The Last Thing You Remember
A gunshot shatters your blissful state of slumber. Blood stains your sheets and crimson runs from the walls and ceiling, and you notice from the blurred vagueness that is your peripheral vision, a body slumped over the foot of your bed. Somebody has been murdered in your room.
Despite the early hour, and the shock of your discovery, you desperately muster the strength to search for the last place you put the phone; you have to call the police before it’s too late.
As you frantically search under cushions, beneath stacks of papers and old CD’s, you realize something is wrong. Suddenly, you feel weak, decrepit, frail, a frailness that brings on intense and unwanted dizziness. You clench your teeth as you search for the phone, but your pain continues lurch at your bones and nag at you. The pain becomes intense, and your vision blurs, and you keel over in pain onto the floor. You are immobile due to the raging and unknown pain clawing at your insides. Helpless.
You sense a living presence in your room now, your sheets rustling, and now footsteps. The debilitated corpse that once lay helpless on your bed, you realize is moving of it’s own volition. It is alive.
In your last moments of consciousness, your last breath of air, you manage to grasp at your stomach, and you feel torn skin, and then raw flesh. And then nothing. There is a gaping hole there.
These are the last things you remembered.
Posted in Murders & Deaths
September 6th, 2008 at 6:11 pm
i dont get it
is it like the movie alien?
September 6th, 2008 at 6:29 pm
This really gave me the creeps thank you it really was creepy.
September 6th, 2008 at 7:06 pm
Welcome back WHOWASPHONE.
September 6th, 2008 at 9:34 pm
This was inresting and I loved it continue on!!
September 6th, 2008 at 11:06 pm
I liked the twist. Nice.
September 6th, 2008 at 11:14 pm
Good story, but WHO WAS MURDERER? No really, who was it. And who was corpse.
September 7th, 2008 at 3:50 am
A family death is never a good thing, my hearts are with you WHOWASPHONE. Welcome back
September 7th, 2008 at 5:30 am
I bet a lot of people are going to be like ‘wat?’
and I think that is sort of the point of this pasta. You are presented with a very brief moment of consciousness and confusing and scary images during it. You die or go unconscious before you find out what is happening.
I like this pasta a lot.
September 7th, 2008 at 12:08 pm
Eh… I don’t get it. Was the corpse a zombie? Somebody the murderer killed earlier? The murderer himself?
September 7th, 2008 at 12:15 pm
Hey, third paragraph, is the keel suppose to be kneel?
September 7th, 2008 at 1:07 pm
keel is an actual word.. look it up
September 8th, 2008 at 9:00 am
I dunno… seemed really obvious from the start =/
September 8th, 2008 at 12:48 pm
Keel used as a verb means to fall, I believe. In example, “He keeled over, dead.”
That aside, this is actually quite terrifying. Imagine waking up to this, with no explanations before you are forced into nonexistence or your preferred conception of the afterlife.
September 8th, 2008 at 8:11 pm
what the crap does keel mean i don’t want to look it up
September 8th, 2008 at 8:28 pm
Welcome back WhoWasPhone.
I think the corpse was never a corpse. It was the murderer. However, because the victim (the narrator) had just been shot and they were in shock, not to mention rapidly losing blood, they were unable to realise this and assumed it was a body.
As sensation returned to their body and they started feeling the effects of their imminent death, they started to become more aware of their surroundings and of the “body” not actually being dead. Of course by that time it’s too late and the last thing they do as they die is realise that they’re the victim.
I like it. I kind of knew the narrator was the one who’d been shot from the first paragraph so it was creepy reading their steps to realising this themself.
September 12th, 2008 at 6:46 pm
I believe it’s a zombie.
September 12th, 2008 at 10:17 pm
wb WHO WAS PHONE
i like that i was a bit confuzzled…still am a bit though
but it’s definitely one of the better pastas
September 13th, 2008 at 10:04 am
THEN WHO WAS CORPSE?
September 13th, 2008 at 11:14 pm
WHO WAS MURDERER, indeed. Some guy just gets his brains blown out by a sleeping person…???
September 16th, 2008 at 10:05 am
what the crap why does every on say who was somthing like who was corps or who was murderer what the heck r yall tryin 2 say how was the corps or who was the murderer
October 10th, 2008 at 2:57 pm
owww this was sad/scary
October 12th, 2008 at 3:32 pm
maybe it’s one of those stories where the dead thing switches places with you.
like… it was a corpse, but then when you died, it came back to life.
i know it’s weak, but that’s what i thought.
October 26th, 2008 at 9:16 pm
He obviously gave birth to the corpse
November 20th, 2008 at 10:10 pm
ok… i dont get it. he died but his corpse was on the side of his bed he dies somewhere else i assume cause who puts there phone in their bed room. he realizes hes dead but HIS copse moves. what is they saw each other. itd be liek
“you:your dead
You2:your dead
you3:what the F**K!”