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There were giants on the earth in olden days, and Methuselah lived to be 969 years old. Is it accurate to dismiss these accounts as fantasy or allegory?

Years ago in my freight-hopping days, I climbed into an open boxcar on a rural siding out in the middle of nowhere and was surprised to see a very old man sitting in a dark corner. We got to talking, and he told me that the perception of time passing was just an artifact of consciousness, and that everything was indeed happening at once.

He said that the ancient Essenes had learned to control time through conscious will, enabling them to live very long – though not quite immortial – lives, and that their descendants, modern Essenes, still walked the earth, blending in with us due to not wanting to call attention to themselves. He said it was impossible for ordinary humans to distinguish a modern Essene, but that cats, with their amplified sensory abilities, could tell almost immediately.

Apparently cats don’t like Essenes very much and the attitude is reciprocated, so an Essene will immediately leave the room upon seeing a cat in it. He further stated that the modern Essenes were hunting him down in order to kill him to suppress this secret, but that he (and I) were “pretty safe” out here on the rails.

Slightly creeped out, I selected another boxcar to spend the night in, in hopes a train would come by the next day, hook up to the cars on the siding and take me somewhere interesting. An hour or two after midnight, I heard a rumble as a passenger train was approaching rapidly on the main track. I watched out the open boxcar door, through a light rain, as the windows and scenes on the passenger train flashed by, and I heard a loud thump as something thrown from the moving train struck the outside of my boxcar. The next morning I got out of the car to stretch my legs and found what had made the thump. it was the body of a cat with its neck broken.

I never saw the old man again.

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  • http://www.neopets.com/userlookup.phtml?user=silent_doom_tonight Jumbo Shrimp

    The story was okay until you killed the poor cat.
    I hate you now. D:<

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  • http://hai2u.com Yeah

    yeah i like cats

    yeah
    yeah

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  • Wheat

    THEN WHO WAS OLD MAN?

    hurrrrr

    seriously you guys it’s not funny any more.

    Anyway, this pasta was okay, but there’s nothing supernatural about it. a crazy guy killed a cat.

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    • Sour Skin Seamus

      A crazy, IMMORTAL guy killed a cat

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  • r

    the possibilities of the story are interesting @wheat.

    besides…
    everyone hates cats..
    ..right?

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  • Lion-O

    but WHO WAS ESSENE!?

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  • uhm, yess

    It was crazy gary oldman

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  • Shuriken

    Dude, I kill cat’s and old men. I’ve killed like thirty in the past hour. This is nothing original.

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    • LOST THE GAME

      Well, you’re a shuriken, you kill everything you come in contact with, really.

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  • Reptilian Liar

    Hmm….very interesting. I think maybe the ending was a little poor [not just because they killed the cat] but the rest was excellent.

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  • YAHWEH

    I see what you were going for with the story, but a couple of things that kinda lost it for me at the end. It could just as easily have been that the old man was mad/lying, and that he just killed a cat for because he’s a crazy old man.

    Would have worked better if you stated that you heard several sinister voices from his cart that night, and what sounded like a struggle, and a cat fled the other room, looking agitated. The next morning, you check the old man’s box car, to find nothing but some ominous blood-stains, and a note for you, saying “It would be wise to forget about this. We see you.”

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    • Endoplasmic Reticulum

      Vezyvezy nice ending good sir

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  • Derp

    YAHWEH has a point it could’ve been much better if that was added to it.

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  • Miss Betterdone

    Someone always beats me to the WHO WAS…

    Boo on you for not liking the dead cat. It’s a story, and I thought the death of the cat contributed well to the ending.

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    • Endoplasmic Reticulum

      Cats dieing contributes well to ANYTHING.

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  • http://yahoo.com I Was Phone

    no one gets this one

    I think the old man was an essens

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  • http://yahoo.com I Was Phone

    *essene* sorry

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  • NO U

    Has no one considered that THE CATS KILLED HIM, TO KEEP THEIR POWERS SEKRIT?

    DUMM DUMMM DUMMMMMMM!

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  • life

    this story had it’s good qualities but the whole thing kind of through me off. and it lets you think of the ending, kind-of. like either the man WAS crazy, HE was an essene, or there really WAS a real essene.

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  • Z

    What? Guys, I really like this one. I personally think that adding to it would take away from the kind-of crypticness of the ending. I think it’s supposed to be pretty clear that the old man was an Essene. :/

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  • Very Old Man

    I gotta be honest guys. That cat snuck up on me and I kicked it by accident.

    Whoops.

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  • A Cat with a Broken Neck

    Its pretty hard to talk with a broken neck… but come on guys, what did I ever do to you? And how did I get here anyway? Seriously, just leave me alone. Alright, I think I should die now, bye.

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  • Essenes

    @Very Old Man

    Wait… so who did I kill?

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  • Suigintou

    The impression I got was that the Essenes came for the old man that night – that the narrator narrowly dodged the proverbial bullet.

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  • Icecry0

    An old fart killed a stray smelly cat, boohoo.

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  • xDDDDDDDDD

    @Suigintou

    you got it~ ^_^ we’re thinking the same thing

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  • MooMoon

    at #19

    a old man….duh

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  • Essenes

    @ MooMoon

    I know that. But apparently I was meant to the old guy on the train, not the one in that huge white house. Joe Bush, I think his names was… or was it George?
    Humans have such weird names.

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  • Martin Van Buren

    xDDD,

    BAWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW SOMEONE WROTE A FAKE FICTIONAL MADE UP STORY WHERE A CAT GOT KILLED AND I LOVE CATS SO NOW I AUTOMATICALLY HATE THE AUTHOR AND THE STORY AND WANT TO KILL HIS FAMILY BECAUSE I’M AUTISTIC!!!!!

    …then who was cat?

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