Upstairs
When I was a child I lived in a rented two-floor house. Both my parents worked so I was often alone when I came home from school.
One early evening when I came home the house was still dark.
I called out, “Mum?” and heard a voice say “Yeeeeees?” from upstairs.
I called my mum again, and again got the same “Yeeeeees?” reply.
I felt she was calling back at me and climbed up the stairs.
When I reached the first floor I called her once more and the voice “Yeeeeees?” came from the furthest room.
I felt both uneasy, but a strong urge to see my mother, and started to walk towards the room.
But just that moment I heard the front door downstairs open and my mother come in, carrying a lot of shopping bags.
“Sweetie, are you home?” my mother called in a cheery voice.
Hearing her voice made me feel instantly better and I turned back to go downstairs at once…but not before I had a quick glance towards the room.
While I watched from the top of the stairs, the door to the room slowly opened a crack.
For a brief moment, I saw something strange in there.
A pale face, staring at me.
Firsties!!!!! Wow a pale face that was ur clencher? Brix were not shat!
lolwut
WHO WAS PALE FACE
BUT WHO WERE FACE?!?
Better luck next time.
Holy shit, that was Vincent Price!
wtFIRST also lame
It’s kind of like “Coraline”
Not bad, though.
SO WHO WAS PALE FACE?
nice one
BALLS.
There was absolutely no shock. I knew what was up after the first few words.
3/10
Love. <3
LAWL. Enjoy your morning man-milk surprise.
This story fails so hard
fairly average
FUCK THIS
omg creepypasta is creepy. I think this needs a desert.
Wow, could have been interesting.
Oh no a pale face saying yeeees to a little boy!
AHHHHHH!
that sucked.
THEN WHO WAS PALE FACE
so? is that all ?
it looks like incomplete if you ask me…
it would have been better if the kid challenged with that pale faced thing in the room, before his real mother show up.
THEN WHO WAS ROBOTNIK?
also first..maybe?
Disappointingly predictable.
old pasta is old
it was clearly micheal jackson
i think this pasta may need some more sauce.
That sucked. Seriously, like, holy shit. Wow. This reads like something that a third-grader wrote for English class around Halloween.
Kind of weak, nothing special.
…fucking kidding me…
Are you kidding me? That was so pedicable. Had too many lose ends. And wasn’t creepy at all! That is obviously this persons first pasta, AND, it wouldn’t even get a 0/10! More like -1/10. They shouldn’t have let the mother come in right away. Besides, he didn’t happen to think of the fact that he just talked to what I am guessing is some sort of doll. The mother should have come right when he was opening the door, to face his fate AND BE EATEN BY THE DOLL!!!!!!!! Muhahahahahah! Oh right so yeah, that’s what I say. (BTW, Michael Jackson? Michael Jackson is awesome!!!!!! JOE SHOULDN’T HAVE GOTTEN THE KIDS!)
I liked it. It’s something that would have made me terrified to answer the voice of any loved one when I was little. Mistaking someone you know for something that probably wants to eat you is always freaky D:
Wasn’t this on Saya?
Yesss yesss yessss, Are you sure that the dad wasent having an affair or somthing?
This one is old, years old…
It doesn’t get better with age either.
Meh? Yeeees.
Meh? Yeeeeeeeeeees.
Had potential if it was not so short and with that HORRIBLE ending >> brix are laughing at you
@ Vaughn: Don’t forget “Predictably disappointing”
This pasta is moldy, old, stale, and undercooked. All at once. Could’ve had some potential with a lot more work. I’m a huge fan of the simple things that scare the hell out of you, but this was just: “So I walked home and I thought I heard my Mum and it was liek, this ghost thing. Yeah.” Sorry. Try again.
It’s a joke, for anyone saying this story is weak. The pale face is michael jackson.
micheal jackson???
It was EXTREMELY predictable, but was still creepy in my opinion.
THEN WHO WAS…
Oh… Wait.
I got bored once I read “When”. Come up with something creepier with more suspense plz.
UGH PALE FACE
started out good but weakened off drastically afterwards.
i am dissapoint.
That wasn’t scary at all, and felt like a real cop out of a story in general.
Bricks were not shat.
I thought narrator was walking in on their parents.
This sucks. 1/10
Kinda brings back memories of wandering around a relatives creepy house.
…that’s it?
Honestly, it’s pretty creepy for a short pasta.
Straight to the point that I can easily imagine this happening to me in real life.
8/10.
That was terrifying.
Not the story. The writing.
It was good when it first hit the net, but it’s old and to be frank: it’s got bits so poorly written I don’t even know what to say. Maybe “get an editor?”
“I felt both uneasy, but a strong urge to see my mother, and started to walk towards the room”
why a strong urge to see mommy? why not just curiousity? gay.
Gollum!
maybe it was pedobear’s grandfather?
Or the ghost of jackson?
who knows and frankly WHO CARES…
Credited to Saya perhaps?
BUT THEN WHO WAS VOLDEMORT
Oh, right.
Chill the fuck out dude, I was drunk and I got the wrong house ok? God, why did you have to put this shit on the internet. Douche
Pretty Good, Actually… has potential…
^ I lol’d
BUT WHO WAS PALE FACE?
More sauce please. >: |
How did this shit make the frontpage?
I’ll put as much in to critiquing this as the author did in to writing it.
k I’m done.
Yay, finally an actually good pasta! Not some bullshit ritual or dumbass who can’t use punctuation!
It was EDWARD CULLEN!
The pale one was…EDWARD CULLEN! The explanation of being scared by it
Dawg, this is on encyclopedia dramatica’s creepypasta page, I think I was still in brace’s when I read this story, be original for God’s sake.
Short but good ;_; Writing could’ve been a bit better but I liked it.
Seriously? Is this site the place where pastanistas come to rail against any creepypasta that doesn’t measure up to their standards? You people need to lighten up. This stuff is free, after all.
Anyway, not too bad. I do think it was on Saya for a while, though. Something remarkably similar, at least.
This actually really freaked me out. How the hell would you get back downstairs? Inch away and keep an eye on the door? Jesus, that’s a terrifying situation.
the only scary part was how horribly this was written D:<
This is the worst creepypasta I have ever read… EVER. I hate to sound like a dick here, but please consider abandoning all hope for making a career out of this before your future self comes back to the past to punch you in the face for it.
i’ve seen this floating around /x/ for a long time
while it’s still shitty creepypasta i’m glad to see something short and quick again.
RIPPED OFF SAYA IN UNDERWORLD D<
this was posted on saya’s site a while ago.
I actually found it pretty creepy. Just imagining the voice that sounded almost similar to his mother’s but repeating the same thing.
this pasta isn’t saya’s, you idiots. it’s classic /x/ stuff and even on encyclopedia dramatica’s creepypasta, quit saying she ripped it off.
THEN WHO WAS MICHAEL JACKSON?
One of mai Favorites =__=
Saya probably won’t be happy about this.
@ Lodi, No, Saya didn’t write it herself, but she says she translated it from a Japanese pasta.
Sigh I forgot to add something in my post before and once again, IT WAS NOT M.J! Sigh what do you people have against the king of pop? Or, good music, twas a sad, sad day, when he died. Anyway, the scary thing about this (this is the part that I forgot to add) was that I have these old antique dolls that are like these women from the 17-1800s and usually I get home waaaaay before my mommy, (and I’m much to curious for my own good >:) ) and could easily picture that happen to me. Although, there are loopholes. You see, if you are afraid of this it is always the same sound that it makes. Nothing more, nothing less, always yeeesssss. And so, if you hear this, you can ask again, and again, and again, WITHOUT going upstairs. You could just run outside for dear life, go to a neighbor, or a friends house, or jus wait outside for your mommy. That is what I think anyway, enjoy the stories.
K.K out!
and the face said…take a seat…right over there
THEN WHO WAS FACE!?
Yeah, some context for everyone: This isn’t actually a creepypasta, it’s a post from the Something Awful Forums in one of their ghost story threads.
It’s supposedly a first hand account of an experience one of the forum members had with the supernatural as a child. Why this one was posted over the numerous other, better ghost stories from those threads I do not know.
Yeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeece?
@isantorin, if Saya is taking credit for this, she’s full of shit. As other comments have already said, this is from Something Awful, it was never in Japanese for her to translate it from. It’s been around for ages and is on tons of sites, including ED. So quit trying to start trouble.
I cant enjoy this old pasta.
True, it may have frightened me a bit the first 3 timesI read it, but this is older than the internet itself.
That was stupid, it could’ve been anybody.
whatever, this is creepy as shit to me. it’s one of those simple stories that could easily happen to anyone instead of all this ritual crap. you would all shit brix if this happened to you and you know it.
I agree with Diana, It is creepy because it is one of those things that could actually happen not every creepypasta is going to have OMGWTFITWASAZOMBIEONOES or somthing along those lines… get used to it >_>
I was laughing all the way through this from the ‘yeees’ bit because I was picturing the guy from Simpsons who talks like that and then says he had a stroke xD
omg Michael Jackson was in your bedroom!
It got me to go all pins and needles…
I can imagine the split second of happiness at his mothers voice before he realized what it implied, then the slow turn back to the door, and that cold feeling I got when I woke up in the sierras with a full grown bear sniffing at my tent, not three feet from my head, dimly lit by the moon light through the trees.
Being almost naked, trapped in your zipped up sleeping bag, lying on the ground staring up at several hundred pounds of muscle that could cleave you in half on a whim, and _not_knowing_ if it would… THAT was irl brick shitting.
man, people bitch a lot on this site.
oh god i’m doing it now
Repost of a repost of that repost from that board on that site which had the repost of the repost.
To everyone who said “lame” I urge you to actually think about how hard you would piss yourself if that happened to you.
Haven’t seen this exact story before, especially not done better.
BUT WHO WAS SHOPPING BAGS?
that 3rd “yeeeeeeeeeeeeeees” made me laugh
is this story told by like a native american? and the pale face was a “pale face?”
You know there was a lot of potential for this story. I don’t see why you didn’t take the chance and just left it as a few paragraphs.
SAYA SAYA SAYA SAYA in UNDERWORLD…. You turned a decent creepy pasta into this retarded half baked piece of tripe.
Blast it with Piss.
HOLY BALLZ
No shock factor whatsoever, but it still bothered me a little.
it says that he climbed the stairs, but was on the first floor afterwards…im confused
Aw, come on, I only wanted to help you with homework!
it was actually kind scary to me for some reason.
Like, I saw how it was gonna end and everything, but I still got the chills.
YEEEEEEEEEEEEEES?