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I used to live in the Lower Queen Anne region of Seattle, just a few blocks from the Space Needle, which has a little park around it- lawns, a fountain, sculptures, a theater and museums- a little park which is remarkably safe after nightfall. There is also, in the same complex that has all these great museums and verdant lawns, a sad little failing fair, which is deserted enough in the daytime. It was a great hangout for me and my friends after dark. We used to climb to the top of the roller coaster, smoke a little pot, and talk about the sort of trouble we could get in if we actually had the nerve, which we never did.

It was nice. We were so high up, we could see all the city lights glittering like deep-sea fish, and there was a lovely feeling of wrongdoing coupled with the almost certain fact that nobody cared we were there.

One day we decided to do shrooms instead. It was a good idea at first. The pretty lights and cool, crisp air became a religious experience. Then, all of a sudden, SNAP- something changed. We all felt it. The air wasn’t cool or crisp anymore. It was musty and humid and had a horrible, somehow familiar smell. The lights started to move about in a very unusual manner, sort of lurching and bobbing and above all, approaching. We didn’t see anything actually come into the little patch of fair that we were looking down on, but the lights around it were far, far too close together.

Obviously, we started to freak out. Me and AnneMarie and Brian perched up on that coaster ledge like our lives depended on it, but Eric broke off running. He made his way down the coaster with the grace of an ape, and lunged over the fence, and rushed off into the middle of the sane and healthy-looking concrete. There was a huge chirring sound, which was distinctly insect-like and seemed to come from no direct source, but rather from every molecule of the atmosphere that surrounded us.

Then- SNAP. The city was back to its normal, peaceful self, and the three of us were still up the coaster, beginning to shiver a little in the drizzle. 

We never saw Eric again. I moved to the country soon afterwards. You can visit that roller coaster in Seattle, but somehow I suspect the same thing could happen in any city. Anyone in a densely populated area with a lot of lights could experience just such a SNAP. I know they like population centers. I don’t hear the chirring out here in the country.

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  • ben dover

    OH BOYS

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    • The Hash Slinging Slasher

      Even when SpongeBob read this story he laughed in my face.

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  • The Grammar nazi

    …and this is where I stopped reading: “For me and my friends”.

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    • Fancy Hamster

      Yeah it just got stupider

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      • http://creepypasta.com NetherPie

        Stupider, isn’t a word. I’m surprised the grammar nazi didn’t correct you first.

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        • Fox

          I agree with netherpie
          :D anybody read jeff the killer
          heheheehehehehe

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  • Anonymous

    first

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    • Anonymous

      To me saying ‘first’ is so stupid it’s funny. Another joke, 2 muffins were sitting in an oven and one says, “gee it’s hot in here” the other says, ” HOLY CRAP A TALKING MUFFIN”

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  • MisterVercetti

    …is this some kind of joke? Like, “OMG teh shroomz tripz makes teh pepplez disapear lol!”

    This fails even worse than the Socratic Method, and I thought that pasta failed pretty hard.

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    • The Bomb.com

      I think this story could probably work as a lecture of the consequences of shrooms, as long as they add,
      “So remember kids, doing drugs makes people run like apes and disappear”

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  • Comment Leaver

    A tad rushed. Oh noes, something happened to Eric, the end. Needs more of an explanation, one minute they can see Eric and the next he’s gone? Did something get him? Was it this noise? I love when things are implied but this just needs a bit more.

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  • Candleja?

    Grammar Nazi, maybe you should think things through more carefully before you take that title. His grammar was perfectly acceptable. To say “for my friends and I” would be incorrect. You wouldn’t say “It was a great hangout for I”, you would say “it was a great hangout for me”. The addition of “and my friends” doesn’t change anything. Never has. I hate when so-called “grammar Nazis” make this mistake, which they almost always do.

    And with that incomprehensible rant…

    I’m quite happy that the kid called Eric died. I have an issue with Erics. It was a decent pasta; I liked the imagery.

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    • Name

      I agree with you Candle. And also, although this has nothing to do with the story, I find it insulting to joke around with the title “Nazi” because I have many Jewish friends who’s past relatives lives were impacted by Hitler and the Nazis.

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      • poop

        Snap crackle pop…..oh no rice crispies…..

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  • Yotan

    i feel like it could be longer, maybe elaborate more? how do they know it wasn’t just a bad trip?

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  • Dirjel

    Drugs are bad, mmmmkay?

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  • Zomby.

    It was alright. Could have been a little better….but it was good.

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    • Mrs. Creepypasta

      I didn’t understand the story at all…Can you or someone please explain?

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  • Anon

    wuts goin on herrrr

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  • Alex

    Sadly Anonymous, you’re not the “first”
    Good try though
    Also, what the hell?
    He disappeared. So unless there’s that monster from Star Wars in the concrete, I kinda wish I knew wtf happened

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  • Anonymous

    Uncooked pasta should not be served. This is sounds more like the effects of conventional illegal drugs, and less like something that’s creepy. So he experiences a trip? Nothing unexpectedly creepy about that.

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    • CANDLEJACK

      WE TRIPPIN BALLZ UP IN HERE!

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      • The Killer Known As Jeff

        Candlejack get ou

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  • Datura

    Am I the only one who didn’t really understand this?

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    • SuperSak

      No, you arent.

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    • Ash

      I didn’t understand it either.

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      • Mrs. Creepypasta

        I AM COMPLETELY LOST….

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    • Blue Fox

      There’s absolutely nothing to get. The story boils down to “sittin’ on a coaster and doin’ some shrooms. Eric disappears. End.” The author is the stupid one in this case, not the readers.

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  • katie

    i don’t like it. i need more gore and horrible, frightening details.

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    • darthknight

      The comments here in a nutshell.

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  • rinoakes

    So mix a roller coaster and some drugs and you get…a shitty pasta?

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  • james

    i do not get it.

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  • Revus

    THEN WHO WAS SHROOMS?

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  • OAIEBH

    OH SNAP.

    get it. LOL…

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    • Amanda Bynes

      I LITERALLY CANT.

      THAT ERIC KID WAS LIKE #ByeFelicia

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  • mngamojemo

    Grammar Nazi needs to learn grammar. If you’d be saying “me” when nobody else was present, you still say “me” with the addition of extra parties. My friends and I went to the movies. It was a new experience for me and my friends.

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  • http://fuckyou Penis

    BUT WHO WAS SNAP

    god dammit i feel unclean now

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  • Shan.

    …What?

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  • http://thehungryreader.com Krepta

    Who’s “they”? The buzzing air molecules? You moved to the country to escape from air? I got news for you, kiddo, the same thing’s going to happen anywhere you take a hallucinogenic substance.

    Drugs =/= ghosts Very bland pasta, more like Creepy-Boy-Ar-Dee.

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  • Mary Hatchet

    But who was SNAP?

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  • Mew?

    this story is not even remotely creepy

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  • Master Kenobi

    So he attributed all of this to evil and not to the drugs he took? Or are we to assume he still does mushrooms regularly, even given what happened? Maybe Eric’s mom caught on and wouldn’t let him hang out with “that crowd” any longer.

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