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Finally, I’m home. After working a late night, I finally finished a project that my boss pushed on me. It was all worth it though, because I had a great day ahead of me. The part I was most excited for though, was seeing my son. I finally won the custody battle against my ex-wife, so now I actually get to see him. I fixed up my old spare bedroom for him, although it looked bland in all white. I figured we would have some spare time later and we could make any changes he wanted. I lumbered up the stairs, and when he finally heard I was here, he quickly called me into his room.

“Daddy, I can’t sleep, there’s a monster in the window!”

Monsters, huh, that’s original for a kid.

“Oh don’t worry about that, it’s just the tree’s branches blowing in the wind, see?”

I pointed and showed him the branch tapping against the window pane. He trusted me enough to calm himself down, and I kissed him good night. Finally, time for sleep, I could hardly even see straight at this point. I walked across the hallway, and collapsed into my bed. I had too much on my plate to be dealing with monsters. I had to go with him to school the next day to get him signed up in our district, I had to buy him school clothes, I couldn’t even think straight. That’s when I heard him calling again. Man, I love the kid and all, but I needed some sleep!

“Daddy, the monster is back again!” he shrieked.

I looked to the window: nope, nothing but the tree’s branches. I walked over, and to prove it to him, I opened the window and turned back to him.
“See, it’s nothing but the tree, I told you, now go to sleep, you’ve got school in the morning.”

He was still a little startled from what I could see, but what could I do, I was just too damn tired. Again, I fell into the comfort of my bed. Then I heard a cry, and I had just had enough.

“Fine, I’ll just sleep in your bed with you, if you see any monsters, just hold tight to me.”

I walked back into his room, pulled back his red blanket, and lay next to the kid.

While I lay, eyes closed, my mind started wandering. Didn’t I buy white sheets for the bed? I looked at my son’s slit neck and realized my mistake. That’s when I heard the monster, except it wasn’t tapping at the glass; it was the footsteps from the opened window. I couldn’t help but laugh, how didn’t I realize I had no trees in my yard?

Credit To: Legendd

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  • amber

    i think the laugh could be added up to shock and the sudden realization of his own imminent death. my issue with this story… what the hell kind of child preying monster just slits their victims throat and goes on their merry way? kids are good eating.

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  • Mr.Sarcasm

    Creative. It sounds familiar but I cant remember where I heard it. All I have to say is the build-up really sucked but it gave a good payoff without a letdown.
    Dan Oudda Dan

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  • O _ O

    It was decent, but the way it ended just gave me an uneasy feeling..

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  • http://yahoo.com corey

    I’m more creeped by the father at the..s.I mean one: he didn’t have trees and he said there were (no onea,that tired)

    And two..insane much….. I mean….he’s more a monster than what killed his son, you just don’t lol

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  • selenav

    obviously dads not really the smartest. and it sounds like this was inspired by the babysitter who sees the clown statue and parents realize they dont have a clown statue. Not bad , not that great

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  • http://creepypasta.com the cake

    it is moderate. the visual imagery is the only reason it belongs here. :) laughing at the end: no. could’ve also gone deeper into the story u know? “my kid moved in. he died the first night living with me. best father award would go to me, but i died too.”

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  • charissa

    is it jeff the killer

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  • justrealistic

    It was decent but you could see the twist from a mile away

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  • Len Lye

    The Willow Men return!!!

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  • Herobrine

    @justrealistic, I know you can see the twist a mile away, but still, if you can get off Crappypasta, you’re not that bad of a writer, I mean, have you seen the stuff there? Seriously, this was a good pasta, but could use a bit more work.

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  • Anon

    “I looked to the window: nope, nothing but the tree’s branches. I walked over, and to prove it to him, I opened the window and turned back to him.”

    “I couldn’t help but laugh, how didn’t I realize I had no trees in my yard?”

    …Exactly what did the man see when he opened the window originally? The choices either seem to be (a) a tree or (b) a monster or (c) nothing. Nothing is ruled out as the man was claiming it was a tree branch. So that means he either saw a tree branch, and thus had a tree, or he saw the monster directly, which results in it being a tad silly (even in his tired state) that he claims it’s nothing more than a tree branch.

    On an alternative note, maybe the monster was hiding on the side of the building and brought a tree branch with him and kept hitting the window with it? That’s about the only thing I can think of that makes that make sense.

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    • Tropograph

      …Ooooor maybe it was a monster that LOOKED like a tree? Camouflage and all that, you know. Admittedly he’s still stupid for not remembering that he doesn’t have any trees on his property, but still…

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  • Anonymous

    BUT THEN WHO WAS TREE???

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  • Damo

    Oh come on – he laughed?!! I don’t think so.

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  • T

    Very creepy. this got me scared, didnt see no trees in the yard coming

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  • Kevin

    That’s a really patient monster. Hey, but what do I know? It was good enough to be posted here so that has to say something about the dedication of the writer.

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  • Andrew

    How did I not realise I didn’t have any branches in my back yard? LOL

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  • TheMan

    That is really creepy had a few flaws like the monster…monster… let me guess it was Sherlocks holmes dead Chupacabra.!,,

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  • Bricks

    Some of you guys seem really dense. The tree branch he saw could have been the monster hanging from the sound of the house and having his arm sticking out or something. As far as the father laughing it was out of hysteria and realizing his impending doom.

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  • zeldaaloveex

    Your all so fussy, I thought this was a brilliant pasta. No way it deserved to be a crappypasta…

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  • Anonymous

    It was creepy for me but I feel like if the dad was so happy to have won his son in the custody battle, why wasnt he upset at all that his son was dead, he just laughed? That was confusing, but overall 8/10

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  • BODs

    this really is a fairly simple concept, but really those are always the best.

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  • Kuroemon1201

    The ending with the footstep is not good, I think you should change it a bit like: he doesn’t hear the tap anymore, but he’s hearing the noise of licking your own lips next to his dead son(maybe the monster gonna eat him or drink the blood of the kid)

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  • TrollyPonah

    That is truly a man that doesn’t give a damn.

    Son dead? PSSH bitch please im just going back to sleep and laugh.

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  • Jay

    Did he pick the kid up from school? Where’s the babysitter? How old is the kid? Left way to much out. Too tired after winning a court battle to get your kid, interesting. I’m assuming the author is not a dad or if they are they are a terrible one. A dad would do anything for his child, especially considering the circumstances.

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  • POOP

    HAD SO MUCH POTENTIAL

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