On October 1, 1957, Callie purchased the small cottage overlooking Cimmerian Bluff. She was quite alone in the world. Having just lost both her parents in a head-on collision three months ago she felt it was time to make a life for herself, to move to a new town where no one knew her, a town where she wouldn’t be accosted daily by the well-meaning people who offered their sincerest sympathies despite the fact that they had never bothered to acknowledge that she even existed before the accident. She had no other family. She had no friends. The only things that truly belonged to her were her dog, Hodge, her new job as a page at the town’s library, and the broken-down little cottage that she’d purchased on a whim.
Turning the cottage into her personal sanctuary would be a grand task. But the inheritance that she’d acquired would make that possible. From the looks of the exterior, it appeared to be a shell-like ruin. But having gone inside she realized that with some initiative and a little elbow grease she could fix it up in no time.
“A diamond in the rough,” she kept telling herself. “Once I clean it up and have the water turned on Hodge and I can move right in.”
It had been uninhabited since the late 1920s, when a tragedy of heinous nature struck down the elderly woman who had lived there with her cat, and it had remained empty until Callie discovered it. According to the citizens of Cimmerian Bluff, a traveling tramp had been blamed for the brutal slaying. The old woman’s throat had been viciously torn open in what the police believed to be an act of desperation when the hobo had broken into the woman’s cottage and been caught stealing. They never did find the cat. The tramp swore ignorance, claiming to never have been near the cottage. But despite his protests, he was found guilty and hung for his alleged savagery. The townspeople swore that the old cottage was unfit to live in, that it was haunted and did not want to be lived in.
But Callie detested superstition as much as she detested unwanted guests. So she bought the house despite its sordid past with the hopes that the legend of the tramp and the old woman would deter townspeople from making unwelcomed visits. Callie paid to have the water turned on and the roof and floors repaired and by the seventeenth, she and Hodge had taken up residence. True, there was no electricity at this point. But Callie enjoyed the warm glow and snug atmosphere that candlelight and the stone fireplace provided.
She’d enjoyed her first two days at work. Shelving books required very little human interaction and allowed Callie to listen to her audio books which always made the time go faster. The only problem she’d experienced thus far was the spotting of a field mouse scurrying into the stacks on her way to the lunch room. Callie had always loved animals, more so than people. But rodents gave her a fright. As a child her mother had always been cruel to her, insisting that if her room was not spotless the mice would come into her room at night and bite her toes. Callie’s mother maintained that they would scamper into her room every night searching for a reason to get her. Since then the very thought of a mouse could cause her to freeze up and panic to wash over her in tidal waves.
Thinking of her mother saddened her. She’d spent most of her life trying desperately to win her approval and affections. While her father, on the other hand, had been the most loving person she had ever known. He was the only person that she enjoyed being around and now he was gone. She refused to upset herself any further and cuddled close to Hodge as she sipped warm cider in front of the fireplace.
“This could be a lovely little cottage,” she said out loud, talking to both herself and the dog. “We just need some new carpeting, perhaps some floral drapes, maybe I’ll put in some window boxes to really spruce it up around here.”
Hodge sneezed, bringing her back to the here and now then plopped his little head back onto her lap. She peered through the cottage windows to see the autumn leaves coming down from the trees that surrounded her new home.
“Every single one of those villagers must be the town idiot,” she chuckled to herself. “The house doesn’t want to be lived in,” she said in a mocking tone. No cottage could ever make her feel more comfortable and at home. No cottage could ever be more welcoming.
On October nineteenth the first incident occurred, though she’d taken it lightly and dismissed it at the time, it would be of great significance in relation to later events. Lying in bed that night, somewhere between the half-dreaming and half-waking world, Callie heard the familiar scratch of claws on the bedroom door. Since he’d been trained as a puppy, Hodge used this as his means of communicating that it was time for her to take him out. The electricity wouldn’t be fixed for another two weeks. So she found her way to him with help from the moonlight. Throwing the pudgy Jack Russel over her shoulder she felt her way down the hallway and made her way carefully to the tiny staircase. A loud snap jolted her upright as the dog leapt from her arms and down to the floor.
“Must’ve been one of those rat traps I set this morning,” she whispered to the dog, kneeling down to stroke his soft coat. “A place that’s been vacant this long is bound to have vermin. Glad I thought ahead.”
The thought of a rat in her beloved dwelling made her feel nauseous. What made matters worse is the thought that she would have to go look at the trap and possibly find the disgusting half-dead little pest squirming to get free. Then what would she do? Worry about that in the morning is what she would do. That vile little interloper would surely be dead by morning and she would be able to handle the matter more easily.
The following morning, she’d discovered an enormous rat dead inside the trap. Thank God she thought to herself. Hodge growled at the grotesque corpse until Callie mustered up the courage to pick up the trap and throw it in the outdoor garbage bin. It had been the size of a small trout and left her shaking as she ran back into the house to get as far away from it as she could. She set another trap that evening, hoping that they wouldn’t hear anymore loud snaps in the middle of the night. Living in a house that was supposedly haunted did not bother Callie in the least. But living in a house that was infested with rats was enough to make her skin crawl. Remembering her mother, she wore her shoes to bed that night.
Several nights passed and each morning Callie had discovered dead rats in the traps that had been placed. She phoned an exterminator while she was at the library but was disappointed to learn that he would be unable to make it to the cottage for another three days. No matter, Callie would not allow those disgusting varmints to scare her out of her own house. Not when it had become the biggest part of her new life.
Around midnight Callie had heard Hodge’s tell-tale signal scratching at her bedroom door. It was a moonless night and she had forgotten to bring a candle into the room with her. As she crawled out of bed, feeling her way through the darkness, she could just make out the shape sitting in front of the door. She lifted him onto her shoulder and started carefully toward the stares. His weight bore down on her heavier than normal.
“Whoa, buddy. You’re getting heavy! Guess we better cut back on the Milk Bones, huh?” Callie stroked his coat lovingly. Something was wrong. It felt harsh, coarse, grimy.
“Hodge?” she managed to utter through trembling lips.
She turned her head to look at him. What she saw glowering back at her sent ice through her veins. Frozen in place, Callie saw two beady red eyes and whiskers that unmistakably belonged to a rat. But this rat was larger than any she’d ever seen. It was slightly bigger than Hodge. Where was poor Hodge? As she felt its naked sinewy tail thumping against her chest and bare arm she could smell the scent of blood mingled with the rat’s own musty stench. Its whiskers brushed against her cheek, leaving streaks of blood in its wake as it inched its snarling snout closer to her neck.
What was it going to do to her? It had already eaten Hodge. Why was it perched on her shoulder so calmly, almost calculatedly? Her mother’s words popped into her mind. Scampering, she’d said. They scamper in looking for a reason to bite. But this rat had not scampered. It had waited calmly as if it were waiting for Callie to figure something out. Suddenly, the pieces of the puzzle started to come together. It had not occurred to her because her own mother had been so disconnected from her. She did not wish to protect Callie from anything. But her mother did not follow the laws of nature. This monstrous rodent that lay heavy upon her now, however, did.
It’s their mother! The voice inside her rang out. She’s the mother of the rats that I caught in the traps!
Callie didn’t know if it was the rat’s reaction to the fear the seemed to pulsate from her body or if it somehow realized that she had figured out why it was there. But before Callie could find the strength within herself to try to fight it, the mother rat sank its grizzly needlelike teeth into her throat. As she fell to the floor the last things she saw were those piercing red eyes and the blood-soaked muzzle dripping all over the beautiful new flooring of her beloved cottage.
The next morning the police found her lifeless body at the top of the small staircase. They concluded that a prowler must have attacked her and ran frightened out into the night. After all, whoever it had been didn’t bother to use the door to escape. The downstairs window had been smashed to pieces and none of the wild animals in that area were big enough to do that kind of damage. They’d tried to warn her before she’d purchased the cottage. This place was haunted. It did not want to be lived in. The old lady found that out and sadly Callie had found out too.
“Oh but that’s just a silly old legend,” the real estate agent said with a halfhearted giggle. “Something cooked up by the local busybodies because they had nothing better to do back then.”
I eyed her suspiciously. My husband’s job had just transferred him to Cimmerian Bluff and we were in desperate search of a reasonably priced home where we could start a family. A small cottage set back in the woods away from the hustle and bustle of the town. When we’d heard the story of Callie and the old woman from his new boss we’d thought it was a sick joke. The realtor’s reaction to our account of the tale calmed my nerves as she invited us to walk into the cottage. It was lovely, cozy, just the type of place that we were looking for. Not to mention the price was right. We signed the paperwork and were more than ready to move in. But it’s funny. As we made our way back to the car, I am certain that I saw a rat scamper underneath the front door of the cottage.
CREDIT: Christina Durner
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I enjoyed reading this. I am scared of rats so found it very creepy. I also liked that that killer was a live rat instead of a ghost or something else paranormal… it was different… well done! :)
I really enjoyed this! 8/10
Thank you =) I’m glad that you enjoyed it.
I really liked this, but why didn’t Callie drop the rat when she realized it wasn’t her dog? How did she wake up to nails scratching if she slept through her dog being eaten?
Beautifully written, however. I hope we see more of your work in the future. :)
Thank you for your kind words =) I hope to have more pastas published on here in the future.
This was a decent first pasta. I only had a few issues with it.
The biggest two issues, and I’ve had these often with pasta’s based in the past is anachronisms or things being out of place in time. A little research goes a long way towards suspension of disbelief.
The audio book was not popularized until the advent of the Walkman, which happened in the late 70’s/early 80’s. Additionally, the Jack Russell Terrier was rare in the U.S. until the mid ’70’s.
The last issue I have is with the sudden change of perspective at the end. I don’t know if it was supposed to be jarring, but it was. Other than these things, your storytelling was excellent and I really enjoyed the tone and the fact that you didn’t draw anything out unnecessarily. Thank you for this pasta. 8/10.
Thanks for the 8/10 rating and the constructive criticism. I’ll keep a closer eye on that kind of stuff next time =)
They’re rats, they’re rats! They’re dirty and forlorn!!! 8/10, ill bump it 2 points if you get this reference.
It’s from Hey Arnold!
This was really good! Great concept, well written, and a nice cliff hanger. Great job!
Thank you so much =)
I did like this a lot, but I wished it had been a little bit subtler. A big rat could probably kill an old dog, and I’ve heard stories of rats killing babies in Victorian times, and a fragile old woman also seems feasible… But a young, fit, totally healthy person (who even lifts heavy books for a living) having their throat ripped out by a rat is way too far for me, personally. It should be scary enough that they’ll take your toes and pets, you know? I don’t need to believe it could beat me in a fight.
Thanks Cez. I am glad that you enjoyed the story. I based her death on the fact that despite being young and healthy her fear was so paralyzing that it ultimately led to her demise. She was incapable of fighting it off because of her inability to react. Much like the way that Jimmy Stewart’s fear of heights in Vertigo prevented him from being able to react in enough time to save Madeline.
Reminds me of the time we got our house tented and a rat died underneath the basement. The worst part of it all was no one could get to the corpse so literally hundreds of flies were coming up through the ventilation ducts. I had to kill so many flies and then a hundred more would come right back. I had never seen anything like it before, and hope to never see it again in the future.
Oh my goodness that sounds like a horror story on its own!
Well written! Although rats don’t creep me out, I still managed to find this kind of creepy. I couldn’t help but notice The Langoleers shout out in the middle with the reference to the cold uncaring parent and the word “skampering”. If that’s not just a coincidence then FREAKING AWESOME! Love that movie!
Yes! Mr. Toomey and his scampering comment always stuck with me so that is a shout out to him. That’s so cool that you caught that =) Thanks so much for your kind words.
However, the part about the mom telling her that they will bite her toes if her room is not clean is something from my own childhood. Been terrified of rats ever since.
Very good. I hate rats so this one was especially creepy for me. 9/10
Thank you so much!
This wasn’t creepy, but this story specializes strongly in REALISM. This CAN actually happen, if the rat is not a ghost or anything.
But with the way the character needed candles, I’m thinking this was in the 19-somethings? Because, flashlights exist…
Hey, I use candles! And I’m now! And… Wait, did you just say a rat can really kill an adult at full strength?! Nah…..I mean, I don’t think so, I hope not, dear god please… Has… Has that ever happened?
I am an avid candle user myself that is why I didn’t think twice about it lol
Well, the adult didn’t get a chance to fight it at full strength, due to her let it reach her neck…
And it MIGHT have possibly happened…
It did say she was waiting for the electricity to be turned on in another two weeks so
This was very good! I kinda wish someone would’ve eventually killed the mother rat, but not all stories have to end with a hero defeating evil. 10/10!
Oh my goodness, thank you so much for your kind compliment! This is my first time writing a Creepypasta =) I’m thrilled that you enjoyed the story so much. Thanks again for the kind words.
Most stories on creepypasta, even the crappy ones, have this type of ending. It’s quite typical…