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You awaken with a high pitched ringing in your ears. Gradually, the sound becomes softer, like the humming from your refrigerator, and eventually, it stops completely. Even after a peaceful night’s rest, your eyes are not ready to open. Your instincts urge you to KEEP THEM CLOSED, but you find no reason not to open them.

The florescent lights blind you as your eyes are adjusting to the brightness. You are in a perfectly square, white room with one door. One door. There is nothing strange about the door, yet you find it strange how the door seems so ordinary. You are now sitting up in your own bed, in an unfamiliar room. You are not surprised. You don’t know why. But you are not surprised. Your gut is telling you to go back to sleep, telling you not to be so curious, telling you not to….. too late. You notice an elderly man, possibly in his late 70’s, sitting in the corner of the room. He is wearing a cheap brown suit and a pair of sunglasses. There are several pieces of cardboard signs, resting on his lap. He opens his mouth and begins to speak… he makes no sound. After a few moments, his lips stop moving and he grins. He grins. It reminds you of the smile of a mischievous little boy, stealing toys from his siblings. The man lifts up the first sign, it is written by hand. “Hello, my name is Micheal, do not be afraid of me. I will not hurt you.” He continues to smile, showing his decaying teeth. He switches to the second sign. “I will grant you three wishes, if you want them. Any information I reveal will count as a wish. I will not hurt you.” He waits. You nod your head. He switches to the third sign. “If you use up all three wishes, I will give you another three, but once you start to use the next set of wishes, you will have to give me something… valuable. I will not hurt you.” You immediately want to know, “Tell me why I’m in this room.” Before your lips begin to produce any sound, his mouth begins to move. You notice his crooked yellow teeth. It keeps moving as though he is talking, yet he makes no sound. You feel somewhat frustrated and cheated by the mute man. You get up and walk towards the plain white door. The man gets up, slowly feeling for the corners of the bed, he crawls under it, it is obvious that he cannot see. You approach the door, turn the knob, and open it. After opening the door, you find that the door is still closed, and you are holding a piece of cardboard with your own writing on it. You read it. “You have one wish left, don’t open the door” You check on the old man, he is still under the bed. He is grinning again, this time, the grin stretches across his face. His decaying mouth begins to laugh. A soundless laugh. You start to realize that the situation is hopeless. You want to go home. You want to wake up and realize that it was all just a dream. You say to the old man, “I wish this was all just a dream and I won’t remember it when I wake up.” How stupid, you notice it only now. You are deaf. You will never notice this, but you used four wishes.

You awaken with a stinging sensation in your eyes. Gradually, the pain becomes less intense, like a wound starting to scab, and eventually, it stops completely. Even after a peaceful night’s rest, your eyes are not ready to open. Your instincts urge you to KEEP THEM CLOSED, but you find no reason not to open them.

Your gut is telling you to go back to sleep, telling you not to be so curious, telling you not to notice the old man with the rotting smile, staring intently at you.

-Brian Chua

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  • Alan

    What? This story is cluttered from beginning to end. (well, there wasnt even really a true end, which is supposed to be creative i guess.)

    The big trick is that the old man is using wishes by explaining things or that the kid is thinking out loud? How could he not notice that hes deaf, he gets out of the bed and walks, around, obviously making noise.

    Not even really a good concept, oh look, another ominous figure here trick you into mortal harm or purgatory, this stuff is getting old.

    PHONE, You should up the standard when you pick the stories, if the people cant even create readable sentences then dont post it and encourage others to throw junk together and send it in, in hopes of making the front page.

    Well, im off to re-read Josef K’s stories.

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  • Sara

    But who was old man?

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  • Suffra

    I would have loved the story if I understood what the Hell it was about in the ending with you going to deaf and all

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    • Anonymous

      you already use one wish before the beginning of the story to forget what happened and the you used on to get information and thenyou used another one to forget what happened again

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  • Xantherian

    Nice concept, but I couldn’t understand half of it.

    ‘Twas very poorly written. ):

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  • hmm

    perhaps before that he wished that it was a dream and he wont remember anything after that… 4 wishes and he lost one valuable thing (his hearing, thus the buzzing sound)

    since he doesnt remember anything… the thing repeats itself? his eyes hurt… i’ll suppose he lost his sight? that’s just my guess =D

    just

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  • Zanik

    First wish. He wants to know why he’s in the room. He doesn’t hear why.
    Second ‘wish’, he opens the door.
    Third wish, he wants it all to be a dream.
    Fourth wish, he wants to not remember it when he wakes up.

    The man grants all the wishes, but because the boy started his ‘second’ set of wishes, the man steals something from him. This time it was his eyesight, I imagine. He’s deaf at the start of the story, therefor this wasn’t his first set of wishes. It was his second. Thus, he made the same mistakes the first time around and lost his hearing for it.

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    • maybe

      Nope.
      “Any information I give will count as a wish.”
      Wanting to know why he’s in the room already accounts for the fourth wish. That’s why he was already not able to hear the response.

      Also, I don’t think the last part is the crucial part. You’re supposed to catch up on what’s happening in the middle then just kind of confirm it in the end.

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    • Christine Byars

      Exactly. It might of been hard to understand the point of his second wish though. As he was walking towards the door and opens it, it closes, but it was always closed to begin with, so he wanted it to be opened and thinking it to be opened, counting as his second wish. Also, I believe that with the boy or man loosing his hearing, there had to of been wishes that he wished for at the very very beginning of the story that we do not know about to be more of a shortened story, but at the end, the old man could of took away his sight for the sake of something ‘valuable’ he wanted.

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  • Zanik

    No, I’m wrong. The second wish wasn’t opening the door. The first wish of this story (which is the second set of wishes the boy made) is the second wish of the second set. Therefor, wishing it were all a dream was his third wish of this set, and wishing he did not remember when he woke up was the first wish of a third set.

    This leads me to believe that the first wish of the second set of wishes is the same as the first wish of the third set. He didn’t want to remember.

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    • Christine Byars

      and he didn’t want to remember when he first woke up so that had to been the first set to begin with then it started up with the second set.

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  • R’lyeh

    In a Mr. Welldone-esque fashion, I’ll sum this up in a short and sweet comment: this story was garbage. Where’s entropyblues when you need him :(

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  • http://www.cafepress.com/cutelyevilinc Addish

    I got the gist of it, reminds me of the story of the old man who wished to remember who he was.

    But it was poorly written.

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  • Akatz

    i on the other hand thought it was pretty good. not confusing at all. it had a good concept and keeps you thinking

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  • Snowden

    It was well written, except for the refrain sentences strewn about the entire pasta, but the point was unclear. The pasta was bearable because the rhetoric used was fresh, and not recycled every couple of sentences. It was hard to understand, though, which was a bit frustrating, so I didn’t particularly like it.

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  • Debbie

    So, he has been in this room before…the man has already stolen his ability to hear and now also his ability to see. The guy always wanted to forget about it all and awakes again in the room…where the man steals another sense…right?

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  • Wow

    I have to say this is one of the most confusing stories I’ve read. It didn’t make any sense to me. Nor was it very scary.

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  • Sigma

    Liked the concept ^_^ .
    But surely REMOVING HIS EYES would count as hurting him?

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  • http://myspace.com/bitch4u2hate VickyBee

    Ok I get it after having read it twice. he’s basically going to have to keep doing this scenario until the old man takes all the senses from the guy that he’s lacking. the first time he wakes up he’s probably already been through this and he just gave the man his sense of hearing which is why he thinks the man isn’t making any sound. The guy actually does ask the man why he’s in there but since he’s deaf, the man’s answer doesn’t get through to him. so then the guy goes to the door to leave and he notices it’s still closed because he probably wanted to forget whatever was on the other side, which would explain why he wrote “don’t open the door” so he wouldn’t have to go through it again and not be able to forget it since he had no more wishes. and THEN, his eyes are hurting the next time because the man took his sense of sight so now he’s blind and deaf. so i dont understand how he can notice the man the 2nd time. this was very clever though. the poor boy really is being cheated, though

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  • Scheide

    Even with the explanations given.. I still dont get it. But I guess its better than anything I couldve written, though.

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  • TIJ

    I dont really get it much, but i figured it ran along the same line as the pasta about the 3 wishes and how when the guy awoke, he’d already used 2 of them, and his final one was to know who he was (which was actually his first wish). =/

    i dont really appreciate pasta like this. i know its supposed to be some sort of mindfuck thing, but.. i just find it a bit confusing and sloppily written =(

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  • TIJ

    oh, i just read post 15 and re-read the pasta and got it. DDX

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  • Cthulhu

    This story was terrible.

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  • Someone

    I appreciate the effort, but this story was really poorly written. I couldn’t follow it at all. I mean, I got little bits and pieces of it, but towards the end I didn’t understand a thing that the person was trying to say

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  • Allie

    I think the wishes are the cards of information the old man is holding up.

    “I will grant you three wishes, if you want them. Any information I reveal will count as a wish. I will not hurt you.”

    Any information. That was the second wish, and the third was that he’d have to give him something valuable.
    Without knowing it, every piece of information he got was a wish.
    So by asking for it to be a dream and to not remember it was the fourth.

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  • Yep

    Read the comments people!

    We all have opinions, but don’t say it’s bad just because you can’t put 2 + 2 together.

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  • Brian

    Hey, this is the author.

    I just want to apologize about the confusingness… i have no experience in writing. i recently started reading pastas and came up with a spinoff of the wish concept. old, common, yes… but i tried to make it interesting.

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  • Comment Leaver

    This was a very good spin off.

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  • Anon

    I happen to think this story was very well-written and interesting. Don’t put down the author just because you don’t immediately understand where the story is going.

    I prefer stories that make me think, and this pasta certainly fits that description.

    Great job!

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