from 17 votes)
      • Jel

        The doctor was also insane.

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        • Anonymous

          the doctor was the entity trying to deceive him so was the therapist

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        • vaginal fart

          No the doc had pity on him.

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          Rating: +1 (from 9 votes)
        • I Consist Entirely of Lego Bricks.

          Everyone but John is controlled by this ‘entity’.

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          Rating: +8 (from 8 votes)
    • Anonymous

      Yea I like it a lot! But the only thing I don’t like about it it’s the ending and if the doctor at the end is lying or telling the truth or if the guy is crazy or sane.
      I would rate it 9/10. The ending and uncertainty knocked it down to nine for me.

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      • Anonymous

        That’s the beauty of it. He masterfully crafted the ending for you to interpret it as you see it.

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        • reiu

          Nah, the ending gives it away pretty much. John was right, the entity was real. That’s it.

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          Rating: +5 (from 21 votes)
      • http://www.memecenter.com/thorn-and-spec Thorn-and-spec

        The doctor, Amy, the Therapist, everyone, was the entity that John goes on and on about, the story makes him look insane, and he is, but he was also right!

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      • Anonymous

        are you kidding me? the best part is the ending, dude!! that’s taken plot twist to a whole new level!! if you can’t understand, here it is! the doctor wanted to tell John that he was sane, but because the doctor had his mind controlled, he couldn’t do so, and instead telling the otherwise that John was insane! So basically the doctor lied, although he couldn’t help it since his mind was controlled.

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        • Anonymous

          the ending was well crafted, but definitely not masterfully. though the ending is vague on how the entity exists, it expressly states that it does, stopping any thought that this could happen in reality… btw my take on the ending is that the doctor is part of the entity, and the entity is amassed that johns will is so strong, but continues to try to break him, for sport.

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        • Yumikuri

          I can’t stress this enough. THERE IS NO “RIGHT” ANSWER TO THE ENDING. it is an open-ended ending in the way that the CONCLUSION is the way YOU take the words to mean. The way most seem to view the ending is that an entity is controlling the doctor (that is neither right nor is it wrong). another way to look at it is the Doctor feels sympathetic to John and want to cheer for him and his delusional state of survival, but it is not his job to encourage his patient’s delusions. also, by stating that John is insane, you question his sanity. is his proneness to delusions what has kept him sf efrom the entities. or is his delusions what keep him safe from the doctors “deceptions” of leading him back to a normal life. There are abunch more ways all of this can be taken. and it is very well written for that reason because in a way it play off of your own mental state and what you wish to believe.

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        • Yuki

          @Yumikuri. I agree, there is no definite answer, it leaves it up to the reader.

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  • Joekirk

    A long read, but a good one.

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    Rating: +103 (from 125 votes)
  • Anonymous

    This has got to be one of my favorite pastas. I agree with Ryan, that made the length well worth it. However, regardless of the ending choice, I think that had it decided to go the more disappointing route at the end, I still would have felt it worth the read due to the great tension building moments throughout.

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    Rating: +84 (from 110 votes)
  • Kefka

    SECOND!!!

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    • Anonymous

      lol the dislikes tho

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  • Anonymouse

    Delicious pasta.

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    Rating: +131 (from 147 votes)
  • lulzfish

    I would have just asked Amy to verify something else.
    It’s not like you only have one memory in common with each friend.

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    Rating: +222 (from 252 votes)
    • Tyler

      Well, it says that that one memory is something he never shared with anyone else, which could mean that he has already shared a myriad of other facts and memories about himself and Amy, so he would just conclude that the entity knew those things from previous conversations. He would have to go back and systematically check every memory he had with just the two of them alone that he never told anyone else about. It’s pretty mind-rattling.

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      • http://creepypasta.com Lola

        Hey Tyler so I was thinking, “well why couldn’t he have just asked her for another memory?” But you answered that and I totally forgot that he said that that memory was the only one he had never shared with anyone else

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        • Anonymous

          Well he would have to ask for another question because that entity knew the answer to the question because the webcam was pointed to it

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        • Anonymous

          Well he might have not shared it with some one but the webcam saw it so it knew and he would have had to ask another question

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          Rating: +6 (from 6 votes)
      • Anonymous

        He could have asked her for the name of the park. He hadnt written that down anywhere.

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    • Kaylee

      That’s exactly what I was thinking

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  • looby

    Brilliant story! Sad ending ;__;

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    Rating: +78 (from 90 votes)
  • Christopher

    Wow… This really got me to thinking. It was a wonderful Pasta, the best I have read. It did not make me so terrified I could not sleep, or look out windows, or give me a headache. It had great grammar. And was very well written. I wish there was a big book about the story of this man, and his, “Cyber-Psychosis” and again, it was a wonderful read. How he compared his own eyes, with the eyes of a machine, was beyond brilliant. It was the most interesting pasta that was not scary. I never knew it could work so well like that.

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    • Gaskank

      I agree wholeheartedly. Such a delicious pasta.

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      Rating: +26 (from 34 votes)
    • Lolz

      I am a little confused. Is he just crazy or is the entity real?

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      • Anonymous

        No, that’s whyit’scalled Psychosis. He is paranoid because heletthe fear grow in his mind, ur rationalizingit.

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        • notfallingforit

          i know you’re one of them

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        • Anonymous

          im cofused too. I mean i thought he was just crazy, but it says that the docter was like being forced to tell him that, and the entity was real. It was a really good pasta though!

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        • MrSandman9151

          The ending can be interpreted many ways, that’s what makes it so good. On the one hand, the circuits and all that around the doctor could be describing his actual tendons. Like how eyes are likened to cameras. In that respect, we are all the deceivers, drying to rationalize our hollow existence and expelling anything resembling a separate course of thought. Such as his psychosis; we were rationalizing with his fears, for we were trapped in the room with him. On the other hand, the machine controlling the doctor could be real, and was controlling his actions. In this case, his “psychosis” was not psychosis at all, and his fears were actually justified. We spent the entire story thinking, “well that’s sad, but… what if…” and lo, we were right all along. Makes you question the state of your own sanity…

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        • patrick leary

          yeah he’s the deceiver he’s making you think that it was fake….

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        • Anonymous

          The entity was real and trying to deceive him, and amazing pasta loved it

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          Rating: +4 (from 8 votes)
    • Bruce

      I agree with christopher amazing pasta with a great story and a good ending. The long read was worth it,and it didn’t make me paranoid that a monster would come to me in the night and kill me. Plus what makes it even creepier and better is that phsycosis is a real condition. 10 out of 10!

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    • Some Fat Guy

      Give me this recipe!

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      Rating: +7 (from 9 votes)
  • http://violentharvest.blogspot.com Violent Harvest

    Nice. I enjoyed it.

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  • Anonymous

    Great build-up and good ending 10/10

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    Rating: +47 (from 53 votes)
  • Gar

    Thanks for the positive feedback guys :) though it seems my italics didn’t show up here. I’ll have to remember that for next time.

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  • Aurah

    I deeply enjoyed this pasta, it’s one of the best one’s i’ve read in quite a while.

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    Rating: +27 (from 33 votes)
    • http://crazynoodles.com Super ONE!

      You mean noodles?

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      Rating: +3 (from 11 votes)
  • Wed11:03PM

    Bravo

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  • HooFlungPoo

    So, does this make everyone feel better? Ya know, about the halloween incident?

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    • Kyle

      What Halloween incident?

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      • Anon

        i would really like to know too

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    • Jester

      Yes, please tell us.

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    • Anonymous

      this comment is going to make me go into a psychosis

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      • HooFlungPoo

        the one where a guy went into phychosis and wouldnt leave the top story of his house

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        Rating: +4 (from 4 votes)
  • Squiggles

    Wait…What??
    I was expecting the entire time that he was just going crazy, but still loving the pasta. it was written in a way that seemed obvious, hes nuts. but him being insane….saved him? trippy pasta is trippy. 10/10.

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    • Joe McBobski

      I don’t see it as his insanity saved him, per se. Reread the ending, and think of what else it could be describing.
      Think realistically.

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      • FumingPanther

        Maybe I’m a little thick, but what’s this realistic bit you mention? with the nerve filements and the thing wrapped around his eyes, i can only assume something is forcing him to act that way

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        • Death Slade

          His mind is the machine that’s forcing him to do it. His mind is controlling him to do it. The mind is a mans best friend, and at times his worst enemy.

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        • Joe McBobski

          Yeah, this is what I was getting at, although I didn’t want to spoil things.

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        • http://none Person

          I am with joe here; it was his mind who sis that not some monster or his insanity. GREAT STORY!!!! 10/10

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      • http://NA Austin

        Just curious, could you explain what you are getting at. I am imagining robot Dr.

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        • x24sonic

          What I interpreted was that the doctor described at the end was possessed by this otherworldly being, and could not help but do the actions that it was chemically forcing him to do. (manipulating the people’s actions through their brain)

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        • Anonymous

          So…… The doctors mind was being controlled by the boy who thought he was mad, a as was Amy etc??? Amazing pasta though

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        • Bob

          So it was God the entire time?! I knew he couldn’t be trusted!

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  • Koobaxion

    10/10, could have used a different ending, but other than that, it was awesome!

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  • Flash37

    Doors; They are large rectangular blocks of wood used to fill ungainly holes in walls, not portals, silly~

    *ahem*
    Okay, I was getting hints of 1408 until he got to the mental hospital, then I was predicting a claw popping out of the doctor’s back. Then I squealed inside =D
    Very good pasta, perfectly cooked and it leaves no bad aftertaste. 10/10

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  • JMac

    FANTASTIC!!!

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  • ScaryStoryIsScary

    Excellent – one of the best printed here in a long time. Professional quality.

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    Rating: +45 (from 47 votes)
  • Eric

    Very scary. 9/10.

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  • KatieBug

    Weird. In a good way, I liked it. Almost makes me paramoid…

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    • Slender Man

      Oh damn, I hate it when I get paramoid

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      • Swirly Head Man

        ERRMAHGERRD! It’s Slender Man!

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        Rating: +18 (from 38 votes)
        • http://none Slender Man

          Yes it is! Fear me!

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        • Alecae Alaysia

          -insert girly scream here-

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          Rating: +15 (from 19 votes)
        • Gage

          Up for a game of Manhunt?

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        • Chuck Norris

          Hey, Slendy……start running!

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          Rating: +23 (from 33 votes)
        • Jeff The Killer

          chuck,please….you are how old? Bruce lee beat you.Im bat shit cazy as hell and i know this.so dont be talking to my bro slendy like dat

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        • 10 year old girl

          I wont fear you you little … ok I wont cuss now but you arent even scary slender man ive seen scarier like jeff the killer but im not saying hes all that scary either so just bequiet and quiver at my boldness cause im only 10 yea thats rite 10 and you are ssoooo scary yae rite maybe read that story again or even better in the wall and poop your pants because its so scary . Boom!

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        • Lolz

          I think Slender Man is just lonely. If I saw him I would want to give him a huge hug!

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        • Mr. Widemouth

          How many people do you think we could “take out” together, slendyy?

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          Rating: +5 (from 5 votes)
        • The Real Candle Jack

          hi

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        • a person

          since when are slendy and jeff.y bros?

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  • Kryptography

    Great story, very well written. Not 100% sold on the ending, I think even without the very last section the story is just as good, maybe better.

    Either way, great job! Look forward to seeing more from this writer.

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  • Bob

    Can someone explain the ending a little more clearly?

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    • Joe McBobski

      Reread the ending, and then think of what it could possibly be describing. Nerves. Eyes. Inside the skull. Think realistically.

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      • Anon

        it says the nerve filaments wrapped around his head…”wrapped around” as in not inside…so, no not inside his skull…around his head…something else controlling him…not his brain…pay attention…>.>

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        • Katkee

          It still wraps around his head, inside or outside. Doesn’t make a difference. It’s like, blood vessels go around your body, but they’re on the inside.

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        • Tymann

          Actually, it says it like the nerve filaments are outside the body, like it’s attached, giving the idea that something took his brain over. It also says he tried to scream, but the nerves forced his brain not to.

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      • Anonymous

        But it says, “His body walked into the cell like a puppet” Usually the word puppet means that he was not in control of his own body.

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        • Zach

          It’s referring to the mind as a separate being, in a way. No, he was not in control of his own body. His mind was treating his body as a puppet. “A sane man would have fallen for the deception long ago”. He is not a sane man, he is insane. Insane, and didn’t fall for the deception of his mind. Our minds are what allow us to be sane, and everybody else was sane, their mind controlling them like a puppet. Everybody except for John.

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        • Anonymous

          So is it as though a Sane person is just being deceived by the Human mind to believe that Everything is normal and Insane people have been freed of that deception and know that the mind works against them?

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        • Think

          Or it could mean a puppet, as in a dcotor walking into a patients room (as doctors do a million time due to work) as a puppet. Remember the quote “insanity is doing something over and over again and nothing changes”
          Doctor could be not controlled by an entity but the writer still described him as a puppet due to his job and the countless times they are meeting with the same patients everyday.

          Something to think about.

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    • Artemis

      The ‘nerve filaments wrapped around his head and into his eyes’ are linking back to John’s notion earlier: ‘what’s the difference between a camera and my eyes? They both turn light into electrical signals – they’re the same!’. This explains that the eyes are linked to the brain, so in this ending, it may be saying that the eyes are controlling the brain, and the brain in turn controls the body.

      Hope this helped!

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  • Ther

    Incredible. Very very good.

    9/10 :)

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