The Deepest Fear
You’ve been dating your girlfriend almost two years now. You often stay late over the summer and on weekends and arrive home long after the rest of your family go to sleep.
Every night you drive the deserted rural roads back home from a pleasant evening at her house you become overwhelmed by fears that you will arrive home to find your family dead in their beds. Each night you peek into your sister’s room and see she’s fine and hear the reassuring rumble of your father’s snore as you pass your parents door.
You chuckle at your silly worries and drift off to sleep. Finally one morning you decide to tell your mother about your late night fears amidst some jovial conversation for a nice laugh. As you tell her a concerned look comes over her face. She sweeps the hair away from her face as she says, “Oh honey, you know we were all shot almost two years ago.”
You scream as you see the gaping bullet hole in her forehead.
Posted in Insanity & Madness
June 27th, 2008 at 11:26 pm
What’s with these things being written in second-person? Someone tries to tell me a story starting with “You do x.” My natural gut reaction is “Fuck you… no I don’t.” and thus the suspension of disbelief ends there.
June 30th, 2008 at 5:02 pm
Fun creepypasta, but I agree with Dreamer.
It presents a situation where I would act entirely different than what the story is telling me I’m doing.
Most of all; I don’t think stories like these should tell me what my fears are or how I react to a paranormal situation. I think those details should be my own.
July 17th, 2008 at 4:37 pm
I’m with dreamer, UNLESS it’s about something you SHOULD or WILL do, not something you did.
July 23rd, 2008 at 4:12 am
@dreamer
True. I don’t like stories like these.
“You do (something)”, lines like these removes my interest on reading the rest of the story cause I keep thinking “no i did not!?”
July 24th, 2008 at 8:54 pm
And then you fuck it..?
August 8th, 2008 at 4:45 am
THEN WHO WAS GUN?
August 8th, 2008 at 12:28 pm
@diana
D: You sick fuck.
@Uncle Anon
I WAS GUN.
August 12th, 2008 at 1:02 am
When ever i read stories like this i just think “Oh i must have and just forgot”
“You Raped Her!”
Nuh us shut up cleverly writen out words above this sentance…You’ll never know what i actually did. -.-
August 17th, 2008 at 11:43 pm
I can see why people write it this way…It’s in the hopes of making a connection with the reader and thus making it creepier. It works sometimes if you do it right, but usually? No. An example of a well-done one was the one about the little girl and her bad dream…you know, where the thing is wearing mommy’s skin…
August 19th, 2008 at 3:45 am
@9 Yea, that story freaked me the hell out, but for other reasons.
*Wanted to reword this into a pasta but oh well.*
I was about 10 years old. My imagination was extremely wild, to the point I would hallucinate the point it felt real. One, night I try to sleep, then my bed starts to rock, side to side. I try to make it stop, I tell myself it’s not happening.
Evntually i can’t stand it and ask my dad to sleep with him. HI jump into bed and the rocking begins again. My dad said it was my guardian angel,. Although still freaked the hell out I fell asleep.
August 19th, 2008 at 3:46 am
Sorry for the poor grammar. It’s late.
August 21st, 2008 at 5:22 am
You’ve been dating your girlfriend almost two years now.
come on man, if you don’t keep it a little believable it is no fun.
August 25th, 2008 at 6:52 pm
gasp! i think they’re talking bout me!
August 25th, 2008 at 6:57 pm
gasp! i think they’re talking bout me :O
August 31st, 2008 at 11:22 am
While I do agree with Dreamer some people might look at stories as a way to live them, so instead of just reading a story for entertainment, some might actually want to know how creepy a creepypasta is, thus putting themselves in the shoes of the main character.
September 13th, 2008 at 1:10 am
it’s a bit sad
but i’m wondering is his family just killed…or did he have something to do with their death?
if he didn’t kill them [i don’t think he did] then perhaps it’s madness that came from guilt of not being home, that could be why the writer mentioned the girlfriend…the character probably was at his girlfriend’s house when they were killed and was so guilty by not being with his family it turned him mad.
September 19th, 2008 at 10:39 am
i think if they were dead for two years and his mom head a hole were a bullet shot her he would have definatly noticed
October 15th, 2008 at 4:06 pm
LOL @ 12
October 19th, 2008 at 10:14 pm
I didn’t like this one.. It basically killed the creepiness right away when he says he’s scared he’ll come back one day to everyone being dead.. &I also agree with dreamer. Most people wouldn’t react this way in these situations &stories aren’t set to a certain sex, I’m a girl and when I read stories where the main character is clearly a guy yet talks in the second person it ruins the story.
November 7th, 2008 at 2:46 pm
im sorry but this is a Rubbish pasta.
the plot is so obvious and if my mum sed that 2 me i’d b like
COOL!!!!! WTS IT LIKE DUDE???
November 10th, 2008 at 2:23 am
shut the fuck up guys.
just read the story and quit YER BITCHING