Scary Paranormal Stories & Short Horror Microfiction

Creepypasta

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It was the 2nd of January, 2:04 AM. I woke up to a knocking on the door. One knock every 3 seconds. I slipped on my slippers and walked down the stairs. As I walked down, the knocking on the door got faster, almost like a heartbeat. When I got to the door, the knocking stopped, I looked outside and nobody was there.

I went back up to my room and went back to bed, thinking it was just some kids playing a prank. At 4:21 AM I woke up to the front door slamming shut. I jumped, terrified. I looked over at my frosted window to find “smile” written all over it in the frost. I grabbed my phone next to me, ready to call 911, only to find a message written on it saying “I told you to smile”. I cried and ran for my life running outside.

As soon as I got outside I knocked on my neighbors house across the road. They answered and held me while I sobbed. They phoned the police. At exactly 5:42, the police came to my neighbors house after an extensive search of my house. They told me there had been no evidence at all of anyone in my house other than me. The messages on the window were gone, same with my phone. They told me to get some sleep and advised me to see the doctor about stress and anxiety problems. Fuck that. I knew what happened to me was real.

The following evening, after spending the day at my neighbors, I went home. I went up to my bedroom and set up a camera. It was aimed at my bedroom door and my bed. I set it to record and went to sleep. Thankfully, I slept through the night. However, as I watched the footage, I couldn’t believe what I saw.

At 3 in the morning, something crawled out from under my bed. It was a completely naked, anorexic man. He stood  up and looked at me on the bed. He did so for another hour, not moving at all. Then he moved. He walked over to the camera until his face took up the whole shot. He was extremely pale and had bulging veins all over his head. His eyes were completely black, with a huge smile on his face. He stared at the camera for another two hours, not blinking, just slightly twisting his head every now and again.

After two hours of him staring went past, he walked back over to my bed and crawled back under. I skipped the video forward until it showed me getting up and walking over to the camera. The video finished. I was frozen with fear. The video showed him going back under, but not leaving. Whatever it was, it was still there.

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  • Henry

    I like this one! It leaves some to imagination and has decent descriptive power behind it. A very good pasta, I would eat again. Possibly even have thirds, at the risk of felling like a fatty haha.

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    • http://creepypasta.com madison

      i like your thought they seem very….. interesting about that wierd have thirds more of pasta thing

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      • Swirly Head Man

        Stories on Creepypasta are called pastas.

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  • THEN WHO WAS….nevermind…

    This was pretty cool! I would be super freaked if that happened to me. But WHO WAS NAKEDNESS??? lol…seriously great story!

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    • BUT WHO WAS BONE

      Agreed.

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  • Nick D.

    Delicious pasta I will definitely eat again. Not scary, but chilling and creepy nonetheless. 10/10

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  • The Llama Amalume Sama

    That made me laugh… nice pasta.

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  • RedBeans

    Nice, but I don’t understand what ‘I told you to smile’ has to do with it really.

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    • Zeeboto

      Perhaps the naked man knew he would set up a camera?

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  • http://creepypasta.com madison jade

    this was a more… odd story. but very descriptive and interesting.all though i li9ked it it seemed a little wierd.

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  • Tardigrade

    Really good, really creepy! I think “anorexic” would have been better as “emaciated” or similar, though, as the former is an eating disorder and not a physical appearance.

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  • Alice

    Very cool idea. Only, if the creature was under his bed, why was it knocking on the narrator’s door? And if the police went to the house, why didn’t they find it? Where did this thing come from? Why is it emaciated? Why is it haunting the narrator? When did it tell the narrator to smile before the message? Now, even with all these questions, there were few, if any, typos and the mystery is nice :) obviously. xD please, continue to cook up some yummy pastas! i give it a 6/10

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    • Bonnie

      Near the beginning the narrator says they are awoken to the door slamming, so maybe that’s the man first entering?

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    • Craver

      I like less explanations on my pasta

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  • Nighttouch

    I loved the 2nd half of this story. The overall idea was good, but the part before the camera was set up, and the part after feel like 2 different stories.
    Still, 8/10.

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  • Anonymous

    You simply need to make the wording more serious sounding. Not using the phrase ‘ran for my life’ :3 really good story though. I think you should have made it longer though.

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  • Bo

    You simply need to make the wording more serious sounding. Not using the phrase ‘ran for my life’ :3 really good story though. I think you should have made it longer though.

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  • Bobby Flay

    Ok, I honestly got creeped the f*** out. Short but scary. 9/10

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  • Anonymous

    Thank god the bottom of my bed is right on the ground.

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    • Jane the Killer

      That’s exactly what I was going to say!!!

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      • Mr. Dafuq

        Same here

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        • PAPUCHA

          My bed is one of those that you have to pull apart and lift the other part up in order to assemble it, and there is space below it for sheets ad stuff. When I was little, my brother and I took turns hiding in that space. I now imagine a corpse there, since I don’t have space under the bed that a monster can crawl out from underneath. However, I imagine the liftable side of the bed (because my bed is literally split in two parts; one that you pull and the other that you lift, under which is the coffin/place for bed sheets) being pushed be the corpse underneath, and since I sleep on the pull side of the bed, it can now do whatever the hell it wants to me.

          Wow, I just realized how much I (hypothetically) talk. Ever since I started posting comments, I have been posting too much. I even described my fucking bed to everyone!!!!
          But, hey, good idea for a pasta, right?? :P

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        • Devil’s Advocate

          That, honestly sounds like a couch bed. The whole pull and lift thing. But my bed isn’t on the ground, and I’m this close to having my roommate check under the bed every night.
          This pasta preys on the fear of “the monster under the bed” or in the closet. A fear nearly all people have as kids. And I love it.

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  • Gee

    It was really generic, if not a bit bland until the very last sentence. The last sentence changed my rating on this one XD Good story. *fist bump*

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  • Nina

    Reminds me of the news report about a Japanese woman living in a guys house for a year.
    http://www.telegraph.co.uk/news/newstopics/howaboutthat/2054057/Homeless-woman-comes-out-of-closet.html

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  • J

    To answer some confusion going on in the comments, my interpretation was that the creature/man was knocking, then when the door slammed that was the creature/man entering. It told her to smile by writing “smile” in the frost on the window. The protagonist obviously did not smile, so then the text message was sent, “I told you to smile”. So I was not confused.

    I thought this was very creepy, especially the part after the camera was brought into play. What I wish, though, is that you would have slowed it WAY down. It felt incredibly rushed, and the random “fuck that” took me out of the story for a moment. More details, more drawn out scenes, and this would be a 10/10 for me. As is, I gave it 7/10 for creep factor at the end :)

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    • PAPUCHA

      I actually like the “Fuck that”. It was sudden; at one point, the neighbors are holding the sobbing protagonist, and a couple of sentences later she’s all like “Fuck you, son’t tell me what to do, I know what’s happening to me is real”. I wasn’t really concentrating, and the “Fuck that” woke me up. :)

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  • Anonymous

    This was really tasty.

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  • Alexandra

    I read this story yesterday, and it had me up til 6 AM this morning thinking that something was going to crawl out from under my bed. I guess not a lot of other people think this is very scary, but this is the only pasta that’s scared me so much. Good job.

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  • Gabie

    Really good story I must say.

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  • And

    Aack!! Wtf? Omg great story with seriously creepy ending!

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  • Jason

    Great story. Open endings leave the imagination to run wild and give an impression of ongoing terror. Well done!

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  • anonymous

    A lot of things irk me about this pasta. First of all, your usage of ‘anorexic’ is incorrect and borderline offensive, whether or not you intended it to be. You could have said “sickly thin”, “bone thin”, etc. The ‘monster’ you described reminded me a lot of The Rake; not original.
    The last point I’d like to make is in regards to your plot-holes and awkward sentences… things that could be corrected by proof-reading.

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  • Kiri

    It has potential but the writing was lazy. Especially the part where the man was described as anorexic. That doesn’t even make sense because anorexic isn’t a synonym for skinny, since there are more anorexic people out there who aren’t skinny than there are skinny ones. It would actually make it even more creepy if you actually described his thinness! Something like “He was so thin that his gray, paperlike skin clung to his bones in a sickening way, and he even seemed to lack muscles.” would have helped and amped up the creepiness at least a bit!
    I’ll give it a 6 because it could be decently creepy if written less blandly!

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  • Black Cat

    Was it supposed to be a fusion between Jeff the Killer, The Rake and Boogey Man?

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  • Madison and Katherine

    Very good! :D

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