The Boogey-Man
When you come home from your night out, you are going to find that your house is just the same as it always has been. It will be bright; well illuminated by the light bulbs you leave on in the living room and kitchen whenever you know that you will be out after dark. Your expensive furniture, from all your favorite designer stores, will still be in place. Upstairs, your computer’s fan will be humming because you’ve forgotten to turn it off. That’s something I know you do quite often, even though you try not to.
Kind of strange. You leave the lights on, but you try to keep your computer off. Don’t you know that wastes just as much power? It’s not going to keep the ‘boogey man’ out. Not the real boogey man. Not me.
You’ll take your jacket off and hang it on the hook next to your doorway. Your wife’s hook will stay empty, though. Don’t act like I don’t know, John. You’re acting like everything’s normal, but you know that it’s not. You were out tonight because you wanted to drink your problems away. Even if you were at a bar tonight, you won’t be tomorrow, and you’ll still be drinking. You’re quickly becoming an alcoholic, and it’s because you can’t accept the truth. Your wife isn’t going to be coming back. Not tonight, not tomorrow, not ever. She left you, and I can’t blame her.
But, hey, I’m not complaining. It only makes it that much easier for me. I knew that I could lead her away from you by handing her those photographs of you in bed with that cheap whore from Middleton; I didn’t know that you would become inebriated, too. You won’t put up as much of a struggle as you might have before.
Tonight, after you take a quick shower trying to sober up, you’re going to sit down on the couch. I know you better than you know yourself, John. You’re probably going to try to call your wife, too, where she’s staying with her sister. After your call last night, though, she’s had her number changed. You probably don’t remember, but you threatened to kill her with a broken liquor bottle. That definitely ruined any chance you ever had of getting your wife back.
After you finish crying over the phone, you’re going to pass out on the sofa. That’s when I’m going to strike. I’m going to take you, John, and I’m going to drag you away and drive you, in the back of your own car, to a place down by the river side. I have some friends I want you to meet there. You probably don’t know them, but they know you, and they’re going to be eager to get acquainted. You see, there are some people who want to be you. They want your money, they want your life, they want each and every one of your credit cards.
And it’s a lot easier for them to take all of that away from you if you have no one, if you know no one, and, oh yes, if you are dead.
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Credited to Dr. Malpractice.
That was boring. Shut up.
Oooh, nice one there. It’s very rare to see a pasta written in second person without it adressing the reader. Wonderful change of pace. Also nicely written; easy to read.
Brix were, however, not shat, since I kinda can’t take anything seriously that has the word ‘boogyman’ in it.
Still a delicious pasta, though.
And the moral of this story is: don’t sleep with cheap whores from Middleton.
Poor John :<.
Unless this was one of those ones that try to guess your name. In that case, James, I’m going to kill you tonight.
oh wow, i might be first
anyway
this was an anteresting pasta. it was new in that it wasnot supernatural at all. In fact it was rather misleading. In reality it wasnt creepy at all. I do think you could make quite a story out of it but as a CREEPYpasta, i dont think it did that well
John sounds like a real douchebag; he deserves to die.
I could swear you’re a fan of SAW. Not your average pasta, and that’s why I love this one. Amazing job.
FUUUUUU-
lol wut
Wow thats creepy cuz it sounds exacly like me and my real names john.
Ahh, humanity.
And this fits my habits almost exactly. Except for the whore from Middleton.
Spooky!
First!!!! Didn’t read it, though. lol
Title looks promising.
Oh shi-
Very nice, it was well written, but, like always, the ending seemed a bit rushed. Really nice otherwise.
Meh. It was fine up until the Following line : and, oh yes, if you are dead.
It could have been a very well written story had the last line been omitted. Other than that, it was still relatively creepy, but not scary enough. Maybe I just read too much Creepypasta.
Also, The first line in this comment is written in the format it is in because my Quotation mark/apostrophe key is shot.
BUT WHO WAS BOOGEY-MAN?
…
*Locks the door*
<_<
wow.. reminded a litle of saw
To leave no ripples behind with your passing. To disappear unnoticed, unloved, unmissed…not a single living person to mourn.
The boogey-man kills your soul.
I sort of liked this one, but it wasn’t terribly creepy.
I like it, but the ending could’ve been a bit better. A little more detail about how these people would become John would’ve made me shit brix.
Wow. Creepy
ehh…It was alright I was hoping for a better ending…;-/
but it had a good start
Pretty good, but it walks a strange line between trying to appeal to people’s fears and telling a story meant to be seen from an outsider’s perspective, making it very unscary if your name isn’t john and your wife didn’t leave you and you’re rich. It could use some revisions but it’s a good start.
THEN WHO WAS LIGHT BULB?
So he was probably killed when he passed out, right?
I love this pasta!
*note to self : never pass out on the living room sofa when alone.*
Written well enough. Sounds like this guy upset the wrong mobsters, though. Not supernatural, but creepy in its own way. Overall, a good read.
Let’s see… no comments, but it’s been nine hours… I wouldn’t be surprised if a post after this comment tried to claim first.
A resounding “meh”. I was really liking it until the last long paragraph, but that pretty much ruined it. The shift to the mundane financial world kind of killed what basically has to be a supernatural entity that can watch someone inside their home constantly. Unless it’s supposed to be social commentary and the “boogey man” is really Big Business or something, but…that would be getting pretty silly.
Also, the last line sucks.
Moogie Boogie~
oooooh~ =P
2nd!!
i liked the whole thing about how he ruins his life, just to take it. but it wasnt creepy
Woah.. I Dind’t Even Have An Reaction On This.. Sorry Dude… 2/5. ~_~
Meh wasn’t creepy or interesting..
It was well written ill give the author that.
Sucked…
WHO WAS PHONE?!??!?!
Oh it was wife
Sigma
Feb 21st 2009
“Poor John :<.
Unless this was one of those ones that try to guess your name. In that case, James, I’m going to kill you tonight.”
SHUT UP
I’m James
;(
I liked it.It wasn’t creepy though
Very interesting. Not scary, but cool.
I thought it was pretty fantastic.
NO JOHN, YOU ARE THE BOOGEYMAN
AND THEN JOHN WAS AN ALCOHOLIC
shit.
this should be on spookystoriesforkids3-6.com
not creepypasta. this fucking sucks, and was not creepy. go suck a horse cock.
It could have been a bit grabier and creepier but it definetely was nicely written.
@THE GAME: Damn you, I lost…
this pasta was bland. Sure it was easy to read, but right from the start (with its constant “I know what you do every day” attitude), it was hard to not guess one of the two most obvious ways this would end: 1- continued stalking 2- death of stalked character
WHO WAS IDENTITY THEFT?!
Fuck. I lost the game too.
Anywho, I’m not much of a fan of this pasta,
But I appreciate it.
And good thing my names not John, nor am I male, lol.
poor john, i feel so bad for him ):
obviously, the boogeyman is a jerk.
The writing was excellent. The plot I was not a fan of. Mediocre pasta at best.
very well done however the name took a little away from it
the title and john
nice story, just not scary at all.
But…but…I never left John. I just found him fishing near the riverside, he’s been kind of quiet. O_O
Nice story, i’ve read better though.
The BoogeyMann.!(:
Hello, John.
It is a shame to see you have drifted away so ignorantly and gone to feature in other mind-game stalker stories. I am very upset, John, and truth be told, I grew very attached to you during the filming of the first movie. You could call it love. But I am not homosexual. Merely infatuated with your beautiful attitude.
I am you, and you are me.
We are one.
Do not think you can slip away so silently, as we are each other and cannot be parted.
You portrayed my character so valiantly, so… perfect. But you left.
I am not happy.
Hello, John.
I want to play a game.
except for dude,you should not have given man a name,shoulda made it like he was talking to us,then the alcoholics on this site would shit their pants
hahaha, so the guy under my bed was identity theft all along.
> NO JOHN, YOU ARE THE BOOGEYMAN
> AND THEN JOHN WAS AN ALCOHOLIC
ROFL!
ah, Anon, you made my day.
I like that this pasta does the real-world horror thing, as in the real boogeymen(?) are murderous creeps, but it wasn’t very scary. Maybe you didn’t mean it to be, especially knowing that only a fraction of the audience are called John and the rest sort of distance themselves.
Sounded like The boogey man was going to Rape him….
xD This one’s actually kinda funny. Only a little creepy.
This one asn’t all that creepy. I think the creepiest part about the story was John having a stalker who doubles as an identity thief. It was a little disappointing…
You guys don’t know what actual good storytelling is. Which says to me you’re all much more wrapped up in gory things than mental games.
Losers.
Quite cool,but the end sort of… eh… I don’t know. The build up was incerdible, the concept is marvelous. This “real boogeyman” is quite a concept, creepier than any imaginary boogeyman. But the ending had me sort of…
BUT WHO WAS BOOGEYMAN’S FRIENDS?
Yeah, like this.
Niggercock, tastes vary. You might like it, other people prefer different flavour…
Well, I’m home alone, also a small teenage girl (perhaps I shouldn’t really put that on a public website. Especially one like this…) and this definitely made me uneasy. Guess I will make a mental note not to drink myself to sleep tonight.
Dr., I admire your intelligence, but your stories are just too obvious. It’s pretty damn clear where all of your stories are going, and it seriously detracts from the ability to creep me out. And I agree with the guy that said it sounded like your boogey man was going to rape John, whoever the hell he was.
Since when is identity theft considered creepy pasta?
Those Mexicans sure go into desperate measures to get into America these days.
that, was lame
<.<
*grabs bat*
Come get me now Boogeyman!
Overall a pretty good pasta yumm
Not particularly creepy, but nice. I like the style.
meh
It was so very nicely written. Then it got REALLY sexual (but maybe it’s just me).
“I’m going to take you, John…”
No, please just no T-T
And the credit cards? Just didn’t fit. Why would a Boogey-man’s friends be interested in your credit cards? I know it’s used for identity/soul stealing emphasis but it didn’t really click and basically put a big splotch on a pretty good story.
Second person? Ugh I really hate those.
Good premise, but let down by the fact that the narrator assumes your name is John. The good doctor needs to go back to the way he wrote before. 7/10.
Fear the Darkness
-Nex
BUT WHO WAS CREDIT CARDS?
BUT WHO WAS CHEAP WORE FROM MIDDLETON?
this was fucking terrible
That was fucking horrible