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  1. WriterWolf
    December 19, 2012

    It reminds me a bit of The Thing. Anyway, I really like horror done in this matter of fact, straight written manner (my favourite in that style is probably The Hirsch Camera or osd09-h03). This was pretty good. 7/10

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  2. Hopesworth
    December 19, 2012

    Bravo! Very suspenseful and detailed. 9/10. I want seconds!

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  3. mmm
    December 19, 2012

    We don’t have mountains in Finland :D So I’m guessing it’s not a true event then huh ;)

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    • Mouse
      January 2, 2013

      I’m not the author, but I know this story. It is basically a tweak of a real story that happened in Russia in 1959. You can google the Dyatlov Pass Incident and see the pictures from the unexplained event. Personally I believe it was a government experiment with some sort of hallucinogen on a research team.

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      • Owen
        January 14, 2013

        I’m pretty sure that this one has been tweaked to be a werwolf story. Lempi was a werewolf.
        She transformed, tore into the door, someone (Probably Manu) knocked her on the head (the hair), Anni and Ole were first out, followed by Jaak and Raine in a different direction (It never went after them and they died later that night from hypothermia), Manu tried to fight the werewolf and got his head caved in, it went after Anni and Ole, chased them up a tree, caught Anni and killed her, lost its hand, Ole fled, it caught up, and he either jumped into the river to flee (but why would he drop the axe?) or got thrown in and drowned by accident. I just don’t get why Lempi would disappear. It works for a suspense movie with a gruesome ending, provided you can still get away with Found-Footage movies. Ole has to be camera man, and we need to kill off Jaak and Raine but still make it sweet, like Jaak jumps in front of it so Raine can try and run. Or before the “footage” starts its a police investigation and it shows them huddled together for warmth. I’m pretty good when the story is already written for me. Can anyone help me write believable Finnish dialogue?

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      • Andy Hackett
        October 2, 2013

        There’s a pretty major flaw in your theory of events. It’s stated the blood on the hatchet that Ole discarded belonged to Anni, and that the blunt force trauma to her head did not match that of Manu’s (whose head was considerably more squashed).

        Also, the “werewolf” couldn’t have lost its hand up the tree that Anni was beside, if Lempi is meant to be the werewolf, because the tree her severed hand was discovered in was a kilometre away, whereas Anni’s body was about 30 yards away from the tent.

        Fairly valid reason for dropping an axe: you can’t really swim well while wielding one.

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      • Wikipedia
        January 18, 2013

        The hikers’ clothing was found to be highly radioactive. During the period of February to March 1959, by various independent witnesses (including the meteorology service and the military, there were launches of R-7 intercontinental missiles by Eugene Buyanovthere. Scrap metal found in the area indicates the military had utilized the area secretly and might have been engaged in a cover-up.

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      • Tristan
        January 19, 2013

        idk the way it started on the inside made me think someone had lycanthropy

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      • PAPUCHA
        February 7, 2013

        Sorry, but the Dyatlov Pass Incident actually has a full, believable and logical explanation. I found it on http://www.cracked.com in an article called “6 Famous Unsolved Mysteries (With Really Obvious Solutions)” http://www.cracked.com/article_16671_6-famous-unsolved-mysteries-with-really-obvious-solutions.html

        I know it’s a comedy website, but they have a lot of articles like that…

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      • Rodavon
        February 26, 2013

        “Believable” is a relative term, especially when Cracked thinks a “rational explanation” is one that will jump on any comforting fact that MIGHT explain the incident, or at least make it less weird and disturbing. Confirmation bias goes both ways.

        Also, not only does paradoxical undressing not occur in every case of hypothermia, but it also doesn’t explain why the victims started a fire, and later tried to get dressed. Was it hypothermia? Maybe. Is Cracked.com’s dismissal of the actual research anything other than a pitiful attempt to avoid dealing with anything “weird”? Not likely.

        Also, there was no evidence of an avalanche. Would you rather trust a humor site that likes to occasionally pose an an expert, or actual evidence? If it were something as simple as an avalanche, or hypothermia, I’m pretty sure the USSR would LOVE to believe it.

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      • Becca
        September 2, 2013

        Well Craked is all about factual information while bringing a little humor into it to make it more enjoyable to read. They do research and even provide links most of the time to prove that the information they are giving you is true. Its comedy sometimes but the information that cracked provides isn’t false information. Just because some of the stuff is humorous doesnt mean they cant be taken seriously. I learn a lot of stuff by reading cracked articles. And ive even done research of my own to see if that stuff is actually true and it always is. I am on cracked a lot so trust me when I say. Cracked is a trusted source of information about a variety of things. They are very smart on the site and always use reasonable thought. Though they are open to the unexplainable. Im not saying that what cracked is saying about this story is true or not but cracked isnt some joke site with false information. Its not a site to just laugh at and not take seriously.

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      • Amanda
        May 13, 2013

        I was going to say, this sounds very much like what happened at Dyatlov, but nuclear testing in Russia is more believable than a werewolf in Finland.

        http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8pp6POvlER4

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      • Luke
        April 22, 2014

        There was also a movie made about the dyatlov pass incident called devils pass it is on netflix. It is obviously a fictional telling of the story but it is similar in some aspects to this pasta, but it was a good watch and very entertaining for a lower budget film.

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  4. Freaky Fred
    December 19, 2012

    “Planned their junket?”
    Lol thank you thesaurus-man

    Wtf is a junket?

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    • bugsbunny
      January 9, 2013

      A junket is a trip or outing.

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  5. thatgirl
    December 19, 2012

    Best pasta I’ve had in a long time. Kudos to the author for the brick that was shat in my pants.

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  6. LOREAL
    December 19, 2012

    It’s hard to get into a true story where all the people died at the end. I did not enjoy reading this one for obvious reasons. Other people’s tragedies are not entertaining to me. PLEASE STICK TO FICTION! Also, when writing fictitous stories you don’t want to bore people with details so keep them as short and to the point as possible. When you give too many details and are overly descriptive it makes people forget why they’re reading the story in the first place. Then they don’t want to continue. Just hold the reader’s interest. Just some friendly advice.

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    • Anonymous
      December 19, 2012

      Pretty sure the added detail is supposed to make the story seem more realistic.
      The author was going for the “true story” thing, after all.

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      • Anonymous
        January 20, 2013

        But it took away from the story, it was really hard to get into

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      • Rodavon
        February 26, 2013

        No, not really. You can tell what format it follows from the start, so if you aren’t into that, you can stop reading. The rest of us liked it.

        Although it would be better if they hadn’t just ripped it from the Dyatlov Pass Incident.

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    • Anonymous
      June 22, 2013

      Yea because people stop reading Steven kings’ thirty page short stories because they’re too long

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    • Lynton
      September 12, 2013

      Just shut it and enjoy it.
      Why?
      Because you’re worth it.

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  7. Noctem
    December 19, 2012

    Well then… o .o
    I’m quite confused .
    Very good story.
    Very good story, indeed..

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  8. o.O
    December 19, 2012

    That was actually pretty good. The fact that they… ehh… bleh. Sorry, but please don’t bring that in. It honestly turned me off the whole story.

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    • Ashlee
      December 19, 2012

      The mentions of sex shouldn’t be a turn off. It’s a real event. It happened.
      Plus, sex is a part of life. It’s really not a big deal and a minor detail that made this all the more interesting in my personal opinion.

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      • TheTurretCube
        December 23, 2012

        Ummm actually, I doubt it’s based on a true story. Mostly because Finland is completely flat.No mountainous regions whatsoever.

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      • Anonymous
        January 6, 2013

        It was based on a true story that happened in Russia

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      • Anonymous
        January 22, 2013

        Actually there are mountains, they’re just not called that. Ever been to Kilpisjärvi? We call those things there fells but they look like mountains to me. Besides, the word “tunturi” is pretty hard to translate, no?

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      • Anonymous
        May 1, 2013

        It’s basically a police report. They’re gonna report sex. They’re gonna report everything. Everything.

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    • rose
      January 9, 2013

      You must be five.

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    • Anonymous
      January 20, 2013

      I agree, they should have left the sex out, especially with the two guys, that was discusting

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      • Anonymous
        January 23, 2013

        Really the homosexual contact was “dicusting” you need to grow up and learn that people are the same regardless of orientation. oh and learn to spell “disgusting”

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      • Lynton
        September 12, 2013

        Oh look. The homophobe. Gay rights, asshole. So the fuck what if a guy likes a guy? Or a girl likes a girl. What happens between two people is up to them. Don’t like it, then shut the fuck up. People like you make me sick.

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  9. caroline
    December 19, 2012

    This is obviously the story from Dark matters true stories on the scify channel

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    • derpbutt
      December 19, 2012

      I can’t speak 100% for the author, but I’m fairly sure it was inspired by a real event!

      Google ‘Dylatov Pass Incident’ for more about the ‘real’ one.

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      • Jamesey
        December 20, 2012

        yeah, I thought the story had a familiar feel to it. The actual real-life event is not quite the mystery people make it out to be, by the way.

        However, this is an excellent pasta.

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  10. Grey
    December 19, 2012

    is that seriously true? That is the scariest shiz i have ever heard. seriously. oh. my. gawd.

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  11. KarlaRei
    December 19, 2012

    Very good writing organization skills. A great read!

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  12. Anonymous
    December 19, 2012

    I liked this one. I really did. But I feel like I’ve read this on the site before…

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    • derpbutt
      December 19, 2012

      It’s similar to (and probably inspired by) the Dylatov Pass Incident… however, I admit to finding stuff like that very interesting, so give me some leniency if I let through more than one pasta on the topic. I’ve said before that I don’t mind posting things that are similar/inspired by previous work (Candle Cove and Slenderman are the most obvious examples of this happening) as long as it’s not a direct copy, is a good read, and clearly had effort put into it.

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  13. Anonymous
    December 19, 2012

    this is very similar to an actual event that happened in the early 50′s

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  14. Anonymous
    December 19, 2012

    this is similar to an actual event that occured in the early 1950′s

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  15. patrick jorgenson
    December 19, 2012

    this is similar to an actual story that happened in the early 1950s

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  16. Bonnie
    December 19, 2012

    I’m thinking Lempi turned into something.

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    • Suzanne
      December 21, 2012

      Hmmm interesting theory. But what about the severed hand that was discovered to be Lempi’s hand?

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      • TheTurretCube
        December 23, 2012

        He chopped it off after realizing what happened maybe?

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      • Jason
        December 31, 2012

        Or the other guy with the hatchet chopped it off. Why it would be up the tree is still a mystery. I’m thinking that the guy taking the picture of the girl’s butt somehow triggered the thing to change or got a “No cameras” response from it. Anyway…great pasta

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    • wolfe75
      December 21, 2012

      Why Lempi?

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    • Anonymous
      December 23, 2012

      Maybe that’s what the hatchet was used for? Lempi’s hand cut off while in monster state, then turning normal? Hmm.

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      • Anonymous
        January 20, 2013

        But the hatchet didn’t haver her blood on it, only Annie’s

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      • Lynton
        September 12, 2013

        If Lempi turned into something, the person who had taken her picture to the tree, then had to turn back to human to try and climb, only to have her hand severed, that would explain the hand. She could then have turned back to whatever (Perhaps a wolf or other creature) then fled (Explaining the lack of a body) The blade could then have been cleaned in the snow, removing the blood, or perhaps, the blood removed itself, since we are on the topic of the supernatural, it’s not that hard to believe. Then, the individual who had just dismembered Lempi, ran into annie, mistook her for Lempi, and lashed out, only to realise what he had done, then made a hasty retreat, but not before stripping her for her clothes.

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  17. Anonymous
    December 19, 2012

    Great read. One glaring detail that ruined it for me. -22 degrees and the guy drowned in a river? Other than that, good pasta.

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    • Rhavnod
      January 27, 2013

      You do have an excellent point but we don’t know how fast the river was moving, so we cant exactly be sure that it would have been frozen.

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  18. reapersgirl
    December 20, 2012

    so f***ed up love it

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  19. PAPUCHA
    December 20, 2012

    Werewolves, anyone??

    I didn’t read the whole thing, but maybe we can take a look at the behaviors of all the members of the group… you know, the two guys who fought and take a look at who had.. ahem… *intercourse*, and I am WAAAAYYYY too lazy to do that. But, if anyone has the patience, figure out who the werewolf was :P :)….
    Hehe we’re detectives :)

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    • Suzanne
      December 21, 2012

      Someone up there in the comments said that he/she thinks the “werewolf’ was Lempi. But what about the severed hanfd that was discovered to be Lempi’s?

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      • Jason
        December 31, 2012

        But she’s the only one that didn’t have a body at the end. Devoured or still in hiding?

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  20. ike
    December 20, 2012

    At first, I thought that it was way too “in the norm” for a catastrophe like this to be written about, so although it’s very well done(like meh steak) it lacked creepyness. Then, As I read on, the creepyness was unleashed, and I have to admit. A really good take on this real life incident. “INCIDENT”.

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  21. slenderninja
    December 20, 2012

    wiki or google this. it is based of a reported true case

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  22. Mr_Noms
    December 20, 2012

    So lempi was a were-monster of some form and someone chopped her hand off with the hatchet yes? Very good read.

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  23. anon
    December 23, 2012

    the finnish abominable snowman?

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  24. plop
    December 24, 2012

    Dyatlov pass incident was caused by nuclear testing, all the signs of bodily damage shown by the deceased are consistent with damage from the expansive shock wave of a nuclear explosion, keep in mind the USSR ran a lot of covert nuke tests, everything from the branches, burns, and text explosion are consistent with nuclear detonation anywhere between 100-75 miles of the camp site

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  25. plop
    December 24, 2012

    Tent explosion*, on my phone, sorry for the typo :3

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