Scary Paranormal Stories & Short Horror Microfiction

Creepypasta

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A thousand miles away, there is an attic. No one knows about the attic, for a very good reason. If you were to stand outside the building the attic is in, you’d be hard pressed to find the courage to enter the crumbling, ragged building. Outside, on a plaque that’s been torn at and faded by wind and water, is the origin of the reason no one enters. “Quiet Acres Mental Institution,” it reads. Many of the letters are gone. If you were to walk inside the creaking, boarded up door, you’d be met with darkness. A single candle lights by an unseen hand, and the wind blows the door closed behind you. At least, you hope it’s the wind. Looking around you, you see a rickety spiral staircase. A thousand cobwebs. A mirror that you think you see a flash of a face in. But you pass it off as nothing. Just a trick of the light. Or so you hope. You take the candle with you as you go up the staircase that creaks under your weight.

Up, up, up you go. You hold the candle before you as the wind howls at the windows and screams to be let in. Cold drafts threaten to extinguish the flame, but you keep going. Creak, creak, creak go the stairs. Let me in! Let me in! Cries the wind. You feel something cold and almost cloth like brush your hand. You gasp and pull away from whatever it is. Just a cobweb, you think before continuing. You hear someone calling your name. You whip your head around, looking frantically. There it is again! A voice like a breath calls your name, coming closer and closer. You scream and run the first way your feet go-forward. Your name is called again, and you can hear the insanity as it laughs. You’re getting closer and closer to the attic. A door creaks, then falls down before you. The voice calls your name again, sounding but a few paces behind you. You vault over the door and run, run through the cobwebs.

Your heart is pumping, beating so you think it’ll just burst out of your chest. you’ve reached the attic, but you don’t know that. Room 113, it reads on the ancient plaque. You open the unlocked door, and slam it behind you. “Hello,” A voice says. You whip around and scream a sound that you’ve never heard yourself make before-one of pure fear. On the ground before you is a young girl, not older than seven. She looks normal enough, but you can see the hot light of insanity in her eyes. She has a circle of candles and broken dolls around her. She laughs, a sound that chills you to the bone. “I’m crazy, if you’re wondering. Everyone says I am.” She rolls her head back and lets it loll there like a rag dolls. “You should leave. I have this urge to just wrap my hands around your neck and squeeze.” You start to back away. “Do you know why I’m the only one left here? I got lost. I got lost, and found myself here. I couldn’t unlock the door, and I starved.” She smiles sweetly. “Would you like to stay with me? We can be insane together!” You find the window behind you, and freeze as the little girl walks towards you slowly. “Or you can fall. Either way.”

Suddenly, she seems to fly towards you. Her face, as blank as a sheet over a ghost, has no eyes, no features. “Join me!” She hisses somehow. You wordlessly shake your head and take a final step backwards. The little girl laughs as you stumble and pitch backwards, as you fall down, down, down. You watch as the little girl smiles as you fall. As the candles fade into darkness. Then, you feel a terrible crunch and everything goes dark.

Next time someone enters the Quiet Acres Mental Institution, you call their name, haunt their minds, and never let them escape.

Credit To: Hannah

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  • Adveshan

    And then a skeleton popped out!

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    Rating: +15 (from 17 votes)
  • WhatisthisWinter

    You forgot the part where it was supposed to be scary.

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    Rating: +15 (from 17 votes)
    • Vadim

      This pasta sucks no scary part girl braboboly stalker

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      Rating: -3 (from 3 votes)
      • Anonymous

        braboboly omg

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        Rating: +1 (from 1 vote)
  • RedBeans

    Considering this got such a low rating, i thought this was quite good, and straight to the point, it makes a change from all those lengthy pastas we’ve had recently.

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    Rating: +4 (from 16 votes)
  • user 390-56

    i liked it nice grammer dont want to visit quiet acres tho ~shiver~ dont want to die today!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! GOOD PASTA I LIKED IT :D

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  • fallenangel013

    please don’t write anymore or at least figure out how to properly word your sentances.

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    Rating: -7 (from 15 votes)
    • girl

      you can’t even spell, sentences*

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      Rating: +23 (from 23 votes)
      • Vadim

        lol ololololololololololololololol

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        Rating: +5 (from 5 votes)
  • The Reader

    Had so much potential. Felt like the old campfire the stories I used to hear at summer camp. Then you just threw the ending away. The final paragraph was totally predictable. I felt disappointed overall.

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    Rating: +7 (from 7 votes)
  • Lab

    When did creepypasta become PG rated? I’m starting to think there’s a community of trolls out there writing crappypastas, considering the two I read before this were just as horrid, as if someone wrote a summary of a Goosebumps.

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    • https://www.facebook.com/betonunesneto Alberto N.

      hey! goosebumps are awesome…

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      • AssHat

        Yeah, if you’re ten

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        • Vadim

          lol Hat is right i used to read goosebumps when i was 7 know im 13

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          Rating: -3 (from 3 votes)
  • PrincessDango

    This is a okay pasta. It had okay grammar, the and the story line was good. It wasn’t really that scary though, it reminded me of Luigi’s Mansion for some reason. 6/10

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  • Rose

    I have to say the first line turned me off. If no one knows about the attic, how are you telling us about it?

    Pretty decent though. It had potential. I would recommend trying it with a narrative style, not so much the ritual style next time. :)

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  • Anonymous

    Most ritual pastas suck, especially the ones that forget to be ritual pastas halfway through, like this one did.

    You need to learn how to use paragraphs and properly punctuate dialogue. Look those two things up on Google or ask your English teacher at school, or maybe read some books and pay attention to how it’s done there.

    And try something less trite and overdone for your next pasta. Creepy little girls and broken down mental hospitals are tired old horror cliches, and while they do sometime work, it’s obvious that you just threw them in here because you’d seen them elsewhere and didn’t really consider the subtle nuances of what actually makes them scary.

    Read some good books, do some thinking on the differences between your writing and that of published authors, and I’m sure you will improve. Good luck and keep writing.

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  • Anonymous

    I would be insane with her. <3

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  • Anonymous

    Scream a sound. Lol. Why did the mods let this garbage through. Its like it was written by a ten year old

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    Rating: +1 (from 3 votes)
  • Crystal Aaron

    Hmm… I like the whole “Mental Institution” thing going here. Just needs a little bit more.

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  • Anonymous

    but who was phone ?!

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  • DJ

    “Creak, creak, creak go the stairs. Let me in! Let me in! Cries the wind.”
    I felt like I was reading a bad, very cliche childrens’ story. Next time, try to make your stories scary and mature.

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    Rating: +3 (from 3 votes)
    • Vadim

      true,very true

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  • http://crappypasta.com the cake

    “you” is the reason i skipped this story. i couldn’t keep choking down the yous

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    • Cinder

      It was very interesting, given that very few things I find have it written in second person. If read correctly, and with the right mindset, it could be very creepy.

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  • Teethmeat

    At ‘there is an attic a thousand miles a way’ I was put off; me and a friend set off from our separate houses and ended up at different attics.

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  • Haruhi-chan

    “I’m crazy, or at least everyone says I am” or something to that effect. (T_T) just… Really?

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  • http://creepypasta.com rockaholic

    I wouldve been insane with her tbh xD

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