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Razor Mouth



Estimated reading time — 4 minutes

Have you ever had the feeling that you were being watched from the darkness? Do you live out in the middle of nowhere, where even if everything was normal, everything would still be creepy as hell? Well, both of those go for me, and when I looked out my window one night, I regretted ever moving to this god forsaken brick shack on top of this wooded hill… All around my house, the trees are so thick that if you were to go out during the night, you would most likely be lost until sunrise. Or even worse, you would find one of the many bogs around my home, and you would get sucked to the bottom, never to be heard from again. After seeing this “thing” that I couldn’t ever formulate a name for (at the time), I realized what most likely laid underneath all of muck and leaves.

Things like this shouldn’t ever be put into this world… I’m a kid that likes fantasy, and would trade most of my real life for a good game of pokemon or yugioh any day. But this bit of fantasy? It made me want to end it all, and just get away forever.

One night, laying in bed, I happened to roll over to where I was facing the window.  Eyes still closed, I began to hear a scratching noise at my window. As I opened my eyes, I saw something that I could never erase from my memory. A face that was as white as snow, but it held no real features, except for a line where its mouth should be, a hollowed out spot where its nose should be, and 2 lines where its eyes should be. Those lines that it held as its eyes ripped open like lightning, revealing to me two blank white orbs. I ran from my room as soon as my feet hit the floor. I slept in the bathtub.

The next day, I told my mom that I wanted curtains. She took a few days to fulfill my request, so the bathtub became my bed. It always sucked whenever the tub was still wet from an early morning shower. I soon learned to wipe up the water before laying down. Once mom finally put my midnight black curtains up, I went back to sleep in my room.

MISTAKE.

I slept for one night in there, but when I heard a child’s laughter, I ran like hell. Nothing could make me go back to that room for at least a week. Finally, I worked up the courage to go back to my room after about 8 or 9 days. I slept with my back facing the window. About 3 weeks after re-entering my room since I had gotten over the creepy laughter incident, I heard a crash in my room in the middle of the night. I made the mistake of looking over towards the window where the crash came from.

The curtains had blown open thanks to an AC vent, and knocked an action figure off of a shelf. How the curtains had that much strength was beyond me, but I wasn’t concerned with the curtains as much as I was concerned with the thing behind the curtain.
That wretched face looked at me, as if staring straight into my soul with its blank eyes. I ran from my room once again, and when I got into the bathtub and closed the shower curtain, I heard a shriek, as if the laughing child from before was being stabbed. I slept in the bathtub all the way up until my 17th birthday party. The night after my party, I went to my room, and promptly clothes-pinned my curtains shut. Nothing was getting to me that night. Or so I thought…

Around 2:00 A.M. I awoke with a fright. My stereo started to blare at its maximum volume, and the thing that played on the stereo scared the life out of me.

At the end of a “My Chemical Romance” song off of their album “Three Cheers for Sweet Revenge” their is the sound of a girl’s laughter. That was all that played. Over. And Over. And Over. I took the CD out of the stereo, broke it clean in half, and began to look for my lighter so that I could burn the pieces… That’s when I noticed it.

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The curtains.

Clothes-pins everywhere.

And the AC had just kicked on.

I did a sort of “crabwalk” to get back onto my bed, and at that time the curtains blew open so hard that the curtain rod fell.

On the other side of the window, he sat there. Looking into my eyes. I had finally had enough.

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I ran up to the window and hit it with all that I had in me. It splintered the bottom portion of the split window, and when that happened, the creature raised its head to the top half of the window.

Its mouth opened. The teeth…. they were like razor blades.. except they were so jagged, as if they had been run across asphalt.. Its eyes rolled forward, and the piercing red irises of those eyes were going to rape my memory for the rest of eternity.

I yelled out as loud as possible “GET OUT OF MY LIFE!”

What happened then… I never expected it…The thing… It spoke to me in the soft voice of a small feminine child..

It said “All that I wanted to do was play with you sweetie. But I guess the deer will have to do.”

As it said that, it reached a bone white skeletal hand through the splintered window, making a small hole through the spider-webbed center of the glass.
It caressed my face and closed its mouth, giving me a faint smile.

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“Goodbye brother, I’ll always be waiting” was the last thing it said before it dropped out of sight and the terror left the room.

My mom came in about 10 minutes later to find me crying on the floor, saying the same thing over and over: “Brother”

To this day, I have no idea why that thing didn’t take my life. Perhaps it loved me in some strange sadistic way. Perhaps it never meant to do harm to me, or even scare me… Maybe if I hadn’t been so afraid, I could have talked to the only thing in my life to ever call me “Brother”…

I still don’t understand two other things. One: how could it be looking into my window if I lived on the second floor of my house?… And number two: The girlfriend I have now has a little brother that is very feminine. He has the same voice as that thing. How could that be possible, seeing as I never knew him until a year after this happened?…
All of this still haunts me…

I want explanation, but there is only one way to truly understand it all. Come back and see me again, Brother Razor Mouth.

Credit To: La’Mont

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82 thoughts on “Razor Mouth”

  1. Lol this was good! I wish it were longer. But I enjoyed it it was spooky and interesting. I think these tales scare me the most because my biggest fear is looking out my window at night and seeing something. Ugh! After stories like these i hear loud bangs and stuff on my doors and windows. I don’t dare to look. Something is definitely mocking me

  2. YOU KNOW WHAT THEY DO TO GUYS LIKE US IN PRISON. Oh come on now. Really? I understand taking it out but you should NEVER break an MCR cd

  3. TheReaderDownUnder

    I REALLY liked this story. No grammatical errors as I saw, very interesting, and overall kept me reading until the end. And this story had an ending that didn’t leave me guessing like these other stupid creepypastas.

    10/10

    Keep up the good stories, I look forward to reading more.

  4. INFERENCE FROM THE GURU: Appears to be alright, from the first 3 or 4 sentences. Strong start, giving a clear view of the narrators situation. The title gives you an idea of what it will be about, predictably a creature, for easy browsing and selecting. Over all, this seems like it will build up to a great pasta. Amazing base noodles her, linguini, just the way i like! Lets top it off with a herby sauce with lots of hidden ingredients! Base compenent rate: 9/10 Bow tie Noodles

  5. Nice story. I liked Brother Razor Mouth. For some reason I could clearly see him in my minds eye. I did minus one point from you for mentioning pokemon and ugioh and another point for mentioning my chemical romance. Lol JK. I wont actually minus your story because you like shitty games and shitty bands

  6. 900% sure that it is Gerard Way laughing at the end of You Know What They Do To Guys Like Us in Prison, not a little girl.

  7. Wow, this was really good and well written. I haven’t seen anything like this before, 10/10!

  8. I had that thing come to me too it said “I’ll be waiting”

    That is all it said then it ran off with a really feminine laugh mixed with a cry

  9. I don’t think it’s a girl laughing at the end of that particular MCR song… I think that’s just Gerard giggling.

  10. Its eyes rolled forward, and the piercing red irises of those eyes were going to rape my memory for the rest of eternity.
    Epic description of eyes is epic.
     

  11. That was entertaining, but the whole, “I sleep on the second floor” thing just killed it. I know that was meant to add to the creepy factor, and I appreciate the try, I really do, but it just killed it for me. If that had been removed, and the girlfriend, little brother thing stayed in, then it would have definitely given me the heebie-jeebies.

    3/5

  12. the story began kinda creepy but the writing style made it difficult to take seriously.
    especially the “I did sort of a crab walk” …

    can’t believe this got an 8…

  13. I love the story and all, but the laughter at the end isn’t a girl, and it isn’t Gerard. It is Bert McCracken, the lead singer from The Used. But yeah, 9/10, fantastic.

  14. I really liked the story! I’ve never commented on anything on this site before, because nothing really stood out. This, however, has enormous potential, and a sequel would be awesome. The fact that the monster didn’t hurt anyone made the story really different than most pastas out there. It shows that not all scary creatures want to murder you on sight. The naming of the geek culture stuff sort of makes people take the story less seriously, and the hurried ending disappointed me a little. I hope you write a sequel so we can learn more about the monster. 9/10, and keep writing, you’re good at it. ^^

  15. I LOVED the ending! =) Great job with that! But while earlier introducing “Brother Razor Mouth” you said he only had slits where his eyes would be, you later then said it had “piercing red irises,” Also, what does it mean it wants to play? How will it play with deer? That was the only foggy thing. I absolutely loved everything else. 10/10.

  16. I loved this pasta. One of my favorites, I don’t know what iit is about it but it’s really fuckin creepy. I LOVE My chemical romance so I was thrilled when you mentioned it, and I found it funny that the laugh at the end of ” you know what they do to guys like us in prison” was compared to a girl when it’s really Gerard xD. I’m rambling anyway epic story 10/10!

  17. I never comment or rate creepypasta because none of it ever scares me. This, nuh-uh, didn’t scare me… But it sure as hell creeped me out!

    I think it was the description of the “monster” that caught me, that and it’s sudden movement of peeling back it’s eye skin to reveal those two orbs… Like I said. Creepy.

  18. i like mcr but the exessive nerd culture referencing and overall style of writing irked me. a glance at other comments likened this author to stephen king — i suggest op doesnt let that get to their head because the king’s voice in his writing and aptitude in storytelling far excells this little spoonful of pasta. im not saying this is BAD bad but there is a lot of room for improvement and a few noticeable grammatical errors that make me cringe. dont quit and youll get better, theres some potential in this for sure but you need to learn how to turn the potential into something good.

  19. all i could think when i finished reading this pasta is dear god i hope that nothing like that comes near busy roads!
    good pasta yummy yummy 6 and a half out of 10

  20. Isn’t the laugh from “You Know What They Do To Guys Like Us In Prison?” I love MCR, and I really liked this story, but the laugh at the end of the song isn’t a girl, it’s Gerard.

  21. Dude, you are a fucking genious. All the things that people are saying is exactly what people used to say to Stephen King. You are just as good as him my friend. I live EXACTLY where the protagonist said, and I am very much like the protagonist, I loooooovvveeee Pokemon! My bed is also next to my window! Thats why this was so good, it made me feel like this was happening to me! I especially loves the part when it call the protagonist “brother” then linking it to the protagonist’s girlfriend’s brother and how he has the same voice as the creature. Well done bro. 10/10. All of my yes! And maybe my virginity as well… But if possible I would say 4,830,000/10! Good fucking job!

  22. I enjoyed it. A lot of people are saying the ending’s not scary, but I thought it made it even more creepy, I mean, why did it call him “brother?” The protagonist now may be questioning his own humanity.

  23. Excellent, 9/10. The part where you said you lived on the second floor gave me kind of a jump scare, very well done.

  24. New Techno Leader

    i loved this … and i love my chemical romance, one of my fave pastas, though i was a bit botherd to hear of the mutilation of an MCR cd!!

  25. “its eyes ripped open like lightning” that line, gave me a visual that scares me the more i think about it.

    I can’t get it out of my head.

  26. “Goodbye brother.”
    “it sounded like my girlfriends little brother.”
    YOU’RE DATING YOUR SISTER.

    good pasta, not the ending I was expecting. Could have been better though.

  27. @legionnaire: after I saw “the crawler” I sang Night Crawler by Judas Priest to myself over and over. Both fit here

  28. Awesome story! I especially love how unexpected the ending was that he actually wanted the thing to return.

  29. thanks to this pasta & its comments i discovered crab core. not sure if thats good or bad but personally i loved the pasta. it wasn’t as uncreative as people seem to think however the ending was definitely a bit rushed or forced. to explain some people asking why he let it “stroke his face” he was obviously in shock. i mean he just freaked out and smashed the window standing between him and the creature he thought would kill him.

  30. Good to see that some people are enjoying it, though I respect the opinions of those who aren’t. I understand that the ending was a little rushed, and the whole “brother” thing at the end was a little cheesy.
    As for the sofa thing, I based the layout of this house in the story off of the layout of my own home. I do live in the middle of the woods, and my room is on the second floor, annnndddd the only sofa is in the living room, which has 3 windows and a sliding glass door. O.e

    One night I thought I saw something in my window, and I freaked out, so I slept in the bathtub. I bought some curtains the next day. I soon told my friends about it, but they all told me I was just imagining things.
    A couple nights later I told myself that they were right, and decided to open the curtains to prove to myself that nothing was there. Evidently, two nights before, one of my close friends that only lives half a mile away from me had used my dad’s ladder, climbed up it to my window, and taped a Halloween mask of Michael Myers to the window..
    So, when I opened the curtains, I freaked out, punched the window, and in the process, did a fair amount of damage to my hand as well as the window… It was rather embarrassing, and my friends laughed at me for close to a year.

    I do not plan to write a sequel to this story unless it gets a lot of activity, but I plan to write a lot of other stories and post them as I see fit. So, keep posted if you want to read my future stories!

    Thanks,
    -La’Mont

  31. If there had been more explanations it would have been more enjoyable. It didn’t really creep me out, though.

  32. I began reading, wondering idly if it was worth the read… it was. I enjoyed it, it was creepy and is original, in a way. Very nice pasta.

  33. Good read but he chose to sleep in a bathtub every night? What, his family didnt own any couches? I think i would have chosen the floor over a bathtub lol.

  34. Thank god you burned that terrible cd my chemical romance is almost as bad as black veil brides. but on a more appropriate note i really liked this pasta (besides the reference for my chemical romance) It was original and i like the ending it makes it creepy. 8/10

  35. This creeped me out so much in the beginning that I felt a constant shiver through my body, then imagining that creepy laughter and little girls voice talking just scared the daylights out of me… but this is a great story, I love the end even though it’s king of sad. I feel it brings a little more meaning to the type of beings so many stories are written about. Anyway, brilliant! 10/10 :)

  36. I just found it cheesy /: “ooh I live on the second floor, how did it look in the window? Scaarryy”
    No -_-
    “Come back and see me again, Brother Razor Mouth”?
    Really?
    Come on.. -_-

  37. i liked this pasta. the antagonist was a little too humanoid, and the conflict a little old, and the ending was not as scary as i thought it would be, but it was still a good pasta. i honestly got the chills as i read it (and moved a little further away from my window…) 7/10

  38. Honestly, it wasn’t creepy because you humanized the monster too much. The fact that the protagonist would let the thing sit within a foot of him, and allow it to caress his face is a tad over the top.

    The possibility of this happening is what makes a story all the more creepy.

    Though it wasn’t half bad, and worth a read.

  39. The way you described the creature…reminded me of ‘The Crawler’ from Fable 3 for some reason…
    on another note, loved it to pieces.

  40. Why did the character sleep in the bathtub? His parents didn’t care? They didn’t have something like a sofa in the living room at least? Doesn’t really make sense.
    As for the story itself – it was pretty good, but the ending really disappointed me – kinda blurry and abrupt. I expected something like a dead deer in the backyard next morning at least. Plus, I don’t know how about other people, but if I saw shit like that peeking in through my window, I’d be long gone from the house, cuz no curtains can protect you – if you can’t see it, it doesn’t mean that it’s not there…

  41. I ask that you take this as constructive critisism. It really wasn’t that good, especially the end. The end was really rushed and kind of forced, like you didn’t know how to really end it but you wanted to give us a creepy unknown/all the pieces feel but it failed to deliver. I think your headed in the right direction though, try making something more creative next time though. 4/10.

  42. Mentioning things like Pokemon, action figures, and (sigh) My Chemical Romance made this not so scary. I had to stop towards the beginning. This was also a very generic story, “Oh nooooo something’s scaring me at night!” Try to use something more concrete and original next time

  43. That was pretty chilling my friend!
    I live in an old survey, theres only about 5 people all together that live here, And me and the fellow kids here always have eerie feelings living in a such a secluded location.
    But all together a fantastic read!

  44. Meh, I’m fine. I seriously doubt it could be any more sinister than what I listen to. But at least thanks for clarifying the theme of the album. I guess it is a bit fitting, then.

  45. I’m a big My Chemical Romance fan. <3 The song that kept playing the girls' laughter was "You Know They Do To Guys Like Us In Prison" if you want to look it up. Most of their songs off of Three Cheers For Sweet Revenge are sinister…

  46. It was pretty good, I think. But after the whole “My Chemical Romance,” thing, I found it a little harder to take seriously. 9/10.

        1. batmaneatyourheartout

          eh i don’t hate them but its funny how he imply s how goddamn loud that music is XD

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