• janniex

    its so sad and touching T_T

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    • TheYellow

      Agreed.

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      • WonkyTARDIS

        I feel all the feels.

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        • Tandoori Is Your Sister

          I feel your feels while youre feeling all the feels. Q♥Q

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        • Roy

          I feel your feel of feeling all the feels :P

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    • little miss black cat

      It was soo touching * bawling eys out.*

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  • OReally???

    Almost a tear jerker…good story!

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    • Anonymous

      Ok we’ll I wasn’t planning g on crying today, bi AHHHHHHHHH

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  • Stephan D. Harris

    What a sad little ghost story, well done.

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    • WonkyTARDIS

      “A sad little ghost story.” HA! You sound almost sarcastic, Stephan.

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  • Slender

    I loved it, almost cried

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  • V$VP

    feels were definitely felt.

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  • Opaleone

    I would lose the last line.
    Otherwise, lovely.

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    • NovaStaR

      I agree, it would leave it more open to the readers imagination, plus, I think by then they’d already get the gist of what going on.

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  • Bear82

    Similar theme as the end of "Odd Thomas", I cried then too.
    Well done.

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  • aidan

    That story was awesome. I don’t know how u make such story’s like this

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  • jamie

    i’ll admit it, i started sobbing.

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  • Maria

    Great story! I can honestly say, I tried holding back tears. I was thinking about what if this had happened to my boyfriend. It was very well written and completely enjoyable. :D

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  • Aly

    I was nearly in tears. I loved it

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  • Zheng Yuan

    I loved it.

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  • Hanis

    that was something else, i suck at this kind of stories man…(T.T) what a tear jerker.

    8.3/10

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  • C.K

    I never cry. I did.

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    Rating: +10 (from 14 votes)
    • Endoplasmic Reticulum

      I never cry, I didn’t.

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      Rating: -4 (from 16 votes)
      • Dr. Troll

        I never cry. I laughed.

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  • Riptide

    First creepypasta ive read since july.. this is far more enjoyable than the old scary ones

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  • Caleigh

    Here come the tears..awesome story! Different than the other pastas.

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  • http://graysurfacing.tumblr.com/ Mike S

    i applaud you on one of the mos touching stories i ever read.

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  • Megan W.

    I cried. I love this.

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  • Amber

    Bravo! It gave me chills-and literally made me tear up. Because I know a love like this and it is the best thing life has to offer. This was fantastic, amazing.

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  • Jayden B.

    Why do you want me to cry?

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    Rating: +4 (from 6 votes)
  • Julie

    Get over it already.

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  • ChrisPetrone

    so sad but i loved it. solid 10

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  • Anonymous

    Good. The ending really pulled it together for me. I consider myself a realist. So…the idea of holding a burning body close to me stikes me as silly. Fire is hot. Nobody could hold a corpse being lit up at hundreds of degrees. But I digress. I liked the story, but the grammar was absolutely horrible. Too many commas where there should be periods, and the word "to" should be "too." Little things like that distract readers like me. I would proofread a little better next time.

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    • David

      Look the story was great you dont have to point it out ass whole

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      • LHSS

        asshole*

        ^_^

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    • dingdongmonk

      i agree bro.

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  • MAHDICK

    I fucking cried.. thanks for the tears

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  • Deloesian

    Thank you all for the very positive feedback! This was my first real attempt at creative writing and I was unsure how it would be received. Your responses have been amazing, so again, thank you.
    To the Anonymous response:
    Guilty as charged. I should have spent more time proof reading the story for grammar errors.

    Concerning how realistic it is to hold a burning body:
    Remember, the story makes the reader question whether or not Julie’s presence has all been in the main characters head. Maybe she really was never there.

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    • Nicola Marie Jackson

      When she was burning him but telling him that it was Ok baby, that it didn’t hurt, that got me welling up and that scene will stick with me until it’s my turn. Absolutely beautiful xx

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