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If you’re just staring to read my experiences with this horror, you should read my other stories first. You can find them here:

Part 1

Part 2

Part 3

Part 4

Part 5

Okay guys, a lot has happened since the last time I checked in. Lot of you messaged me asking if I was doing ok. Some of you even went as far as sending me you phone numbers and really reaching out. I thank you for that.

We have not encountered Rose since the last time. Also, we decided to move. I got a decent job on the south of the US and we thought it’d be a good idea to get out of here (any Atl folks, holla at me). My father did go see the priest who baptized me and the story actually become more convoluted, if you can call it that.

Anyways, I got baptized in a church called Ostrog, in Montenegro. Here is the pic of it. I don’t believe in god in any kind of way, but this church is amazing. It was built a long time ago. When the Turkish Empire came to take over, people took it stone by stone and moved it up in the mountain where the Turks couldn’t reach it. It is a magnificent building. Many people of different religions, including Muslims and Buddhists, come to that church in search of a spiritual help. That is the only place I ever felt something “more” than just my non-believer reality.

The Church

So, when I was six, my dad decided to baptize me there. Neither of my parents are particularly religious, but my dad fallows traditions, and baptizing kids is one of them. He decided that baptism should be performed at the most famous church in Balkans, Ostrog. You had to schedule it, and demand was so high that I was going to do it with other kids as a part of a group baptism. When we arrived there, and disappointment awaited (at least for my dad, I couldn’t give any less fucks). At the entrance of the church, the priest stopped me.

“You. You cant go in.” He physically stopped me with his hand. Priests in our country wear long black robes and rock long beards. So I was standing there being held by this batman looking dude. My dad jumped in front of me and asked what the problem was.

“You my child (talking to my dad), I know you. I baptized you. I can tell. (He did baptize him 20 years ago or so). But your son, he can not go in here.”

“And why is that?” My dad asked, shocked.

“I cant really tell you, but it is better for us all if he went elsewhere.”

“But why?”

“Son, please, leave. But remember this, don’t dare not baptizing him. You have to.”

“I don’t understand.”

“Nor will you ever. Just do it.”

So my dad took my hand and walked away not knowing what in the fuck was going on. On our way home, he was trying to figure out what happened. He thought that maybe I messed something up, like peed behind the church or something (which sounded like my kind of thing, but I didn’t do it).

When we got home, we got a phone call. It was from that priest. He wanted us to come back. Right away. It was a 35 minute ride back. My dad and I were more confused than ever. We arrived at the church, and all the previous baptisms have been performed already. It was only 3 of us there.

“I decided to baptize your son despite…”

“Despite what?” my dad asked curiously.

“I could not tell you. But it is important we do this fast.”

So we did. I walked in a circle and he went on with his prayers spraying holy water on me. I remember getting bored as hell right before he finally finished. He told us to go away and not to come back unless something out of the ordinary happened to me.

My dad was just glad we got it done. That was 20 years ago. My dad went back there few days ago. Priest was still alive, although retired. He still lived on the church grounds. It took some talking into (and donations) for him to speak up.

I got baptized on February 13th 1992. On the night before my baptism, priest was handling his sheep (back in the day, priests raised sheep and cows and lived mostly off of that) when he saw a figure in the dark. It was strange for someone to stand there that late at night, especially because visits were over and all the clerical staff was already in their designated housing.

“Hey, who is that?” Priest yelled.

“Come, father.” Woman’s voice spoke calmly.

Priest explained that from time to time, he’d get visits from desperate people, begging for blessing or shelter. So he went ahead to see what the woman wanted. He said that when he came there, he saw a woman in white, standing, not moving. She was standing among sheep, but they formed a circle around her, almost like a safe distance. Priest claims that he immediately felt something unholy.

“ What do you want?” he asked in a defensive aggressive voice. At that point he knew it wasn’t a peaceful visitor he was talking to.

“Tomorrow. Tomorrow you will encounter a boy. Just like any other. His name will be Milos. You won’t baptize him.”

Priest told my father that he performed several exorcisms before but he was never actually scared. This time, he felt unsafe.

“You and your kind have no place on this holy ground.”

“My kind, father? What would that be?”

“You, demons.” His voice was cracking in fear.

She laughed. “Demons? I realize you’re a man of cloth, but believing in demons? That takes a lot of faith, father.”

“I want you to leave, now.”

“Listen to me you pity priest. I know who you are. I know what you think. I know you feel my strength. Deny my request, and you’ll never sleep in peace again.”

Then, she left. Rest of the story you know. He refused to baptize me than he changed his mind. Apparently, he told my dad that he’d rather be tormented by an unholy spirit than deny god’s child a chance to connect to Jesus. He also said that he has been paying for it since the day he baptized me.

Every single night for two weeks after he baptized me, he has been seeing a woman in white appear on his window. She’d just stand there, looking at him with hand tilted. No smile though, but only a face of anger. He’d say many prayers but it didn’t seem to affect her. Then, his sheep started dying. There were no wolf marks, no sign of force. Just laying dead. Finally, number of exorcisms skyrocketed. He claims that this was a direct consequence of him disobeying woman’s orders. He even showed an exorcism videotape (they started filming in the chapel in the mid 90s) to my dad. My dad says it was unreal. Apparently a 13-year-old girl came in the chapel with her mom. Her mom was sobbing in tears begging for help. Priest started performing his ritual when the little girl started throwing stuff around. Priest called two young guys who came in to pray that day and asked them to hold her. She kept walking in circles, with two grown men holding her. And right before she fell to her knees, she said “You shouldn’t have done it father.” She was cured.

My dad had more than enough of information thrown at him, but he wanted to know what this woman was. Priest said that he originally thought it was a demon, but a lack of prayer efficiency and her freedom of behavior on the holy ground was concerning. He then thought it was some sort of a cult, witchcraft maybe. The problem is, she has been visiting him on February 13th every year. All the livestock he’d have would die on that day. Any sick person coming for help to the church that day would get worse. Number of possessed people would skyrocket abnormally on the 13th. And at the end of the day, she’d come to the window, no matter where he was. He tried talking to her many times, asking what/who she was. She never responded. She never aged. Priest was finally broken down to the point where he quit. He remained living at the grounds, but he couldn’t do his job anymore. He lost faith. He claimed that the god should’ve protected him. My dad says he may be mentally unstable at this point. He was mentioning something about Morana, whatever that meant. It appears to be a goddess of death in some cultures, but I really think this man has gone mad.

I think that this whole story was jabber of an old man gone senile. Goddesses? Demons? Hardly.

That would be the disappointing story of my baptism. I have not had any encounters with any of them since the last time. I am moving away, hoping it helps. I also decided this: if I encounter them again, I am taking the orange. I cant go on like this forever. I just… can’t.

For the ending of this story, go HERE – it will not be posted on Creepypasta. I feel that the final part is most effective when left at its original source.

Credit To – Milos Bogetic

NOTE: This is the sixth in a series of several popular Reddit posts documenting some seriously creepy experiences. We are publishing them here with express permission of Milos Bogetic aka inaaace, the original poster. The story is in multiple parts, and will be published completely over the next few days – much like what I did with the ‘Bedtime’ series earlier this year. After the stories have all gone up, I’ll edit each post with links to the other parts.

The OP has finished the continuation book that he promised during his successful kickstarter project.

You can find the paperback and Kindle e-book versions here: The Story of Her Holding an Orange by Milos Bogetic  – full disclosure: our referral link is included.

I know that this will not be new material for all of you, but for those of you who – like myself – don’t use Reddit, I wanted to post it so that you guys could enjoy it as much as I did after having it brought to my attention. Thanks again to Milos for letting me post it, and enjoy!

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  • Renataninja

    Awesome!

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    • http://none xchenya

      i know how to get rid of rose permanently please get intouch to get rid of this DEMON. I WAS once haunted too

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  • CNB reviews

    Fuck yeah he took I’ve been waiting for him to grow some balls lol jkjk

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    • CNB reviews

      GODDANGIT “he took the orange” I suck lol

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  • THEN WHO WAS….nevermind o.O

    Please tell me the ending was a joke….like seriously. I should choke ur balls man

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    • CandleJack

      on reddit, where this was origionally posted, after this is just a small little email you open up and all it is is a video of a man walking down a park, you see Rose sitting, she turns to him. he says “ive decided to accept” then takes the orange. then she lunges at the camera with a demon face then all you hear is screams.

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      • Herobrine

        How do I get to this alleged Reddit post with the video, cause I want to see it.

        -Herobrine

        Always watching…

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        • http://Blaketropica.com Stevenson H. Blake

          If you are “always watching” why didn’t you see him getting to the post

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  • Its just me

    Do you realize that there is something on top of the church??!!

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    • anon

      holy shit…

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    • darthknight

      Omg
      A cross!!!!

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    • http://NOYB.com TheCritic

      There is nothing on top of the church except to say the steeple & cross. Of course it could be your imagination too! It’s built in the side of a hill, a lot of rock, so there are a lot of shadows but there is nothing out of the ordinary on the top of that building.

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  • Fenris

    Bravo. Bravo.

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    • Anonymous

      can anyone sum the story up from part 1 to part six cuz i dont have much time to read it

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      • http://NOYB.com TheCritic

        Don’t bother reading it. I skimmed the majority of it & knew within 10 minutes it was a gimmick leading you to buy something. I give the person credit for spending so much time on it but it’s poorly written. It’s a really lame advertising trick. This could have been a really good short story but he smothers it & draws it out with too much unrelated stuff. Basically he “encounters” a woman in his teens who presents an orange to him & tells him he must go now. Then he goes on & on about other encounters throughout his life & adds other characters & their encounters with her. Nothing flows or connects. He keeps swearing its true which dimishes any chance of getting readers to believe. Its like he is convincing himself. He also drags the first part of it out by detailing how “f-ing” scared he is but later even he gets bored with it! I think he uses the f-word as filler he uses it so much, it doesn’t add to the story at all. Suspense? There is none, just blah, blah, blah. At the “end” he “takes it” & you have to buy the book to find out what happens. Schoking! LOL!

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        • erika

          you don’t have to buy the book to find out what happens idiot… what happens is the title of the post on the website the link takes you to. It just says “I took it”. That’s the whole ending to the story. Almost as if he can’t tell us anymore because he is dead, or in their control… etc. You sound really stupid criticizing him for selling the book at the end when you didn’t even realize that the ending was right in front of you.

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        • Devin

          I’m really glad you posted this.
          People want to believe something like this would happen. hell, even I wanted to. But the more you poke at it, the more holes you see in it. Plus, you end up reading the stories just to be lead to a link that wants you to buy a book. I mean, what the fuck? That’s when you know it’s fake. I’ll give him credit for trying but I’m not giving up a dime. I don’t ask people for 5 bucks every time I tell a ghost story at the campfire and neither should anyone else.

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      • moi

        i understand it was very good story, but i suggest u read it all

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  • Rage_Quitter

    Bet you wish you’d had more internet hours now huh milos. :P

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    • leV-Lee

      I voted you down by mistake.

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  • Anon

    Loved the series but god that ending is awful. Guess I’ll have to buy the book to find out.

    Being completely unfamiliar with Reddit I didn’t understand that the ending was just the title. I kept clicking to pull up the story and nothing happened. Then I ran searches to no avail. Then it finally hit me the ending was just those three words…

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    • Anonymous

      Oh! thank you for commenting that! I was searching forever!

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    • Due piña

      Lol I went through the same process. Pretty frustrating I must say. Very well written. Hopefully the ending is in the book but what a way to make some cash by adding a “to be continued ending” – spend 10-15… Get to read final chapter. :-/

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    • Ismael Zuniga

      I did the exact same thing.

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    • Dar

      I did the exact same thing… -____-

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    • Nope

      DUDE SAME.

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    • leV-Lee

      I did the exact same thing, except only searched once. But seriously, what the hell kind of an ending is that?

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    • anon

      i Did the same exact thing, it was beginning to piss me off, lol!

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    • al dente

      OH.MY.GOD thank you for posting this it took me literally a day to finally figure out the ending was the title. I will definitely buy the book!

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      • anonymous

        Could you tell me what happened?

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    • Suomonona

      I dont understand why everyone had so much trouble with this… if there is no text under the title then the title is obviously the ending.

      now shower me with your down votes!

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  • leV-Lee

    Im using an ipad and i can’t seem to get the actual story at reddit. Only the comments show up, any help?

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    • Awkward Thursdays

      There is no story, it’s just the title…

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    • Herp Derp

      the title is the ending thats it “i took it” i think he just ran out of steam for the story so thats how he decided to end it, he took it and no explination of what happens there after or the circumstances of where or why he took the orange…i believe that milos is now the leader of the slender man cult along with his GF. just my input.

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      • josh.

        BEST. COMMENT. EVER.

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    • Arxtix

      For people who are confused or can’t get access to Reddit, the page just leads to a post with just a title that reads “I took it”. Nothing more. There is no mix-up with you or your internet. That’s the ending. The real ending I suspect will be in the book he’s making.

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    • Dar

      The title IS the story -___-

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    • Anonymous

      Im on PC and I just see the comments too. :/ If someone helps thatd be great

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      • The Killer Known As Jeff

        Can you not read? The ending is the title: “I took it.”

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    • ? Star

      Same

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    • 0.0

      I am also having this problem :/ and I need to know how it ends.

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  • Anonymous

    WTF! Was that seriously the ending?!?! Or can I not reach it on my PS3?

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    • justgeni

      Nope…that was it..I know right!

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  • StoneH

    Dafaq? That’s it?

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  • Anonymoose

    Am I missing something in the shitty reddit interface or is the ending one bloody sentence?

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    • Awkward Thursdays

      It’s one (non-bloody) sentence

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    • CNB reviews

      It’s just one fucking sentence

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    • seribro

      No, the ending is just “I took it.” Although he is still posting on reddit :P

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  • Hmm

    If the OP is turning this into a book then obviously hes not dead and its bull?

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    • Ant

      Or. Or or or or…
      Maybe.
      The orange wasn’t murderous? And he didn’t die a citrus-ey death?

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  • :-(

    That ending was awful… trying to get money out of us by not revealing the end. The entire story feels like such a joke now. Just three words could mess up such a good story

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    • ARTJEN

      Totally agree. This whole story has been iffy to me but now I really don’t believe it.

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    • Suomonona

      The ending was simply: I took it.

      there is a link at the end of the story.

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  • Nosleep4456

    Orange you guys excited to see if anything happens next?

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  • anyolebody

    Orange you guys excited to see if anything else happens?

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  • http://creepypasta.com tytiger10

    Really! That it! That is the worst fucking ending ever!! I mean there so much build up and it ends with 3 words that’s bullshit!!!!

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  • StoneH

    What a goddamnt letdown, all that buildup for nothing!

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  • Anon

    So… Did you just decide to stop writing?? Got bored with the story did ya?

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  • http://none no name

    are you serious….i am dissapointed severley the ending was one sentence i took it ughh cant belive i read these day by day and the ending story is i took it cant belive this -.-

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  • Josh

    The link does not work plz, someone send me another link at Joshstather@gmail.com

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    • Herobrine

      The link works just fine, the ending is the three words “I took it.” The author just ran out of steam, and he just wanted to end the entire series, but those three words did not deserve an entire new part, they should have just been added to the fifth part.

      -Herobrine

      Always watching…

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  • seribro

    The ending is just called “I took it” with no story at all >:(

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  • Ismael Zuniga

    This series was okay. After his first story, I felt that the creepiness was slowly slithering away.

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    • Someone

      me too. the first and second were decently creepy and then it just kept introducing more and more characters and giving their accounts.

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  • Anonymous

    dafuq kinda ending is that? ruined the whole story

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  • Lizzabitch

    http://www.creepypasta.com/the-girl-in-the-picture/
    Its rose. Read about the red shoes. And the tapping on the windows :o my mind=Blown.

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    • http://loughboroughtattoo.com/content/view/12/26/ OjamaYellow

      Glad some else thought this! Not just the shoes but the giggling too!!

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    • anon

      but that’s fiction.

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  • ZeldawonderLinklover

    whaa….? That’s it. He just…Took it? So weird yet….awesomely scary :/

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