Less Than A Second
You’re in your room late at night. You’ve been on the computer for a while now, and it’s almost time to get some sleep. The light behind you is still blazing, cutting a swath through the oppressive darkness of whatever ridiculous hour of the morning it is. In a sleep-deprived haze, you amble over to the light switch and flick it off, and instantly realize you screwed up. Your headphones are lying on the floor, and without the light to see them you’ll probably step on and crush them. Resolving to turn the light back on so you can grab them, you spend less than a second in near-perfect darkness as this goes through your mind. Then you flick the light back on.
You’re not in your room, anymore. It’s as if fifty years of disrepair have ravaged your once-loved living space. You’re also surrounded. You can’t really see them, mostly just their shadows are visible as they crouch on all fours all around you. The only features you can make out are hundreds of mouths of jagged, grinning teeth, and a set of glowing, red eyes to go with each twisted smile. You almost have time to scream. Almost.
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Credited to James V.
Posted in Beings & Entities, Strange & Unknown
September 11th, 2008 at 1:21 am
ooooho that was cool
September 11th, 2008 at 1:58 am
OH SHI-
September 11th, 2008 at 5:07 am
Pretty creepy, especially considering I was about to turn off the light and go to sleep myself…
September 11th, 2008 at 6:29 am
Hmm. Intriguing concept. However, this is one of those pastas that’s only really creepy/terrifying if it happened to you. Reading it, I really didn’t find it scary at all.
September 11th, 2008 at 6:44 am
I agree with “Z” (The first comment, in case you couldn’t figure that out.). Not really scary per se, but certainly an interesting idea. I did like the ending, though.
September 11th, 2008 at 7:21 am
This creepypasta was alright, although I felt it wasn’t really written as good as it could have been.
Delicious pasta none the less.
September 11th, 2008 at 9:29 am
WOW. Kudos on this one! I thoroughly enjoyed it. Thanks
September 11th, 2008 at 9:46 am
I’m sorry, but this is dreadful. Where’s the explanation to it all? Just a random ending thrown in.
September 11th, 2008 at 9:47 am
PS: I know you didn’t make this, Phone, not having a go at you.^_^
September 11th, 2008 at 10:34 am
sage
September 11th, 2008 at 1:09 pm
this was terrible
September 11th, 2008 at 1:52 pm
THEN WHO WAS HEADPHONES!?
Moral of the story:
Never put your damn headphones ON THE FLOOR!
September 11th, 2008 at 2:58 pm
didn’t really manage to creep me out. just confuse me.
September 11th, 2008 at 3:43 pm
Yahweh & Aye, I think it’s not just a ‘random ending’, the point is that everything changed so completely and horribly in… well, less than a second. The idea of such a thing happening to you is what brings the creepy.
September 11th, 2008 at 4:25 pm
I like it, it has more of a classic creepy taste.
September 11th, 2008 at 5:39 pm
You could’ve made the overall story better, but the ending was fantastic. Try again, you’ll probably make a really good one.
September 11th, 2008 at 6:38 pm
>.> <.< *brix*
im at my comp alone and its dark and rainy outside o_o
September 11th, 2008 at 7:37 pm
Meh. I didn’t like this one that much. It was an interesting concept, though.
September 11th, 2008 at 9:02 pm
Hmm…bit random, but did I like the creatures? You bet your sweet ass I did.
September 12th, 2008 at 2:20 am
I liked it. It’s creepy if you’re in the same situation they were in…(I am). Kinda paranoid about the light switch now….
September 12th, 2008 at 6:43 pm
D:
HOLY SHIT. I REALLY LIKE THIS ONE.
September 13th, 2008 at 12:02 am
i dunno if i liked this or not…
but i agree with Z [comment 4]
September 13th, 2008 at 9:20 am
I like it, but brix were not shat.
September 13th, 2008 at 10:47 pm
lskdjflskdfjasdlfkj.
D:
September 25th, 2008 at 10:30 pm
I’m always biased against second person pastas.
They just seem too cheesy.
Cheesy pasta.
September 29th, 2008 at 6:50 pm
shi*
September 29th, 2008 at 8:17 pm
I like random “AND THEN MONSTERS!” pasta when it’s well executed. This one fits the bill.
October 1st, 2008 at 12:08 am
I didn’t really care for this one at all. I feel like putting these stories in the second person is cheating. It’s like “hey, what if the scary thing happened to you?” directly instead of having you identify with the characters. I can deal with it most of the time, as it’s pretty popular with these pastas, but not with something this short.
October 5th, 2008 at 11:23 am
I think this would really be cool to try as a (very) short film…
October 13th, 2008 at 5:34 pm
ekekeke.
October 19th, 2008 at 1:54 pm
If this happened to me, i wouldn’t scream. the last thing i would say would be “fucking headphones”
October 25th, 2008 at 12:19 am
Oh Christ I guess I’m sleeping with my light on tonight.
November 20th, 2008 at 9:37 pm
haha a furry creepypasta
furries distort time, making life horrible
note the end as they smile
they just found a yiff partner