La Muerta Blanca
I am currently sitting in front of my computer, scared witless. Any moment now I am going to be killed.
Today a friend of mine told me a story.
His aunt had taken care of him since he was a small boy, and she told him last night about how his parents died. He did a very fair imitation of her (I knew them both pretty well):
“They were doing mission work in some nasty little South American country when a man burst into the mission hospital one night, terrified out of his mind. He told them that his sister had been killed by a Muerta blanca, and that he was certain that it was coming for him next. What is a Muerta blanca? Apparently it was some sort of bogey-man, something like that dumb chupacabra or whatever. They called it the White Death or the White Girl, because it was the soul of someone who hated life so much that they came back in their shrouds to kill those who told of them.
The man had been told about the vengeful spirit by his sister hours before her death. It was a girl with dead, black eyes that wept bile. The thing moved without ever actually moving its legs, and it stalked its victims back to their homes. Now, if you weren’t already aware that this thing was following you, once it got back to your house, it would start knocking on your door…
Once for your skin, which she’ll use to patch her own decaying flesh.
Twice for your muscle, which she’ll gnash her teeth on between victims.
Thrice for your bones, which she’ll make knives to pick her teeth and kill her victims.
Four times for your heart, which she’ll wear around her neck.
Five times for your teeth, which she’ll polish and keep in a box.
Six times for your eyes, which she’ll see the faces of your loved ones through.
Seven times for your soul, which she’ll eat whole – you can never pass while you’re in her stomach.
She has to repeat this on any mirror or door between you and her.
You can try to outrun her, but she’s faster than the fastest man. And if you leave your home while she’s knocking on your door, she won’t be so courteous when she catches up to you.
Now the man was certain that this thing had killed his sister, that he had tried to tell the police, but they would not listen. Next he had tried to tell his priest, but the priest turned him away when he saw that the thing was following him now – oh, that’s right, I forgot about that – it can only get you if you tell someone else about it, or you saw it kill someone else. The man, after finishing his tale, stole a car from the mission, and was never seen again.”
Apparently his mother and father had immediately called his aunt about this when it happened. They were found in the morning, skinned and dismembered. Their bodies were covered in tiny, child-like handprints.”
His aunt was really drunk the night before, and had told him about that. He told me this story early in the morning today at school, before the cops arrived. His aunt had been murdered that night. I called him later that night, and he told me that he was being chased by someone, and now they were knocking on his door. I told him to stop shitting me.
He held the phone away from his face for a minute, and I could hear slow, deliberate knocking. A moment later, I heard the door rip from its hinges and the dying screams of my friend.
Then a little girl’s voice spoke over the line: “WITNESS.” I hung up.
Three minutes ago someone started knocking on my door. She has to knock 28 times on my front door, 28 times on the mirror in the hall, and another 28 times on the door to my bedroom. She’s doing it slowly… I think she wants to scare me some more, let me know that my death is just moments away. I will not run – I couldn’t get to my car in time anyway. She started knocking on my bedroom door a minute ago, she should be done any moment.
Nice knowing you guys, it’s been fuy5
WITNESS
This is a good one, I heard it a long time ago!
Old as the Internet. A classic though.
I was wondering why this wasn’t already here. Great story; about as close as you can come to a classic when you’re talking about internet short fiction.
Yeah, I’m kind of shocked at myself for taking this long to post it =/
One of my favorites.
why on earth did the dumb shit tell us then? unrealistic there.
why the hell would he tell us then if he knew it’d get him killed?
I read this on /x/ already. Awesome story. Paranoid out of my fucking mind now…Fuck…
good pasta.
THE NAME IS WITNESS NOT LA MUERTA BLANCA
also creepy knocking sound coming from my door. g2g
This is fucking awesome.
Nice this is priceless…. But isn’t this similar to candeljack’s sto
everyone’s read this, yet i have not.
i feel so naïïïïïve.
woahexcessiveumlauts.
I thought it was a little….lame.
Classic
Haha. I remember reading this after Stumbling on the intarwebz a while ago. I was like ‘generic creepypasta…quite good but not spectacuHOLYCRAP WITNESS?!?!’
Made me paranoid for the rest of the night.
i would carry around a bunch of those handheld mirrors my whole life.
@ The “Who” when they call “Who’s There”:
I don’t think that it’s the narrator who says ‘Witness’ at the end. From the rest of the story, I got that the ghost says that right after she kills someone.
Personally, though, I heard this about a month ago in video form (it was really creepy, more believable, from the pov of someone’s webcam, which makes the WITNESS at the end make more sense).
I haven’t been able to easily get to sleep for about a month.
oh gosh that scared me.
XD I heard this one just a few days ago. Unrealistic, kinda, but I like it.
I read this one last Halloween. XD Was scared out of my pants. XP
i could have sworn i read this one on this site before
i mean i loved it but i could swear that i read it already
Wow… I’m going to have nightmares tonight.
Wait, I don’t understand.
Why does she have to knock 28 times on each door? It says seven knocks on each door or mirror. Even if the writer meant 28 knocks total, it still wouldn’t make sense, because there are only 3 portals she needs to pass.
Or maybe I’m dumb. Halp plz?
Classics never die if they’re good. WITNESS, that can be used over and over and over again.
its been fuy5
I think I read this on /x/ a while ago.
Wonderful pasta, brix have been shat
@The “Who” when they call “Who’s There”, Dr. Malpractice
The ghost kills someone when
a) They tell someone about the ghost
b) They witnessed it killing someone
So since he heard his friend dying over the phone, he’s considered a witness. And at the end, obviously, similar to the candlejack story, the ghost comes after him before he can finish his sente
this is my favorite pasta, ever.
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WAY TO GO CREEPYPASTA, NOW WE’RE ALL GOING TO DIE.
WAY TO GO CREEPYPASTA, NOW WE’RE ALL GOING TO DIE.
I read this a while ago, but I always forget she makes you a “witness.” Ha, Nice classic.
@The One Hiding Under Your Bed, He already witnessed his friend being killed so whether he told someone or not, he’s dead.
He’s just spreading the wealth. lol
Nice pasta!
This story scared the crap out of meeee.
@Dirjel: She knocks more like:
One
One two
One two three
One two three four
And so on and so forth. If you add it up it makes twenty-eight.
They already had this Story on Pasta for a while.
Still Good though.(:
I love this pasta, it’s one of my favourites.
Read this ages ago, still awesome!
It’s called Witness!
I read this a long time ago, with much better grammar and spelling. I was kinda creepy then, but I’ve seen it enough that it doesn’t phase me anymore. Good story.
What do you mean Witness? I didnt see her kill anyone, neither did i hear it ? Does that mean that if i read about the paper about murder im also witness to that? Stupid-ass girl, doesn’t know the definition of witness. Go peel your own skin off.
she weeps bile? thats just nasty…
Not really believable. If you knwo that telling someone will kill you, why do it? Wait, or was he already doomed after the call?
@ everyone:
It doesn’t matter if he tells or not. He was a witness to one of the murders. She’s going to get him anyway.
damn. I should’ve read all the comments. first =P
This was already on the site.
So I’m confused a little. Does La Muerta Blanca knock seven times total, or does she/it knock more than that.
I mean, the way it’s written it could be:
Seven knocks, one for each part of you it wants.
Or
1 + 2 + 3 + 4 + 5 + 6 + 7 = 28 times.
Um, no… no it wasn’t, Caedus. Unless you’re implying that I shouldn’t bother posting things from the forum on the main site as well?
La Muerta Blanca is a dumb bitch
FUCK i just shat a bit lol na just kidding that wasnt even that scary
Um, yes… yes it was, Caedus. Unless you’re implying that I like arguing over meaningless things?
@ 2nd ‘who was cabbage’
you forgot the link.
i’m glad to see so many observant people.
and i’m going to assume it was an idiot ‘i’m this person not a fraud plz’.
Yea…not my favorite. Writing not so great, left nothing really to the imagination.
I remember that one from a while ago.
Great story, though the many times I read it have proven the lack of trhuu
WITNESS.
Not that scary. Very predictable. Leaves the story dead, because noone in their right mind would tell the tale if they knew that telling would lead to your death.
Glad I’m not the only one who was reminded of Candlejack. If you think of it, the similarities are rather rema
That guy SCPantera, who makes pretty good creepypasta videos on Youtube, did this one. It is pretty good!
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=to7N0oTbtAI
“…some nasty little South American country…”
Hey, what the fuck?
At the end at WITNESS, bricks were shat.
I’m going to have nightmares tonight, and not just her but that little girl from the F.E.A.R. games too.
“It was a girl with dead, black eyes that wept bile.”
Made me think of that chick on Heroes, Maya.
Photo: http://i41.tinypic.com/11rcc1t.jpg
But after the little chuckle I had from that, decent pasta.
we rather liked it it made us feal nice and warm inside keap up the good word
p.s. we hate how all of them are really long now i like some sort and some long b/c we just don’t have enough time
Yeah, like some other people said, this story is similar to the candlejack story because 8fhy40w8 WITN
Wow, this chick is gonna be busy tonight.
brix were shat.
Isn’t it weird how this pasta would have been pretty mediocre if not for that last word? And it ended up being fucking awesome?
Hmmm…….I approve.
This one is good.
Approval, this has it.
Very helpful of her to press enter!
omg! I hear a knocking sound….
I’ve read this before. It’s not bad, kind of sad in a way somone so young could hate life and the world. Pretty good.
what happens if you get her drunk?
I’ve always hated this one…
I mean, I love the story. It’s just, one continuous typo bugs me- it should be “La Muerte Blanca”, not “La Muerta Blanca”. “La Meurte Blanca” means “The White Death” and “La Muerta Blanca” means “The Dead White Woman/Girl.”
What happens if you answer the door after only one knock?
Will she only take your skin?
Candlejack, it makes sense as-is. “They called it the White Death or the White Girl…”
*sigh*
Thank god I’m sitting inside the Freedom Gundam right now, that bitch will have to get through a hail of railguns, beam blasts and plasma cannon shots, and honsetly, I’d like to see the bitch try it.
Waht if you’re out in space, is this bitch able to survive somehow?
Has anyone tried opening the door while she is knowcking and shooting her?
Okay, this is bullshit. You fags are just a bunch of kids shitting your pants over a poorly written post some other fag made. You know what I’ve got that you bitches don’t? A girlfriend. She just finished making me a sandwhich and is asking to come into my room with it right nowfl;cfmerocnjhbhf,frxjbpj l cfvg.cd’;65
WITNESS
jesus that was efed up
ahahaaaaaaaaa SHIT again i had to fight her off before with a pellet gun and a blunt knife… now i’m pregnant
i’m male
That was epicjka;;;;;;;;;;;;;
WITNESS
Ah, god damni5tWITNESS
damn you cthulhu, why’d you post here? now everyone but us elder gods are going to go insane anytime they read the comments. that story was really good, tho, surprisingly so.
I’d be dead for sure, because I can’t help listening to and sharing ghost stories.
i feel stupid asking but how do you post storys
So what if you just answered the door then while she was knocking? Would she kill you then or finish the ritual?
If I heard seven knocks at my front door I would rush to the bathroom, take an aerosol can, and smash my bathroom mirror into a thousand little pieces and then lay them in a row in my hallway going to my room where I would shut the door, smash my full body mirror, and repeat the process before climbing out my window and driving into the fucking sunset.
Wow, didn’t think he/she had that much time to type out all that while the girl was knocking
OK, some people are stupid.
The reason she’s telling the story is because she’s already going to die for being a witness. Keeping silent would not have saved her.
Hmm… what if you told someone the story and then said CandleJack… would they wind up seeghaojifadj WITN
Great pasta.
Someone is knocking on my door.
Brb.
I’m going to buy a hundred mirrors and line them all the way through my house. I’m going to cover the fucking walls in mirrors, it’ll take her forever to knock on all those8oq
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I love this one. So great. It keeps the ‘slow knock’ cliche alive and brix inducing! Did anyone notice that the way he typo’d at the end… It was like he was clawing at his keyboard, trying to crawl away.
Y for his right hand jutting from it’s desired path
And 5 as his left claws at his keyboard. unintended awesome?
The ending made me lol so fucking hard.
that is neat but it shacked me a bit and I need to get the door before the knocker gets pis
This is stupid, why didn’t the aunt die sooner. The parents told her before they died which was when the friend was a small boy. Therefore, she should have died long ago.
Arn’t we all a witness now ? Oh shit, i can hear knocking sounds on my door.
“to kill those who told of them.”
saw that coming and it still hit me like a rock.
brb, door
@Stefanie: she didn’t die ‘cos she kept the secret for a while.
This shit fucked me up.
For all you people that don’t understand the knocking thing, she knocks a total of 28 times.
(1+2+3+4+5+6+7 = 28).
It’s time for math fun! Let’s say we’re all “witnesses”, and each of our homes has 3 doors/mirrors between us and the White Death. We’ve all read this, so we know everyone here’s going to die. Let’s say it takes 1 second per knock, and the chica takes 60 seconds to get to the home of her next victim. Let’s also assume kills are instantaneous, that she’s been very busy since the story was posted, and let’s say it was posted 30 days ago.
She starts knocking on your front door. How long do you have until she reaches you?
30 days = 2592000 seconds, which means she’s killed about 494 people:
n = 494; (21 * (n + 1) * n / 2) + (60 * 494) = 2597205
You know she’s killed those 494, so she takes 10374 seconds, or about 2.88 hours, to get to you.
Extra credit: How long has this story been floating around the interwebs for people to witness? How long would you expect the White Death to knock before she reaches you? How many people would you have to know about her killing for her to take 60 years (your appreciable adult life) to finish knocking?
Also, WHO WAS PHONE??
oh i get it.
i witnessed her kill someone.
uh-oh.
Wait, hehe, at the end for her to write witness it means that she had to send the story here to be posted. Imagine if he had really slow upload, she’d be getting really frustrated.
Yeah okay.
Why doesn’t someone kill her?
I don’t recall reading about her immortality.
WHO WAS WHTE?!?!
BUT THEN WHO WAS GIRL?!1dweq
Witness
I hate Bovius for breaking my brain.
Also, creepypasta is hilariouspasta, and it’s definitely because of the key word there. I can totally hear this little kid saying it trying to act all scary and badassm complete with the hissed s’s and everything, and just totally failing in the attem8u9
WITNESS
…Fuck, I just failed that particular test of my apparently meagre self control.
THEN WHO WAS WITNESS?
Oh, shit, I guess I was… that can’t be goojrg
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people are stupid they say the author is stupid for writing this if it’s going to kill him if they read it properly it was already gonna kill him because he was a l9nfgd
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Him telling us didn’t kill him, the fact that he was a witness to his friend’s death did.
xD
another pry to late to be read, but i will say my piece none the less.
TO TOP POSTS
AS TO WHY WE WERE TOLD
you say its stupid because her telling would get her killed, but she was already doomed. She was witness to her friends death. if you recall what the ghost said on the phone – WITNESS! basically you know what happened and ima kill u. so she told us so we were warned… but notice at the end of the story she says – its been fun! but while dieing or attacked she spells – its been “fuy5″. this proves here death and thus the last line which was sent by the white lady… WITNESS
if you didnt get any of that… well ok then lol
when i say the last WITNESS it is sent to US who read this story and have proof of her death so basically we all should die XD
THEN WHO WAS TEETH?!
or…
WHO WAS YO MAMA?!
@ The “Who” when they call “who’s there”:
He was a witness. He was going to die anyways, he just wanted to let us know what happened, have record record of his death, etc.
tasty pasta
Wait, so does this mean we’re all witnesses? So…are we all gonna die? This story was such bullshiklnsfam WITNESS
she knocking on my mirror to bad i knocked it down now she cant geWITNESS
All those people are real douchebags. If they just stop telling the freaking story, nobody would die, you knWITNESS
Graveone, this has nothing to do with Candlejacks stor
Creepypasta is creeeeeeeeeeepy
12/10
Why would they tell us so we get killed!? Anyway very good story.
Damn it, I was hoping I’d have more time, but after reading the commej90
WITNESS
If you know it is going to kill you when you tell someone about it, why tell anyone?
This is still my favorite.
Yeah seriously if you don’t actually see her kill anyone how are you a witness?
I love how everyone in the comments is typing “Witness” even though they’re
a) not telling about the Girl
and
b) did not witness the killing (yes, reading about it doesn’t count as a “wit5fffffffffffffffffffffff
WITNESS.
Fucking neighbours don’t knock on the wall while I’m reading this ><
Wow, that was pretty good. Pretty sure that black-eye bile weeping thing came from hero’s. But on the whole good.
Hang on, someones knocking on my door…
WITNESS.
Shit I just told my friend about this and now I’m scared as fuck.
OHSHIT I JSUT HEARD KNOCKING.
Oh god guys….
fuck….
oh shit I’m so scared….
20….21…..22….23…..24….25….26….27….28
That’s weird.
Maybe it was all in my head or someth01az
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hahah mofos i aint dead yet im wait OH SHI-
Great, great story. One of the best here. Has that “urban legend” feel to it like the old “Bloody Mary” stories we used to tell each other as kids.
BUT THEN WHO WAS FUY5?
Scary, but if she comes for me, I am not going to give up without a fight.
I just don’t get why everybody’s saying ‘WITNESS’ at the end of their posts.all they’re doing is84uihefj
WITNESS.
Fucking fags, you can’t scare me with your OBVIOUSLY faked “WITNESS” comments. Dammit, how stupid do you thinkklkopkppll;
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Haha, I had read that one a few years ago and it scared me to death. It’s a nice one.
THEN WHO WADFGH
WITNESS
JESUS FUCK
my sister just came back from school at 9:10 am cause it’s closed. of course, she’s locked out so she starts hammering on the front door.
BRIX WERE SHAT
MOTHER ******! Dude, as soon as I finished reading this, the UPS man was knocking at the front door.
Well. I have my monologue for Actor’s Studio now.
I can’t believe you’re all so scared of the stupid story, it’s obviously not reLil
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LOL! I like Witness?’s comment! He has a good point
yum extreemly satisfying pasta
best one for a long time
Would’ve been more awesomer if someone had knocked on something in my house afterwards.
Also…
WHO WAS SHINY MIRROR?!
It makes me laugh how people try to continue the Candlejack meme.
If lots of people read this at the same time at different locations, who will Witness kill first? lol
Maybe someone should tell the story then call candlejack so they’ll meet at someone’s house then Witness and candlejack could live happily ever after.
BUT WHO WAS KEYBOARD PIANIST??
OFFLIGGAARRGGHHRJIGTBNLSRK NJGBLFBN SLFR NTLSKD FGBWLF NLEJRNE FRGHTBSDJVNLERBJGSDFVGER
wha if bitch saya candlejack? knock knoc
my first trought after reading this was: “FUCK WE’RE FUCKED” (exact words)
i liked this story. I like how the girl herself is never described accurately and the feeling of an unstoppable chain behind this: the sister of the guy told him about la muerta blanca, the guy told it at the friend’s parents, they told it to the aunt who told it to the boy who told it to the protagonist of the story who told it to everyone on the internet. Deserves a 7/10 at least.
BananaCorn, do not use my name.
Fear the Darkness
-Nex
There’s knocking at my door, I shot through it…no blood….I don’t have much time, tell my mother I lovfdsc
WITNESS.
*girl knocks on door*
*answers door*
*girl*: Would you like some cookies?
*me:*no
*girl*
what if u open the door for her? what happens? if she never knocks and u open the door, wtf happens?
THEN WHO WASSHGFK
WITNESS
What a load of bullsy5 WITNESS
Do we have a new meme, instead of “who was …” or candlejack? WITNE
Scared out of my fucking mind right now my door is currently closed and my friend started knocking on it
Great story though
guys, if she comes for you, take a few mirrors and shatter them. each piece is like a tiny mirror, and she has to knock on every single piece before she can get to you!
it’s the perfect pla4igj WITNESS
What happens if I’m Mike Tyson? I can knock this bitch out, in the first round. When she starts knockin’ I’m a punch a hole through the door.
Wait, if the person who wrote this was killed before they could finish then how was this story posted? Lol I doubt the ghost wouuh53jh
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I find it amusing how people still continue this meme.
Old meme is ollsshgeklkkkklllll32;
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Wait, slight issue. Either he sent it before dying, which means it can’t be altered, or else he was killed before it was sent, in which case this ghost has a VERY loose definition of witness
Also, hmm… let’s see… Now La Muerta Blanca is after me, and I am certain that Slenderman will come after me soon due to me becoming so obsessed with him. Now all I need to do is say Cand-I mean, you know who’s name when they arrive, then offer my soul to the devil, and I can have a party!
awesome story!!! knocking is freaky! anticipation of the thing is actually worse than the event itself. creepy how he wrote till the last second. OH SHIT. just realized that makes us all witnesses. damn. i’m still a virgin. maybe someone in my dorm can fix that before SHE comes knocking.
OH SHIT! DAMN YOU! Fucking scared me right after I was done reading this my mom knocked on my door and I swear I thought I shit myself!
I can’t let you tell that Starfox.
People are saying \"why tell us if its going to get him killed?\" well, if you pay attention, the girl tells him WITNESS, which means hes screwed anyway. And now we\’re witnesses. get it?
Stupid girl. Slenderman’s really not gonna be happy when he finds out she got me fir8spk
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Um…. this seriously scared the heck out of me. XD
I don’t understand the candlejack or “who was” thing….
Wha does that mean? >.>
Anyways, I was even afraid to tell my mom this cuz she would be
a witness! D: But she doesn’t believe it cuz no spirit girl will come
knocking on our doweidwdjoor53545555555
WITNESS
Gotta tell you.
I really love this.
But uh…if you would NOT make me jump of the sound of my step mom opening and closing kitchen cabinets? That’d be greeaaat. e_e
This was pretty good, if someone knocks on my door tonight I’m going to have a heart attack. Like I did for a minute when I was reading the comments and somebody else had used my username that I use on all these other sites… I didn’t know what was going on, but I’ve been on here all day long and I was pretty sure it meant something BAD was going to happen!
She can’t get me, i’m already dead
Good luck miss. I’m behind thousands mirrors
Good luck miss. I’m behind thousand mirrors.
LOL