On the farthest point of Long Island, the last scrap of land that still counts as New York, there sits a tremendous, abandoned building. Protected by its own isolated location, there is also at any given time two to three Security Guards there. However, if one approaches the cast iron gates on the night of December 4th, you will see that on this night, even those few security guards refuse to work.
The gates are left unlocked, and the wind will be utterly still, a nearly opaque fog filling the peninsula. Go directly to the main doors and step within, there will be a single long hallway, the end occluded by that fog. If you look to either side upon entering, you will see a modern operating room through a glass door. The further in that you walk, the older the equipment will get and the more old fashioned the doctors will be dressed.
When you can finally come upon the end of the hallway, the screams of the patients will be nearly deafening. The hall will terminate in an open door leading to a single wooden table where a man in woolen medical clothing, stained brown from blood, will be bent over a corpse. The body’s face will be covered, and the man will turn silently, screwing the top onto a cloudy jar of liquid, filled to the brim. He will hand this abnormally heavy object to you, before turning back to his work.
Instantly, you will be outside of those cast iron gates. From that point on, disease and injury will never affect you, but if you ever open that cloudy jar and pull out the contents… you will find a heart, pulsing and beating loudly in your palm. A sudden feeling of horror and revulsion will pass through you as realization strikes, that you have just pulled your own living heart from your chest.
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The jar is called Soul Gem and the doctor is Kyuubey (sorry can’t resist that, really)
I quite like this one
The heart in the jar reminds me of both Pirates of the Caribbean and Voldemort’s Horcruxes. Just keep it safe and never tell ANYONE about it and you’re golden. I’d totally do this.
Someone say ‘operation’?
…No? Awww…
A nice little pasta .
But who was doctor!? (Sorry been wanting to say that sense I started reading these things.)
You mean Doctor Who? Fantastic! Allons-y! Geronimo! Don’t Be Lasagne! (Nope Capaldi still needs a catchphrase.)
Anyway, I think this is a good outline for a really satisfying pasta, could even be a movie, but it needs fleshing out (pun intended).
Well done. Perfectly cooked and well seasoned. I see the only draw back to doing this is our own human curiosity getting the best of us and we open the jar. However, personally I’d seal that sucker up with something and hide that thing. Once I was on my death bed. Then I’d open it up lol
if you didn’t tell us what was in the jar would’ve been more ominous
I’ve lived on the island since i was born never heard of this but if you’re looking for something similar go to Camp Hero
One of the best ritual pastas I have seen in a while
I would totally try it!
And, because I am a sick, sick person, I would enjoy it……hospitals scare me yet fascinate me at the same time.
Thanks for posting this!
Holy crap I loved that! 10/10 :D
How else do ya think I became immortal?
My luck…… I’d drop the jar on the way home.
It’s a good pasta because they let you know WHY not to open the jar!
the price being maybe that you can’t let that jar come to ruin or you die, even if its not your time?
or maybe you have to give up all reproduction or aging?
sounds legit…
This tale is quite amusing; the way it conceals the true price from those foolish enough to attempt it. The idea that it could possibly be without a price is ridiculous, as nothing’s free. I know the real price, but I’m not telling you, it’s more fun to let you find out the hard way.
I HATE ritual pastas.
I love this pasta! Kudos!
Awesome pasta~! Rare and original ^^
LOL NEX!!!!
NO! its my jar of dirt :D
but really finally a creepy pasta without a catch? wow i mean really you could just buy a safe a lock the jar in it and then go be a daredevil or whatever
so the only consoqence is that ill be scared sign me up jk
No real or interesting concept I could see. And sorry, but the mood was kind of ruined in the first paragraph by capitalized Security Guards and me being referred to as ‘one’ and ‘you’ in the same sentence. :( OK I guess.
BUT WHO WAS CORPSE?
“I’ve got a jar of dirt! I’ve got a jar of dirt! And guess what’s inside it?”
Fear The Darkness
-Nex
I’m a time lord so I have two hearts.
@Arancaytar
So, I guess what you’re saying is… BUT WHO WAS LICH?
kewl
BUT WHO WAS JAR?
Storing your heart/soul/life essence in a safe place is the fashionable thing to do for evil sorcerers. :)
@BUT WHO WAS X?
You don’t instantly die when your heart is removed, fyi. If that were so, there would be no transplants.
okayy it sounds good, but the draw back is you actually have to go go Long Island
ohhh Love the Location!
What if someone else opened the jar?
what if it wasnt ur heart. it says realization. but you would have no time to realize if you had no heart. also, WHO WAS HEART?
I liked this story when I saw it in Pirates of the Carribean.
Oh wow, I’m surprised this is still around. I guess there’s no way to prove it, but I wrote this back in the hay-day of /b/ Creepy Pasta threads.
So that’s what happened to Davey Jones.
i like this one the end of it is pretty good.
OH YAY! A RITUAL FROM LONG ISLAND THAT’S WHERE I LIVE! As soon as I read Long Island I felt special :]
Kaler, you forgot:
5. ?????
6. Profit!
1. Do Ritual
2. Invincible
3. Join Army
4. Happy Ending
I would go the other way.
1. Do ritual
2. Invincible
3. REVOLUTION!!!
4.????
5. Profit.
if its an abandoned building, how come doctors are doing all kinds a fun stuff in there? other than that “typo” pretty nice read.
they are obviously spirits of doctors. It reminds me a little bit of House on Haunted Hill
I can’t believe no one’s commented on how in line with the Holders this is.
Oh, nice! :D
keep the jar in a safe, become invincible and kick some ass. sounds like a good idea to me – you can kill shit, drink as much as you want, have unprotected sex, etc and be fucking invincible. epic win.
Become a vigilante Super Hero! :P
I’ll go if someone goes with me
ive read this before and i always wondered what would happen if you accidentally dropped the jar? =\
btw if it tells me that even security won’t work there that night, then i’m not going in…simple.
…you know…this is a pretty good ritual pasta! Not insanely hard, no stupid back firing (as long as you don’t open the jar), no punishment, hell I’d do this one!
Same!
……….i would hate to live for ever (not that it said that)
but i would’nt know where to keep the heart,plus anything that demonic cant be good ……awesome pasta though
That’s a pretty freaky thought. I wonder if one stays forever youthful, in addition to living for as long as that jar is kept safe.
Well old age is a result of injury to our DNA over time so I think it would be quite possible that you live forever. Also, would you be able to feel your pulse?
Holy crud. What is the drawback?
Oh Wow, This Is Awesome. It’d Be Pretty Easy To Keep That Jar Shut Now That I Know NOT To Open It. :] I Like This Pasta, Well Done.
I’ve read this one before…
Though I can’t remember where.
just as long the doctor isn’t scary looking.
This is my new favourite ritual pasta.
It isn’t to complicated and it’s actually worth doing… what a suprise!
Plus, we get to know what’s in the jar.
Wouldn’t mind doing this, pretty easy to do, and you can just keep the heart safe at home then beat up your enemies.
Oh, this has always been a fave of mine…so ghoulish and mysterious.
This could go in “Locations” to. I wonder if something really is as it says…?