Scary Paranormal Stories & Short Horror Microfiction

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It begins gently at first, softly falling like a child’s tears.  It is a sad thing, but not so unusual and wholesome in its way.  And the wind lightly blows, almost tenderly caressing your face.  This will not last, but it’s nice isn’t it?

In the beginning there were two and they knew love of a kind.

The rain comes down harder now, no longer a child’s gentle weeping, and not quite an adult’s passionate cries for a lost love.  It is somewhere in between.  Then too, the wind picks up, catching your hair, causing it to fall across your face.  It speaks, in the way that wind speaks, a soft moan, nothing more yet.

Time passed, and the two brought forth children.  The children built and bred and grew.  Thousands, then millions.

The rain has not changed, it does not fall with greater intensity, but in the distance the faint sound of rolling thunder and the flash of a great light.  The voice of the wind calls out to it, the clouds gather more strongly.

The two were not man and woman, but that is close.  In the full distance of time, they grew apart and so their children suffered.  She was not happy with Him, but She would not leave Him.

The rain falls strongly now, if you were not wet before, you are now.  The wind’s moan has changed to a howl and the lightning grows closer.  The air is charged with possibility.

She loved them, but to Him they were a barrier, something that caused the coldness that had grown between them.  Perhaps that is why She said nothing when they drove Him out.

The storm is a storm in truth now, the rain stings a little as it falls, water dripping from your hair.  The wind’s howling pierces your clothing, finding any gap and driving itself through it, perhaps seeking your warmth.  You should find shelter, but something is about to happen.

Generation upon generation grew, lived, and died.  They forgot Her name and His.  She was still with them though and they still loved Her, in their way, but He, they lost entirely.  He watched from beyond, unable to touch Her.  Sometimes He lashed out at the skies.

The lightning is close now, illuminating the entire night sky, the thunder crackling within a minute or so of the lightning.  It should feel cold, shouldn’t it?  The wind is strong and the rain is fierce, but you are not cold.  There is an energy building.

A crack has formed in his millennia old prison.  He feels it and rages against it, throwing His might towards it.  The crack widens.

You stand there, silently staring at the raging heavens as lightning cracks open the vault of the sky.  The lines of light hang suspended in the air, after they should have ended.  Something is coming.

He feels freedom.  He goes to it; soon He will be with His bride once more.

He is coming.

He is angry.

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Credited to Jimmy Reinstatler

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  • Aaron

    Oooh, very tasty. Very ambiguous, as most of the pastas are, but at the prose was very well written, and the idea intriguing. Best pasta I’ve read in a while. 9/10

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    • Anonymous

      I didn’t get it. Someone help me understand?

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  • http://jack.is/ Jack

    She = earth?
    He = ???

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  • Shang

    First~!!
    very creative, although not so much as creepy. liked the story, though.

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  • Anonymous

    meh. not creepy. definitely different though, so 6/10

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  • Pastamancer

    Not bad, not particularly creepy but thought-provoking and well-written. Which is good.

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  • Helios

    wierd but good

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  • rodina

    First!Haha

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  • rodina

    I am the best, literally

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  • KatieBug

    FIRST! (: Ehh. Not very good. Sorry

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  • An hero

    Woah. Not really creepy, but kind of beautiful.

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  • Judge

    What the fuck?

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  • boomachicaboom

    Your metaphors are a child\’s after-carnival vomit.

    \"He doth attempt to utilize literary devices.\"

    You speak in cryptic form.

    \"He knew not that He must not quit His day job.
    He is sucky.\"

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  • RemickZeroLight

    Interesting syle of narration.
    No noticable typos or errors.
    Pleasant read that I enjoyed.

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  • ChronBon

    I feel like this was awesome….then just lost me. I don\’t understand what it is I was just reading about.

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  • Sir Shoop Whoopington

    I’m not scared at all, but it was definitely cool
    story 5/5
    scary 1/5

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  • The Listener

    Interesting, this one had me somewhat puzzled until the ending at what you were building up to.

    I thought it was a decent story, short, but enthralling.

    Not creepy in the traditional sense, but it conveys more of a growing dread at an inevitability, like waiting for someone to die.

    I enjoyed this pasta.

    8/10

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  • fucking spam

    1st? or second/third/15th idc
    havent read yet if it sucks ima hit you

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  • Anonymous

    First comment!!!

    That is all…

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  • BananaCorn

    I like this.

    Unfortunately, Phone’s not had much success with the forums due to a noob/troll shitstorm.

    This looks like it would have been a bitch of a thing to write, but it sure as Hell is worth it.

    9/10

    Anyone who doesn’t like it should go put their dick in a toaster.

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  • Mini Mi

    First

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  • http://www.creepypasta.com/when-rain-comes/#comments Someone is here now

    This is beautiful and in a very poetic way.

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  • Theguyoverthar

    Eh, lacking in creepiness.

    The story is ok, but the way it was told could of been better.

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  • Um…

    What the shit

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  • Anon

    I like it. I think it leaves a lot to imagination which is a good thing.

    A little of it is poetically forced out. The ending lines are a little cliche too. But overall, it was worth the read and kind of left a weird feeling over me when I finished it.

    8/10.

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  • Max

    Ain\’t really creepy or anything, but a nice and refreshing variety of the old world-being-destroyed-by-some-angry-god scenario.

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