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Creepypasta

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Okay, I know I had an announcement here about how this gallery functions, but apparently that part of the draft got eaten before it published. Thanks, WordPress. Love you too.

Anyhow, for those of you who can’t figure it out without help – when you click an image, it takes you to that image’s page. From there, you can either click the image to enlarge or leave a comment on that specific image. It’s set up this way in case people wanted to comment page-by-page as they read the story. However, as I originally said before the site decided to randomly delete it, it can also be set up where the thumbnails go straight to the image with no individual image comment forms. Let me know which way you guys would prefer, and that’s how we’ll do it for future submissions like this.

Writing credit goes to Neil Gibson. Art credit goes to Caspar Wijngaard. This is an excerpt from Twisted Dark Volume 1 [Disclosure: Amazon affiliate code is present in this link - as always, thank you if you purchase anything using our links! -Derp]. Uploaded with permission (and enthusiasm!) from the creators.

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Credit To – Neil Gibson, Caspar Wijngaard

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  • Ghost

    If we could view them enlarged without having to press BACK or CLOSE and cycle through them in a click, that would be great.

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  • Randomguy

    So we get a creepypasta submission in comic strip form, the writing is way too small to even see, I click on an individual picture hoping it magnifies the words and the drawing, it doesn’t, I rate the pasta a 1/10

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    • http://www.creepypasta.com derpbutt

      Yes, it does. Click them, it takes you to an individual page where you can either comment on the specific page or click them again to enlarge.

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      • Randomguy

        Ok, you’re right I had to click it once more to enlarge it. Like everyone else complained about it’s so annoying have to go back then click on a new panel and repeat. It took a while to get through them, but I did. And I’m very glad I did. It honestly didn’t creep me out, but it depressed me. In a good way ( I think) It was haunting and solemn. I retract my 1/10 for a 9/10. I don’t know why I rated it before I read it anyway, I was grumpy last night lol.

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        • http://www.creepypasta.com derpbutt

          Yeah, just to clarify guys – express your opinion on the gallery layout in comments, not the rating! Leave the rating for the actual comic!

          Thanks for the feedback. I’m just really annoyed that the site ate my initial announcement (see the edit to the post), could’ve saved you some frustration while I was asleep.

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  • Anon

    I’m on an iPad, so the links were a little wonky… Had to read them in sort of a choppy manner. But I’m glad I had the patience to do so. The story was a little slow at first but the art was strangely immersive… By the time I got almost to the end, when the father and son were walking home with the dog, I knew something bad would happen within the next few images. I considered stopping there and letting the story have a happy ending… But then I realized that without whatever ending was waiting for me, there wasn’t much of a story. So I looked at the final few links and I have to say, that ending was damned unexpected. The story itself fell into place so suddenly… And it was creepy enough on its own, but with the artwork it literally sent chills down my spine. Just writing this and picturing the final two panels is making the hairs on my arms and legs stand on end.
    Beautiful, intense, sad… And definitely creepy. This story has it all, and in a truly unique format (to this website, at least). I don’t think I could recommend it highly enough. I’m sure it has its flaws, but honestly I enjoyed it so much that I can’t think of any. The story and art fit together so perfectly. I feel like both would be weakened without each other, but this was genuinely unique and that’s what makes it so great. Right now, it’s only been rated a few times, but I hope this story gets more exposure and the high ratings I believe it deserves. 10/10

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    • http://www.creepypasta.com derpbutt

      Yeah, I’m not sure which gallery presentation is most effective – I do wish it would let me just create a widget where you could enlarge and slide through the images. That would make sense. Can’t have that!

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  • Charlie Matheson Jr.

    Nice, good story with a sad/creepy ending. I like how you decided to set it out in a unique fashine. It makes a nice change although it was a little annoying to keep going back and forth if you have pationce this makes for a decent story with a unique layout. 7/10

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  • Anonymous

    Man that was good! Probably one of the best Ive read, and the uniqueness of putting it in comic form is sauce on the pasta. Well worth having to read each page separately. Nice creepy feel and epic little twist at the end.

    yum yum!

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  • :O

    This reminded me of the short story El Hijo by Quiroga- it’s in spanish, but here’s an okay translation
    http://fwufferz.livejournal.com/98574.html

    We read it in my Spanish course… that was a mind-fuck.

    Also, that dog! Awww.

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    • justanotheranon

      Yeah, I also noticed the similarities.
      The plot began to feel somehow familiar as soon as the boy went hunting and didn´t return. The father’s desperate search and the twist ending definitely have parallels with that story.
      Apparently, being written in Spanish, not many Anglophone people know about Quiroga’s work.
      There is a nice anthology of other writings by the same author, entitled “Tales of Love, Madness and Death” (I recommend, for anyone interested, “The Decapitated Chicken”, that one goes more into horror territory).
      Returning to the comic, I liked the added details in the context of this adaptation (they made it feel more like creepypasta), and the art, as well as the atmosphere, were nicely done. However, I admit I would have felt more comfortable if the comic included at least a mention of Quiroga’s story. A little “inspired by” note under the title, or at the end, would have been adequate.

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  • http://deliriletterari.blogspot.com CMT

    Although I do like the story, I don’t like the comic format. It’s mostly exposition with background pictures, that don’t really add much to the story itself. It would probably work as well, if not better, as a normal text story.

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  • Mark

    Yea this is an adaptation of another story, I really like the comic set up but wouldve been better if it were stated straight in the beginning where this story was adapted from.

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  • So sad

    This was sad. The comic format is really annoying because I have to constantly click to he image, click it again, and finally click it once more.

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  • Coyote

    Unique, well written AND well drawn. Probably one of the best I’ve ever seen here. AMAZING job.

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  • Kiki

    I misread that as poutine. That is all.

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  • Strae

    Then who was shotgun?

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  • itsKitty

    Chilling! I’m scared to get out of bed now haha.

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  • Rassilon

    While reading it, I almost forgot The website I was on. Then The ending sharply reminded me to wake The hell up and remember this is a pasta. But still a brilliant one. I say make more like this.

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  • Anonymous Dick

    *mumblemumble* Can’t have nice things… like a good gallery layout…

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