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Creepypasta

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I love jigsaw puzzles. So when I found one on my phone that allowed me to make any size puzzle I want with a snap of a picture I was hooked. I started by taking pictures of random shots in my room, clicked “cut” then “mix” and poof, I was off wasting time. After about 30 minutes of putting my “room” back together I decided to take a picture of myself to cut up and puzzle.

I decided to cut the picture for the puzzle at an expert difficulty. It was pretty awesome seeing my face split into hundreds of different puzzle pieces, each one flaking off one by one like an ember to the floor of the screen. After an hour of reconstructing my face I notice something in the background of the puzzle that resembled an unfamiliar black leather jacket hanging at the top of my closet door. Two more pieces revealed what looked to be a medium length, auburn colored wig while another piece showed eyes apparently painted on the back of eyelids. The final piece of the puzzle showed a face missing its mandible. I’ll admit. I was a bit unhinged at the sight of it…a bit puzzled even.

Coincidentally, my mandible would wind up being the last piece of his puzzle too.

Credit To – StupidDialUp

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  • Durrr

    Huh.. What?

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  • THEN WHO WAS…….nevermind…

    Huh?? Wait…hold up…wtf just happened…WHAT JUST HAPPENED????! I didn’t get this at all and i pray there’s someone else just as slow as me when it comes to this story…

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    • Munchkiens

      lol she loves puzzles the creepy bloke behind him/her was made up of different pieces of ppl like a puzzle its jaw was missing the bloke jaw gets ripped off so creepy is put back together again

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      • THEN WHO WAS…….nevermind…

        Ok…thanks! I get it now! I even reread the last line again and was like “aha!”

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      • Herobrine

        That was no clearer than the story, so, please, if your gonna post something to answer someone else’s question, make sure you answer it in a clear and concise way.

        -Herobrine

        Always watching…

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      • ttam2

        what?

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    • She-Who-Must-Not-Be-Named

      haha yea…that would be me.

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  • Night

    he finds out that there’s someone with him and coincidentally his mandible just happens to match the other person’s mandible…nice story OP.

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  • Caleb

    Does anybody want to explain the ending to me?

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  • http://www.facebook.com/stupiddialup StupidDialUp

    My take on a haunted game pasta. The first line below describes the LITERAL events that transpired for the narrator. What would “unhinged” and “puzzled” look like if it were a physical thing?

    “I’ll admit. I was a bit unhinged at the sight of it…a bit puzzled even.

    Coincidentally, my mandible would wind up being the last piece of his puzzle too.”

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  • Mary Jane

    I liked it. I find it funny how it took the time to finish the puzzle to notice someone else in the room

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    • Anonymous

      Dude, I think the narrator’s the one with the mandibles- the story’s told from the perspective of some monster, who is affable, has a smart phone, and enjoys jigsaw puzzles- it took a reread for me to realize that, but… It’s now clear to me.

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      • Awkward Thursdays

        No… The monster is collecting body parts from random people to create “his puzzle” or body… He only is lacking a mandible at the time of this incident, so the mandible from the narrator is the “last of his puzzle.”

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    • Anonymous

      I am an intelligent person myself, but at first I had absolutely no idea what the story was about. In the end though, when I found out what happened I thought it was an astonishing story with a twisted(how I love twisted things) plot. Well done!

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      • Anonymous

        you’re really not that intelligent. am i the only person who didn’t get confused reading this story? you’re all idiots.

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  • J

    Cool story, not set up very well, though. I would still be interested in more pastas from this writer.

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    • http://www.facebook.com/stupiddialup StupidDialUp

      What was it about the set up that didnt work for you? Feedback is always appreciated.

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      • http://deejaeharper.tumblr.com Deejae Harper

        My problem was the ending. The start was interesting and nice. But the use of mandibles and the short, almost blunt ending did not make much sense to me. It was not one of those moments like I got with Sucker Punch where it was so rich it took a while to figure out what I thought of it. I think it should have been a bit longer and using less scientific language.

        I say “less scientific language” because the piece is not written in a voice that says “this is a man/woman who is smart and educated.” It seemed rather casual, like the voice could belong to someone who was 15 to 20 and the language did not fit (to me) with that personality.

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        • Hai

          Mandible isn’t that scientific. I’m. 14 and I know what it is. Have you ever gone to school? And you shouldn’t give feedback to a story you didn’t understand. I myself thought it was a good story. If you get it, you would find a big plot twist, so this was a great story in my opinion :)

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  • http://theponderersbox.weebly.com J. Brown

    A little on the short side, but that lends a lot to the creep factor. It’s unnerving how quickly the main character meets their end. Well done. Well done indeed!

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  • Matteo

    Amazingly creepy idea, terrible delivery. Couldve worked better on this mate.

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    • http://www.facebook.com/stupiddialup StupidDialUp

      What was it about the delivery that was terrible for you? Feedback is always appreciated.

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      • Matteo

        Well I was confused as hell at first and it felt a bit like it was cut off from this creepy build up to this sudden ending. I like short pastas but maybe one paragraph more would be nice.

        But thats just my opinion mate, Im no pro writer and I could be totally wrong.

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  • inxtcy

    Loved it. Great play on words and just the right “ick” factor.

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  • http://creepypasta tytiger10

    Goodjob. It is nice that one of your stories made it on the site.

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    • http://www.facebook.com/stupiddialup StupidDialUp

      2nd story by friend, 2nd! Woot Woot!

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  • Shadenfreude

    This was a pretty tasty snack. Short, sweet and to the point, just how I like ‘em! :)

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  • heheeheheheh…….

    thats creepy……………………………I LOVE IT!!
    :D

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  • randomlise

    I probably would have got it if I wasn’t dumb and actually knew what a mandible was lol.

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    • Anonymous

      It’s your jaw :)

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  • Jess the Killer

    I like, I like. Took me a minute to get it though.

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  • Kumi

    Was “the back of eyelids” part meant to just be eyelids? If something was on the back of someone’s eyelids, only they’d be able to see it (when they closed their eyes).

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    • http://www.facebook.com/stupiddialup StupidDialUp

      It was meant to be painted on eyelids…there is something wickedly sinister about painted eyeballs on the back of eyes IMO. See, take a look:

      http://farm2.staticflickr.com/1388/5105293133_6d8a2c2bb0_z.jpg

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      • Anonymous

        Fuck! Jesus christ that picture is horrifying, especially after reading this, I can’t turn around and that picture just sealed the deal xD

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  • Quantumbo

    the end left me a bit puzzled

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  • lonecreeper232

    Mandible?

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  • LOLz

    Uh…what’s a mandible?

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    • http://www.creepypasta.com derpbutt

      http://lmgtfy.com/?q=mandible

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    • THEN WHO WAS…….nevermind…

      That would be a human a jaw..or something like it. No Derp didn’t look at the link…lol

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  • http://www.fictionpress.com/u/247488/ Katherine C

    I liked this. It was short and to the point. I think some of it was a bit hard to follow, but that could also be because I initially read it right after waking up this morning. It has a humorous, light tone to it which contrasts with the somewhat sinister ending, and I like that. Even in such a short piece, you had some really great phrases and descriptions without going overboard. I enjoyed it overall. Thanks for writing such a fun micropasta! 8/10

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  • She-Who-Must-Not-Be-Named

    lolwut.

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  • http://vgfdddhs.com Jack the Ripper

    I am confusd someone oh wait never wait yeh no I’m so confused :( explain some nice person

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  • Tokyoboosh

    Mandible.

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  • ?????????

    A pretty good idea but poorly written 6/10

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  • angelofdead

    TO THOSE WHO DONT GET IT. in the puzzle was a person in the background. that person was made up of other peoples body parts. it was only missing a jaw so it was going to take her. thats why she said she was the missing piece to his puzzle too. at least thats what i thought

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