• http://Facebook Valkerie Nightstalker

    wow…. just…. wow…

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    Rating: +218 (from 254 votes)
    • the grim sleeper

      wow oh wow,

      i just wonder how,

      the wurds fall in place like a sillohuet of kitty cats,

      jelly fish wearin’ its hat,

      mad hatter!,

      more like a rad hatter,

      out to all the ghosts!

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      • Anonymous

        The ending was great, I love that the parent got to experience what the child was going trough for all that time.

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        Rating: +281 (from 295 votes)
        • min

          this story just creeped me the fuck out… and for that my friend, i raise you a toast

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          Rating: +168 (from 180 votes)
        • Katastrophe

          Good post

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        • http://ok Mr Jaffa cake

          That was the most horrifying story ever this aint fake like that SLENDERMAN dis is real ive always been scared of sleaping but now its nice but this story has blown my mind

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      • The Operator

        I’m pretty sure that comment must have been written by a junkie suffering from slendersickness.

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        • sweet deadlyshadow

          i agree with them i do think its great tht the parents got to expirence it

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          Rating: +27 (from 55 votes)
        • Paddy

          There is no such thing as “slendersickness”. Just the effects of his power over you, making you weak.

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          Rating: -38 (from 66 votes)
        • Paddy

          As the Operator you should know this :P

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          Rating: -27 (from 49 votes)
        • ABEL

          You would know… Operator…

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          Rating: -10 (from 28 votes)
        • Anonymous

          Give me the right
          Area code, and a number
          I can use
          Directory don’t have it
          Central done forgot it
          Got to find a number to use

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        • Anonymous

          This dumb as shit

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        • Anonymous

          agreed

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      • Anonymous

        I just lost 50 IQ points reading that @the grim sleeper

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        • Anonymous

          Thanks Annon, your comment may of just given me cancer

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      • Anonymous

        Cool

        It’s interesting to say the least 10 out of 10

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        Rating: +29 (from 35 votes)
      • shadybanana

        What you just said is one of the most insanely idiotic things I’ve ever heard. At no point, in your rambling incoherent response, were you even close to anything that could be considered a rational thought. Everyone in this comments section is now dumber for having read it. I award you no upvotes and may God have mercy on your soul.

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        • Anonymous

          Love the billy Madison joke! :D

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        • Anonymous

          A simple wrong would have done just as fine…

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          Rating: +14 (from 20 votes)
      • Anonymous

        Yea fuck you dude you arent artsy

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        Rating: -10 (from 18 votes)
      • Greenleigh

        What are you talking about?????

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    • Anonymous

      This is too good.
      Best tasting pasta, so far.

      *standingovation.

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      Rating: +78 (from 86 votes)
    • slarti

      Ha! Thats just a classic poltergeist. Just a man with a magic box. There no ghost or poltergeist, just a desperado with a little special tool. Aka juses sayten..

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      • Anonymous

        A man with a magic box? Are you implying that it was the Doctor?

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        Rating: +53 (from 65 votes)
        • Anonymous

          The doctor can climb into my bed any day!

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          Rating: +83 (from 95 votes)
        • MaryAsh

          Same…

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        • Doctor

          Guess!

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          Rating: +14 (from 18 votes)
        • Anonymous

          When you say the doctor do you mean the doctor from black ops zombies?

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          Rating: -47 (from 61 votes)
        • The Tardis’s sister

          that comment… The doctor is awesome do not imply he was the doctor

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          Rating: +10 (from 12 votes)
        • DoctorIsHere

          The Doctor can visit me nightly anytime he wants :)

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          Rating: +10 (from 14 votes)
    • Anonymous

      Werid

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    • Beastasaur66

      My house is over 200 years old. When I move into the spare room like you, this happened to me too, but It tried to Push me off the top bunk and onto the floor. As my pillow fell down, i swear, it went though the floor! It was tugging me to the ground! I passed out as it grabbed my neck and touched my cheek, almost like you. I woke to the sound of my father knocking on the door, and as he was about to take a step in the room with the floor, I screamed stop, and he did as I said. I threw another pillow down. Nothing. He came in asking what was happening.
      I swear this is true. About a month later I found the pillow that went through the floor. It was in the basement, covered in blood and scratches. My mother wondered what happened to it and just threw it out. Nothing since then happened to me. I still live in that room, though now I have a carpet where the so called beast seemed to appear from

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      • MacKenzie

        yeah sure

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        • Richard

          Well I can’t attest to the above story, but I’ve heard a story from an acquaintance of mine that was about exactly the same type of thing. normally I’d discount such nonsense, but the look that accompanied the story was dead serious in a way that couldn’t be dismissed so easily. Of course sleep paralysis and waking nightmares could be an explanation, this is one of the more believable creepypastas
          I’ve read.

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      • Anonymous

        Cool story bro.

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      • Witness

        Thankfully God has mercifully kept me from ever having experiencing something so horrific…But when I was younger, I had a dream. I was lying in the top bunk of a bunk bed, which was strange considering I had long ago given those up, I was sleeping, cuddling someone. But something made me realize it wasn’t someone but something. Just some dark, featureless creature aside from two mouths full of sharp teeth for a face. We struggled and I cast it off my bed where it fell into this gaping hole in my floor that I knew was Hell. As much as I’d like to say it was just a nightmare… Just thinking about it brings these feelings that tell me that maybe it wasn’t.

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        • Anonymous

          something like that happened to me yet when i was 5.there was rustling of papers coming from under my desk witch was across from me since i lived in a long narrow room like you and sometime a pressure from under my bed came feeling like a small hand witch scared me when i heard how similar your story was.

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        • Anonymous

          seems like this happens to people who sleep on the top bunk of their bunkbed

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        • Anonymous

          i dont get it why dont people believe it….paranormal activities are real nothing is fake….believe your eyes….believe your mind….believe whats in front of you…take a closer look

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      • Anonymous

        me too. accept mine was at the window and i was out after 3 days.

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      • Amber of angels

        Hi, sorry for the people that do not believe you, but I do, because I have seen things in my house. This is why I do not go to sleep without music, because then I can block the sound out, but I have seen people in my house and shadows and I even had a dream of my mom dating my ex step dad 3 years before she deforced my dad. I have also heard a kid laughing at me while I am doing chores….. No one in my family, but my sis and mom, believe me….. Mom has felt them and sis has had things move around…. But anyway I just wanted to say I believe you.

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        • Generic Internet Commenter

          I know exactly how you feel. Its hard to explain and almost unbelievable. But two years ago I was in my house alone. I was doing homework when I heard a sound come from the kitchen downstairs. At first I thought oh my parents are home. I went to go say hi but when I went down there. Nobody was there. Then about a week later I took a picture of the kitchen are since we were selling the house and something caught my eye. I saw the face of what seemed like a teenage girl in the window. I got paranoid at that time and asked my mother why that appeared. She thought I was ready and told me that for years ive been followed by a teenage girl. That she is suppose to be my guardian angel and appears when bad stuff is going to happen to me. I thought it was a load of crap since nothing happened. I saw here several times throughout my years but didnt give any attention to it. But 2 years passed and since I share a room with my little brother we have a bunk bed. One night it was like 3 am, I awoke to the sound of rustling. I thought my brother was just moving around but what scared me was that we sleep with our door closed but it was open. Once my eyes adjusted to the dark I could swe through the crack the silhouette of the girl there watching me. Since I got use to her I didnt scream I just closed the door and went back to bed. Now heres the scary part. Like the story my bed was next to the wall. I started feeling somw scratching on my arm and someone pulling me. Thats when I wanted to scream but my voice was muffled. No scream came out. I struggled to pull myself away from the grasp. Eventually I did and I couldnt see exactly what it was except for a hand that was going back into hiding. I turn and see the girl standing in front of my window motionless. Lets just say I start paying more attention to when I see her around. Thats my horrifying experience.

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      • Kirstin

        Whoa…. That’s just…. whoa. Put up pentacles and triquetras, along with other Wiccan protection symbols… they really work, I promise. Crucifixes, not so much, but they can’t hurt you if you use a Wiccan protection symbol such as a triquetra.

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        • Mufasa

          fuck that call the priest

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        • Elinor Brennan

          YOU CAME BACK MUFASA!!! :D :D :D

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      • eSoh

        I’ve had a similar experience.

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      • moonlightnight

        mhhmmm

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    • Anonymous

      Oh wow

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    • http://creepypasta michael myers

      yea, i didn’t read it :)

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    • Anonymous

      I can’t….the story was badass but now I’m extremely paranoid because my beds up against the wall….shit

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      Rating: +35 (from 37 votes)
      • Avie

        …. so is mine … *smh*

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        Rating: +10 (from 12 votes)
      • lovemandi

        Shit mine too, and I’m on the top bunk .___.

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        Rating: +20 (from 22 votes)
        • Anonymous

          Mine too, dang it…

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          Rating: +2 (from 2 votes)
        • Anonymous

          I have a bunk bed and i sleep in the bottom and its against the wall……shoot…..

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          Rating: +8 (from 10 votes)
    • Anonymous

      This was a Great story

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      Rating: +4 (from 6 votes)
      • Anonymous

        Mine to NOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!

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    • anal thrasher

      such wow
      much scare
      many scarey

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      Rating: -5 (from 35 votes)
      • Anonymous

        Were you so scared you forgot how to spell?!

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        Rating: +5 (from 11 votes)
        • Anonymous

          That was a meme. Doge, tbh.

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          Rating: +2 (from 2 votes)
      • Anonymous

        oh wow

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    • The midnight marinara hooded figure

      It could have been a monster

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      Rating: +3 (from 5 votes)
    • Anonymous

      This is really a wow story it is amaizing!!!!!!!!!!!

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      Rating: +4 (from 4 votes)
    • http://none Deeno

      SUDDENLY CAREBEARS FLY EVERYWHERE!

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      Rating: +1 (from 3 votes)
    • Anonymous

      very good book

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  • Burdicus

    Very well written. Definitely suspensful. It left me wanting more. I wish there would have been some sort of explanation as to what this thing was or why it was harassing the inhabitants of that room, but I guess no knowing it part of the charm.

    Overall, very well done. You got a 9/10 from me.

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  • Beefnuts

    I thoroughly enjoyed that!!

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    Rating: +32 (from 36 votes)
    • https://www.facebook.com/GhastlyTalesPresents Michael Whitehouse

      Thank you. I’ve been overwhelmed by the response to my stories.

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      • Charlie

        Excellent, I enjoyed reading this and the great grammar added to the realism of the story itself. Bravo!

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        Rating: +28 (from 32 votes)
      • Mitchell

        You sir, are an amazing author. I thank you for leaving me paranoid as fuck everytime i read one of your stories!

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        Rating: +1 (from 1 vote)
    • SlenderMan

      Dude I love your name ^-^ Beefnuts epic man just epic

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      Rating: +5 (from 13 votes)
      • random kid

        AW YEA SLENDY

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        Rating: -4 (from 12 votes)
      • Chuck Norris

        Good story, but slendy I kill u fool

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        Rating: -6 (from 18 votes)
  • me-sama

    im 14 and hate the dark and i don’t think i can sleep to night … my bead is pushed up to the wall thank you for reigting this thow .

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    Rating: -58 (from 98 votes)
    • Brandon

      If you’re 14, then you should fix that spelling and grammar.

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      Rating: +107 (from 125 votes)
      • Sean

        Not everyone speaks english…

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        Rating: +11 (from 53 votes)
        • Kayti

          Eeople who don’t have English as a native language usually have spelling and grammar down if they have English as a second language. Plus, he was not careful with his eyes and things of that nature, so you can assume he was just being careless and lazy, like most 14 year olds. (and yes, I am 14 as well).

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        • Gingerbread

          I’m 15, English is my second language and I really don’t see how this has anything to do with grammar and spelling…

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          Rating: +23 (from 41 votes)
        • anonymous

          Says the person who spells people “eeople” and I “eye”

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          Rating: +9 (from 13 votes)
      • Anonymous

        that is quite true

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    • David

      im 15 and i don’t give a shit

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      Rating: +77 (from 81 votes)
      • Bruce

        And I like turtles

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        Rating: +57 (from 71 votes)
        • http://creepypasta.com tytiger10

          I like trains!

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          Rating: +22 (from 44 votes)
        • Hey look its ME!!!!!!

          His has gotten way off track where did trains come from?

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          Rating: +6 (from 20 votes)
        • florence.

          NYEEEOOOOOOOWWW.

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          Rating: +5 (from 11 votes)
        • http://creepypasta.com Sarah

          I like this pasta, and the excellent bread, but the sauce, that was the best part.

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          Rating: +10 (from 16 votes)
        • http://Youareinasearchpagenow tytiger10

          *A random train hits Bruce. Wow I have been waiting for like 5 months for that.

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          Rating: +8 (from 8 votes)
        • Anonymous

          who doesnt?

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    • Mistystar

      Same with me. I don’t like what’s in the dark, not necessarily the dark, too. My bed’s pushed up to the wall too.

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      Rating: +4 (from 6 votes)
      • The Man in Red Stains

        Pshhh I never use my bed I sleep on a sofa in my room XD

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        Rating: +1 (from 5 votes)
  • Aurelia

    I liked this a lot! It was very gripping and creepy and I enjoyed every word.

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    Rating: +31 (from 41 votes)
  • Mr cannon

    I…AM….PLEASED.

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    Rating: +54 (from 68 votes)
    • PWAL

      That’s what she said.

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      Rating: +33 (from 61 votes)
      • Slenderman

        He

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      • Anonymous

        Epic. I’m glad I’m not the only one who thought that.

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        Rating: +6 (from 6 votes)
    • Anonymous

      ever been to plasnewydd mr cannon?

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  • https://www.facebook.com/GhastlyTalesPresents Michael Whitehouse

    Hi everyone. Thank you for the kind words. There are actually 4 other follow-up stories to this. I’ll submit them to Creepy Pasta, but if you would like to read them now then you can find them here:

    http://www.wattpad.com/6852431-bedtime-watty-awards-2012-the-aftermath

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    • indigo

      just finished reading this story and all the follow-ups, and i am in awe. i don’t think i’ve been this creeped out in a while. excellent work!

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      Rating: +11 (from 13 votes)
    • Anonymous

      This was sooo good! By the way you wrote this it really makes it sound like an experience you actually had.

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      Rating: +3 (from 3 votes)
    • serenawitchwriter

      hey I remember reading this on wattpad. why did you cancel your account?

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  • Akai no Yuki

    I love it! Just one question. When he says they lasted 10 days and we moved on the 11th what does he imply?

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    • Hopen

      that his parents were harrased by the thing and they decided to move after enduring it for 10 nights

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      Rating: +29 (from 29 votes)
    • JustanotjerFan

      He implyed that after 10 days in the room,the parents got scared and moved out the 11th day

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      Rating: +4 (from 4 votes)
  • Danielle

    Holy shit, this is prolly the second one to ever really scare the piss out of me, next to the Russian sleep test.

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    Rating: +18 (from 20 votes)
    • Anonymous

      What the fuck is prolly?

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      • Anonymous

        Must have meant probably.

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  • raymond

    This was one of the best stories I’ve ever read mkay

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    • https://www.facebook.com/GhastlyTalesPresents Michael Whitehouse

      That’s really kind of you to say that.

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      Rating: +8 (from 10 votes)
  • Cavoto

    That was fantastic. Incredible vocabulary and use of basic mechanics. You have written a truly great suspenseful pasta. 10/10 easily.

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    • Danielle

      10/10 would read

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      Rating: +12 (from 12 votes)
  • LollipopGestapo

    Holy fucking shit. This was absolutely terrifying. This made me very uneasy. I have always hated sleeping alone in the dark, and this drew in all of those fears. I’m 24 years old, and I will still undoubtedly be sleeping with the door open. Dear lord. Bravo. Really, good form. ten out of fucking ten.

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  • http://facebook.com/nicolasjauvin Gingerbread

    Very good! So well written and detailed, truly creeped me out as I read this laying in my bed pressed up against the wall with my window nearby at 3 in the morning! Very nice job sir, hope to see more from you :)

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    Rating: +12 (from 16 votes)
  • Keiren

    This scared the hell out of me. My brother and I had bunk beds when were kids, and this totally brought back the fear I used to have that something on the upper bunk was going to lean over and get me at night. Of course I never felt that comfortable when we’d switch beds, either…

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    • Not my real name

      So glad i got a new bed.

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  • PuddingTea

    Good show! Nine out of ten pumpkins!

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    Rating: +5 (from 9 votes)
  • Moo

    WOW WOW WOOOOW! I loved it! The ghoul kind of reminded me of an old Are You Afraid of the Dark monster that lived in the walls. I used to be utterly terrified of that idea! Now you’ve managed to reignite that fear with 10X more intensity! This story was AMAZING! Your writing is so professional! I can’t wait to read more of your stories!

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    Rating: +8 (from 10 votes)
    • https://www.facebook.com/GhastlyTalesPresents Michael Whitehouse

      Thank you, it means a lot to me when people enjoy my stories. I am currently trying to become a professional writer. I’ll be self publishing my first collection online called ‘Bedtime and Other Tales of Terror’ soon. Fingers crossed I can get a publisher interested in it. If not, then I’ll just write for the love of it :)

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      • Archfiend

        I pity the person who doesn’t see the gift and potentail you have. This story is far greater than most horror stories or even movies. This story alone, is even greater than the horror story series that I’m making! You Deserve a pat on the back!

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  • Anonymous

    There were a few times when I was reading and suddenly I realized I wasn’t breathing. The suspense really made me only want to keep reading. What brought me out of my trance, however, was that you kept using the word “breath.” You used it so much, and at times you meant “breathe.” There is a difference. I might have passed out if not for those few errors. Just might want to do one more run through when checking your stories. Other than that, bravo.

    I also look forward to a story with a villain who maybe has a motive and an explanation for why it is doing these things. Who knows, I might write one, then someone can criticize me.

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    • https://www.facebook.com/GhastlyTalesPresents Michael Whitehouse

      Thank you for the kind words. You are quite right, there are a couple of typos which I need to correct. Thank you for pointing them out!

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    • Dovahween

      I felt the exact same thing. While reading I found my breathing pattern changing over and over. Never have I read such a short story that put me in this kind of trance. I like this a lot. I think I’ll spread it around a little.

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  • Xaoh20z

    Epic i just don’t understand what you meant by they lasted 10 days.. but u moved on the 11th.

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    • https://www.facebook.com/GhastlyTalesPresents Michael Whitehouse

      Something happened to them in that room…

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    • Suzanne

      The parents saw the thing, too, so they left.

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  • Nick Wagner

    Wow only I’m prity shore that you wouldnt remember all that detail @ 5 other wize great job

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    • https://www.facebook.com/GhastlyTalesPresents Michael Whitehouse

      This story is based on an experience I had as a child. I remember the whole ordeal vividly. It still haunts me.

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      • Abby

        The experience you described is almost exactly the same as what I went through as a child, except mine was accompanied by sleep paralysis and I didn’t tell anyone or even let on that I was having nightmares until many years later. If you know any more about the science/superstition behind this, I would greatly appreciate any info you could pass on to me.

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    • Anonymous

      Pretty sure he was 8.

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  • Manny Pacquiao

    WHO IS WALL MONSTER?!

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  • iDeceiver

    I loved this one. I wish there were details on the appearance of the creature though. But I guess it adds to the mysteriousness. 10/10

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    • https://www.facebook.com/GhastlyTalesPresents Michael Whitehouse

      Thank you, I’m really glad you enjoyed it. This is the first story in a 5 parter. As soon as Creepypasta.com starts taking submissions again I will send them in. If you click my name it’ll take you to my Facebook where the rest of my stories are :)

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  • Lanie

    Actually I’m not that into supernatural stuff. But this one – to sum it up – was simply WOW! Couldn’t stop reading. Also I just HAD to follow the link to the follow-up-stories). Will comment as soon as they are uploaded here as well.

    For this part: 10/10

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    • https://www.facebook.com/GhastlyTalesPresents Michael Whitehouse

      Thanks so much for taking the time to read the other stories. I hope you liked them :)

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  • http://www.creepypasta.com epicwolf

    Oh my god thats scary

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  • YumPasta

    A very well written Creepypasta.
    This truly is a terrifying story, but I wish I could know what the creature wanted or how did it look like.
    Regardless, 10/10
    BEST PASTA EVER

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    • Anonymous

      Creature? It’s a pedophile or rapist…

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  • dapplemii

    This is fantastic! I loved the ending.

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