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Puzzled



Estimated reading time — < 1 minute

I love jigsaw puzzles. So when I found one on my phone that allowed me to make any size puzzle I want with a snap of a picture I was hooked. I started by taking pictures of random shots in my room, clicked “cut” then “mix” and poof, I was off wasting time. After about 30 minutes of putting my “room” back together I decided to take a picture of myself to cut up and puzzle.

I decided to cut the picture for the puzzle at an expert difficulty. It was pretty awesome seeing my face split into hundreds of different puzzle pieces, each one flaking off one by one like an ember to the floor of the screen. After an hour of reconstructing my face I notice something in the background of the puzzle that resembled an unfamiliar black leather jacket hanging at the top of my closet door. Two more pieces revealed what looked to be a medium length, auburn colored wig while another piece showed eyes apparently painted on the back of eyelids. The final piece of the puzzle showed a face missing its mandible. I’ll admit. I was a bit unhinged at the sight of it…a bit puzzled even.

Coincidentally, my mandible would wind up being the last piece of his puzzle too.

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71 thoughts on “Puzzled”

  1. Wait… So this creepy guy with no mandible waited for this guy to finish his puzzle before killing him? Was he just standing behind him the whole time like “nope, that piece doesn’t go there”

  2. Anoymous:
    you’re really not that intelligent. am i the only person who didn’t get confused reading this story? you’re all idiots.

    If you are so sure u get what the pasta is about why didnt u share it!!!!
    In future if u make a comment like this dont hesitatae to tell the world what ur ‘ingenious’ mind is thinking!!!

  3. The use of the word mandible doesn’t fit any of the other word choices. It sounds like you’re referring to a literal mandible, and that the narrator is a spider. One of the worst mistakes a writer can make is that of confusing GOOD word choice with BIG word choice. Using mandible in place of Jaw was stupid.

  4. Great story, but the ending was a little confusing. I didnt really get it at first. Heres how I read it.

    (Reads the ending)
    Wait, what just happened?

    (Re-reads)
    Still don’t get it.

    (Reads again)
    Nope.

    (Reads 1 more time)
    Oh, now I understand! The weird guy in the background stole his jaw!

  5. Am I right in assuming the person with the phone isn’t the monster? The only thing that puzzled me was why they didn’t stop solving the puzzle when they realized something was wrong with the picture’s subject matter. I mean, if I was that protag I would have gotten the hell out of there before finishing the puzzle.

    Also, if the puzzle had hundreds of pieces and the monster was within 10 feet or so I doubt only a couple of pieces could have made pivotal differences as the narrator is solving the puzzle. Like, one piece suddenly revealing the eye lids? Eh…

    But all that aside I thought it was ok.

  6. I’d definitely use “jaw” instead of “mandible”, since “mandible” brings to mind an animal or monster before it does a human. Reads like the narrator is a monster his/herself in the last sentence, and that reads like the twist.

  7. I guess what confused me is why is the jawless monster hanging from her door? And if it’s taking people’s parts, why are the eyes painted on the eyelids?

  8. I probably sound quite stupid, but what’s a mandible?..My English kinda got worse since I live in different country…

  9. I think I understand this a bit but at the same time I think it needs a lot more detail as to what actually happened. This point in the story I just assume there is something wrong with the app and it has a demon that steals body parts lurking in its code.

  10. Actually pretty good, although I think that the last line takes a little bit too much deciphering to really work as a twist ending.

    I think we can all just agree that “I became a little unhinged…puzzled even,” is the punniest line on this site.

  11. I get the gist of the story. Someone does puzzles and notices someone behind them who takes their jaw. However, there were some problems I had with execution.

    What I Liked:
    I liked the idea behind the story. The idea (not the execution) is great and creepy. Imagining it happening to me, in my own way, really seems like something that would scare the crap out of me. Also, someone taking my jaw…

    What Could Be Improved:
    1. The voice was no consistent. The vocabulary did not match. The character I had in my head, supported by the use of language, tone, and vernacular, was not the sort of person who would use mandible.

    2. The ending was far too short.

    3. Audience is key when writing. The audience on this website is mostly, as has been mentioned before, middle school and high school. It would have been a better choice of words to use “jaw” and then describe the character a bit more.

    1. Honest to goodness, it didn’t even occur to me that there were people that did not know what a mandible was :(

      Greatly appreciate the time and thought you put into the feedback.

      1. I understand that character build up is hard, but I would have liked a little bit more from this. Perhaps it would be better to expand it just a little, add a hundred more words, to make the story really shine. I hate to see an interesting piece get gyped out of being truly great because of word limits.

        I knew what mandible meant, but when I read it to my cousins (15, 11, and 14) they had to ask me what it meant. It was also a little unclear who was behind him, because the description of both the monster and the man were not clear.

  12. TO THOSE WHO DONT GET IT. in the puzzle was a person in the background. that person was made up of other peoples body parts. it was only missing a jaw so it was going to take her. thats why she said she was the missing piece to his puzzle too. at least thats what i thought

  13. I liked this. It was short and to the point. I think some of it was a bit hard to follow, but that could also be because I initially read it right after waking up this morning. It has a humorous, light tone to it which contrasts with the somewhat sinister ending, and I like that. Even in such a short piece, you had some really great phrases and descriptions without going overboard. I enjoyed it overall. Thanks for writing such a fun micropasta! 8/10

    1. THEN WHO WAS.......nevermind...

      That would be a human a jaw..or something like it. No Derp didn’t look at the link…lol

  14. Was “the back of eyelids” part meant to just be eyelids? If something was on the back of someone’s eyelids, only they’d be able to see it (when they closed their eyes).

      1. Fuck! Jesus christ that picture is horrifying, especially after reading this, I can’t turn around and that picture just sealed the deal xD

      1. Well I was confused as hell at first and it felt a bit like it was cut off from this creepy build up to this sudden ending. I like short pastas but maybe one paragraph more would be nice.

        But thats just my opinion mate, Im no pro writer and I could be totally wrong.

  15. A little on the short side, but that lends a lot to the creep factor. It’s unnerving how quickly the main character meets their end. Well done. Well done indeed!

      1. My problem was the ending. The start was interesting and nice. But the use of mandibles and the short, almost blunt ending did not make much sense to me. It was not one of those moments like I got with Sucker Punch where it was so rich it took a while to figure out what I thought of it. I think it should have been a bit longer and using less scientific language.

        I say “less scientific language” because the piece is not written in a voice that says “this is a man/woman who is smart and educated.” It seemed rather casual, like the voice could belong to someone who was 15 to 20 and the language did not fit (to me) with that personality.

        1. Mandible isn’t that scientific. I’m. 14 and I know what it is. Have you ever gone to school? And you shouldn’t give feedback to a story you didn’t understand. I myself thought it was a good story. If you get it, you would find a big plot twist, so this was a great story in my opinion :)

    1. Dude, I think the narrator’s the one with the mandibles- the story’s told from the perspective of some monster, who is affable, has a smart phone, and enjoys jigsaw puzzles- it took a reread for me to realize that, but… It’s now clear to me.

      1. Awkward Thursdays

        No… The monster is collecting body parts from random people to create “his puzzle” or body… He only is lacking a mandible at the time of this incident, so the mandible from the narrator is the “last of his puzzle.”

    2. I am an intelligent person myself, but at first I had absolutely no idea what the story was about. In the end though, when I found out what happened I thought it was an astonishing story with a twisted(how I love twisted things) plot. Well done!

      1. you’re really not that intelligent. am i the only person who didn’t get confused reading this story? you’re all idiots.

  16. My take on a haunted game pasta. The first line below describes the LITERAL events that transpired for the narrator. What would “unhinged” and “puzzled” look like if it were a physical thing?

    “I’ll admit. I was a bit unhinged at the sight of it…a bit puzzled even.

    Coincidentally, my mandible would wind up being the last piece of his puzzle too.”

  17. he finds out that there’s someone with him and coincidentally his mandible just happens to match the other person’s mandible…nice story OP.

  18. THEN WHO WAS.......nevermind...

    Huh?? Wait…hold up…wtf just happened…WHAT JUST HAPPENED????! I didn’t get this at all and i pray there’s someone else just as slow as me when it comes to this story…

    1. lol she loves puzzles the creepy bloke behind him/her was made up of different pieces of ppl like a puzzle its jaw was missing the bloke jaw gets ripped off so creepy is put back together again

      1. That was no clearer than the story, so, please, if your gonna post something to answer someone else’s question, make sure you answer it in a clear and concise way.

        -Herobrine

        Always watching…

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