Scary Paranormal Stories & Short Horror Microfiction

Creepypasta

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You’re walking down a road near to a park. It’s dark, cold and wispy. The moon is slowly emerging through the smoke like clouds, giving a appealing glow. The wind is harshly blowing towards you, the bottom of your trench-coat flapping. The worst of it all, you can’t remember why you’re walking out this time of night! You just suddenly found yourself walking out the door, and decided you must have had a good reason. And this coat seemed new as well. You don’t remember wearing a coat like this, yet it seems vaguely familiar.

Your gut is telling you that you should carry on, you came out for a reason, if not you would have left 10 minutes ago. You’re always excited about lost or forgotten coats, because you always find interesting stuff in the pockets. Money, an old letter or drawing, something lost a long time ago, the list was endless. Throughout the walk, you felt a bit of excessive weight in your side pocket, and had been saving it for later on.

When you open the zip on the pocket, a horrible smell occurred. You winced at its rotting odour. It smelled of decay, and memories. You pull a disgusted face, and shakily reached your hand in the pocket.
Eugh! Some sort of horrible, sticky gloop is in there! You can’t look down to see what it is, as it had stuck to both sides of the pocket, sticking them tight. Some of it is watery and gloopy, sticks into the grooves of your skin! You quickly pull your hand out, the substance sliding off. You’re revolted, it feels like, and old jelly or drink left to spoil. Or someone’s huge glob of chewing gum, scrammed in. That must be it, you think. You had gum and stuck it in there, not thinking.

You carry on walking, but your curiosity entices you to put your hand in again, slowly. You take a deep breath and reach in your hand. It seems relatively the same as before, but as you rummage further, you, you can feel something more solid now, more defined. You dive your hand in further, getting to the source of this object. You feel it, its round, definitely, squidgy, spongy. You can immediately tell for some reason, that this is the thing causing the horrible odour. You feel it further, a bouncy ball? Tomato? Grape? No, that’s not it…

…Suddenly, an irresistible, realising grin spreads on your face. It all makes sense now. You can remember why you’re walking out, where the coat came from. Oh how she kicked! Oh she kicked and screamed and begged! Yet you simply hushed her, and got the knife. Oh, she was a tough one alright! But you got them! After much squirming and squealing, you got her eyes! Another marvellous souvenir of your victims to put in your pocket, to see anytime. Oh what fun you had! What was it this time? Ah yes, a tongue, you’d go out, get yourself a fresh tongue…

Credit To: YOU CAN’T HANDLE THE USERNAME!

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  • YOU CAN’T HANDLE THE USERNAME!

    yaaaaayy.

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  • C

    Well that escalated quickly! It went from not creepy to confusing… I feel like it was a bit rushed, I don’t know how else to explain it.

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    • ARTJEN

      I agree totally. It seemed very rushed at the end and the rest was just like “ok…”.

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  • YOU CAN’T HANDLE THE USERNAME!

    C, he is a murderer. Hope that clears things up

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    • C

      I know he is a murderer, that’s not what I meant by confusing. He liked getting coats with things in the pockets, and then he remembers he killed somebody when he finds eyes. Just feels like a lot of missing information to me.

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      • YOU CAN’T HANDLE THE USERNAME!

        Ah yes I see, it is a bit hard to understand. He has a multiple personality, and doesn’t remember the horrible things he’s done until he wears that coat.

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        • C

          Thanks

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  • alice

    very nicely done. i wasn’t confused at all. definitely didn’t expect the ending xD only a few typos, but most of it was well done. :) please, continue to make more yummy pastas

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    • YOU CAN’T HANDLE THE USERNAME!

      Thanks that means a lot, considering how all my comments have been thumbed down like I caused cancer or something. There is another one of my pastas going up on April 1st. Look forward to it.

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  • AnOctaveAbove

    BUT WHO WAS TONGUE?

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  • Pycnic

    …. I don’t know what to say honestly ….
    BECAUSE I DON’T HAVE A TONGUE

    *DANT DANT DAAAAAAAA*

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  • Bear82

    To crappypasta with you, stat.

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    • YOU CAN’T HANDLE THE USERNAME!

      Why how bloody dare you!

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      • Poodleinacan

        People don’t seem to appreciate pastas that come close to being “psychological horror”…

        It sadeens me that 10 year old are allowed to roam the internet and be ignorant douchebags.

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        • YOU CAN’T HANDLE THE USERNAME!

          True dat.

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  • C

    Sorry people are thumbing down your comments, don’t think it’s me just because I didn’t think the story was perfect! I don’t randomly give thumbs down, I know you were just trying to clear things up.

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  • https://www.facebook.com/betonunesneto Alberto N.

    hey, that was some nice pasta. The only things that bothered me a lot were the verb tenses, especially from the 3rd paragraph towards the end. That bit just made the text extremely difficult to read, being as it didn’t flow as well as it should have. Always try to keep the verbs in the same tense as the story; if you start out in the present, don’t put verbs in the past while they are happening. Also, are you the same person that I always see here on CP comments? Because if you are, that’s so cool!!!

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    • YOU CAN’T HANDLE THE USERNAME!

      Yes, this is YOU CAN’T HANDLE THE USERNAME. Thanks.

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  • Cynnical Person

    I didn’t like it because it wasn’t only predictable but made weak attempts at making it original. I get that you were trying to make a short story but it seemed rushed and incomplete. The story felt like it was cut and re-glued all over.

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    • YOU CAN’T HANDLE THE USERNAME!

      Everyone has a different opinion. Thanks.

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  • http://www.youtube/cockneypasta cockney pasta

    nice one mate.

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  • http://..........ca

    Son of a bitch that’s creepy 0.o

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    • YOU CAN’T HANDLE THE USERNAME!

      Mu-har-har

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  • http://crappypasta.com the cake

    i didnt know you wrote shtuff! :)

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    • YOU CAN’T HANDLE THE USERNAME!

      Yes I do dear Cake!

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  • http://www.creepypasta.com Alicia

    I think it was not good but not bad. kind of boring and short but a creepy ending. it was okay i guess

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  • creepypastry

    I like the idea of the story, but the writing just killed me (zing!)

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  • unknown

    oh now i remember good times good times

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  • CakeFace

    y u no write story about mee

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    • YOU CAN’T HANDLE THE USERNAME!

      Dafuq?

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  • http://twitter.com/creepypastacom/status/339167814386601984/ @creepypastacom

    Pockets http://t.co/K5quDxxrvF #CREEPYPASTA

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  • Critisizes for pleasure

    It sounds a bit rushed and is one of the lamest pastas I’ve heard. Needs more gore and action.

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    • YOU CAN’T HANDLE THE USERNAME!

      You live up to your name.

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  • Gchchlcohxocx

    I liked it it is really creepy

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  • http://lol.com Pastanator

    This is MY opinion:
    Build up: 9/10
    Ending: 6/10
    People-being-not-douchebags-to-the-author-in-the-comment-section: 1/10
    Wich is actually pretty sad. Your story doesn’t deserve all the downvotes, negative comments and hate that it gets!
    Overall: 7/10
    Good job!

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  • OH SHI-

    Pretty good and twisted

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  • paul

    What is the pocket? Is it just a story some dips hit pulled out hiss ads or is it a myth?

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  • CodehChan

    I like this. Yeah it’s short and all but it makes it obvious that it could be a personality dosorder..it was nice… A bit strange but ehh x3

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