• Anonymous

    aww now he gets to be the mind-fucker.

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    • Angel

      I don’t get it. Is this some version of slenderman or is it something else?

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  • Anonymous

    THEN WHO WAS EYES

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  • Anonymous

    Nice. Well written and genuinely creepy.

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  • bf

    it’s an oilchild, sounds like

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  • Anonymous

    Alright, first, I want to know at what age did he have a girlfriend that’s serious and mature enough to say something like this – “She told me she couldn’t feel the boy she loved in me anymore.” I mean, really? This kid had this thing following him since age 12, then, in his crazed state, somehow got a girlfriend that was serious about being with him enough to say, “You’re not the same guy I met?” That’s just bull. She only really met one kind of guy – crazed idiot who, as this “pale face” doesn’t seem to even be doing anything but /be/ there, can’t just live his life before being damned.

    Above conclusion to paragraph = second point, by the way.

    Third, I think it’s ridiculous how, in all these types of stories where people are suffering over years and years, that no one ever thinks, “Let’s find others like us!”

    Story = long piece of fail. Pasta was too stringy, and literally saw the waiter sneeze on it as he was bringing it over. TAKE PASTA BACK ‘N’ GIVE ME ‘NOTHER!!

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    • Shadowed Beauty

      That’s kind of mean to say but I like the last sentence. It was a little strange to hear about the girlfriend thing.

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  • Jesus

    I WAS EYES

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  • Mookster

    awesome pasta is awesome

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  • http://myspace.com/darkwolf4ever Father Crow

    Oh shit. o_o
    Well… I’m gonna be paranoid.

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    • pale face

      why is that?

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      • REALLY!

        AH thought i seen you.

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  • Anomalous

    Not bad, one of the best I’ve read in a while

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  • HALP

    that was GOOD. 9/10

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  • The Pale Apparition

    Um… I am the Pale Apparition… Have been for… Three years I think? I am pale, I am relatively skinny. NO signs of ribs showing, though, as well as the eyes-part is a bit off.
    -I just be there at night and other times unpredictable and never scare someone intentionally… And sometimes be together with those I like.
    …Guess I just have some not so good far relatives playing tricks on little boys. -_-

    Seriously though, there were a few odd things- a serious girlfriend at that age and the thing really doing nothing; Perhaps it mysteriously emitted the Fear, along with something that turned others to what it is.

    Conclusion: Average. 5/10

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  • http://www.mybloghasadd.blogspot.com Addish

    Parts of it could have used some work and the ending was a little meh for me. But it’s still pretty good and very creepy.

    Agreeing with Anonymous about the girlfriend thing, that was somewhat wierd.

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    • Anonymous

      Perhaps the author really was crazy and imagined it all. The girlfriend, the pale face. Who’s to say that isn’t what happened?

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      • Angel

        This was ok

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  • pastalover

    I see flickers of movement sometimes. T____T
    nice one.

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  • Blinded by Tears

    FUCK IT.
    Yeah, I won’t be able to go into my bedroom anymore without going mad.

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    • Nobody

      I feel ya. Oh shit hes in my room! wait, its just slendy. Heeyyy slendy. Sure ill go outside. Hey rake oh thts u hes talkin bout? Lol.

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      • POWER LEVELS!!!

        u sir made me lol

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  • Anonymous

    Made me think of no-face from spirited away.

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  • http://thehungryreader.com Krepta

    How, paleface! Great Spirit say you in heap big danger! UGH!

    The description of the paleface itself was nicely evocative and could definitely be repurposed for future pasta, but this particular pasta was distinctly lacking in subtlety. I expected the last line to be, “BOO!”

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  • Kat-chan

    Olol. Girlfriend at 12?

    Anyway, it was pretty good.

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  • anonymous

    not suuuper creepy, but creepy enough, pretty good read.

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  • KillerSkaarj

    This actually creeped me out. Then when it said that I had my own pale face I said “Aww, not again!!!”

    But now I’m unfazed by it so it gets an 8/10 for creeping me out but not being able to make the creepiness linger with me for a while.

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  • Anonymous

    I always hate the ones that end with the guy becoming the creature. Because why would they take the time to tell this little story?

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  • Mog

    WHO WAS RANDOM GIRLFRIEND?

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  • Zomg.. pie.

    At 12, you would be surprised how many people think they have serious relationships and fall head over heals for other little people. And his advice was to keep your friends and loved ones close – may have picked up a girlfriend along they way and pretended to be normal.

    Annnnnyways.. Yeahh.. good pasta. Im going to be freaking out next time Im alone at the house at night. [darrkkk]

    o.O pie? O.o

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  • anonymous

    sounds to me like u have ISSUES!

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  • Mew?

    Pretty good story, at the end it does a good of interacting with the reader.

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  • Rafy

    ”the corner of my eye”

    I hate that line

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