Scary Paranormal Stories & Short Horror Microfiction

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In my town, there is an old wive’s tale of a boy who fell in love with a girl. He could never get up the nerve to ask her out, he’d follow her, waiting for an opportunity to approach her and ask her out.

One day, he found out she was moving town due to problems with her parents and most likely never coming back. He decided he’d wait on the outskirts of town and surprise her.

While he was waiting, his head filled with all the possibilities that this event could lead to. He begin to get excited, keeping his wrists together and drumming his fingers together.

He saw her car leaving the town and heading down the only road out which he was waiting beside, hiding in the bushes. As this was a rural road, there were large bushes either side of the road and only one lane for the cars to drive on.

As the car drew nearer, the excitement overtook him and he leaped onto the center of the road, shocking the girl and not leaving enough breaking distance for her to stop.

The car swerved and hit the boy, launching him through the air and landing hard on the rough terrain of the rural road. The girl jumped from the car and approached his twitching body.

As the girl bends down to examine his injuries, she hears a faint gasp from his body. He utters a single sentence,

“Love me?” He asks with a grin, as blood trickles from his deathly grin.

“What?” She replies in her confused state, after presuming he had died.

“Do you love me?” He questions a sickly monotone voice.

“Em…yeah sure.” She answers after a moments silence.

“You’re lying.” He yells louder than he should be able to, considering his current state.

The girl apologizes, and begins to back away in fear of his screaming, a look of terror spread across her face.

With great difficulty, he attempts to stand, he groans accompanied by the cracking of his bones. He falls to the ground and lets out a cry of pain.

The girl approaches him again in pity, lifting his arm over her shoulder and helping him get to his feet. She walks him to her car and lays him in the back seat and he loses consciousness.

She climbs into the driver seat and continues the way she was headed, as there is no hospital in her town and she wasn’t eager on spending the night with her parents.

The drive to the next town is along a dark and lonely side road, nothing but empty fields on either side of it. She hears him shifting about in the back seat. She speeds up, eager to get to the hospital, where she can drop him off and continue with the rest of her long journey.

“Are you alright?” She asks, not even sure if he is awake but eager to fill the silence with something.

Keeping his eyes closed, he questions her again.

“Love me.” He mutters, as if the words pain him more than his wounds.

She stays silent, pretending not to hear him and turns on the radio to fill the awkward void the question has created.

“Why don’t you love me?” He questions, continuing his interrogation.

She sneaks a glance in the rear view mirror, and immediately wishes she hadn’t. The boy was now sitting up in the back seat, staring maniacally at the back of her head, an unsettling lifelessness in his empty eyes.

“You should lay down, rest, your wounds could get worse.” She suggests, hoping he’d stop his incessant glare burning deep into the back of her head.

“Tell me you love me.” He demands, raising his voice slightly louder than before.

“Lie down, we’ll be at the hospital soon, I think I see street lights ahead.” She replies, again avoiding his question.

“Why won’t you say you love me?” He screams piercingly, causing the girl to jump in her seat.

“Stop this!” She yells in response, trying to break through his screams of insanity.

“Love me!” He screams one last time, wrapping his hands around her face.

She yells out in agony as he claws at her upper face, gouging out her right eye. She screams continuously, the car swerving on the road as he grips her around the neck.

Her focus is torn from her driving, now being driven by her primal instinct to survive. The car swerves out of control and crashes into a telegraph pole.

The following morning, the car was discovered by local police officers and the woman’s body was examined by forensic experts who concluded that the woman didn’t die from the crash, but from strangulation as proven by the severe bruising around her neck in the clear form of someone’s hands. This is the part that confused the experts, as there was only one body discovered in the wreckage. Whoever else would have been in the car with her should have died from the crash itself.

The boy hasn’t been sited since that night,some say he has returned to the town and has fallen in love again.

Credit To: Tober ‘n Wick

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  • koray

    this reminds me of myself this kinda happend to me today but without the gory stuff

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    • AssHat

      You got stuck in a car with a grievously injured boy asking you to love him?

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      Rating: +51 (from 51 votes)
      • Riley

        That happens to me on a daily basis.

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        Rating: +27 (from 31 votes)
        • Yo Mama So Fat…

          At first I kinda believed that this story would end with a cute, romantic ending (I forgot that this is f***ing CreepyPasta.com), so I kept reading it, and then the end just made me sad…

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        • http://www.wattpad.com/user/MadeInWicklow Cian ( Wick )

          So you didn’t like it?? :(

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        • ThatOneTotallyAwesomeGirl

          Me too :( it was a good story nevertheless, but I was kinda bummed out at the end.

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          Rating: +2 (from 2 votes)
  • OReally???

    Nooooooo

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  • lilwolf

    how cute!!

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  • endercreep

    very sweet of him to hold on like that, i fear strangleing my love XD

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    Rating: +13 (from 17 votes)
  • Squidward

    Sounds like overly attached girlfriend.

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    Rating: +17 (from 19 votes)
    • PAPUCHA

      *boyfriend
      And he was insane, because obviously the girl barely knew him, and he wasn’t even her boyfriend. Fuck.

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      Rating: +3 (from 5 votes)
  • http://Mikes-revenge.net Star_Tribe_Rep

    OMG THAT WAS FREAKY. Nice pasta dude, had that creepy effect and made me jump from my seat. It was a little simple though, and could have used more detail. The story kinda made no sense, why would he kill her? I give it 8/10

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    • ght

      Because she didn’t love him :I

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      Rating: +7 (from 7 votes)
  • DooM_Bunny

    An overall tasty pasta, very well wirtten, with some spelling mistakes, but you’re on the right track as far as story telling goes. Keep up the good work, hope to see more from you !

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  • Anonymous

    If the girl died and the boy was never seen again how can anyone know the details of this story?

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    • Name

      Its a story bro.

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      Rating: +5 (from 5 votes)
  • IDK

    I found this adorable… And I don’t know why. •_•

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    Rating: +2 (from 4 votes)
  • Freaky Fred

    I thought this was REALLY BAD. The whole obsession thing has been done, and this was done without any decent details. Why does he jump in front of the car? Why does he strangle the chick? Is there something about him that makes him immune from dying in the car crash? Sense is not made.

    No, I’d like to send this pasta back.

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    • http://www.wattpad.com/user/MadeInWicklow Cian ( Wick )

      No1 cares.

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      Rating: +5 (from 9 votes)
    • LHSS

      I agree with you, Freaky Fred. This was kind of bad. I’m not sure why it has a 7/10. :S

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  • http://www.wattpad.com/user/MadeInWicklow Cian ( Wick )

    Hi,
    I am one of the creators of this story, me and my friend did it! :D

    I actually edited this story a bit after we wrote it and posted it to another writing site which I am on! :D

    To read the newer version, and more of my work, here are some links:

    The edited, improved version of this story:
    http://www.wattpad.com/6647872-short-stories

    My profile with all my other stories:
    http://www.wattpad.com/user/MadeInWicklow

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    • MotherOfDragons

      Well whilst you are here…
      1.The story is cliché and has been done to death. Hardly ever successfully and definitely not in such a short (tiny in fact) pasta.
      2. No one cared or even slightly identified with the characters as they were under-developed probably due to the fact that…
      3. The story seemed rushed as if hashed out in an hour or so. You may be able to imagine their personalities and life etc but you need to put that on paper for anyone to feel as enthused about your story as you seem to be.
      4. You don’t seem to have a wide vocabulary as you use words I assume you think seem “smarter” in places they don’t really fit or aren’t really needed.
      5. Certain words (“Eager”, “Grin” etc) you repeatedly use. Worst of all you put them all within sentences of each other which I found made it difficult to read as I stuttered over this.

      Besides these points.
      Good first try, maybe go back and re-write it, y’know proof read it before you submit. Not the worst pasta I have read on here but in no way do you slightly deserve your 7.4 rating… unless you are 12, in which case, GOLD STAR kid!

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  • Jerome

    Dis won didnent evn hit da spot mane it woz two fony bombaclot

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    Rating: -9 (from 9 votes)
  • Miss Misanthrope

    I thought this was brilliant, actually. I did see some spelling errors, along with some punctuation errors, but nothing too bad. I liked the obsessiveness of the guy in the story; it really adds a creep factor. Good job!

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    Rating: +5 (from 7 votes)
  • Gothic Doll

    I really loved this story (‘:
    I’m sorry of the girl that didn’t told him that she loved him

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    Rating: +2 (from 6 votes)
  • lemons

    *shudders* good thing no one likes me..

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    Rating: +5 (from 5 votes)
  • Kitten

    sounds like my ex :P

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  • LHSS

    “He asks with a grin, as blood trickles from his deathly grin”

    -_-

    I’m sorry, but this was just bad. Poor grammar, spelling and sentence structure pulled me straight out of the story. Plus, there were far too many questions left unanswered.

    Who are these people? How was he able to stand and move despite his clearly horrific injuries? Why didn’t she flip the heck out when she hit someone? Why did she think he was dead when he was clearly moving (twitching body)? How did this boy survive when he was hit by a car AND THEN in a horrific crash that should have killed everyone in the car?

    I’m going to stop there for now. You have potential, and an interesting, albeit not to original, idea. Maybe if this was more fleshed out… It would deserve the 7/10.

    For now, I gave it a 3/10. You tried.

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  • Insanity

    I actually think this is cute ._.

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  • beff

    this was really good:)

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  • Mr. Crow

    Moral of the story:
    Girls can’t say ‘I love you’ honestly to save their life.

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  • Demon_dancer

    Okay then…….. I hope no one does that to me. Or I hope I don’t do that to my crush

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  • Demon_dancer

    Okay then…….. I hope no one does that to me. Or I hope I don’t do that to my crush. Heh heh, maybe

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  • http://creepypasta MRS.CANDLEJACK

    I liked thos story and actually found it quite interesting.
    BUT..why would he just jump in fron of her car? I understand that he was probably a phycopath with serious issues, but really? If I were the girl I would have just told him I loved him and totally ditched him at the hospital, unless he was actually a decent guy.
    All I got from this story was that the guy was a phycopathic stalker who fell under obsession or “love” with some girl that clearly doesnt know how to brake on a car, and beat the living crap out of a badly damaged teenge boy.

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  • http://creepypasta MRS.CANDLEJACK

    Sorry, but I really dont understand how hard it is to push on the brake pedle and punch the guy in the face. Sure she was prob surprised or shocked, but if it were me I would have gone into complete beast mode :P

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  • Thatreallygoodlookingkid

    This was a sad story
    The boy should
    Of died and the girl should of exploded in the car crash.then it would of been a happy story

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