Roulette
During your day, there are probably a half a dozen moments where you can’t see, if only for a split second. Not like blinking, of course, that’s far too quick . Just that moment when you’re taking off your shirt, or wiping your face with a towel. That brief instant where you’re plunged into darkness. Every time this occurs, you’re playing roulette. A game. Unbeknownst to you, of course. Every time that happens there is something waiting, eagerly, to pull you into that darkness. That only happens if you lose, of course. One day you might open your eyes to find that you’re not where you were before. There are unsolved missing person cases every week. Those people? They lost.
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Credited to JHubbbb.
….I just lost too
Pretty lame
Short and sweet.
Ehhh.
Decent story idea, far too short and vague to be satisfying.
Well, if the game’s official, then the chances of winning are very high indeed.
THE GAME.
You just lost it.
hey, if you’re reading this: THE GAME
you lost it
THEY LOST THE GAME!
Short and lawlzy. Honestly, who was supposed to have written this? The “something” – trying to scare us?
Lawlz.
It could be better, but at least it’s a short one. I miss those.
This is actually one of my biggest fears, that something will be waiting for me after I lift the shirt off my head, or finish drying my hair. This pasta, however, does not do it justice. It could have had more oomph.
First Candlejack and no
Meh… Interestingly, though, there *is* some truth to this. You’re blind for a good part of the day due to your brain basically “shutting down” your eyes whenever you shift your gaze somewhere else.
Uh. Wha— Oh… It looks like somebody stole my name
Eh. A little too short. But, i guess it was pretty good. I give that an, 7/10.
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I lost too, when i read this story. haha j/k
I like reverting back to shorter stories, but gotta put more effort into it!
You know what this story did? It sucked the long dick of the establishment. It was fucking stupid
I lost the game.
Damnit lost the game, too.
Stupid Pasta
BUT WHO WAS LOST PEOPLE?
LOL THEY LOST THE GAME!!!
Simple, but good.
Mr. Smith, we meet again.
HURRY UP AND SPIN ME!
I like it. Ilike the sort ones alot. I never really thought of it that way, but somethimes I get freaked out when im trying to get a shirt on, but I can’t. I don’t know why…
That last line reminded me too much of that other missing person pasta.
Delicious.
Would’ve been better if it WAS the blinking
I’m not going to say this was a favorite of mine, but damn it is nice to see a return (however brief) to the old, short-and-sweet pastas of old. My hat’s off to you, author.
It’s me, I am The Game.
This is like listening to someone tell try to tell you something they experienced, but they leave out the important shit, and leave you wondering what the fuck they’re talking about. With a little more effort, it could have been great.
awesome
awesome
Sorry guys, I didn’t mean for anyone to lose :/ I was always scared of those little moments, so I decided to write a pasta. It’s my first and it needs editing, but thanks for the feedback
BUT WHO WAS GAME?
(shamefully breaking a long-running self-pact not to do that)
Cliche pasta is cliche
Short and sweet. Verry delicious. Although about three seconds after I finished I could only think, “I LOST THE GAME!”
Damn,
I LOST THE GAME
crap, i lost the game like 300 times while reading the comments. this is a neat idea and quite creepy, if a little too short.
It was pretty good. Short and to the point. +Imagine how many people just lose the game as Lunar said.
“Missing” ripoff, which I liked better.
I do it for the lulz
It’s a decent idea, if not a little cliché. I’m just not a huge fan of the way you wrote it. It was very … blocky. You had a bunch of unnecessarily short sentences that smashed right into the flow of the story and made it, in the end, unenjoyable.
6/10. It had potential.
eerie but not creepy.
Interesting, I used to have fears about that when I was young. Whenever I was alone in my room, changing, my heart rate would always increase a bit whenever I took off my shirt; I was afraid something would suddenly be standing where I couldn’t see for that split second.
Well, I liked it, I believe you could have made it just a little bit longer adding detail…or maybe a ‘incident’ to go along….but I read the story at three in the morning and had a nightmare at 730am. Thanks.
It was alright but it needed a bit of polish if you get me
I THOUGHT YOU SAID THEY WERE UNSOLVED.
….Shit.
I lost the game.
Lame.
Pretty kewll..
I like the story that say shit about the unsolved missing persons cases cause its truuu D;
Interesting idea that if I’m wiping my face with a towel, and when I put that towel down, I might be pulled into a creepy place and never be able to return to this “world”.
However, “Roulette” is so lame right now for me probably because of Rihanna slaughtering it with her music video. =/
The reason I can’t see right now is because I clawed my eyes out when I read that.
This pasta was bland and undesirable. There was nothing scary about that than the idea a real person thought it was good. Honestly…
Shoulda mentioned those brief moment we’re blind when we move our eyes back and fourth that adds up to about fourty minutes of total darkness a day with our eyes completely open. You should do a little reasearch on Saccadic Masking and maybe incorporate it if you ever revise this, I think that’d be interesting to play with.
I’m just gonna make this more interesting in my mind and say that blinking counts. If that were the case, then…
I’M SCEERED TO LEAVE MA HOUSE NAO
that was fun i wanna lose sounds like a cool place
So is it Candlejack who makes you lose th
Shat a brick or two. The concept was pretty cool, but it’s not vague enough to strike fear.
Well I go to sleep every single night…I’m a winner!
YOU JUST LOST THE GAME > : D
Bland pasta is bland.
I liked this one a lot.
Short, sweet, and to the point.
Also, interesting idea.
more about the roulette? it doesn’t really seem like it plays much of a part in the story. it could be changed into anything else and pretty much turn it into one of many stories already posted here. you should seriously consider expanding.
Gay pasta is gay.
Not creepy but interesting.
It’s obviously not Candlejack. He doesn’t care if you can’t see. He just takes you whenever he wants, like this:
the only creepy aspect is that i’ve always been paranoid about those moments spoken of, for the most part it just made me laugh.
Title made me think of Lady Gaga, which despite its relative decency negated all hope it had of being creepy.
Short and to the point but not quite enough to be “creepy”
6/10
and………
THE GAME
It would be good if it wasn’t stupid. But it is.
so theres a demon in my towel and shirt?!?!?! *gasp!
Maybe the missing people are just glitches in the matrix.
i HATE changing my shirt and drying my hair because i feel like that would happen.
First Candle Jack now this shit damnit this noodle is a little good but tends to be alittle overused.
MAN i hate that phrase… ‘half a dozen’. WHY DONT RETARDS LEARN THE NUMBER SIX.
I’m more afraid of monsters warping while I am blinded and attacking me
…Damnit, I’m afraid of the dark, mannequins, doors, and have a mild fear of escalators. How the fuck did I get so messed up?
Fantastic Pasta.
It was the Weeping Angels(from Doctor Who).
Sorry, that was the first thing that popped into my head.
You cheap fucker.
I outta forfeit the game.