We Danced
Footsteps aren’t an uncommon thing to hear when you’re sitting in a basement, so I think nothing of it when I hear quiet thuds coming from my upstairs hallway. I just assume it’s my brother, and continue doing whatever pointless little thing I was doing at the time. They go on for another couple minutes, and I’m starting to get pissed off. They keep getting louder and louder and I sigh, wondering what the hell my brother’s doing this late at night. I sit there, because it’s impossible to focus with the racket. I mean, it sounds like someone’s power walking all over my main floor.
I sit there and listen as the thumps get faster and wilder. They just keep moving, almost starting to form a rhythm. They move even faster and get even wilder and they’re thumping all over my main floor. I realize that whatever this is, it can’t be human. No human can move like that.
“What the fuck?!” I finally yell. After that, all the noises stop. Everything is quiet for a moment, and then I hear calm, slow footsteps moving to my basement door. The door is pushed open, and the footsteps stop again. I listen to my breathing for the next three minutes, then sigh, thinking it’s over. Turns out something else was listening, too. Suddenly I hear it thudding down the stairs, and I knock my chair over in my haste to stand up. I start to run towards the nearest closet, just in time to see a grotesque, hairless, four-legged creature, dancing towards me, tapping it’s swollen feet in an intoxicating rhythm. I dive into the closet and slam the door shut. There’s a half-second pause and then I hear that same rhythm on the door.
It just keeps going and going with no pause, no rests, no relief. He’s been at it for hours now, and I find myself tapping my fingers along with his song. But then, just as suddenly as it began, it ends. I wait for a few moments, then look out. He’s gone. I flip on a light and fall into a chair. It’s safe. I relax and think for a few moments. But then I notice my foot tapping. Maybe this song isn’t so bad, I almost like it enough to dance to it. So I drop down on my hands and feet, and I start.
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Credited to Smiles.
FIRST….BUT WHO WAS HAPPY HORROR FEET?!?!
OMG FIRST!!!
first?
LOL I recommended this. Phone <3
Meh.
I’m fond of this one.
What the hell?
This was worse than that Dulce De Leche pasta I accidentally made last night. Someone throw it out!
Then who was musical?
Nice one, not creepy, but nice.
I liked it. Short and simple.
A great short one! The ending was kinda predictable, but the part where the thing opened the door and started coming down the steps kinda made my heart beat faster. XD
THEN WHO WAS FOUR LEGGED HAIRLESS CREATURE?
Hmm, it was a little predictable, but not bad.
LOLWUT
That’s fucking creepy.
Maybe this guy’s brother decided to become an Olympic swimmer while drunk off his ass one night. He chose to get a full-body wax (to increase his speed, of course) before learning to actually swim. Then he came home, and realized that waxes hurt like shit. He started slamming his arms and legs on the floor, writhing in pain and being a giant pussy in general, as people are prone to do after getting every hair plucked from their body.
Then the narrator comes and sees his brother being an alcoholic freak as usual, and shuts himself in his closet and dances before seeing that this “four legged hairless creature” is actually just his brother being a tool, and that it’s iPod headphones are totally visible.
So in short, smashed brother comes home in pain and writhes around to some bitchin’ techno, while narrator pisses his pants (he is also drunk).
The only creepy part about it was what I imagined the creature being xD Otherwise I liked it ^^ Pretty awesome, considering I used to have a computer in the basement. It reminded me of myself hearing footsteps o:
But it never turned out to be a hairless thing. D:
Loved this one!
Made me think of the Centaurs from Fallout 3
http://images3.wikia.nocookie.net/fallout/images/b/bc/Centaur.png
ooh a pretty tasty pasta for once, the recent ones have been pretty tastless but i actually really like this one.
short, sweet, and to the point and doesnt act pretentious
XD
but yeah very good :3
Crepy, but usaul.
Pardno teh bad splelin g, my hnads ar ehurtin gwith alll ths dancing.,.
This was scary because it made me think of children’s shows, like Barney, and how easy it is to get one of their earworms stuck in your head, and what monsters those puppets would be if you saw them as living beings.
Fear the power of dance!!!
I like contrived’s story better than this pasta.
Whoa, that’s actually really creepy. Kudos.
THEN WHO WAS BASEMENT DWELLER!?!?
It was alright. Kinda made me thing of the Lady Bug from James and the Giant Peach.
And thus; Zack Efron was born.
I liked it. Short abd sweet with concise-yet-delicious descriptions. Good word choice all around, and he doesn’t try to draw out the horror. It’s a nail-and-bail with just the right amount of everything. A++, my favorite pasta in a long time.
I felt like I was supposed to laugh…
but it was so freaking creepy
@ contrived: was just thinking the same lol
I bet it was a human that heard the dancing, too…
It wasn’t very scaey but how I imagined th thing was… *shudder*
And I’m in my basement with my dog running like crazy, freakes me out a little.
Lord of the Dance! Fookin River Stomp!
Short and sweet.
Tapdancing monster of DOOM, what deity do you hail to?
i saw the title to this and thought “ballroom ghosts” but the idea took me completely by surprise.monster reminds me of centaur from fallout 3,among other distorted art.
I am Candlejack, and I approve of this pasta.
Wow, that’s kind of creepy, not that creepy, but still made me cringe a little.
Very pleasantly creepy.
I liked it and ive figured it out this is what realy happend…
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=komvFIGYBYM
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=komvFIGYBYM
This was creepy until I imagined the dance. Then it was amusing, although I do want to try and do it myself now- IS THIS WHAT IT WANTED ALL ALONG?
I think someone left this pasta out on the counter for a few days and it’s getting moldy. DO NOT EAT!
I picked it looking oddly liked an even more deformed version of smeegal form Lord of the Rings. And I looked up those Cenataurs from Fallout 3, they are fucking scary. o.o”
So now I picture it a cross between those, dancing,stomping, and jumping around to weird hill-billyish music. I liked this pasta though, very yummy :p
Delicious. I really like this one…I dont know what about it got to me, but…It was just…Well, it seems to have scared the living crap out of me.
Creative, awesome concept, felt like some traditional horror fable from the “Scary Stories” books, but wholly original. Incredibly disturbing idea for a monster and how it converts victims, raising lots of creepy questions.
People who disapprove of this story are just being dumb.
Return to classic pasta. I like.
I want dancing mosters to dance with.
IM SO RONERY..
@NOM: I’m with you there. Some indescribable quality about this pasta made it all the more enjoyable.
THEN WHO WAS DDR TOURNAMENT PARTNER?!?
Creepypasta = comedypasta?
This made me giggle, actually.
NOM NOM NOM:
Are your bowels now devoid of living crap and now filled with dead crap? J/w.
dayum that one was acctually really good
WAT?
i didnt like how it was written but the ending is epic
I imagine the monster thing doing the river dance. XD
Ah, a nice traditional pasta. It’s been a while.
Holy crap, this one really creeped me out. Delicious pasta is DELICIOUS.
well that just totally sucked ass.
I pictured a giant four-legged hairless spider for some reason, which made it all the creepier.
I liked it. It was short, to the point and had a plague-spread feel to it. I wonder what did it in the first place or created it though…
I really enjoyed this one.
Nicely cooked.
You know how siblings always manage to give you something when they catch it? Well, this is like your brother catching the “dancing” and then coming downstairs to give it to you! How considerate! =D
Looks like Gloria Estefan was right- the rhythm is going to get you.
Nice title
not a bad pasta, made me LOL
Hell hath no fury like a dancing hairless monters.
i loved it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
That was pretty creepy. Those Cenataurs from Fallout 3 are terrifying.
Wow must have been a sick beat.
The only shit that scared me was this…
“I start to run towards the nearest closet, just in time to see a grotesque, hairless, four-legged creature, dancing towards me, tapping it’s swollen feet in an intoxicating rhythm.”
!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Yeah, the creature scares me like no other. I recommend this, though.
That was a lovely pasta…totally DID remind me of those Scary Stories to Tell in the Dark books… Those illustrations always made me shit brix.
OMG?!! IT WAS PUMBA
I really liked this one. Gave me some chills when the tapping stopped and it waited at the top of the stairs.
Disturbing. Very.
It made me lol at first, then I read it again and the word “swollen” is what got me.
I can just see an army of humans on four legs dancing down the street…
noh!!!!!
Incredible. I love you.
Intensely well done. I got chills. CHILLS. I happen to be in a basement where I happen to hear footsteps all the time, and now I happen to be freaked the hell out every time the house creaks or the ice maker drops a cube harmlessly into the tray.
FREAKED. OUT.
That’s what it’s all about, though, and you’ve done an incredibly good job at it. I haven’t been this creeped out by a pasta before. It’s largely situational, but still … just, well written, well devised, well done.
This is honestly the funniest fucking pasta I’ve ever read. Just the way it changes back and forth, the screaming “What the fuck?!,” the tapping along with the being dancing horizontally on the closet door, the comments, the ending, it’s all too much and I can’t stop laughing. xDD
Perhaps this is because it’s 5am here, and I’ve been running on nothing for the past 32 hours.
Regardless, props, never has randomness been applied so skillfully in creepypasta.
Sweet Jesus. No pastas on here have freaked me in a long time, and this is actually starting to get to me.
Might be because I sleep in the basement and am about to turn in, but eh. A+ for you, writer.
This gave me goosebumps. The part where the narrator realized it couldn’t be human was scary, and the thing reacting to his shout was fucking terrifying… But why would anybody shout “what the fuck” when they realize something BIG and NOT HUMAN is scuttling above your basement bedroom? Wouldn’t you want to get as small and quiet as possible?
Anyway, awesome pasta. I didn’t really expect the ending, I was thinking it would be more of a WHAT DO I DO GUYS IT’S OUTSIDE MY DOOR thing. I’m glad it wasn’t.
bricks and contrived win
Reminded me of The Unborn, and the way the old man chases the woman on all fours… Eugh. I was in my basement as I read this too. D:
Very delicious.
So the thing could open the door down to the basement, but was stopped by a closet door? Most closets open outwards so its not like he could have barricaded it.
Very good story, I liked the build up, then delivery of the climax. Details definitely helped me visualize the situation in my head. Also, I did think of the Centaurs from Fallout 3 as others have. Damned things always get me by surprise.
I couldn’t help but start to tap my fingers to the beat of the song playing on iTunes while I read this pasta. Excellent work.
This is not bad. I really like it, it was creepier than others I’ve read(coming from someone who lauged more than they were scared at a movie that was supposed to be completely terrifying, that’s a great compliment.)
Contrived’s explanation had me in stitches.
Oh god it’s dancing to don henley’s ” dirty laundry”.
I liked it, it was fun to read.
Morally ambiguous hairless seizure dancing gravity defying four-legged thingie of doom!
For some odd reason, the tern “swollen feet” creeps the hell out of me. xC
That was an AWESOME pasta. It just screams SILENT HILL when the monster was being described. This pasta had the funk!
WHO WAS HAIRLESS GUY?
oh, gollum
This is the culprit.
http://88mph.fr/wp-content/gallery/best-motivators/1182204188302.jpg
@contrived I love you. Marry me?
i would love to see more of Smiles pastas on the site.
OMG ITS SLOWLY DANCING THIS WAY!!!
BUT WHO WAS CLOSET?!
You are all ignorant dumbasses. The pasta is not funny. At all. The ending isnt random, it’s explaining how the last victim was turned into the beast that was in his house, and how he is going to turn into that as well, because he cannot stop dancing. Bitches.
Tight mayne.
Hmm…. I really liked the fatc that it was thumping down the stairs.
That thought scares me senseless
Like, it’s running down really fast on four legs
DASNJFNSDUIFS
Scary thought. I have to think of something else >_<
ANYWAY
To make this different, maybe more creepy, you could change it completely, but keep the begining, and have it go instead with the plot that there was something actually crawling around, upside down, on the ceiling of the basement.
Im pleased but disappointed,
I like the Basement dweller, but but but, I figured you where heading in the danse macabre direction. Still an interesting concept,
I’ve had songs i couldnt stop tapping my foot, or stop playing again and again… I gotta get on all fours now, my foots tapping too fast.
Light thinks itself the fastest, but wherever it goes, darkness gets their first – unknown author
I think you infer that the creature used to be human but danced that song for so long it became groteque and captures others like it did that boy. I liked it.
Y’see, I had a mild Spore phase. The game where you create creatures. In that game, you can go into a test drive mode, in which you can make the creature you just made dance. There’s a dance in there which involves swinging one foot to the left, the other to the right, and then a backflip. Banjo music plays in the background with various hillbilly calls on occasion.
That is what I pictured as I read this. It made this soooo much better.
9/10
How was no one else awakened? The brother must have been the monster (seriously).
Out of all the pasta I’ve consumed, this one stands out more in my mind.
so…..im confused….this thing just makes people dance like little mutants of itself…sounds like a sure fire story to me…
Laughing my ass off at contrived’s comment.
Alors on Danse!