The Statue
You some how wake up surrounded by very tall hedges. You are very disoriented and groggy. As you observe your surroundings, you realize that you are in a very complex hedge maze. The hedges are 10 feet high and impossible to see over. There is a light fog dispersed throughout the area. You don’t know how you got there or why you’re there. All you know is that you want to get out as quickly as you can.
You feel a strange sensation as you explore the large maze. As you explore the maze, the fog becomes thicker and your heart becomes heavier. After several hours of wandering, you end up in what appears to be the heart of the maze. Your body freezes as your eyes lay upon a large stone statue of some sort of disfigured creature. The statue is missing one of its arms. Its feet and one hand look like that of a reptilian. Its face is deformed and difficult to see and clear features. But there is one feature you can recognize; a revolting, twisted grin with sharp jagged teeth. Your body is still frozen as if though someone had paralyzed you. The statue appears to be looking right at you from about 500 feet away. There is something very unsettling and disturbing about this particular statue.
You realize that you can still blink your eyelids. You blink once. It’s as though the statue had moved closer towards you. You think to yourself that it’s just your wild imagination. You blink again. The statue still appears to be moving closer still. You try not to blink anymore, but your watery eyes get the best of you. As you blink several times, the statue creeps closer and closer. It eventually reaches the point when the statue is only 5 feet away from where you’re standing. The grin on the statue appears to be larger and more disturbing then ever. It’s as though you can feel it breathing right upon your face. You are struggling to keep your eyes open. As your eyes water and become very irritable, you become fearful on how close your next blink will bring the statue. Your eyes close.
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Credited to Brad H.
Posted in Artifacts & Objects
September 18th, 2008 at 11:19 pm
Hee. “Don’t blink. Blink and you’re dead. Don’t turn your back. Don’t look away. And don’t blink. Good Luck.”
September 19th, 2008 at 12:24 am
Reminds me of a combination of the hedge maze and hedge animals in the movie/book of “The Shining.”
September 19th, 2008 at 12:42 am
@ silv automatically had your name as my name thing wth
September 19th, 2008 at 1:21 am
Wow. This one is pretty freaky
September 19th, 2008 at 2:05 am
Very nice creepy pasta.
September 19th, 2008 at 2:46 am
BUT THEN WHO WAS STATUE?
September 19th, 2008 at 3:24 am
Pretty much the exact idea of the statue has been done in tons of books and even an episode of dr who. not exactly original
September 19th, 2008 at 5:20 am
I just found this site. Damn good stuff. I guess Dru is the only one who’s seen this episode of Doctor Who, though.
September 19th, 2008 at 5:28 am
@Dru
Damn you, I was going to do the exact same thing!
September 19th, 2008 at 5:29 am
Woah. Anyone else thinking Doctor Who?
Nice pasta. :3
September 19th, 2008 at 5:43 am
This reminds me of the ghost in the Mario games, if you can’t see it, it can get you.
September 19th, 2008 at 8:53 am
Is like them angels off doctor who.
=]
September 19th, 2008 at 10:15 am
i don’t mean to ruin the greatness of this story but it is almost exactly like an episode of doctor Who but it was still better only because you don’t truly know in this one if he died
September 19th, 2008 at 10:31 am
WHO WROTE THAT PIECE OF FINE ASS
September 19th, 2008 at 11:44 am
what if you just keep your eyes closed? o.O if you dont open them it wouldnt be like blinking. and then u just stand there with your eyes closed….forever.lol. id rather die XD
September 19th, 2008 at 1:39 pm
:c not cool *brix*
September 19th, 2008 at 2:36 pm
Nice twist on the tale.
September 19th, 2008 at 3:28 pm
THEN WHO WAS DOCTOR WHO RIP-OFF?
September 19th, 2008 at 3:48 pm
I liked the imagery. The ending was weak ,though
September 19th, 2008 at 4:00 pm
I watch Doctor Who, too, Brad H.! :p
‘Twas one of my favorite episodes.
It’s well-written though. I like it.
September 19th, 2008 at 4:23 pm
Awesome. These latest pastas have been awesomeeeeee.
September 19th, 2008 at 5:07 pm
I haven’t seen this episode of Dr. Who you’re all talking about, but this is just like a nightmare I had when I was little (except replace the statue with a creepy little girl in a rocking chair), so it freaked me out plenty when it showed up in my email :/
So um um, DR. WHO RIPPED OFF MY BRAIN!
…sorry, I wanted to be cool and bitch about originality, too
September 19th, 2008 at 5:40 pm
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Blink_(Doctor_Who)
September 19th, 2008 at 6:26 pm
This device has indeed been used a good deal, but that doesn’t make it any less unsettling and/or frightening.
Then again, I spook easily.
Hell, that Youtube video with the cat that kept coming closer freaked me out… so grain of salt, I guess. Anyway! This worked really well for me and I enjoyed it and I guess I’m off to have crazy nightmares now.
That video, by the way: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=muLIPWjks_M
September 19th, 2008 at 8:32 pm
aaah a mix of the shining and dr. who i see.
it’s ok
no brix were shat…though that episode of dr. who did O_o
September 19th, 2008 at 11:10 pm
I swear I have never seen the shining or watched an episode of Dr. Who
I just got this idea from a statue that I used to have in my backyard and I was paranoid of it becoming closer
September 20th, 2008 at 1:21 am
I like the premise on this on, however, I’m sad to say that, for me, the writing left something to be desired.
The author uses quite a few simple sentences and rarely if ever varies his sentence structure, making the piece feel jumpy. Also, I do believe that the author is thinking of a Labyrinth, which is a type of maze, so he could probably vary his word choice without sacrificing meaning.
The story also contains a few awkward phrases such as “You feel a strange sensation as you explore the large maze. As you explore the maze, the fog becomes thicker”
Basically? In my opinion, it’s a good start, but the writing really distracted me from the story. However, with some proof reading and polishing, this story could definitely become a good one.
September 20th, 2008 at 4:53 am
@Happy Apple
You know the cat is moving when not in shot right? Somehow the owner has managed to train a Ninja Kitteh! I’m more concerned about how many Ninja Kittehs there are.
Brix were now shat!
September 20th, 2008 at 12:54 pm
Ehhh, I dunno, Brad H. but the similarities are a bit too close, in my opinion. :/ But like I said, I still enjoy it.
September 20th, 2008 at 4:28 pm
@ brad h
i liked this one no matter if its was stolen from dr. who or not and i believe you didn’t get it from dr. who it just reminded me of that
September 20th, 2008 at 9:38 pm
@Dodgy Doctor
Yeah, I know it’s not moving when not in shot, it just creeps me out because the position of the head is, if not identical, then very very similar, so that it’s _as though_ the cat has offscreen teleportation or whatever.
September 20th, 2008 at 11:43 pm
Reminds me of when Liu Kang fought Reptile in the Mortal Kombat movie.
September 21st, 2008 at 12:13 am
Your eyes close. Your brilliant mind has devised a solution, just don’t open your eyes and feel your way out of the maze. You win the game.
September 21st, 2008 at 1:05 pm
I thought it could only move if you do not see it, thus making closing your eyes pretty stupid.
September 21st, 2008 at 8:07 pm
Don’t like the beginning, myself- it just dumps you unceremoniously into a hedge maze.
Needs moar intro.
September 22nd, 2008 at 10:19 am
Close left eye.
Open Left eye.
Close Right eye.
Open Right eye.
You don’t need to close both eyes at the same time.
I love the premise, and the episode of Doctor Who was great (unfortunately whether you saw it or not, the story is just too similar to not be compared) but both this story and Doctor Who episode kinda failed on the part where the protagonists are struggling to keep their eyes open.
Unless winking is a special ability that few people have mastered?
It’s still one of the best episodes of Doctor Who though.
September 22nd, 2008 at 4:21 pm
@ happy apple
thevideo made my laugh so hard
September 24th, 2008 at 9:07 am
hey who left comment #7? that was not me. who’s using my name?
September 24th, 2008 at 4:31 pm
@ hops diggins
someone was using my name also
September 24th, 2008 at 9:43 pm
@ WHO WAS PHONE [and other people who haven’t seen it] i strongly recommend that dr. who episode.
i think it’s on alluc.com or bbcamerica.com
if i find it i’ll send you a link
October 4th, 2008 at 4:37 pm
Who was statue? o_0
October 4th, 2008 at 4:38 pm
Who was statue? o_0
October 6th, 2008 at 3:07 am
Haha, I was thinking DW as well. But that doesn’t mean it’s a bad story, I’d always freak out at creepy distorted statues getting closer and possibly killing me o.O
*shiver*
Besides, there are differences between Weeping angels and the distorted statues. So yes, good story.
November 6th, 2008 at 5:55 am
“You some how wake up surrounded by very tall hedges. You are very disoriented and groggy. As you observe your surroundings, you realize that you are in a very complex hedge maze. The hedges are 10 feet high and impossible to see over. There is a light fog dispersed throughout the area. You don’t know how you got there or why you’re there. All you know is that you want to get out as quickly as you can.”
Sounds like a evil version of Harry escaping the maze in the Triwizard Tournament. Except Voldermor- *ahem* He-Who-Must-Not-Be-Named, is replaced with the creepy statue.