Scary Paranormal Stories & Short Horror Microfiction

Creepypasta

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Ever since you were a child, you were terribly afraid of your bathroom. You don’t know why, but, whenever you would see your bathroom door during nighttime, you would be invaded by an overwhelming sensation of unease. You developed a habit out of locking your bathroom’s door before going to sleep.

You would never rest at ease until you closed and locked the door, and whispered to yourself:

“It’s locked.”

You never understood your own fears and, as you grew up, though you still felt them, you began trying to overcome them, or at least ignore them as best as you could. Although the feeling lingers, you become bolder and bolder, and feel as if you could forget all about this seemingly unreasonable child trauma.

You then decide to stop locking the door. Rolling around in bed, you try to muster up the willpower necessary not to look or think about the unsettling door. With some struggle, you finally fall asleep.

You suddenly wake up in the middle of the night. The first thing you realise is that you are not in bed anymore. You lie in a hard and cold tile floor, surrounded by nothing but darkness and silence. You try to feel around yourself, when your hand touches a bathtub. Your bathtub. You freeze. Your heart starts pacing while, in panic, you try to hear any sound indicating the presence of anything else in that bathroom. You can’t hear anything over the sound of your own panicked breath, and the thought that something could hear your breathing instead only deepens your despair. Barely being able to hold yourself together, you rush for the door, as fast as you can. As you try to turn the handle, you realize your mistake. Your heart stops.

“It’s locked.”

Suddenly, you hear someone else’s breathing coming from behind your back.

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Trauma, 6.9 out of 10 based on 187 ratings
  • Mike

    Good story. Very interesting 9/10

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  • Fray

    creepy and simple. It’s good you found a way to make a short story creepy but the ending should have been left with “It’s locked” instead of adding more.

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    • Endoplasmic Reticulum

      Or have someone else behind you say it’s locked.

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  • Anonymous

    I felt the ending could have been more chilling if the thing in the bathroom whispered “it’s locked.”

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    Rating: +29 (from 35 votes)
  • Anonymous

    But who is bathtub?!

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  • YOU CAN’T HANDLE THE USERNAME!

    THEN WHO WAS BREATH?

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  • http://www.youtube/cockneypasta cockney pasta

    That ís very creepy mate. No liquid after 20:00 for a while. Nice one.

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  • Hugo

    My reading of this (y)

    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1HP4yOwXNOQ&feature=plcp

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  • RedBeans

    what ?

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  • Xaoh20z

    BUT WHO WAS OTHER BREATHING?

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  • Undeadmuffins

    This would have been a lot better if the bathroom entity said “its locked”, or your imply didn’t add anything after “its locked”..

    And also, BUT WHO WAS BATHROOM!?!?

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  • Reviewer 1

    Not impressed.
    . .
    )—-(

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  • Themaninblack

    Whose bathroom locks from the outside??

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  • Anonymous

    BATHROOMS DON’T LOCK FROM THE OUTSIDE.

    Also, if you grew up, why are you in the same house alone? Seriously, this isn’t even pasta, it’s like shredded cardboard with marinara spread over it.

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  • http://www.creepypasta.com/hope/ Dirjel

    I gave it a 6/10. Really had potential, but like everyone else said, this would have been much better if the final line was “it’s locked.”

    That’s not to say you should write out Bathroom Monster, but holy moly if it had been more like:

    “Barely being able to hold yourself together, you rush for the door as fast as you can. As you try to turn the handle, you realize your mistake. Your heart stops, and in the silence, you hear someone else’s breathing coming from behind your back. They whisper two words into your ear:

    ‘It’s locked.'”

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  • blah

    well I look at it this way atleast when you shit your pants you have a bathtub to wash off in

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  • Hugo

    I based this on a habit I have: the one of tightly closing my bathroom door before going to sleep. I have no idea why I do this, but I do. Every night. It was kind of experimental. I’m writing a new one called “Hollow Eyes”. I’m glad some of you liked it. It was my first one. So, yeah. Let’s get on to it.

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  • Lol

    I thought it was very creepy 9/10

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  • LollipopGestapo

    I have a habit of soaking in my bath tub and reading pastas.
    This was not a good one to read while IN THE BATHROOM. Ugh. And the bathroom is right across my bedroom, so if I lay in bed, I literally stare into the bathroom.

    I liked this a lot. I even listened to your recording on YouTube and,”liked, ” it.

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  • freem

    One of rare pastas to give me creeps, but it ended the wrong way.

    As for those who said that bathrooms can’t be locked from the outside… My mother made our bathroom lockable from the outside when I was a kid to keep me and my siblings away from the washing machine. And some people even use keys to lock their bathrooms – and a key can be used from the both sides, unless one is covered.

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  • ChristenRose

    That was interesting ..O-O

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  • pang

    damn cliff hangers

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  • GothicLuv

    Well, im not going near my bathroom after dark anymore… O_O

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  • Anonymous

    0.o creeepppyy

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  • Neon

    WHO WAS BREA- Oh, it was already done. Well, 6/10

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  • Manuel Vargas

    What a scary pasta

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