270 responses

  1. Crystal
    January 5, 2013

    Someone should re-write this more vividly. It just seems like it’s rushed.

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    • firstnamelastname
      January 14, 2013

      that’s exactly my sentiment.
      it’s like someone just came on here and pounded out something without thinking it through or even re-reading it to make sure it made any sense.
      which unfortunately, it doesn’t.
      i just think the entire plot is such nonsense that it would be hard for anyone to re-write while keeping the central storyline of it, they would have to change essentially everything.
      oh well.. not the worst thing i’ve ever read on here:)

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      • firstnamelastname
        January 14, 2013

        (though… it’s pretty darn close to being one of the worst)

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      • Kiirya
        January 27, 2013

        Challenge Accepted. Rewriting in progress.

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      • Jakobos
        March 2, 2013

        Do it! It’s a brilliant concept, just crappy execution :/

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      • minecraftuniverse
        July 7, 2013

        I hear stories of him

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      • Jess The Killer
        February 2, 2014

        I think it was good cx that’s coming from me. Yeah it was rushed but if you read Laughter you’ll see that this is not the worst. It seemed pretty legit. THATS COMING FROM ME………
        An unknown pasta….

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    • tytiger10
      January 21, 2013

      I attempt to do a re-write right before the submission ended yesterday. Hopefully it will make to the main site.

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    • Eyeless Jack
      January 21, 2013

      Do I look THAT BAD in my pictures? I mean, everyone thinks of us murderers and creatures as terrifying monsters. We actually just sit around and play Xbox 360 all day, especially me, Jeff, Slendy and Smile Dog. Although its kind of hard for Smile Dog, obviously. Slendy is the best because he can, well, you know. Occasianally we’ll kill some people, but who even cares?

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      • Johnathan
        January 25, 2013

        it’s good to now that you and the other monsters, and if you find disrespect in this term I am truly sorry, are just like us and not all crazy freaks, well maby jeff is but he did have good reason to snap.

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      • Eyeless Jack
        January 26, 2013

        I would like you, Jonathan, to know personnally that I take your statement as a compliment, and because of that comment I will vow not to kill you, your parents, your friends, anyone you know. You are a good tribute to society, and I hope that you go on to be what you are today. Anyway, Jeff kinda is a bit-er, off of it. He freaking makes me give my own victims to him! Can you belive that!? Sighhh…somtimes I wish Jane knew where he lived, but I guess he can be useful for scaring the absolute CRAP outta people for me, so they don’t have to see me ripping their guts apart. For some reason Edgar’s guts didn’t taste the same as that one guy in his house with him’s did…I know Edgar’s, well, KNEW it because I thouroghly stalk my victims before I murder them. Well, have a nice day reading Creepypasta!

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      • Johnathan
        January 29, 2013

        I think jane and jeff would more then likely hit it off and start dating if they met….

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      • derpbutt
        January 29, 2013

        JtK shippers. Now I’ve seen it all.

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      • Jeff the killer
        February 12, 2013

        Well I don’t EAT my victims like you and slendy,I just kill-er I mean help people.
        And the only reason I look at people in their sleep is to make sure they’re dea-I mean safe!

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      • Jane the Killer
        February 17, 2013

        Pretty sure if I knew where Jeff lived I would have brutally murdered him wanna tell me where he is? Jeff, when I find you YOU ARE DEAD. That’s all. Oh you remember that hotel, Yeah I know you do, Did you check under your pants after words because I stole a little something when I left. ;)

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      • Rake
        March 2, 2013

        what about me? :[

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      • Noelle
        May 16, 2013

        Hey Jack can I come over an play some Xbox with u? I could make some nachos and bring them over I am a huge gamer!!

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      • Franklin
        May 20, 2013

        Quick, everyone become friends with Jonathan!

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      • Lady Immortal
        July 7, 2013

        I prefer the term psychopath but that’s just me. Some people call me odd or weird and are freaked out when I smile. They think I’m smiling for no reason, but it’s really because I have a new “target”. By the way, I kill with a knife, how about you guys and girls?

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      • Quinn Zora White
        March 27, 2014

        Has Jane caught up to Jeff and start all that you-killed-all-my-friends-and-family bullshit while you guys are trying to play video games yet? I feel like that’s how shit would go down–while Slendy’s trying to open up a game.

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      • Anonymous
        March 3, 2013

        Yo eyeless jack want to play halo?

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      • lolurface
        March 20, 2013

        awesome!!! call of duty black ops?!?!?!?!

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      • lolurface
        March 20, 2013

        DO YOU PLAY CALL OF DUTY BLACK OPS?!?!?!?! I MUST KNOW!!!!!!!!!

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      • Smile Dog
        March 20, 2013

        :D yea…it is hard cause UN like you I have no thumbs…this was also hard to type…

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      • Jason Voorhees
        March 25, 2013

        Jesus smile dog u suck ass when u face me in halou think a dmr is better then a energy sword well I got news for u ass hat y dont u just chew up a ipod likema NORMAL dog ur not even a pasta all u domis give people nightmares jeez

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      • Jordan
        July 29, 2013

        sorry you have no thumbs and I don’t mean to offend you or anything but hey can I play xbox 360 with you guys

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      • Smile Dog
        March 21, 2013

        It is hard for me to play…cause unlike you guys i am a dog and dogs have no thumbs…so…yea

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      • Tails Doll
        June 19, 2013

        So what neither do I and I still win against you

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      • Scarlett
        March 14, 2014

        Smile help me ahh keep that tranquilizer away from me nooooooooooooo

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      • Jeff, and Jack Love Me
        April 26, 2013

        You are REAL!!!!

        I LOVE YOU!!!

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      • Rosieskull
        July 16, 2013

        Tails doll your singing a song that gives away your weakness and you’ll die if you go outside during the day… wtf!!!

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      • Tails doll
        April 29, 2013

        Canyoufeelthesunshine?

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      • Anonymous
        April 29, 2013

        lol

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      • HorrorFanGurl
        May 8, 2013

        bad in your pictures? Pft what are you talking about jack? You look adorable. Wish I could meet you smile dog slender or Jeff… But in the day time if chorse, I get paranoid a lot and seeing you guys at night would freck me out and I would never go asleep again. But if I did meet you guys we could all play a round I’d a game of every ones choice!!! And… Please don’t kill me

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      • Eklipse
        May 16, 2013

        I know right? I don’t think you’re monsters and I’m not obsessed with death like oriole say I just find it interesting

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      • Anonymous
        August 6, 2013

        I would love to see you Eyeless Jack.

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      • Pete
        May 30, 2013

        wow, you look a bit like jack skelington in that pic, (btw, you my favorite creepypasta charecter/being or whatever you like to call yourselvs) say high to slenderman for me! :-)

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      • Carressa
        June 14, 2013

        You guys like to play Xbox? :D YA! You just made my day! Im a gamer girl haha and don’t kill me please, im actually a fan u guys are awesome. You don’t look bad either. Have you heard of Pewdiepie? You should go look him up on Youtube. He has some funny videos of him playing Slender The Arrival and The 8 pages. He plays a lot of other horror games too. I think you would find them funny. :)

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      • DarknessTani
        July 1, 2013

        You guys are like normal people but with an addiction like you with kidneys Jeff with killing and his face Smile is a dog so i really dont know and Slenderman…. Well i got nothing but still you guys are normal people thts all nothing wrong and nothing bad….. right???

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      • DarknessTani
        July 1, 2013

        And ure pic looks great nothing wrong with the pic i give thumbs up like alot (i would also give u my kidneys) also do u play Black opps im a female gammer and like ppl say to me a “freack” but idc any bye

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      • Anonymous
        July 29, 2013

        so you guys just play xbox 360 all day sweet

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      • Jordan
        July 29, 2013

        so you guys just play xbox 360 all day sweet you guys are awesome !!!

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      • Jordan
        July 29, 2013

        so you and the creepy pasta gang just play xbox 360 all day sweet you guys are awesome. Hey can I play xbox 360 with you guys???

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      • francesca
        December 1, 2013

        Jack exist he is awesome so is slender and Jeff misty Jane smile dog and all the creepy pasta

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      • Ava
        July 30, 2013

        Jack, Your fake, And you dont exist.

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      • Scarlett
        March 15, 2014

        Ava watch what you say ok I know for a fact that if you say that will say good bye to your brother

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      • Rachel
        August 11, 2013

        I actually think your pretty cool. Also i wanna play xbox. If you ever find me i promise to protect you guys from police… Unless you kill me. (Please dont)

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      • SlendyTheKiller
        August 24, 2013

        You totally forgot about me, huh? It’s me, Slendy the Killer! Who wants me to make Jane take a nap? Forever?

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      • Jess The Killer
        February 2, 2014

        Me pwease >:3
        And if we do….I’m killing her…My way..

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      • Shadow Girl
        October 12, 2013

        Hi jack. Just wanna say u the awesomest creepypasta EVER. And my niece and I both luv u. Want to play some minecraft sometime?

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      • Desilee
        October 24, 2013

        Thank you. :D

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      • francesca
        December 1, 2013

        Johnathan I agree eyeless Jack Jeff Jane misty all you guys are awesome I have to tell Seed eater something try turkey with gravy instead of kids

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      • Lady Immortal
        January 22, 2014

        Jeff, Slendy, and I play cards sometimes, do they ever mention me? I just wish that someone would write me a creepypasta, I suppose I’ll write one of my own sometime…

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      • Jess The Killer
        February 2, 2014

        You forgot about me D;
        No one remembers me anymore -.-
        They remember Jeff but not his counterpart? D;

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    • Me too
      February 16, 2013

      I had a experience too… He humped me so bad I cried while i slept .=.

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      • Slendy
        February 20, 2013

        Hey i just help out jack ok me and him are friends we play all the time

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      • Rake
        March 2, 2013

        CANNOT believe you slendy!

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      • Jason Voorhees
        March 25, 2013

        Knowone cares about a fucking gardining tool

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      • Katniss
        May 15, 2013

        Yo Rake, member that time we went creepin on people? Yeah, I remember too. Don’t feel left out! Xx Katniss

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      • Rosieskull
        July 17, 2013

        Rake I can’t belive you name your self the Rake,sorry but that’s stupit GET A NEW NAME MOROND AND NOBODY CARES ABOUT YOU!!! sometimes I can be a btch you know…and I like to kill people by a mushetie not scream at them to death..SLENDERMAN IS WAY BETTER THAN YOU!!! ;-)

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      • derpbutt
        July 17, 2013

        Mushetie.

        That is incredible.

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      • Ava
        July 30, 2013

        Slendy, Your fake

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      • Rachel
        August 11, 2013

        Hi slendy. How goes it?

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    • Someone
      February 23, 2013

      Yeah. So many of the Pastas are rushed. People need to learn that longer is not um…. worser. There is one other weird ting, the doctor. This doctor character is terrible “Oh yeah, forgot to tell you, you lost your kidney. No big deal. ”

      “Oh yeah, your brother died. Some… thing killed him. No big deal its fine.”

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      • Morvyd
        March 8, 2013

        its definitely a good story base but thts al it is is a base. it needs more substance and planning. but jeff will always be my favourite :3 <3 hehehehehe

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      • Boo.
        August 6, 2013

        It’s a good start, but it could be a lot longer. More substance. More dialogue with the doctor, maybe? I’d be pretty concerned missing a kidney. Maybe some police investigation thrown in there?

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    • The Killer Known As Jeff
      February 23, 2013

      Agreed.

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      • Smile Dog
        March 20, 2013

        you dont know how long it to me to write this (paws you Know) i wouuld like to say that i am good at xbox, JACK, your just to embaressed to say that a dog can beat you in halo also y nobody look at my pics no more, too many fakes :(

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      • francesca
        December 1, 2013

        Dear eyeless Jack smile dog Jane Jeff you guys are awsome love you please don’t kill me

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    • Ava
      July 28, 2013

      Inreresting story. Anyone agree?

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    • Shaft
      October 9, 2013

      Congratulations to the grade schooler who wrote this. If the author is older than 10, for shame.

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  2. Anon
    January 5, 2013

    This is terrible.

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    • Endoplasmic Reticulum
      January 24, 2013

      I laughed when it got to the kidney part, but if I saw a horrifying creature above me my first thought is not “Where’s my camera?”

      Also, why did it take the creature 24 hours to eat half a kidney?

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      • Someone
        February 23, 2013

        He is toothless?

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      • The Killer Known As Jeff
        February 23, 2013

        He may have just been saving it. Eating just a little bit every once in a while. I dunno.

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      • WonkyTARDIS
        May 19, 2013

        Liked because your name is Endoplasmic Reticulum. My second favourite organelle! (Sorry, but you just aren’t as cool as the Golgi Apparatus.)

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      • Golgi Apparatus
        July 28, 2013

        Yeah! Suck it, ER!

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  3. Anonymous
    January 5, 2013

    Pure rubbish. Was this written by a toddler? -1/10

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  4. THEN WHO WAS….nevermind…
    January 5, 2013

    No! NO!!!!!!! nononononono. Just…..no. HELL no!!!!!! This is the kind of pasta thats been sitting in water in a heated container for about a month!!!

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  5. tytiger10
    January 5, 2013

    Sorry. you lost your kidney. This story is terrible. It doesn’t make half since most of the time. And it’s amazing that this made it on the site. I’ve read better story on crapypasta.com. This story is complete crap.

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    • Hannah
      February 19, 2013

      Plus, I would think if your kidney was ripped out and you had a gash in your cheek you would feel something!

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  6. Tariq
    January 5, 2013

    Well…If it’s an old pasta I won’t critique it too harshly.

    The writing was poor, and many parts of it were unbelievable. There were also a lot of blatant errors. (i.e. If the creature didn’t have eyes, how could it stare down at the narrator?)

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    • derpbutt
      January 5, 2013

      To be frank, I consider it on the same level of Jeff the Killer. I don’t find Jeff to be scary, well-written, or all that good, but for some reason it sure has gotten a fanbase. Given the amount of emails and comments I’ve gotten asking for this one, it seems that it’s a similar case of “well, I sure don’t get the appeal, but it’s popular enough that I’ll put it up anyhow if only to stop all the begging for it.”

      The pastas that become mini-phenomenons sometimes really surprise me, I’ll put it nicely.

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    • Stephan D. Harris
      January 5, 2013

      I don’t understand the world anymore.

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      • UndKeineEier
        January 5, 2013

        I guess people would rather look at a creepy picture then read a creepy story.

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      • Johnathan
        January 25, 2013

        I love your stories man.

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  7. The Man with the Russian Hat
    January 5, 2013

    Okay, I swear I have read this before. Also, this does not have many details. It seems like the story has less elements than the last time that I read this. Also, FYI, if anybody wants to name a pasta “The Man with the Russian Hat”, that person/group may do so.

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    • derpbutt
      January 5, 2013

      If there’s a better version of this floating around, that might… make more sense.

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      • Delirium At Its Finest
        January 6, 2013

        I’m just asking, does anybody know a back story to Eyeless Jack. As in how Eyeless Jack came to be Eyeless Jack? Because I think he’s an interesting character, but I can’t find anything except fanfics, this and a youtube video that appears to be Eyeless Jack’s history but it’s in a foreign language.

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  8. Anon
    January 5, 2013

    So that’s what Charlie found at candy mountain…

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    • ThatCoolKidKyle
      January 7, 2013

      You sir, made my day.

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      • a person
        March 15, 2013

        It’s official eyeless jack is from candy mountain. Derp

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      • Charlie
        March 20, 2013

        WTF thats the thing that stole my kiddny?

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  9. anonymous
    January 5, 2013

    “You somehow lost your left kidney last night. We don’t know how, though. Sorry, Mitch.”

    “I have good news and bad news, Mitch. The good news is that you had minor injuries, and your parents are going to pick you up. The bad news is that your brother has been killed by some… thing. Sorry.”

    …?!

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    • lol
      January 5, 2013

      hahaha

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      • Night
        January 5, 2013

        I thought that was somehow funny in a way,I’m sorry you lost your kidney last night like its nothing.lol

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    • J T
      March 26, 2014

      Hey, it could have been worse:

      “You somehow lost your left kidney last night. We don’t know how, though. Sorry, Mitch. But on the bright side, I did save a lot of money on my car insurance.”

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  10. Anon
    January 5, 2013

    This is more funny than it is scary.

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    • RATER
      March 1, 2013

      To some people it could be funny, to others the story is so bad that they dont react at all. To me its a sad waste of human resourse. Cant wait to see Kiiryas’ version of it though.

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  11. Anonymous Doctor
    January 5, 2013

    Lol sorry bro, u lost ur kidney.
    Oh, and ur brother died lol sorry XD

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    • a person
      March 15, 2013

      XD

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  12. Steph
    January 6, 2013

    The dialogue for the doctor was hilarious.
    “Don’t worry too much about that scratch; you probably just got it while you were sleepwalking. Oh by the way, your kidney appears to be missing somehow.”
    “Hey, champ! Good news and bad news. Good news is that your parents are coming to pick you up! Yay! Oh, and your brother’s dead. Sorry ’bout that.”

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  13. AthenaH2SO4
    January 6, 2013

    “your brother was killed by some…thing. Also, we just kinda left his corpse there, is that okay? We didn’t feel like taking it all the way to the morgue or anything, and we figured your house was as good a place as any.”

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    • firstnamelastname
      January 14, 2013

      “also, even though you just had a sloppy home-removal of your kidney, i think you’d do just fine going home today..”

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      • a person
        March 15, 2013

        O and don’t worry ’bout the gash it should be fine. Have a nice nice day sir knowing that until u die that we left ur bro at home dead, he died of something, u now aperenntly sleep walk making urself have gashes, and ur kidney has be sloppishly home style cut out. (Derp this all sounds like a docter I would love to go see.)

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  14. sarah
    January 6, 2013

    ithink this was creepy but ya i think it was kinda rushed. but still good. i think more deatal

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    • Original Goldfish
      January 11, 2013

      Who’d’ve thought?

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  15. Person
    January 6, 2013

    THEN WHO WAS JACK?!?!!?

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    • a person
      March 15, 2013

      Jack is Jack. derp evan my 2 year old cousin can figure this out.

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      • Herp Derp
        March 20, 2013

        you spelled “evan” wrong its “even” my 2 year old cousin could figure that out

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    • Eyeless Jack
      March 20, 2013

      i know who to visit next,to ki- I mean ea- I mean tell you who i am

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  16. Kezza
    January 6, 2013

    Broseph you lost yo kidney last night and we have no idea how. It’s chill bruh.

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  17. EpicWinning
    January 6, 2013

    i gave it a 10

    it had a good plot and the pic looks convencing

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    • RATER
      February 28, 2013

      HA! Are you kidding me!? The pic isn’t at all scary, the plot was sh**y and the dialog was so bad words cannot describe them. Plus where in the story was the creature ever named “Eyeless Jack” because it was never mentioned once!!!

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  18. Star Kindler
    January 7, 2013

    I don’t know whether to give this a 1 because of how terribly written it is… Or a 10 because of how terribly written it is. I am still laughing at the doctor’s dialogue. :D

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    • a person
      March 15, 2013

      I give it a 10/10 because of the doctor

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  19. An Indian
    January 7, 2013

    seems like the doctor turns into jack at night O.0

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  20. Anonymous
    January 7, 2013

    That doctor has one hell of a bedside manner, doesn’t he?

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    • firstnamelastname
      January 14, 2013

      yes. as well as good judgement in sending a patient home the very same day after finding a shoddily removed kidney.

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  21. Charlie the unicorn
    January 8, 2013

    Aw crap they took my fricken kidneys

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  22. ercie
    January 8, 2013

    potek

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  23. Lazarus
    January 8, 2013

    Pic is obviously you in a hoodie with a mask on -.- 1/10 pretty horrible

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    • jaren
      February 17, 2013

      why do so few people apreciate this story. ):(

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      • RATER
        March 1, 2013

        because it was created by someone who has no writing skills, common sense, or a creative imagination. If i could rate it my way it would be -10/10, oh wait i just did.

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  24. MrDingleey
    January 9, 2013

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  25. DearerBurrito
    January 11, 2013

    You lost you kidney, Sorry. Your brothers dead, Sorry.
    WTF!

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    • Shadenfreude
      April 6, 2013

      LOL ikr? The doctors just like, “Well gee, sorry about that there. Looks like your kidney was mysteriously stolen. Bummer.” “oh, gosh. Your brother is dead. Nobody has even bothered to search for\clean up his corpse, but hey, shit happens” I love the creepypastas that exist in a magical world without police…..

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