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  1. Liu
    December 19, 2013

    Gave it a 2, too predictable, more sad than scary but more cheesy than sad. If there had been some sort of twist, then you would have gotten me. I like the style, just not the content.

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    • Anonymous
      January 28, 2014

      I dount know I like it

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  2. The Reader
    December 19, 2013

    So your title gives away the twist immediately. The way the parents are first mentioned (not talking, staying in the bedroom all day) also makes the twist incredibly obvious. The ending felt a little cheesy to me, the whole “Gotta go do my homework on denial. Gee, I’m glad I don’t have that!” as his/her parents lay rotting in bed….I think it’s a creepy premise, and I think you have a good start. You could do a lot more with the story, and I think it deserves a rewrite and expansion. :)

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  3. LovesGod
    December 19, 2013

    Yea, I totally agree with THE READER. The story had alot of potential but it was so predictable. I knew what was going to happen after I read the first three lines.

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  4. Lee
    December 19, 2013

    Did creepypasta and crappypasta sites switch?

    I don’t see how the last few made it onto the site. Slow season?

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  5. Potato
    December 19, 2013

    Just tooooo predicteable
    And last bit oh god -__-

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    • Potato
      December 19, 2013

      The*

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  6. Anonymous
    December 19, 2013

    For me there was a bit of twist. Initially I thought that maybe the author was a ghost in denial and the parents had been mourning. But then it turned out that it was the parents who were dead all along. So it wasn’t too bad. The ending, while cheesy, was very nice in my opinion. Kind of like those Japanese ghost stories.

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  7. Legolas Greenleaf
    December 19, 2013

    this was good. I liked it.

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  8. Anonymous
    December 19, 2013

    That was like a Stephen King story titled ‘Under the Weather’. It was a definite steal.

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  9. dildoman
    December 21, 2013

    super predictable, and would be better off without the whole denial thing at the end

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  10. The kitten
    December 21, 2013

    Nice. I found the very end amusing…

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  11. Tariq R.
    December 21, 2013

    In addition to comments already said, I thought a few things were weird.

    1. Mom’s don’t really have “girlfriends” after becoming Mom’s. Idk, that was just strange to me.

    2. Lol. Kid is obviously young if they take a schoolbus home. Too young to be taking a psychology class. It just doesn’t seem realistic.

    3. End (I mean the last few lines about psychology class/denial) was too straightforward.

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    • derpbutt
      December 21, 2013

      What a strange and somewhat depressing idea your #1 is – the idea that women cease to have female friendships once they have children. It’s certainly not accurate when I think of my female friends who are mothers and all the mothers in my family.

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    • The Reader
      December 22, 2013

      I’m a mother. I have girlfriends. My social life didn’t die with my son’s birth.

      Also, lots of high schools offer psychology classes. And bus rides home.

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  12. WolfyGirl
    December 21, 2013

    I thought it was pretty funny, but I wanted something scary…

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  13. Anonymous
    December 22, 2013

    Wtf was that about. Lame story.

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  14. Anonymous
    December 22, 2013

    Tariq R.:
    In addition to comments already said, I thought a few things were weird.

    1. Mom’s don’t really have “girlfriends” after becoming Mom’s. Idk, that was just strange to me.

    2. Lol. Kid is obviously young if they take a schoolbus home. Too young to be taking a psychology class. It just doesn’t seem realistic.

    3. End (I mean the last few lines about psychology class/denial) was too straightforward.

    In my high school you’re actually able to take a physcology class as a sophomore.

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  15. Emily
    December 22, 2013

    I thought it was pretty creepy &really clever how you incorporated the psychology homework in there. I liked it, I give it 8.

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  16. Professor
    December 23, 2013

    Tariq R.:
    In addition to comments already said, I thought a few things were weird.

    1. Mom’s don’t really have “girlfriends” after becoming Mom’s. Idk, that was just strange to me.

    2. Lol. Kid is obviously young if they take a schoolbus home. Too young to be taking a psychology class. It just doesn’t seem realistic.

    3. End (I mean the last few lines about psychology class/denial) was too straightforward.

    4. Our brilliant young psychologist could not actually figure to call for an ambulance for his parents.

    Concerning #1, it is a matter of culture. In some African cultures, a woman is not allowed to have female friends after marriage, believe it or not. What you have mentioned may refer to the Islamic tradition.

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  17. Ethan Thomas
    December 23, 2013

    Not a bad premise. It really has some good potential. However, the story was too predictable. Because of the title, I was able to guess what the ending would be after a couple of lines.

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  18. HolyDonuts
    December 23, 2013

    This story is just like ‘The Landlady’
    I give it a 4/10

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  19. LilCreepyPasta
    January 2, 2014

    October 5 is my birthday

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  20. Elijah Cassalia
    January 7, 2014

    I don’t have an e-mail

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  21. Ryann
    January 15, 2014

    Little more length would have been nice. How’d they die?

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  22. CYT
    January 15, 2014

    I liked it but it could be better :)

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  23. Chris
    January 19, 2014

    I really liked the twist, but I also agree it was too predictable. Spelling and grammatical errors are huge turn-offs for anyone in the online community, so watch that as well. Maybe change the narrator to a community college freshman or a summer school student as psychology isn’t a common item in high school curricula. Granted, I don’t see anywhere in there that this is a high school student were talking about, but I read it that way.

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  24. Eshed Benayun
    February 14, 2014

    7/10. Although I was a little surprised by the twist , I suppose the title kinda predicted it.
    Besides that, it was well written. loved it.

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  25. Anonymous
    February 23, 2014

    Very predictable, try making a Creepypasta that doesn’t give the whole story away with the title.

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