When I was a child I lived in a rented two-floor house. Both my parents worked so I was often alone when I came home from school.
One early evening when I came home the house was still dark.
I called out, “Mum?” and heard a voice say “Yeeeeees?” from upstairs.
I called my mum again, and again got the same “Yeeeeees?” reply.
I felt she was calling back at me and climbed up the stairs.
When I reached the first floor I called her once more and the voice “Yeeeeees?” came from the furthest room.
I felt both uneasy, but a strong urge to see my mother, and started to walk towards the room.
But just that moment I heard the front door downstairs open and my mother come in, carrying a lot of shopping bags.
“Sweetie, are you home?” my mother called in a cheery voice.
Hearing her voice made me feel instantly better and I turned back to go downstairs at once…but not before I had a quick glance towards the room.
While I watched from the top of the stairs, the door to the room slowly opened a crack.
For a brief moment, I saw something strange in there.
A pale face, staring at me.
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I could easily foresee the ending. However, the last line sent shivers down my spine. 10/10.
Come on…..really?
Hmmmm…. It’s be good if there was a bit more description for this ‘pale face’ 4/5 bunnies :D
I Dont See At Least Scary About This Story
When the thing said “yeeeees” all I could think of was that guy from the simpsons who says “mm..yeeeeeeeeeeess”. Started laughing while reading this
Uh… if I went home, called my mother, got a reply (which would seriously creep me out since she’s definitely not supposed to be there, but that’s another story), then suddenly hear my mother’s voice from a totally different place… I would not feel better a single bit, that’s exactly when I’d start to worry.
The story is a bit flat, especially because the plot is pretty obvious from the start.
Boring as fuck….. I’d rather hear my victims screaming then this shit
Candyman. Why not learn to spell? Huh? By the way this story was kind of funny. But you wouldn’t know anything about that would you?
Whoah i have 4 gusses to know who that is.
.Slenderman
.Jeff the Killer
.SCP-101
.Bloody Mary
Say one of these messages for what you think
Nope, it was Dr. Who, he always ends up in odd places.
Write a sequel
Jeff the killer, maybe?
put some …….,….,………. slender man
in it
u need to saucy it up man
:(
put some slender man in it
that would saucy it up, make it more scary see u later -DF
it was probably voldemort….
you should make a sequel and tell us who the faceis
I understand that this may not be the best story but it is good for this website. It’s okay to criticize a bit but to all those people who say it fails so hard, why don’t you shut the fuck up and write a better story. And think, if this actually happened to you, you would be shitting bricks. Place yourselves in theses situations in all these stories and this is scarier than alot. Get off this persons nuts you overly critical fucks.
I’m pretty sure I’ve read another version of this story that I preferred to this one, I just don’t quite remember where.
The ending is creepy
BUT WHO IS THE PALE FACE?
THAERT FACE NEEDS TANNING LOTION!! GET THE LOTHIRION!!
it. puts. the. lotion. on.
SLENDERMAN!
The ending would have been better if it said ”I looked back, and saw my mother’s face.”
It could be scary but it kind of leaves you waiting for more….so it was alright
am i the only one who said “Yeeeeeees?” in that chef guy from the
Simpson’s voice?
PALE FACE WAS FONE!
PALE FACE WAS FONE.
PALE FACE WAS FONE
:)…
……………………………RIGHT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Agree with AWV, this one was actually quite spooky. I appreciate how the author is able to give the story a creepy mood without the use of gore/shock elements and while keeping it short and impactful.
This is not scary, bricks were not shat, but shadows definitely drew closer.
Great work!
I actually thought this was great. It’s not complicated but it works.
I don’t see why something terrible has to happen, it’s just creepy to think some kind of ghost/monster was someone you know.
Holy shit it’s beast wars megatron
Would have been better if, say, the child went closer and was taken into the room. Moments later the mom comes home and calls for him, he replies “Yeeeeees?”
mom! voldemort wants to know if he can stay the night! please???
Absolutely boring. YOU LOSE SIR. YOU GET NOTHING.
So his mom needs a tan, so what?
HOLY SHIT ITS MICHAEL JACKSON
HOLY SHIT ITS MICHAEL JACKSON
I’d say I saw it coming, but there wasn’t anything to foresee.
Saw that coming after excessive eeeeeeee’s were used >_>
Rectangular blocks fell out my ass.
Bad pasta is bad.
“SALLY! …You’ve come BACK.”
“…I had to.”
“For THIIIIS.” *holds up arm, which waves*
“Yeeeeeeeeeeeeees…”
“Shall we, then?”
^ The fact that that scene kept replaying in my head butchered anything this had.
4/10 for the comedy factor, though.
:|
ok you caught me
i was stealing your underwear when you came in…
the only reason you saw my face is cause i forgot me bear suit
That stupid ass chick on youtube did this.
She fuxing ruined the pasta.
short, unoriginal, but it sent shivers down my spine
Is this bad pasta? Yeeeeeees.
IT WAS FUCKING BAE SUNG
IT WAS FUCKING BAE SUNG
dat was me lol
Pedoface.
Dude I probably would have gone in the room to stab that creeper with a michanical pencil
YEEEEEEEEEEEEEES?
it was actually kind scary to me for some reason.
Like, I saw how it was gonna end and everything, but I still got the chills.
Aw, come on, I only wanted to help you with homework!
it says that he climbed the stairs, but was on the first floor afterwards…im confused
No shock factor whatsoever, but it still bothered me a little.
HOLY BALLZ
SAYA SAYA SAYA SAYA in UNDERWORLD…. You turned a decent creepy pasta into this retarded half baked piece of tripe.
Blast it with Piss.
You know there was a lot of potential for this story. I don’t see why you didn’t take the chance and just left it as a few paragraphs.
that 3rd “yeeeeeeeeeeeeeees” made me laugh
is this story told by like a native american? and the pale face was a “pale face?”
Haven’t seen this exact story before, especially not done better.
BUT WHO WAS SHOPPING BAGS?
To everyone who said “lame” I urge you to actually think about how hard you would piss yourself if that happened to you.
Repost of a repost of that repost from that board on that site which had the repost of the repost.
man, people bitch a lot on this site.
oh god i’m doing it now
It got me to go all pins and needles…
I can imagine the split second of happiness at his mothers voice before he realized what it implied, then the slow turn back to the door, and that cold feeling I got when I woke up in the sierras with a full grown bear sniffing at my tent, not three feet from my head, dimly lit by the moon light through the trees.
Being almost naked, trapped in your zipped up sleeping bag, lying on the ground staring up at several hundred pounds of muscle that could cleave you in half on a whim, and _not_knowing_ if it would… THAT was irl brick shitting.
omg Michael Jackson was in your bedroom!
I was laughing all the way through this from the ‘yeees’ bit because I was picturing the guy from Simpsons who talks like that and then says he had a stroke xD
I agree with Diana, It is creepy because it is one of those things that could actually happen not every creepypasta is going to have OMGWTFITWASAZOMBIEONOES or somthing along those lines… get used to it >_>
whatever, this is creepy as shit to me. it’s one of those simple stories that could easily happen to anyone instead of all this ritual crap. you would all shit brix if this happened to you and you know it.
That was stupid, it could’ve been anybody.
I cant enjoy this old pasta.
True, it may have frightened me a bit the first 3 timesI read it, but this is older than the internet itself.
@isantorin, if Saya is taking credit for this, she’s full of shit. As other comments have already said, this is from Something Awful, it was never in Japanese for her to translate it from. It’s been around for ages and is on tons of sites, including ED. So quit trying to start trouble.
Yeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeece?
Yeah, some context for everyone: This isn’t actually a creepypasta, it’s a post from the Something Awful Forums in one of their ghost story threads.
It’s supposedly a first hand account of an experience one of the forum members had with the supernatural as a child. Why this one was posted over the numerous other, better ghost stories from those threads I do not know.
THEN WHO WAS FACE!?
and the face said…take a seat…right over there
Sigh I forgot to add something in my post before and once again, IT WAS NOT M.J! Sigh what do you people have against the king of pop? Or, good music, twas a sad, sad day, when he died. Anyway, the scary thing about this (this is the part that I forgot to add) was that I have these old antique dolls that are like these women from the 17-1800s and usually I get home waaaaay before my mommy, (and I’m much to curious for my own good >:) ) and could easily picture that happen to me. Although, there are loopholes. You see, if you are afraid of this it is always the same sound that it makes. Nothing more, nothing less, always yeeesssss. And so, if you hear this, you can ask again, and again, and again, WITHOUT going upstairs. You could just run outside for dear life, go to a neighbor, or a friends house, or jus wait outside for your mommy. That is what I think anyway, enjoy the stories.
K.K out!
Saya probably won’t be happy about this.
@ Lodi, No, Saya didn’t write it herself, but she says she translated it from a Japanese pasta.
One of mai Favorites =__=
THEN WHO WAS MICHAEL JACKSON?
this pasta isn’t saya’s, you idiots. it’s classic /x/ stuff and even on encyclopedia dramatica’s creepypasta, quit saying she ripped it off.
I actually found it pretty creepy. Just imagining the voice that sounded almost similar to his mother’s but repeating the same thing.
this was posted on saya’s site a while ago. :|
RIPPED OFF SAYA IN UNDERWORLD D<
i’ve seen this floating around /x/ for a long time
while it’s still shitty creepypasta i’m glad to see something short and quick again.
This is the worst creepypasta I have ever read… EVER. I hate to sound like a dick here, but please consider abandoning all hope for making a career out of this before your future self comes back to the past to punch you in the face for it.
the only scary part was how horribly this was written D:<
This actually really freaked me out. How the hell would you get back downstairs? Inch away and keep an eye on the door? Jesus, that’s a terrifying situation.
Seriously? Is this site the place where pastanistas come to rail against any creepypasta that doesn’t measure up to their standards? You people need to lighten up. This stuff is free, after all.
Anyway, not too bad. I do think it was on Saya for a while, though. Something remarkably similar, at least.
Short but good ;_; Writing could’ve been a bit better but I liked it.
Dawg, this is on encyclopedia dramatica’s creepypasta page, I think I was still in brace’s when I read this story, be original for God’s sake.
The pale one was…EDWARD CULLEN! The explanation of being scared by it
It was EDWARD CULLEN!
Yay, finally an actually good pasta! Not some bullshit ritual or dumbass who can’t use punctuation!
I’ll put as much in to critiquing this as the author did in to writing it.
k I’m done.
How did this shit make the frontpage?
BUT WHO WAS PALE FACE?
More sauce please. >: |
^ I lol’d
Pretty Good, Actually… has potential…
Chill the fuck out dude, I was drunk and I got the wrong house ok? God, why did you have to put this shit on the internet. Douche
BUT THEN WHO WAS VOLDEMORT
Oh, right.
Credited to Saya perhaps?
maybe it was pedobear’s grandfather?
Or the ghost of jackson?
who knows and frankly WHO CARES…
Gollum!
It was good when it first hit the net, but it’s old and to be frank: it’s got bits so poorly written I don’t even know what to say. Maybe “get an editor?”
“I felt both uneasy, but a strong urge to see my mother, and started to walk towards the room”
why a strong urge to see mommy? why not just curiousity? gay.
That was terrifying.
Not the story. The writing.
Honestly, it’s pretty creepy for a short pasta.
Straight to the point that I can easily imagine this happening to me in real life.
8/10.
…that’s it?
Kinda brings back memories of wandering around a relatives creepy house.
This sucks. 1/10
I thought narrator was walking in on their parents.
i am dissapoint.
That wasn’t scary at all, and felt like a real cop out of a story in general.
Bricks were not shat.
started out good but weakened off drastically afterwards.
UGH PALE FACE
I got bored once I read “When”. Come up with something creepier with more suspense plz.
THEN WHO WAS…
Oh… Wait.
It was EXTREMELY predictable, but was still creepy in my opinion.
micheal jackson???
It’s a joke, for anyone saying this story is weak. The pale face is michael jackson.
This pasta is moldy, old, stale, and undercooked. All at once. Could’ve had some potential with a lot more work. I’m a huge fan of the simple things that scare the hell out of you, but this was just: “So I walked home and I thought I heard my Mum and it was liek, this ghost thing. Yeah.” Sorry. Try again.
@ Vaughn: Don’t forget “Predictably disappointing”
Yesss yesss yessss, Are you sure that the dad wasent having an affair or somthing?
Had potential if it was not so short and with that HORRIBLE ending >> brix are laughing at you
Are you kidding me? That was so pedicable. Had too many lose ends. And wasn’t creepy at all! That is obviously this persons first pasta, AND, it wouldn’t even get a 0/10! More like -1/10. They shouldn’t have let the mother come in right away. Besides, he didn’t happen to think of the fact that he just talked to what I am guessing is some sort of doll. The mother should have come right when he was opening the door, to face his fate AND BE EATEN BY THE DOLL!!!!!!!! Muhahahahahah! Oh right so yeah, that’s what I say. (BTW, Michael Jackson? Michael Jackson is awesome!!!!!! JOE SHOULDN’T HAVE GOTTEN THE KIDS!)
calm down it’s just a story
If there were ever an appropriate time to say “too long; didn’t read”, it would be while reading this comment.
Meh? Yeeees.
Meh? Yeeeeeeeeeees.
This one is old, years old…
It doesn’t get better with age either.
I liked it. It’s something that would have made me terrified to answer the voice of any loved one when I was little. Mistaking someone you know for something that probably wants to eat you is always freaky D:
Wasn’t this on Saya?
…fucking kidding me…
Kind of weak, nothing special.
That sucked. Seriously, like, holy shit. Wow. This reads like something that a third-grader wrote for English class around Halloween.
i think this pasta may need some more sauce.
Lol
it was clearly micheal jackson
old pasta is old
Disappointingly predictable.
THEN WHO WAS ROBOTNIK?
also first..maybe?
so? is that all ?
it looks like incomplete if you ask me…
it would have been better if the kid challenged with that pale faced thing in the room, before his real mother show up.
that sucked.
THEN WHO WAS PALE FACE
Wow, could have been interesting.
Oh no a pale face saying yeeees to a little boy!
AHHHHHH!
omg creepypasta is creepy. I think this needs a desert.
FUCK THIS
fairly average
This story fails so hard
LAWL. Enjoy your morning man-milk surprise.
Love. <3
There was absolutely no shock. I knew what was up after the first few words.
3/10
BALLS.
nice one
SO WHO WAS PALE FACE?
I know right
It’s kind of like “Coraline” :)
Not bad, though. :)
wtFIRST also lame
Holy shit, that was Vincent Price!
BUT WHO WERE FACE?!?
Better luck next time.
WHO WAS PALE FACE
lolwut
Firsties!!!!! Wow a pale face that was ur clencher? Brix were not shat!