• Aye

    Ooooh. Definitely creepy.

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    • Calcium-structural-reinforcement-of-soft-bits-came-out-of-hiding-somewhere

      AND THEN A (decode username, capitalize then copy/paste here)!!!

      – 9/10 from me. Good story, but as a lot of commenters pointed out, the end kinda killed the buzz for me. Took it in an unforseen direction mind you, because I did think someone else was going to be dead on his couch… but the twist it took kinda let it down.

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      • Glittergirl

        Skeleton?

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  • anon

    Wtf, why would they go inside the house if they saw what’s going to happen to them?

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    • Mr Poobles

      He didn’t know it was himself that was going to die.

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      • Dantaine

        or if you actually read, it says he can’t control himself. just going through his normal routine while at the same time knowing that he is about to die but can’t stop moving.

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        • youwannaknowmyname

          yes but umm he could purposly drop his keys or somat so he does not go inside

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        • Kira

          Note to self: Specify for victims to not post their stories to the internet pre-death.

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  • http://deleted Maran Doll

    Why the hell would you go into the house?

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    • Anonymous

      They don’t know it’s them

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      • http://creepypasta.com RozzyShad

        Yeah, they do. It said that they couldn’t control themselve. Need proof? Just read second-to-last paragraph, fifth (Or maybe fourth.) sentence.

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      • http://creepypasta.com RozzyShad

        Yeah, they do. It said that they couldn’t control themselve. Need proof? Just read second to last paragraph, fifth (Or maybe fourth.) sentence.

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        • WIMSBYJ

          Not to piss anyone off, but many people just don’t know how to react when they are faced with a fear they can comprehend completely.

          Heck, if you think about it… ever noticed how in most horror movies that there is at least 1 person who dies because they go back to where the problems were?

          Humans are predictable, our curiosity gets the best of us… sometimes to the point that we ignore our common sense and well… we die.

          -8/10 overall

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  • Bruce Lee

    Fortune cookie says DON’T FUCKING GO IN THE HOUSE YOU DUMB SHIT

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    • Mrs. Tomlinson

      I meant to vote this up, stupid touch screen.

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    • BurntAshes

      XD Straight up

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  • Ironbuddah

    It had potential, but the ending just ruined it for me.

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  • Sarah

    That was pretty good, but the typo at the end bothers me. “As you try shrug off your denim jacket.”

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  • Xantherian

    Heh, nice. Is it weird that I find this funny?

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  • ye olde cock

    Yeah wtf is the matter with this bozo? why go into your house knowing your scalp is going to be cut off and intestines piled next to you?

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  • Comment Leaver

    He’s acting on instincit. Would you go into your house? Probably. You wouldn’t be able to think let alone make a wise and rational decision about something so irrational.

    Awesome pasta.

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    • Big Wally

      I might be able to, but I don’t want to find out.

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  • Ma Cherie

    I love this one.

    Great job, Miss Flea.

    “Why would he/she go into the house?” I suppose it’s because curiosity and fear can overrule better judgement and can make some people do really stupid things. Like in horror movies, some idiot just HAS to see what’s making those strange noises in that abandoned warehouse.

    I’d say more, but as you can see, I am the princess of lame explanations. I’m sorry .__.

    Hopefully, someone will come along with a better one when all of the comments are approved.

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  • http://www.youtube.com/user/P4INKiller P4INKiller

    BUT WHO WAS PHONE?

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  • anonymoose

    BUT WHO WAS PHONE?

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  • MooMoon

    i dont have a cell phone :3

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  • Z

    Very, very well-written with an interesting story behind it. I just don’t appreciate the ending. :/

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  • A

    THEN WHO WAS TEXT?

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  • Billy Graham

    Could have ended with your distraction by the messages resulting in a fatal car crash, the police finding the final image on your phone.

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    • Shane

      That’s exactly how I thought it would have ended.

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      Rating: +15 (from 15 votes)
    • Anonymous

      That’s what I was waiting for.

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    • Anonymous

      I expected it would happen after the stop sign

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  • michael jackson

    r.i.p =[

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  • Elpheba

    Ok I’ll take this one-

    BUT WHO WAS TEXT?

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  • Anonymous

    Why is it called Text Message when there’s no text sent? Shouldn’t it be Picture Message? Anyway, just nitpicking, it was good but the ending seemed like a horrible cliche, probably to the fact that it expected from the beginning.

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  • Random person

    I think it was good. If I was in that situation, would I go in my house? Maybe. I would probably be in shock, and not thinking straight, so who knows?

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  • pringles

    he should have just run those redlights.

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  • DJLoONa

    i totally agree with comment 16
    that’s where i thought it was headed actually…it was actually pretty well written [except for a tiny error in the last sentence]

    i didn’t like the end too much…there’s a fine line between curiosity and idiocy…=\

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    • Anna

      I thought the end made sense. In the photo, he’s wearing a denim jacket, so he takes off his jacket and hopefully changes his future.

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      • Anonymous

        Wow! Some back of my mind tells me I already knew that the first, second, third and forth time I listened to it on YouTube, but thanks for reminding me! I love how “The Flea” did it like that. If you are wearing a denim jacket in the picture, try taking it off, so it happens to someone else with an article of clothing that’s denim or a crappy couch! :D

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  • Uncle Anon

    PIME TARADOX

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  • BonerFruit

    I don’t think I would go to my house. I’d throw the jacket out the window and go to a hotel or something. Or just drive all night.
    I didn’t like the ending too much, but Flea, you did a good job with the description.

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    • Jensies

      +1 for the awesome name.

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  • Anonymous

    WTF HAX

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