• Her

    Kickass.

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  • Undeadliver

    Not impressed. Concept reused way too many times. A rather bland story in general that reached no notable zenith. 5/10.

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    Rating: -55 (from 67 votes)
    • CarrotCake

      The concept of a virus that forces people to voluntarily consume live flesh from insects, and eventually humans has been used “way too many times” and is “bland”? Give me at least two examples.

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  • asdf

    get out.

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  • The brown stain on the wall

    First post on an extremely well written story. 9/10

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  • Resi

    I had to reread the last paragraph to get it.

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  • Caedus

    Hm… Question. How is going to be able to eat the person with no teeth? Anyway, its an okay pasta.

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    • bitch

      thats the whole point, he wants to attack someone but with no teeth he cant.

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    • Tyler

      You know, I thought the exact same thing. He could cut off chunks and swallow them whole, I suppose. If not, then I feel bad for the first person he’s going to gum to death. *shudder* It was a well written pasta, in my opinion, but a bit bland. There’s something lacking that I can’t quiet put my finger on. I like the aspect of the infection coming from outer space, since rare/mutated forms of known diseases seem to be a bit too overused. All in all, a more than decent pasta. 8/10

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      • Jason

        but it wouldn’t be part of a living creature if you it was cut off of the victim…

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    • CarrotCake

      That makes it even more disturbing. To eat, he’ll have to gouge out eyes, rip out the poor victims tongue, and reach in through their mouth to pull out soft, vulnerable organs.

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  • Levy

    I liked it^^

    The fact that the infected didn’t turn into brainless and sadistic zombies but were aware of the things they did and felt bad about it but still had to do it was nice!

    Also, FIRST!

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  • Funnyjunker

    1st. Good story, i knew it would lead to cannibalism. Also, how did a meteor cause this? Radiation sickness? Space Virus? Also…

    WHO WAS METEOR.

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    • Notch

      The meteor contained an alien strain which caused a body to decompose like a corpse.

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  • Wing

    Wow, not bad. Kept me interested to the end but it woulda been cool to have some more details here and there.

    Nice fresh pasta!

    7/10

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    Rating: +7 (from 7 votes)
  • Nathara

    What’s the storyteller going to do? Gnaw on the reader’s arm?

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  • Riley

    “First!” “First! “First!” Heh. People don’t seem to understand that the comments are not posted immediately….

    Anyway. I posted my feedback on the forums, but I’ll say it here again: Two thumbs up.

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    Rating: +11 (from 11 votes)
  • http://creepypasta.com Someone is here now

    Wow, me and my friend were talking about this three days ago!
    funny how things work out huh.

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  • Condlejock

    Good, good. An interesting new spin on the zombie genre with an impressive ending.

    8.5/10

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  • Kryptography

    I’m not really 100% sure on the concept…so the reader is reading this inside the writer’s house and he’s sneaking up on them as they’re reading it?

    Otherwise…is this just a confession?

    I don’t get the framing device 100% but overall while it’s a bit of an old theme (disease makes people act like zombies), it’s well written and entertaining. I’d give it a 8/10.

    Oh and Funnyjunker: we’re not doing that lame ass “WHO WAS” crap anymore by the request of the site admin.

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  • Jazzy the Man (who is a woman)

    Average pasta. Nice spin that they are aware of what’s happening, but it wasn’t really gripping…. Aside from the fact that the people are very self aware, nothing else is new. 6/10

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  • Anonymous

    I stopped reading after the first sentence.

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  • -*.inc

    Zombies whos teeth fall out?

    FAIL

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  • anonomouse

    was any one else confused when he said he was a bear?

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  • Wheat

    “two months now since the meteor struck Mississippi. There was a lot of public interest in it, astrologers and the like all gathering around for a look.”

    Am I the only one that noticed he said astrologers? As in people who read/write horoscopes and not astronomers the scientists who study celestial bodies.

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  • Wheat

    The whole thing was pretty bad =/

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  • nightmarific

    ooh, i always love a good cannibal story! but still, not as creepy as i would have thought it would be, still delicious but it has a weird consistancy, like dried coconut…O_o nevermind, 7/10

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  • COCK

    Dude. Zombie concept used millions of times. Too unoriginal.

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  • http://channelislandsghosttrackers.com Deathbecomesme

    This wasn’t bad….pretty yummy pasta…the ending needs a little work though……8.5/10

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  • Anon

    Expected ending was expected.

    7/10

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  • BananaCorn

    Hey, OP here. I’m glad so many of you like it. I’ll admit off the bat that I didn’t really consider how the infected (Don’t really want to call them zombies, because, technically they aren’t dead) eat people without teeth. I suppose that they hadn’t lost all their teeth at once, like the narrator. I’m just stoked that it made it here, that’s enough for me.

    Peace out

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