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  1. nathaniel
    December 10, 2012 • 12:18 AM

    damn that was good i felt like he waz right behi………………

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    • Slenderskiller23
      December 18, 2012 • 10:38 AM

      Slender actually came from Germany which is where I am right now, they call him Schlanker mann.

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      • Jonathan
        January 1, 2013 • 12:07 AM

        Wait isn’t he called Grossmann?

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        • The alternate user name
          January 7, 2013 • 10:22 AM

          That to, I was just giving a literal translation.

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  2. Durrr
    December 10, 2012 • 12:37 AM

    I KNEW it was going to be a story about slender man on the first 3 paragraphs…

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    • Slenderskiller23
      December 18, 2012 • 10:39 AM

      you don’t say…

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  3. Matt
    December 10, 2012 • 1:07 AM

    Ahhhh, that was a very well written pasta. Thanks for uploading.

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    Rating: +5 (from 11 votes)
  4. StoneH
    December 10, 2012 • 4:52 AM

    Slenderman = auto 0.

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  5. Anonymous
    December 10, 2012 • 6:36 AM

    That is the creepiest thing I have ever read!!!!

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  6. Tony
    December 10, 2012 • 7:03 AM

    But slendy cant laugh as far as everyone knows he never says anything.

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    • Endoplasmic Reticulum
      January 16, 2013 • 5:03 PM

      That doesn’t mean he can’t laugh now and then. That’s the thing about slenderman, barely anything is known about him so anyone can make him do anything in a story.

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    • ???
      February 28, 2013 • 6:18 PM

      He does have sorta a mouth in Slender: The Arrival.

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      • Corbinus
        May 21, 2013 • 5:50 PM

        Yeah…but the game doesn’t really apply to the original creepypasta. It annoys me when people think that Slendy originated from the game. Great pasta by the way!

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  7. Mr. Pooley
    December 10, 2012 • 8:36 AM

    This pasta was pretty tasty. :)
    I don’t usually get into to the slendy stuff on here, but this was effectively emotional and descriptive, well done Shannon. :D

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  8. The Reader
    December 10, 2012 • 9:15 AM

    A Slenderman pasta where something actually happens????
    *faints*

    :D

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    Rating: +20 (from 22 votes)
  9. Lolwat?
    December 10, 2012 • 9:34 AM

    “I should have noticed that new tree. A tree that hadn’t been there yesterday. A tree that shouldn’t have been there at all. It wasn’t even a tree.”
    Wut.

    “I turned slowly, and saw him. It. Whatever the Hell it is or was. It was So. Tall. 10 feet maybe.”

    I stopped reading at this point because your sentence structure was atrocious and the story itself was just a cluster of cliche. The only thing even remotely creepy about this story is the fact that it managed to be scheduled with what appears to be damn near no effort. 0/10

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    • Eye
      December 11, 2012 • 8:18 PM

      Wow, you are certainly a harsh rater. I didn’t find that much wrong with the story….

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    • Zoe
      December 13, 2012 • 9:59 AM

      I completely agree with your comment. The sentences are extremely choppy and take away from the story.

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      Rating: -9 (from 19 votes)
      • Anonymous
        February 4, 2013 • 4:29 PM

        I think the sentences are supposed to be choppy. I think it builds suspense. You shouldn’t look at the sentence structure anyway. You should just read and enjoy the story. Though this didn’t represent Slenderman correctly, it was a good story. Alderman causes people to disappear without a trace; he doesn’t torture them, or even try to kill them.

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    • Haunted by Him
      May 16, 2013 • 9:03 PM

      That was a bit harsh. This is my favorite Pasta (the kind that doesn’t make me gag) after all, even though Slender Man is haunting me. For some reason, reading stories like this sooth me from my fear.

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  10. Cynnical Person
    December 10, 2012 • 10:01 AM

    Personally, I didn’t think this story captured the image of Slenderman properly. You make him out to be this sadistic guy who tortures people and then lets them go. But often, he’s rather known to make people disappear without a trace instead. Plus I never heard of Slenderman ever laughing before. If this story wasn’t about Slenderman, but an original monster or even a killer, it would have been pretty good.

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    • TheRadHatter
      December 11, 2012 • 12:56 PM

      Slenderman is a fictional character..meaning u cannot point out those kinds of flaws. “I’ve never heard of him laughing before.” That’s unique, not an error.

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    • Anonymous
      December 19, 2012 • 1:29 PM

      Actually there are stories of Slender mutilating people and putting their organ’s in bags and stuff. There are also stories of him taking people to a beter place as well as just taking the to god knows where?

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      • Anonymous
        December 28, 2012 • 3:34 PM

        so know one knows since god doesnt exist

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        • Anonymous
          April 14, 2013 • 4:28 PM

          yes he does!

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          • Haunted
            May 18, 2013 • 3:01 AM

            I’m a witch, so I do not believe in God, or at least not a singular one.
            People say I should run, but we all know how well that works.
            People say Slender Man isn’t real. Wish I could say the same. I saw him again tonight, and I’ve lost count of how many times I’ve seen him. He’s getting closer.
            They say I need to trust God. If that’s the case, I’m as good as dead.

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        • unknown
          April 14, 2013 • 4:28 PM

          yes he does!

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      • Omg I'm so creeped out
        January 4, 2013 • 6:54 PM

        Really? could you tell me the name?

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  11. Rage_Quitter
    December 10, 2012 • 2:19 PM

    To give this pasta a 0\10 because you don’t like 2 grammatical errors is crazy.

    It deserves at least a 5\10 even with said errors, simply because its so diverse and interesting compared to other Slenderman pastas.

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    • Lolwat?
      December 11, 2012 • 1:43 PM

      It’s not so much the grammatical errors as it is that it robbed me of being able to get into the story. The errors themselves led me to be unable to enjoy the actual story, which in itself wasn’t bad. The real problem is that the errors weren’t tiny, they were huge and made suspending disbelief very difficult for me.

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      • Troll_man_McSlender
        December 11, 2012 • 9:20 PM

        WHOA! creepy pasta. I GIVE IT 10 STARS BUDDIE .3. (YEP I DON’T KNOW YOU AT ALL)

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      • Kelly-Jo Samuels
        May 14, 2013 • 11:38 AM

        U didn’t allow urself to get into the story. Silly human. I dislike simpletons who think they know everything.

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  12. Eye
    December 10, 2012 • 3:20 PM

    I personally enjoyed this story very much. The only thing I would look out for are a few, VERY FEW grammatical errors. Other than that, very tasty pasta! Well done! 8/10, Eye approves!

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    • Anonymous
      December 11, 2012 • 10:54 PM

      Few? Did we read the same story?! There was about one grammatical abomination per sentence!

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      • Someone you wish u never met
        December 14, 2012 • 12:14 PM

        Calm down I thought it was good nobody’s perfect

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  13. Shannon
    December 10, 2012 • 4:35 PM

    Thank you all for the positive and negative feedback. I do realize that some of my sentences were poorly constructed and written. Thank you for pointing those out. Also, in my defense, I wrote this when the Slenderman mythos were far more obscure and I had hoped to create a new outlook on them. Again, thank you for all the feedback and please keep it coming!

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    • Lolwat?
      December 11, 2012 • 1:45 PM

      Wooh, finally, an author that takes criticism well. I was a bit harsh with my comment, but the story itself wasn’t bad when I took the time to read it.

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    • shoobnop
      February 14, 2013 • 9:58 AM

      Yes, but you used the marble hornets symbol. You can’t watch marble hornets, use their symbol, then make him son crazy sadistic murdered. I would not have a problem with this unique take on the slender man if you didn’t steal elements from marble hornets.

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  14. Bonnie Rose
    December 10, 2012 • 6:27 PM

    How can he be behind me if I am on the toilet?

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  15. ẠbracadaveЯ
    December 10, 2012 • 6:50 PM

    So. Many. Sentence fragments. And weirdly short sentences. Why.

    I would have considered this fairly well written if not /every/ sentence had been so short and choppy; it felt kinda like the story was being coughed out. Sure, Slenderman has been done a lot, but the writing itself is at least better than a good deal I’ve seen on here. You just might need to try reading your work aloud to yourself to see how it flows, and try interspersing some longer sentences among the short ones to make it “feel” a bit less awkward. Short sentences are great at imparting a sense of rush or urgency, but when they’re almost all your story is composed of, it makes it oddly uncomfortable to read.

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  16. anonymous
    December 11, 2012 • 5:44 AM

    I did not enjoy this. In my opinion, you need to read more novels in order to expand your vocabulary. I also suggest developing a fresh, individual writing style with less cliche terms. Since there are SO many Slenderman pastas, you have more to compare to, and your frequent usage of choppy sentences did not set the bar very high.

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  17. anonymous
    December 11, 2012 • 5:45 AM

    I forgot to mention, the whole “you may not see him but he sees you” thing is getting old.

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  18. Kayla
    December 11, 2012 • 12:12 PM

    Damn even if it was a powerful monster like slendy you hurt my cat you are dead! no exceptions!

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  19. TheRadHatter
    December 11, 2012 • 12:53 PM

    I saw 10 feet tall and in a business suit and stopped reading. ENOUGH WITH SLENDY ALREADY!!
    Let the thumbs down-fest commence.

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    • Nate
      December 13, 2012 • 12:41 AM

      I agree that the story started out really good until I noticed it was about slenderman then I stopped reading. Slender man is getting so old it’s becoming lame enough already be original come up with something different!!!

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      • Someone you wish u never met
        December 14, 2012 • 12:21 PM

        If you don’t like slenderman or this story don’t make the writer feel bad! And I like the slender man stories!

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  20. Anonymous
    December 13, 2012 • 12:35 AM

    Wow another Slenderman story…How original :/

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  21. Anonymous
    December 13, 2012 • 11:53 AM

    I have to agree with some of the others..slender man is getting a bit old…but, I lie the way you executed it. You didn’t go with all the cliches. Slender man was never anything frightening to me. More like intriguing. This was a good spin on him in my opinion. Sort of a sadist. Something along the lines of cat and mouse. It seems quite interesting….

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  22. Justin Abner
    December 14, 2012 • 4:53 AM

    Dammit I wish just once JUST ONE! slenderman would acutaly come for me pff I’ve been waiting for weeks and I havn’t seen the symbol ONCE! Not fair :(

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  23. Seiren
    December 14, 2012 • 8:57 AM

    I don’t understand why this has such a high rating.
    It’s poorly written, not as poorly written as many other pastas, but still poorly written.

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  24. Anonymous
    December 14, 2012 • 9:06 PM

    Shit. Just. Got. Serious.

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  25. Dominion
    December 15, 2012 • 9:22 AM

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