• Anonymous

    Scariest story I’ve read yet.

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    Rating: +15 (from 17 votes)
  • Bryan

    Is it me, or is that Slenderman in the background?

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    Rating: +86 (from 92 votes)
    • Anonymous

      Yup. That’s Slendy alright. He got bored.

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      Rating: +5 (from 9 votes)
    • ME

      I have a general with pastas NEVER LOOK AT THE PICTURES

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      Rating: +23 (from 25 votes)
      • CANDLEJACK

        I think it looks more like Hagrid…

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        Rating: +2 (from 4 votes)
        • CakeFace

          nahhhh, its Grim Reaper seee seeee look, Slendy doesnt wear a hood,

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          Rating: -1 (from 1 vote)
    • Anonymous

      Slendys photo bombing

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      Rating: +18 (from 20 votes)
      • Trying to keep my dinner down

        The photo kinda looks like a beaver

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        Rating: +3 (from 3 votes)
  • Chase

    hot

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    Rating: +20 (from 24 votes)
  • mona

    holy shit that was scary

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    Rating: +15 (from 15 votes)
  • Anon

    Interesting. Picture’s a good touch.

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    Rating: +21 (from 23 votes)
  • Anonymous

    the picture was a very nice touch, and the story was good.. i felt it was a bit too quickly paced. and that the word crudely was used to many times too often. but great story none the less.

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    Rating: +19 (from 21 votes)
  • http://Www.show-em-the-ropes.tumblr.com Mental_Patient

    Jesus fuck that was scary! Great pasta, although the beginning was lacking something. But overall, 10/10. Picture was a great touch, and scared me.

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    Rating: +11 (from 11 votes)
  • Pyromania

    Nice picture.
    I liked but the story felt as if the author was stood right next to all the characters, just writing down what they saw happening instead of telling the story. It was slightly off putting but it didn’t stop me from enjoying the story.
    The picture reminded me of Jeff The Killer in the sense that its some weird face that’s vaguely human and has a slightly creepy effect to it but this picture didn’t creep me out for more than a few minutes.
    7/10

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    Rating: +6 (from 6 votes)
  • blah

    that was good had my heart racing when i saw the picture

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  • Eyrion

    I guess they deserved it. Still, scary as Hell! Awesome job.

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    Rating: +3 (from 3 votes)
  • Greta

    Great pasta! It feels like he should have waited a few years, though, cultivating his revenge until they grow up, cuz killing so many people would be a little too hard for a kid, especially the one who just got out of the ICU… But nonetheless the story is well-written and is a good read! Thank you))

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    Rating: +10 (from 10 votes)
  • Jivy

    Great pasta, very delicious 10/10 one question
    WHO WAS FORMIC ACID?!

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    Rating: +4 (from 14 votes)
  • Hannah

    That was a very great story, but told a little too quickly. The picture really scared me and I would like to read more of your work.
    8/10

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    Rating: +3 (from 3 votes)
  • http://creepypasta.com me

    This is a different version of Jeff the same things happen except you changed some of it but as for the face burning it happened in Jeff the killer too.

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    • Homeless One

      No it didn’t. Jeff burned off his eyelids and cut at his cheeks to make it smile. There was no searing of the skin to the bone.

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  • Deltaelitecolt

    Best pasta i have read yet. I wss so impressed, i even decided to comment and let you know. This is first pasta i am actually leaving a reply and this to show my appreciation to the author. There are a few things i would like to point out though. Firstly, the plot was too quickly paced. The main character, the killer guy was very vaguely described after he got disfigured. There was not enough depth in the character as he slid into the murderer guy from the comical guy. Besides that, the murderer’s character buildup was too fast. As in I did not really get to know that character and suddenly he starts killing people. Secondly, more detail could be put into the killings. And I am not ignoring the fantastic way you potrayed the last victim’s wounds and injuries. But i meant more detail for the other murders. But i like the way you ended it cause it left me with a little to imagine myself, plus it added a bit more of the scare element. Going back to the point, the story would have been creepier if each of the other victims’ murders were more detailed. That’s about it. But overall. Very well done. The best pasta i have read yet. Please keep doing more. :)

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    Rating: +6 (from 6 votes)
  • Anonymous

    Awesome, just use a thesaurus for some synonyms of the word crude.

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  • Roger Smith

    Great story, that picture creeps me out even when I just scroll by it. 10/10.

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    Rating: +2 (from 2 votes)
  • inihrgesicht

    Good story, except for the fact that formic acid is TOO weak to be corrosive :P Nitric or sulphuric would have been better.

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    Rating: +4 (from 6 votes)
  • meh

    THE PICTURE IS F*UCKING SCARY!!

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    Rating: +2 (from 4 votes)
  • A

    Alright story, bad taste in acid 9a little stronger would have done the trick), and VERY nice picture at the bottom. Honestly wasn’t expecting that ;) Koodos, my friend.

    Also, Slenderman is obviously behind this >_>

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    Rating: +1 (from 5 votes)
  • Shan

    I have to say, the picture completed this particularly tasty pasta.

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  • Adele

    lucky the picture wasn’t clear

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    • Anonymous

      I would have appreciated the pic being clearer. Although, gore and stuff has always been my favorite…

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  • Reika

    I gave it 9 stars for the picture alone.

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  • http://creepypasta.com jimmy

    i did what i needed to do

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    Rating: +9 (from 9 votes)
  • Anonymous

    Oh the humanity! Who uses VHS anymore!?

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    • Anonymous

      …Me.

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      • Anonymous

        Liar.

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