Trevor looked at the sweaty, crumpled paper in his hand, reviewing the instructions yet again. Soon it would be too late to read over them, but until then every rehearsal could be the one that saved his life.
Four pale candles, he read, and then glanced over to the four candles sitting on the floor. He had arranged them in a perfect square, just as instructed. The line of crisp white chalk connected them, and he mentally marked the next item off the list.
His hand was shaking, making it harder to read the scrawled lines of pencil on the paper. With a deep breath, he looked away from the paper and out the window. There was a swell of nervous energy bubbling in his chest. He had prepared, he reminded himself. He had read and studied. He had memorized every line of text and done his research. Now was no time to have second thoughts or doubts.
“Remember, the entity will know your thoughts. If you enter with doubts, he will use these to his advantage.”
Trevor closed his eyes and smiled, trying his best to think confident and reassuring thoughts. What he needed to do, he realized, was find something else to think about. Every review of the instructions only deepened his anxiety, and it obviously wasn’t helping. It reminded him of cramming for final exams. He had always overdone it and worn himself out, so that he ultimately spent a week sick and dreading the impending tests. Now was not the time to weaken his mental or emotional defenses. It was, instead, the time to finally achieve something with his life.
Trevor walked away from his preparations, shoving the paper in his pocket and trying to prevent his mind from running over and over the instructions. They always hung on the final words.
“If you successfully complete the ritual, he will grant you one request for whatever your heart desires. Choose wisely.”
As if he could dislodge the thoughts, he shook his head sharply and turned his attention to his surroundings. He was sitting in the front of an old chapel, the wooden pews cracked and listing in the shadows. What had once been lovely windows were now either caked with dust, webbed with cracks, or lying broken on the floor. The moon sprinkled silver light around the interior, light which somehow only made the shadows darker. He wondered briefly about those who had once gathered here bowing penitently and singing their hymns. But churches dried up when a town did, and it was nothing more than an artifact cast out.
“Find a place of religious significance. It may be a church, temple, synagogue, mosque, sanctuary, blessed space, or area of miraculous happenings. Any place where people come to demonstrate faith will suffice.”
Trevor smirked remembering the words. He had considered going to his hometown’s football stadium, because that was where he had witnessed the greatest religious fervor. But somehow he thought such secular praises were not what the ritual intended. He had lucked upon this place on one of his trips to and from university. It was off the beaten path, well removed from the rest of civilization. Soy bean fields were the nearest attraction, which meant he would be mostly free to conduct his activities in peace. Assuming, of course, local kids did not wander in, drawn by the same isolation and freedom that had brought him. Given the lack of beer bottles and vandalism, he assumed it was not a popular place for such activities.
His legs were shaking up and down, whether from excitement or anxiety he was not sure. He checked his watch, noting that it had slipped five minutes closer since his last inspection. It was now 11:50, which meant his waiting was almost over.
“It must be begun at precisely midnight. Too early or too late and you will have no results but feeling like a fool.”
He had set and reset his watch just to be certain it was exact. Now he just needed to rely on it. He had also selected this position because it was just close enough to hear the church bells from a couple of towns over. Come midnight, they would toll and assure him he was on time.
The wind kicked up outside, tossing a few stray leaves through the opening. The many holes in the roof howled pitifully and the rest of the building creaked with the gusts. It seemed almost as if the building was in its final days, waiting for nothing but a strong storm to destroy it once and for all.
Giving into his worries, Trevor pulled the paper from his pocket and reviewed the important parts again. He skimmed over the materials, certain he had everything he needed. Instead, he reviewed the cautions to ensure he did not make any deadly mistakes.
”First, never speak your name. Such a being will seek any way to gain power over you. Should this creature find any weakness, he will use it to possess you. This is akin to being split apart from the inside out, slowly and over several days. Most unfortunate souls are also forced to watch as they slaughter family, friends, and other victims.”
It was simple enough. No names. That was an easy pitfall to avoid.
“Next, do not answer his questions. They are intended to trick you. You must only say what you have been instructed and your request. If you engage in questions, he will trap you in his game. You will slowly waste away, caught forever in his web of lies.”
Trevor had always been taciturn, so he was not concerned. Remaining silent was his primary skill in life, and he looked forward to putting it to good use. He also could not help but wonder who in their right mind would try to best a demon in a duel of wits. It seemed like one of the oldest follies.
“Third, ensure all barriers are maintained for the duration of the ritual. He will be unable to touch or harm you physically while the barriers are active. Adhere to the guidelines for your own safety.”
Another easy warning to heed. Who would ignore the barriers? Why would they even be in the ritual if they were not vital to its safe and successful completion?
“Finally, believe nothing of what he says. He exists only to lie.”
Rereading the warnings made him feel safer. These were so obvious that he could not imagine anyone making such grievous errors. He certainly knew better. And if the direst warnings in the ritual were so clear to him, it seemed impossible that he might fail.
The clock hands spun closer, and he moved back to his prepared space. There were the four candles, a fifth, and black candle setting to the side. There was a silver bowl of blessed water, secured from his local cathedral some days before. Also, a lighter, a scrap of cotton cloth, and a steel knife. It was everything he needed.
Trevor knelt beside the chalk square, arranging and rearranging items for the most practical set up. He wanted everything in arms’ reach, but also in the order it would be needed. Which meant, he thought, the lighter, the bowl, the knife, the cloth, and finally the candle.
It was midnight, he saw. As soon as the thought crossed his mind, he heard the bells ringing. Right on time, he brought the lighter to the first of the four candles, slowly moving clockwise and lighting each in turn. They flickered and snapped in the breeze, but remained strong.
His hands were unsteady as he picked up the bowl and set it in front of him. With a deep breath, he gripped the knife in his hand and drew it smoothly across his palm, just like they did in the movies. Only it seemed to hurt worse than those actors let on.
“Let a few drops fall into the water, and then bandage yourself carefully. The scent of blood can attract other things you may not wish to deal with during the ritual.”
Trevor followed the instructions to the letter, turning the water a cloudy red with his own blood before tightly wrapping his hand with the cloth. He knew the next steps by heart, moving through them almost robotically. Each step had been dutifully practiced—with the exception of cutting his own hand—many times in the bright light of day. Now, he lifted the bowl carefully with both hands, watching the way it rippled and changed. His blood diffused through the water, leaving darker and lighter patches that were quickly settling into the same pale shade.
“I summon you here with this dedication. Arrive.” With the last word, he tipped the water into the middle of the square. Unlike in the practice sessions, the water rolled and then stopped at the chalk outline, forming a tiny pool that defied the laws of gravity and surface tension. Trevor’s mouth hung open briefly, but he knew he had to continue.
The black candle was already in his hand, and he lit it despite the increasing wind. Gently, he placed it in the middle of the square, watching the tiny flame flicked on the surface of the water.
“I give you light to seek me,” he said, the words trembling from his lips. “Arrive.”
Barely were the words out of his mouth than the black candle began to sink below the surface of the water before disappearing completely. A dark, shadowy face emerged on the surface of the water, grinning widely. The face was hard to discern, but appeared dark and scaly, riddled with scars and fresh wounds that seemed to seep blood into the water around him. There were also many, many teeth. Trevor felt a cold pit of fear settle solidly in his stomach.
“Who summons me?” came the deep, gravelly voice. It came not from the thing’s moving lips, but from the air all around Trevor. The whole building seemed to vibrate with the voice.
No names, no questions, he reminded himself. Trevor’s mouth was dry thinking just how easy it would have been to make that mistake.
“You have been summoned, and I will instruct you. Speak your name.”
The church chuckled in time with the reflection in the water. He was smiling, showing even more teeth than Trevor thought could physically exist in the span of that face.
“Who are you to think you can command me, mortal?” came the bone aching words. They seemed to vibrate through Trevor’s body, as if he was being pulled apart by the reverberations alone.
“Speak your name,” he said again through gritted teeth.
The demon stretched, his arms stabbing through the surface of the water and entering this world. The water trickled off them, stumbling over protruding scales and nodules. Cruel claws shone in the candlelight, covered with water and a viscous red liquid that Trevor knew by sight. The smell of rot and decay followed quickly after, threatening to bring up Trevor’s meager dinner.
“I have summed you, and you will obey my commands. Remain within the summoning area.”
“Oh, shall I obey you and remain here?” asked the beast mockingly, planting one hand one either side of the puddle—outside the thin chalk lines. A deep, rolling chuckle emerged this time as he pulled himself slowly through the pool and into reality. The floorboards of the church appeared to buckle and steam wherever the claws pierced.
“He will try to intimidate you. Stay strong.”
“Remain within the summoning area. Speak your name.” Trevor tried to force all of his courage and confidence into his voice, but it only made the demon laugh all the louder, now standing at his full height.
The beast looked down on the pale boy before him. “You can call me Trevor,” came Trevor’s voice from his monstrous visage.
Trevor froze, his mouth agape and eyes wide. For an instant, the demon appeared almost sympathetic, but the façade cracked into merciless anticipation as the shadows flickered over his face. “You have meddled with something you do not even understand,” it said, voice again deep and roaring, but now mimicking the disappointed tone of a school teacher.
“I–I never told you my name. You can’t know my name,” Trevor stammered, his fear getting the better of him. His eyes flickered from the face to the arms to the rooted feet, never sure where to stay or linger. Everywhere he looked, there was impossibility.
“You think I need you to tell me your name?” Casually, the demon stretched, muscles and joints popping and cracking as if it had been millennia since he moved about. His eyes, dark with unholy light, fixed on Trevor with predatory amusement. He answered his own questions with a deep shake of his head, sending water sizzling across the sanctuary.
Trevor began scooting backward, whimpering with fear as the monster before him took one broad step forward. There was really nowhere to escape. The candles slowly snuffed themselves out, leaving only the moonlight to glint off those smiling teeth.
“But,” Trevor gasped as his hands scrambled along the floor for anything that might help, “but I followed all the instructions!”
The creature paused to survey the assembled implements and the chalk square. “Yes, you certainly did.” The building trembled with the force of the laugh.
From the cloying darkness, an arm shot forward. In the next breath, Trevor was off the ground. The demon slowly drew him close until their eyes were level.
“Who do you think wrote the ritual in the first place?”
“He exists only to lie.”
Credit: Katherine C.
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25 thoughts on “Devil in the Details”
I don’t usually like the ritual pastas, but this one was done right. It isn’t just a list of instructions, which I think is kinda boring. It even scared me a little. Lol good job :)
Added to faves immediately. Way to avoid to cliche summoning ritual pastas so often seen here. You turned it right on it’s head. Great style and flow. Well done and it’s a perfect score for me. Only the second time I’ve given that since starting to read here nightly in last 3 yrs. Absolutely loved it.
I absolutely loved this story!
I am a starting creepypasta youtuber https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCahbr1PGB3fJs25F00KcQjA
I would love to narrate your story and before I do so ofcourse I want to ask permission.
You will be given credit by a link to the story, your username and maybe anything else you want to add to it.
I didn’t find any other way to contact you (I might be just incredibly blind) so I’ll just do it through here! :D
Thank you in advance
Sure, I love seeing the different ways people handle narrations, so I’m always excited to see more. I just ask that you drop me a note when it’s on youtube so I can listen! You can email me at [email protected]. I only ask you include my name, a link to the story on creepypasta, and a link to my personal blog (atticussattic.wordpress.com). Feel free to email (or use the contact form on my blog) if you have other questions!
Thanks for making me do this!
Here is the video! Hopefully you enjoy it :D
Greetings! I included this story in one of my more recent episodes. Hope you enjoy!
I had missed this, but glad I caught it. Thank you! I will definitely have to give it a listen.
Hope you liked it!
Thanks for the comment! Regarding the name, there’s a lot of debate about what knowledge demonic entities do and do not have access to, so that was my idea in terms of how he knew the name. And as to motivation, I understand why you’d feel it was lacking. It was a more intentional omission (as I discussed in my reply to LAKK), but I may have missed the mark there. Thanks for the feedback!
First things first, I love this story! From the way you described the scene (like water sizzling) to the fear Trevor was experiencing, it is just amazing.
I uploaded a narrated video (hope you don’t mind the accent :)) and I’ve left a link to this page and your blog. Check it out when you’re free.
Hope to see you upload another creepypasta soon.
Wow! Love it. And your accent was enjoyable to listen to! The demon’s voice was surprising to me, but fantastic! Thank you for the work you put in! It’s really impressive!
Sorry for the late reply, it has been a long week…
Anyway, reading this story again after a week still gives me a chill down the spine. This story you wrote is seriously good.
Anyway, I’m glad you like the video. You just made my day. :)
Hey! Would I be allowed to read this in a video?
Certainly! And if you drop a link here or email me at [email protected] I’ll post a link to your narration on my blog as well. Enjoy!
Thanks a bunch! I’ll leave you the link when it’s up :)
Glad you enjoyed it! When I see rituals on crappypasta, I almost always say it’s good, but would be better as a story. So I tried it out. And the end is intentionally open to interpretation (but Trevor definitely got played either way). Regarding Trevor’s desire, my description of him in early drafts was that he was pretty bitter and arrogant, which fed into his wish to be the smartest human (and not for nice things like curing cancer, but for things like scheming to get power/wealth and insulting “lesser” intellects). I later decided that his specifics were less important, the story would be better served by a more Everyman sort of character. Ultimately, he is just the misguided human thinking he can outsmart evil, no matter what his aim. I hope that settles some of the curiosity! Thanks for your comment!
yeah! Loved it!
though the last line is a bit of a paradox… If the demon wrote that, then he was telling the truth, telling the truth about being a liar, and therefore proving that he’s not always a liar…
then again him saying “who do you think wrote the ritual in the first place?” could be the lie? Although it’s a question, not a statement. Fuck maybe his evil powers are of simple confusion!
Maybe that’s why there’s the warning about answering his questions…. :-)
Thanks for the comment, and I’m glad you enjoyed it!
Wonderful! Loved the story and the ending!
Thank you! I’m glad you enjoyed it!
So many times the ritualpasta has been attempted with varying degrees of success, and Katherine C nails it!
Thank you for the kind remarks! Ritual pastas are my guilty pleasure, so I’ve written a few to try out the style. I’m glad you found this one successful!
I love ritual stories, PARTICULARLY ones involving demons or the devil himself. Would love to see many more from you Katherine C. Loved the writing style and flow also. If you have anything else, pls direct me there?
Thank you! I’m really glad you enjoyed it. I have a few more stories posted here under my author tag (http://s22568.p321.sites.pressdns.com/tag/katherine-c/) . I also have a blog (you should be able to click on my author name at the end of the pasta) where I post short stories that are side projects, other genres, and in progress/draft versions. Thank you for the encouraging words!