Why He Weeps
I’d heard stories of it. Retreat Road down in Cochrane, Alberta. They have a monastery there. Robes and everything. But their real claim to fame is the massive statue of Christ being crucified in the woods. I’ve been there a few times. Walked up the path with all the smaller statues beside the path. There was a baby, a group of people reaching towards Jesus, all those things, finally culminating in this 20-foot tall cross with Jesus hanging from it. What gets a lot of people though, is that Jesus is weeping on the cross. Nobody can seem to figure out why. Weeping is not the action of a Lord and Saviour.
Never.
Unthinkable.
I’ve been a few times during the day. It’s an interesting walk. Even for the Atheist like myself, it is still awe-inspiring. I happened to notice lights though, beneath all the statues. I asked around, and they do light the path up at night. I asked if I could come back then, but they told me the path would be closed. No one would tell me why.
Not one to follow rules, I returned that night, and made my way over the fence and onto the path. As I walked along the winding route to the large statue, I passed the smaller statues. They seemed different. It was the angle the light hit them. The statue of the baby … it’s eyes were all sunken in, and the shadows seemed to make its fingers end in claws. The statue of the people reaching towards Jesus, they looked dead, reaching towards Jesus with the shadows casting a look of horror on his face. Something about them really unsettled me, but it was on a deeper level than just what they depicted now. I reached the statue of Jesus and gazed up at his face. I stood there for what felt like hours, just wondering why he was weeping. What for? What cause?
I heard the whispers and rustling of the trees on all sides of me long before I saw anything. I gazed up at Jesus, looked deep into those stone eyes, and understood.
That night, he was weeping for me.
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Credited to TheCoffinDancer.
BUT THEN WHO WAS JESUS?
wut
It’s got the perfect amount of detail to be extremely frightening. This one’s gold.
Not necessarily creepy, but I really like this one.
first to comment!
this is pretty cool. I like the religious theme and the overall mysteriousness of it. although I’m not quite sure if I fully understand the ending. I’m guessing something bad happened to him and thats why Jesus was weeping?
anyway nice story…
FIRST.
Brilliant.
nigga i dont cry fo nobody
In b4 the 14 year old gothtards with their “FAIL I H8 U 4 TRYIN TO FORCE RELIGION ON MEEEE. I BETZ U BURN WITCHIZ!” and “I DUN GET IT, LOLZ!”.
I liked it. I usually shy away from anything with religious under- or over-tones, but this was very dramatic- and not really religious at all, as a full piece. Creepy, in a sort of understated way, and very skilfully written. I liked the preciseness of the location- “on THIS road, in THIS state, there’s a statue that looks like THIS”. Too many people try too hard to be obscure and artsy, and wind up sounding pretentious. There’s nothing pretentious here (that doesn’t belong, at least). Good work, TheCoffinDancer.
I think this had/has potential to be really really awesome…but it ends too abruptly and openly, in my opinion.
Heheheh.
It seems… a bit wonky, somehow, but the ending is quite good.
Very awesome!
I GOT GOOSEBUMPS.
This Pasta has sent more shivers up and down my spine than any other pasta I have read.
I’m seconding Mreee’s opinion. This pasta had a lot of potential, but the ending is undercooked.
Hehehe! ^_^…. lol… Heh… heh…. >_> Uh-oh…
Nice.
I liked this, if simply for the ending.
Good hot pasta! I give it 8 ;_;’s out of 10.
Made my spine tingle.
LOL U DYED BCUZ U WUZ ATHEIST LOL
…I couldn’t resist?
Yeah, I agree, a slightly rushed ending… but there’s more left to the imagination than ever before and pretty much NOTHING is absolutely clear. The narrator’s fate is completely obscure. He could have just fallen victim to a pair of Jehovah’s Witnesses, and Jesus was crying because he knows what a pain they are… or the Willow Men could have come after him.. or… well, anything. So I like this. It’s really left almost totally up to the imagination.
I’m loving it. I don’t need any more or less details.
Someonereadthisoutloudtome
Not very creepy, honestly, but certainly a good story.
I think the only really creepy thing was the description of how the statues changed to become “crooked”, and even that, not so much.
-shrug-
Oh well. Good tale anyway.
This was good :]
Unfortunately, I live near Cochrane, & there is no place in or around it like that. So, that ruined it, but other than my knowledge of this being fictional (oh my god! who knew?!) it was satisfying.
Whoa that was awesome. I really liked it.
I like it! But I kinda wish the ending had a little more too it. It was pretty eerie but…not really scary.
A rather bland piece of pasta in my opinion. I would have liked it a better if the details were a little more flushed out, but solid concept dude I really appreciate the originality.
P.S. Savior or not, I know I’d be crying if a bunch of jackasses decided to nail me into a piece of wood.
Amazing. But what happened to the man?
this is fucking awesome.
That sucks Shuleeps. I live near Edmonton and as soon as I read this I was planning a road trip to Cochrane so I could check this place out. Oh well it was still a good piece of pasta in my opinion.
i live in alberta.
ffffuuuuuuuu-
Jesus wept
Shuleeps, Ray, it is a real place. I’ve been there. Less than a week ago. If you get up that major hill near Cochrane heading towards Calgary (where I live), theres a left off the highway. Take a left, then a right, then follow the long road down. Its a marked street. If you come from the direction of Calgary, it’s clearly marked “RETREAT” and “Retreat Road.”
i got a wee bit scared…i’m looking over my shoulder
quite a yummy pasta says i!
that is all.
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I’m from Saskatchewan, Eh.
My friend told me something along the lines of this. He used to live in a small town in Alberta (don’t remember where), and in the cemetery, there was a twelve-foot tall granite statue of an angel. Apparently, the statue was the first thing in the cemetery, apparently to watch over the rested. Every day, he had to ride his bike to school, and every day he’d see that angel. Now, back in the day, school schedules were around 11:00-5:00. Not too bad, but later in the year, it got dark really quick. He told me that every time he walked rode by at night, it always seemed that the angel was staring at him. Hell, he even had a photo of the thing in mid-October; the thing’s eyes were fucking glowing red pinpricks.
One day, as he was riding past, the angel was gone. Fucking gone. The pedestal it was attached to was practically untouched. No foot tracks, tires, treads: Nothing. No evidence of any thing or person took the angel, but it’s gone.
Ooh pretty interesting story
Even if i dont think i really get it ahah
and lol @ people who think there first to comment but there actually not.
twats.
ACTIVATE!
Form of… TAR SANDS
Not creepy….
Hang on….Weeping Angels!
Delicioso
At least two idiots in this thread that think they are first just because they saw no comments when they got here. It does take a while to show up, you morons.
Also, this was not creepy. But it was kind of cool, nonetheless.
Oh no, now the Willow Men are coming for athiests too!
This was a really good story, I thought, but the ending wasn’t terribly creepy. I liked the description of the statues after he goes back at night, that was really well done. Though, as for the ending, I would have liked a little more information on what was coming for him, and why.
I agree with Azriel. The open-ended ending was nice, but a bit more would’ve made this story great.
I did love this though. Just wish it was a bit more flushed out with the details.
ALSO, with the statues changing, was anyone else reminded of the statues in the amusement park in Silent Hill 3? They did change or snything, but, when you go up to them, you would’ve sworn they were about to eat your face off.
*didn’t, I ment didn’t, the statues in SH3 didn’t hange. ^^;
What the hell???
I don’t get where it ends.
What, do the “demons” get him?
Very good. I like the vague, yet ominous ending.
this was good.
too bad it was repetative (i can’t spell stfu) and had some weird grammar goin onnn,
i liked it
I like this one, even if it’s not that scary. Reminds me of the Doctor Who episode “Blink,” which (if anyone wants to check it out, it’s probably online somewhere) is some pretty scary pasta.
Clearly Jesus wants your soul.
hey chill reaper
I didn’t know I insulted you so much by making an honest mistake
THIS IS DELICIOUS
I got the impression that the evil statues came to life and killed him or something. Am I in the ball park?
Anyways, one of THE BEST pastas I’ve ever read.
Definitely not creepy, but it’s a fantastic read. Nice entertainment. :]
Any more detail on the ending would’ve ruined it. I was skeptical about the Jesus doesn’t cry thing, but it was a great piece.
this was really interesting…not creepy..but its nice
utterly brilliant :]
i loved it
this. was. AWESOME.
BUT WHO WAS JESUS?
wow…i’m impressed.
Haha, Shruiken’s comment made me laugh.
I was expecting the statues to start torturing the Jesus statue…
nice but sad pasta
There could have been a little resolution as to the protagonist’s fate, but I liked it. Even something like the next day finding him crucified next to Christ would have been good in my book.
“Weeping is not the action of a Lord and Saviour.”
Jesus wept.
I shat holy brix.
Those who say the ending suck have a weak mind. You know very well that the ending had the perfect combination of vaguness and yet overall unevitability. You know what happens to him
You know why he weeps.
PS. BUT THEN WHO WAS DEMONS
If you don’t think this is awesome, you are a moron.
Delicious pasta.
holy mother of pearl! :O
this is good pasta
and the open ending really gives the reader a chance to imagine what happens next
Entirely satisfying. great work. 10/10
Love it! Love it love it love it! Delicious pasta!
i really liked that one, like, a lot.
I really like this one.
Jesus was Crying for the man because the man was an atheist crying for his everlasting soul and the imiages that he saw of the dead and so forth were the ones that people see of hell , It was a story of a Atheist having a god moment . That was what i got out of it
I though it was very good gave enough detail as to be entertaining but not so much you were getting lost in a sea of adjectives
I LOVE this one.
Well done.
♥
sometimes fate reaches out a cold hand to tap your shoulder.
The story as a story itself was relatively good, but for the fact of religious preferences mentioned… You see, I am a very strict Atheist myself, so that part was a little repelling for me personally.
But still, the story is… Good. 9/10
I loved this one!!! great job. And for those who don’t get the ending, Jesus was weeping for the guy because he’s an atheist and his soul is doomed to reside in hell for eternity. At least that was my take on it.
Very good pasta.
Great detail.
Also, lovespastas, I believe he was weeping as the man was about to die or something.
masturbating makes jesus cry!
wow that was interesting
im an atheist and yet when i read this my heart started pounding
then the last line was like”BAM!” xD loved it
To The Pale Apparition-
I am a strict atheist myself, but the mention of religious preferences should really have no effect on the story, especially when you mention the word repelling. Don’t tell me you’re one of those little 13-year old atheists who do so for the shock factor; no atheist I have encountered has claimed a story to be repelling over something so silly as that.
DAMN good.
Religion shouldnt have to do too much with this pasta – just read it, and love it. Sure, it has Jesus in it, buuuuut.. oh well?
He was weeping because the bro was an atheist.
He was weeping cause he keeps having to see fuckers get eaten by monsters you ‘tards.
*Sigh.*
It’s really not that hard to understand. The statue of Jesus is beholding the damned, in a rather Dante-esque mannner. He’s weeping for the lost souls.
The reason it’s offensive to that one guy up there is because it suggests that unbelievers deserve Hell. Not sure what the motivation for the original post was, but it’s there.
I can only surmise that it ends with him becoming one of the statues.
I liked it for the psychological impact. It didn’t need a monster tearing out his trachea. But, then, maybe I just spend way too much time arguing with Fundies on the internet….
Fucking awesome. It reminds me of a legend where holy status would cry blood in the presence of demonic entities.
Good one. Perfectly balanced, without any unnecessary crap.
Zombie Jesus seems to be in league with a Gorgon (what Medusa was), apparantley.
Meh.
Note to self: Stay in Calgary. Don’t do anything stupid while in Cochrane.
Good Pasta Clean And Simple.
I was listening to “Life in a Glass House” when I read this, and… perhaps that’s why I found it so good. The ending of the song is very fitting weeping music. Man, screw them other peoples, this was a good pasta.
WHAT, Who was jesus???!
Maybe it didn’t mean so much to me because I know that the shortest verse in the bible is one of the most powerful:
He wept.
umm, not that I’m religious or anything, but I’m pretty sure the Bible says that Jesus wept several times throughout his life… I think I’d weep too if I was nailed to a piece of wood… I would check your references before writing things like “weeping is not the action of a Lord and Saviour”
whereis
theark
Whoever figures out the extremely vague reference gets an cookie.
I live in Cochrane and have walked that path multiple time day night drunk sober not once did i see or hear anything
I think I have an explanation for the ending. The shadows bouncing of things to make faces, very elaborate, too elaborate to be a coincedence. The monks have put lights to illuminate the statues yet nobody is allowed there at night, that instantly make the unfortunate person visiting the place want to see it at night. The “monks” wait for a person to show up and… That is left for the reader to decide; but what IS important is that the statue of Jesus is always weeping (it’s a statue) indicating that they have done this time and time again. The story could have been made better by the statue of Jesus looking almost happy in the day time but at the night it looked as though he was weeping.
8/10 Great story not that creepy but nonetheless, a good story.
On a side not, there is a famous sentance in the bible “Jesus wept.” so all this talk about the lord not crying is rather silly.
No. Definitely not good. Not that the author is still around on this site to care….. but I hated it.
I think the reason he is weeping is either because he feels the narrator is not “saved” or something is rustling in the woods to get him.
That is all.
lol as an Albertan who’s been in the area many times, there is no such thing. i just couldn’t take it seriously.
Nice. I had thought that I was immune to creepypasta. This was a refreshing slap in the face. Thankyou, Coffin.
Fear the Darkness
-Nex
Dont mean to sound like a tool ar anything but… Can someone explain this to me?
Delicious pasta. Gets a 8/10!
this creepy pasta made my pussy moist
*blinks*
*facepalms*
*sighs*
*walks away and returns with a Bible*
*opens page and points to the words “Jesus wept”*
*points to the sentence “Weeping is not the action of a Lord and Saviour”*
0/10
Not so much creepy as it was beautiful, and I’m not an excessively religious person.
@Flash37: *points to the sentence where he says he is an atheist*
Yeah, research fail.
Meh. Vagueness makes pasta bland. I was not impressed.
i didn’t get it
To all the people irritated by the whole “Jesus Wept” vs “Not the actions of a lord and savior” issue, might I just point out one thing:
Many christians follow by blind faith, and don’t pay much attention to the book their faith is based on except to justify what they believe. As a christian, I’ve long given up on people getting their own religion right.
nomnomnom
This was real tasty pasta. Loved the end. If you really don’t understand the it, maybe you should go back to the self explanatory section.
The build up was great, but I was expecting more with the end.
Wasn\’t he weeping because the guy was about to get killed by the things that \"made sounds in the bushes\"?
-_-
First
Very nummy pasta! 10/10
The part that makes it unnerving for me is that I live in Calgary, Alberta, about 40 minutes from cochrane.
when i started to read it, i kinda was dissapointed in the religious theme. however…..amazing ending! bam!
Fucking loved it.
this must be the place.
http://www.mountstfrancis.ca/serenitytwilight.html
Awesome, except for the ‘not the actions of a Lord and savior’ issue. Creepy in a subtle way. 8/10
Odd story. I.M.O., I think he was either:
A. Realized his mistakes as he is a man,
or
B. He understood what life and our existence truly means,
or
C. An Angel of Death visited him.
Take your pick.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SzYRvaD-xkQ&feature=related
I’ve eaten many servings of pasta, but I felt compelled to comment on this one.
My interpretation of the ending? Jesus wept for the atheist, because the atheist somehow submitted himself to the killer statues and would become one of them.
An all too beautiful ending
Delicious.
mmm yummy. loved it.
I liked it! (And the constant insulting of 14 year old kids is starting to grate my nerves! >.>)
I think religious stuff can be a good base for stories.
I liked it.I think religion makes a good base for stories,even if it it’s not directly related to religion,like this case.
And the constant insulting of 14-year-olds is getting annoying.. >.>