The Text Message

September 17th, 2008 by WHO WAS PHONE?

Driving home from a friends house, you sit at a red light when you hear a familiar tone from your phone, sitting in the passenger seat. A text message. Probably from your friend; you always leave things at their homes. Being a responsible driver, and the light still red, you open the message and wait for a moment for the image to load. Suddenly, a photo pops into view. Red, obscured, strange contrast. And no text accompanying it.

But the light is green, so you close your phone and go back to driving, wondering vaguely what that was, and who would have sent you it. Perhaps someone accidentally took a picture of the inside of their bag or pocket and sent it to you. You’re still caught wondering as you pull up to the next light, also red, and another little tone from your phone. You flip it open, hoping for an apology from a friend, but find yourself waiting as another photo loads on the screen. This one, still mostly red, but textured now with scraps of blue, yet still indiscernible. This time, it takes an impatient honk from behind you before you realize you can pass through the light and be on your way home. Closing the phone, and continue on your way.

You sit uncomfortable now as the tone rings again, at yet another stop signal. You pause, hesitate, and then open the phone. The picture now is suddenly much more clear. That scrap of blue seems to be the ragged edge of a bit of denim, half blood soaked and laying across a pile of entrails, torn straight through the back of a human torso. You can only see from the bottom of the shoulder blade to the tops of the thighs, but its unmistakably human. Blue-white spinal bone smeared in blood, tubes of intestine trailing out between ragged looking spinal tissue and going out of the frame of the picture. You choke back a throat full of bile and throw the phone back into the passenger seat, happy to be on your way again, and dreading the knowledge that you won’t be able to not look as you hear that tone again.

There is some relief as you realize there are no more stoplights before you reach your home. But as you pull up to that red stop sign, the bottom of your stomach drops out and you feel a cold sweat build on the back of your neck. You have already picked up the phone, even before that tell-tale little tone has told you there is a message. The cell vibrates in your hand as you flip it open, your mind gone on auto-pilot, driving home with your eyes on the screen as the newest photo loads. Intestines piled almost artistically to the side of the body, scalp ripped free and no hair discernable, and that sickening contrast of darkening red on blue. For some reason, you expected that, even as you taste bile on the back of your tongue.

Its not as close or obscured. Flesh torn apart by God knows what means, torn denim, and blood soaked so far into the threadbare fabric of a hand-me-down couch. The one you have in your living room. You pull your car into park, hands shaking as you make your way up to your front door. You can’t stop yourself now, your body’s just doing as it normally would, but your finger frantically scrolls down the screen, finding no name, no phone number, and a time dated on the message three minutes from now.

You put the key in the door as you try shrug off your denim jacket.


Credited to The Flea!

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Posted in Murders & Deaths


69 Responses

  1. Aye

    Ooooh. Definitely creepy.

  2. anon

    Wtf, why would they go inside the house if they saw what’s going to happen to them?

  3. Maran Doll

    Why the hell would you go into the house?

  4. Bruce Lee

    Fortune cookie says DON’T FUCKING GO IN THE HOUSE YOU DUMB SHIT

  5. Ironbuddah

    It had potential, but the ending just ruined it for me.

  6. Sarah

    That was pretty good, but the typo at the end bothers me. “As you try shrug off your denim jacket.”

  7. Xantherian

    Heh, nice. Is it weird that I find this funny?

  8. ye olde cock

    Yeah wtf is the matter with this bozo? why go into your house knowing your scalp is going to be cut off and intestines piled next to you?

  9. Comment Leaver

    He’s acting on instincit. Would you go into your house? Probably. You wouldn’t be able to think let alone make a wise and rational decision about something so irrational.

    Awesome pasta.

  10. Ma Cherie

    I love this one.

    Great job, Miss Flea.

    “Why would he/she go into the house?” I suppose it’s because curiosity and fear can overrule better judgement and can make some people do really stupid things. Like in horror movies, some idiot just HAS to see what’s making those strange noises in that abandoned warehouse.

    I’d say more, but as you can see, I am the princess of lame explanations. I’m sorry .__.

    Hopefully, someone will come along with a better one when all of the comments are approved.

  11. P4INKiller

    BUT WHO WAS PHONE?

  12. anonymoose

    BUT WHO WAS PHONE?

  13. MooMoon

    i dont have a cell phone :3

  14. Z

    Very, very well-written with an interesting story behind it. I just don’t appreciate the ending. :/

  15. A

    THEN WHO WAS TEXT?

  16. Billy Graham

    Could have ended with your distraction by the messages resulting in a fatal car crash, the police finding the final image on your phone.

  17. michael jackson

    r.i.p =[

  18. Elpheba

    Ok I’ll take this one-

    BUT WHO WAS TEXT?

  19. Anonymous

    Why is it called Text Message when there’s no text sent? Shouldn’t it be Picture Message? Anyway, just nitpicking, it was good but the ending seemed like a horrible cliche, probably to the fact that it expected from the beginning.

  20. Random person

    I think it was good. If I was in that situation, would I go in my house? Maybe. I would probably be in shock, and not thinking straight, so who knows?

  21. pringles

    he should have just run those redlights.

  22. DJLoONa

    i totally agree with comment 16
    that’s where i thought it was headed actually…it was actually pretty well written [except for a tiny error in the last sentence]

    i didn’t like the end too much…there’s a fine line between curiosity and idiocy…=\

  23. Uncle Anon

    PIME TARADOX

  24. BonerFruit

    I don’t think I would go to my house. I’d throw the jacket out the window and go to a hotel or something. Or just drive all night.
    I didn’t like the ending too much, but Flea, you did a good job with the description.

  25. Anonymous

    WTF HAX

  26. thebastard

    WTF HAX

  27. Hops Diggins

    instinct doesn’t make you enter your home. instinct means you’re not thinking.

    you’re a right-handed baseball pitcher, you throw a pitch that gets hit directly to the right of you at maybe 90+ mph, and you try to catch it with your bare hand instead of your gloved hand. you know what i’m saying? THATS instinct.

    i don’t know about anybody else, but with the information i’d been receiving from those pics, i would have been thinking.

  28. shortys roc my sox

    what the crap is up with saying
    but who was phone or
    but who was text

    it really only makes sence to say it on the original who was phone yall don’t need to say it for every thing

  29. Anon

    Gotta say it… THEN WHO WAS PHONE?

  30. Freaky Girl

    Wow. Freaky. I love it!

  31. MooMoon

    LOL WUT

  32. Happy Apple

    I agree with Billy Graham, towards the middle I was like “lol gonna crash his car because of inattentiveness”

    But no, “you” is a responsible driver.

  33. Frozen

    guessing maybe right before you entered someone bashed your head with a pipe and through you inside? Maybe.

  34. Ninjajuice

    Yeah. It would have been better if the photo depicted a car-crash, caused by him driving with the phone.

  35. Fund

    “Yeah. It would have been better if the photo depicted a car-crash, caused by him driving with the phone.”

    Indeed it would be much better this way. This message was sponsored by your local DMV and Highway Safety Patrol.

  36. Sara

    It’s at times like this when I’m very happy my mother shut off my texting.

  37. JB_Finesse

    1. Call up an annoying relative, ask them to meet you outside your house.
    2. Ask them if they’re cold.
    3. Insist on making them wear your jacket.
    4. Send them inside, lock the door, listen to your iPod for a while till the screams end.

    There, two birds with one stone. And you didn’t even have to buy a hot dog from that creepy guy in the park.

  38. Truan

    It would have been a lot better if you kept seeing this image of a bloody mangled corpse on blacktop, and then the last time your phone beeps, you look at it, and as it distracts your eyes from the road, a truck hits you.

  39. Truan

    Disregard my last comment, I didn’t read other comments before writing it.

    Also cocks.

  40. shortys roc my sox

    @ 37

    you made me lol so hard

  41. Meowmixkid

    WTF, and the idiot still goes inside! I would have been “well, I’m out of here’, Tore off the jacket, and ran like I was on fire.

  42. Hendetta

    Nice work on this one! Denim jackets are tacky though.

  43. Nylak

    Seriously. If you’re just coming back from your friend’s house, TURN BACK AROUND. This person deserves to be horribly murdered for being a dumbass.

    Also, lolz @Fund. Agreed.

  44. sdasd

    thank the fucking lord that i don’t have picture messaging.

  45. Jesus Yamato

    Personally, I probably would have found a cop, told him about the messages, and have then escort me to my house. That way whatever attacks me gets its ass shot, tasered, peppersprayed, etc.

  46. Flea

    I did what I did because I love the horror where you feel helpless and everything is unfair. Where horrific things happen to ordinary people who don’t deserve them. The feeling of losing control of your own body, even though you know it will only end in pain and suffering. Basically, I like creepypasta where people get what they don’t deserve. That makes it worse.

  47. Anonymous

    Is it odd that my first urge is to text this to a friend who I know drives and texts frequently, in the hopes of catching him off guard? XD If it weren’t so damned long I might try but…ah well.

  48. Anonymous

    I would’ve been all like “fuck destiny” and took off my jacket before going in.

  49. Two-Bit

    I liked it.
    I was just expecting the person to crash because he wasn’t paying attention.
    And then it was like “as you try shrug off your denim jacket ”

    -cue dramatic music-

  50. Becky T

    Omgsh!! That is one of the best i’ve read. I love it! You Should like make a really long book bout it.. lol jk dont ever do that.. But it was great!!! XD

  51. Becky T

    omg 37 comment is so funny!

  52. REKEKEKE.

    WHO WAS PHONE?

  53. Anon

    Who wears denim jackets?

  54. Orbit

    @ 53 LOL

  55. Tet

    Thank god my phone can’t get picture messages. Goddamn sprint :(.

  56. Snazzy Cheez luvs scares

    God damn it
    my phone is vibrating!!
    sum1 quick! get me a dustbin!

  57. Kira "Jesus" Yamato

    This can’t happen to me, for the following reasons.

    First; I have a blackberry and not a flip phone.

    Second: I don’t wear a denim jacket.

    And third: I have a custom made eight-shot revolver, which is always loaded with the following; two incindery rounds, two armor-peircing rounds, two silver bullets, two full-metal jackets.

    In short, anything that even tries to attack me is royally screwed.

  58. astrosimi

    *Looks at Kean Jacket in closet*
    FFFFFFUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU-

  59. sNaZzY cHeDdAfAcE

    hi-
    hey does any1 no if there r eva new creepypastas put on this website? im fairly new and i dnt no much about it. my friend told me 2 check it out and it’s really cool, but i’ve read loads of these now and im just waondring if any new ones get put up and if so how often?????
    thnx if u answer, it would really b helping me out

    ps.) luv this pasta, a bit weird tho, y wud u go in the house??? but weird….. yer.
    x
    x
    x

  60. Text sender

    Hi there, i just sent you a couple of mssages asking you were you want me to put this picture of you at the house halloween party that you had at this house. I thort about putting it in the lounge but I thort the fake intestines may put people off.
    please repli or when you cum home teel me were to put the photo.

    thankyou,
    your cleaner wendelene

  61. astrosimi

    Could have been Candlejack, don’t you think? I mean, text messages aren’t really his style but he coul

  62. Nammar Grazi

    @58
    *wonders what a Kean Jacket is*
    FFFFFFUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU-

  63. Anonymous

    fufufufufuuu

  64. Anonymous

    I would never wear a gaudy denim jacket

  65. faggot

    it would be a better ending, if he recognized the person in the picture to be his family member
    and he murdered them in the end…

  66. Meursault

    Different ending yo!
    There is some relief as you realize there are no more stoplights before you reach your home. But suddenly you see the stop sign right before your house. In your panic, you gun it, hoping and even audibly pleading that there will be no message. As you pass through the intersection you hear the tearing of metal.
    You wake up days later in the hospital. You expectantly look around for your girlfriend. Wouldn’t she be here beside you? A policeman informs you that you were in an accident with another car. You’ll be fine, but the other driver… He stops. The policeman looks away when he tells you that the other driver died. Someone you knew. “Your girlfriend. She was thrown from the vehicle. Died instantly. She wasn’t buckled up.” The policeman gingerly shows you a picture taken at the crimescene. You can’t help but focus on her denim jacket.

  67. Meursault

    @57 Hey Kira “Jesus” Yamato, aren’t A.P. rounds and full metal jackets basically the same thing? I think you meant depleted uranium. Maybe SABOT rounds? And why an eight round revolver? Why not seven? Luckier number. Silver is so expensive too. Make sure it was the silver from an ancient Roman cross though.

    Hollow points for me all the way, baby! brb firing range.

  68. GraveOne

    @67 some people forget guns need to reload… better yet… samuray sword… acid edge with blessed silver used for inscribing pargons of light on the edge… it’s really good for zombie hunting XD getting the blood out is n other story do….

    nice pasta really enjoy it thxs

  69. complecks

    @66
    gtfo

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