Lightning
We had just moved into a little ranch house in the suburbs. Storybook neighborhood – quiet, friendly neighbors, picket fences, the whole nine yards. Suffice it to say that this was supposed to be a new start for me, a recently single dad, and my three-year-old son. A time to move on from the previous year’s drama and stress.
I viewed the thunderstorm as a metaphor for this fresh start: one last show of theatrics before the dirt and grime of the past would be washed away. My son loved it anyway, even with the power out. It was the first big storm he’d ever seen. Flashes of lightning flooded the bare rooms of our house, imparting unpacked boxes with long creeping shadows, and he jumped and squealed as the thunder boomed. It was well past his bedtime before he’d finally settled down enough to go to sleep.
The next morning I found him awake in bed and smiling. “I watched the lightning at my window!” he proudly announced.
A few mornings later, he told me the same thing. “You’re silly,” I said. “It didn’t storm last night, you were only dreaming!” “Oh…” He seemed somewhat disheartened. I ruffled his hair and told him not to worry, there should be another storm soon.
Then it became a pattern. He would tell me how he watched the lightning outside his window at least twice a week, despite there being no storms. Recurring dreams of that first memorable thunderstorm, I figured.
It’s easy to hate myself in hindsight. Everybody assures me there’s nothing I could have done, no way I could have known. But I’m supposed to be the guardian of my child, and these are useless words of comfort. I constantly relive that morning: making my coffee, pouring milk over my cereal, and picking up the newspaper to read about the pedophile local authorities had just arrested. It was front-page stuff. Apparently this guy would select a young target (usually a boy), stake out their house for a while, and take flash photos of them through their window while they slept. Sometimes he did more. My stomach sank as the connection was made.
At the time, it was merely something from a child’s imagination. In retrospect, it is the scariest thing I’ve ever heard. About a week before the predator was caught, my son came up to me in his pajamas. “Guess what?” he asked.
“What?”
“No more lightning at my window!”
I played along. “Oh, that’s nice, it finally died down huh?”
“No! Now it’s in my closet!”
I’ve yet to see the photos police have collected.
Credit To: alapanamo
Lightning,


THEN WHO WAS LIGHTNING?
the camera
The comment was refering to the story “Who was phone” as a joke. Im sure he knew what it was coming from.
Lightning is a pedo, phone is a (insert wat u think) and i am jeff’s partner in crime. Th real question is who r u ? Evr thoughtbof tht
A duck.
and im his sister
I could not read that comment at all
“Who was phone” just isn’t funny anymore, even when well timed.
but it only works if you dont know WHO it was ;p
THEN WHO WAS CAMERA??
That is the best comment ever =)
DUH… did you even read it?
Aw they wrote a storie about me
the pewdophile taking pctures with flash!
HA! Phone reference!
Oh god
I really like this one. There hasn’t been a classic ‘moment of realisation’ story like this in a while. Short and sweet.
Nice.
BEFORE he was caught, so he’s saying his son said this before the police got him. It was pedobear.
*Gasp*
I love this story it is amazing. It gave me the chills at the end. I thought it was gonna be another stupid one about a possessed kid or aliens but it was so much better. Very good
Clever what you did there.
The chronology got a bit weird at the end but I’m willing to overlook it
…his son died, didn’t he.
No you moron….
You’re the moron…
ur face is the moron. look at it. DOOO ITTTT
He IS a moron but you lie cake.
THE CAKE IS A LIE!!!!!
The cake is yummy!
Tasty tasty cake.
LasT!
If the cake is a lie…MY WHOLE LIFE HAS BEEN A LIE. </3
no
No takes the cake. Dammit we all wanted some.
Thouroughly enjoyed this pasta
very savory and taut pasta!
This upset me ’cause I have a toddler.
This site will disturb a lot if you have kids
Then make sure you lock your doors.
you betta hide yo kids
Hide yo wife
Hide yo husband
because they rapin everybody up in here
This story was amazing. The end was a little messed up for me, because I missed some vital information in there… XD
it disturbs even more if you are a kid also ive read so many others like bedtime im gonna have a hard time sleeping tonight wish me luck
you better hide yo wife
This scared me because I’m in my room in the dark with my back to the closet
This one breaks my heart but yet still a great pasta. Xoxo
I first imagined the boy was going report sightings of beings seen in the lighting but that ending caught me by suprise, I’m curious as to what the father would have done next nevertheless a treat hidden within the pasta indeed, compliments to the chef ’tis was a good read.
That’s not how you use the word “’tis.” It doesn’t mean “This.” It’s the words “it” and “is” joined together. The apostrophe takes the place of the missing “i.”
You’d have to say either “It’s a good story,” or “’twas a good story.”
wow, i’m so impressed by your obvious intelligence…not. what a jackass you must be.
Would you rather have him ignore Dormin’s mistake? If he hadn’t corrected him, Dormin may have kept using the word tis incorrectly.
Watch out everybody, we got a Grammar Nazi over here
We’re everywhere.
Now add a period to the end of your sentence.
I actually figured it was photographs. I saw it coming. Good story, though
yeah Its me taking all these flash photos
Hey dont forget, we had a deal, you get the pictures, i get the souls. You remember what happened to Jeff when he didn’t play along, dont you Pedo?
Excuse me Slendy, but I’m the only soul collector around here.
humans dont hav souls. silly abominations.
You guys only get all of that after I transport them back in time and life off their remaining time energy of the life they would have had if I hadn’t sent them back in time. Go it?
You just killed it.
WOOF!WOOF!
Now kill yourself!
GRIN!
You lot ain’t doin’ none of that.Harold is here you sons of b*****.
I’M TIRED OF THESE MOTHERFUCKIN’ IDIOTS, ON THIS MOTHERFUCKIN’ CREEPYPASTA!
Now, now. We were having a fine time playing with his forks and the electric socket when you came Pedobear…
Where’s Jeff. I have some business to do with him.
If it has to do with selling me a house in the middle of the woods, I’m not buying it, Jane.
I know you’re in on the deal too.
Posers.
Shaddup Satan. Make me a sammwich.
During this killing spree do you mind if I can have the blood?
This string of comments just made my day.
Jeff u a dead man in coming for you
Properly terrifying
@Steve No I think the son was raped…
Which is creepier to me than if he were killed
Good pasta though
I don’t think that anything was ever *physically* done to the boy in the story. It gives the impression that some of the children were attacked, but that, for the most part, the pedophile was a stalker. The “what *could* have happened” factor is the big one here, since the predator had just moved into the house and was taking pictures from the closet right before he was arrested.
Definitely a pretty haunting story, regardless.
I think the petophille could of attacked him in some sort of way. The father said how sorry he was about it, how much he hated himself. It sounds to me like more than just what we know, but of course I’m not a parent
I’m still confused what happened to the son. Based on previous experiences I’ll assume he died, but once you got to “a few days” then “about a week” and “several weeks” I just couldn’t follow. Otherwise decent pasta.
Well from what I see the pedo got him after spending a few days taking pics. Its not that hard to understand.
What I’m seeing is that the son wasn’t harmed physically, just had photos taken of him for sexual purposes. The father feels bad because he thinks he should have questioned what his son was saying and investigated, rather than chalking it up to recurring dreams. I think if the son had actually been harmed they would have been a little more descriptive about it. Basically, the kid is fine. The dad just thinks he’s a terrible father.
I think the father doesn’t entirely know what the pedo did to his kid yet, because he’s hasn’t dared to look at the pictures yet. So we don’t know if he just took pictures or actually escalated to physical abuse.
Eek!
I don’t really get whether the kid died or not >.<
The kid didn’t die. The son said that the lightning had moved from the window to his closet a week before a pedophile was captured, and it ends with the dad thinking about how he hadn’t seen the pictures yet, implying that the pedophile was the source of the lightning.
I just wanted the pics for a magazine
Your name and common sense say otherwise.
OMNOMNOMN tastiest pasta I’ve read in a long time,
fantastic ending I did NOT see it coming
There is no error in the chronological order of the events, and those who think there is need to reread the story. But here it is, simply put:
1. There is the night of the thunderstorm.
2. “The next morning…”
The boy said he watched the thunderstorm. The father probably assumed the storm extended further into the night.
3. “A few mornings later…”
The boy said he watched it again. This is the first time the father says, “You’re silly. There wasn’t a storm.”
4. “[Then it became] at least twice a week…”
The father figures the boy’s just remembering the original storm because he liked it so much.
6. “I constantly relive that morning [when I saw the predator on the news.]”
This is self-explanatory. He’s looking back, recalling the horrifying realization.
7. “About a week before the predator was caught…”
The father is merely reflecting; going back before he saw it on the news. He’s saying that a week before the guy got caught, the boy then said the lightning moved to his closet. He is upset because he “should have known” here but he didn’t, not until he saw the news. This is why he feels guilty.
8. “I’ve yet to see the photos…”
Now we’re in the present, and this is after the day he saw the guy on the news.
Goddamn, guys.
And no, the boy’s not dead. I mean, it is left open if you really want to perceive it that way. It’s not a FACT that he’s alive; however, I’m here to say that’s not what the author meant. Proof: he’d have already realized before seeing the news. The author would’ve probably mentioned the moment he walked in on the boys body. But whatever, you can think that. That’s also why I’m here to say, no, he wasn’t raped.. Just pictures, which is awful enough to a parent. But again, go for it and make what you want out of it.
You forgot number 5
Thanks, bro.
Absolutely Original!! Love it!! The ending was my favorite!
I agree with Anon2. To me, there doesn’t seem to be a chronological mix-up. It’s pretty straight forward, and a very refreshing read. A human pedophile instead of something supernatural- and let’s be honest here…a pedophile or a human serial killer scares the crap out of me MORE than anything ‘supernatural’ might. I guess it’s just the thought that some of the members of our species are just as messed up as those monsters we’ve read about.
Are you sure about that?
This was a neat idea, but the presentation seemed kind of sloppy.
I UNDERSTAND the order of events, but it wasn’t worded very naturally (or maybe TOO naturally, as it was written more like the dad was “telling” us a story in spoken English), Either way, it just wasn’t a very well constructed pasta.
You put it exactly how I was thinking it it wouldve been better if worded more fluently or added more detail I’m thinking it’s great but it’s odd and it’s harder than it is odd to find what’s odd about it
It’s SUPPOSED to sound like the father was telling it to us, I think it makes us question if it’s really fiction.
Wow is the only word that comes to mind.
Oh my God, real terror here
Days later and this is till terrifying me. It’s kept me up at night. Amazing