• Joe Shmoe

    Kinda fell flat at the end, Mild shock value + Emotionless ending = Average pasta.

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    Rating: +11 (from 15 votes)
    • Some Fat Guy

      BUT WHO WAS PHONE?

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      Rating: +4 (from 12 votes)
      • TheBomb.com

        BUT WHO WAS TWO BEST FRIENDS?

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        Rating: 0 (from 6 votes)
  • Cannibal_Lovely

    BUT WHO WAS PHOTO

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    Rating: -2 (from 34 votes)
    • Photo

      Me.

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      Rating: +25 (from 29 votes)
  • PEN15

    lol wut

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    Rating: +1 (from 11 votes)
    • jeff the killer’s younger sister

      it was me!… i wnat to play….

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      Rating: -6 (from 8 votes)
  • Anonymous

    you can tell exactly what will happen in the rest of the story as soon as you read the bit about the mom. Not very entertaining.

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    Rating: +10 (from 14 votes)
  • Anonymous

    Holy shit someone fix the grammar the syntax the tenses…everything

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    Rating: +2 (from 8 votes)
  • L

    I liked this one, sent nice shivers down my back. I don’t get how the parents transported home from the hospital.

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    Rating: +4 (from 6 votes)
  • Deaddream829

    Holy shit that was creepy

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    Rating: -4 (from 6 votes)
  • Anonymous

    …Wat

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  • BrianRossII

    The ending on this one seems like kind of a cop-out.

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    Rating: +7 (from 7 votes)
  • Annoer

    Reminds me of something and I can’t put my finger on it. Good pasta says I. :]

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    Rating: -3 (from 3 votes)
  • Catharsis

    Kind of an old one that I’ve seen floating around, but okay.
    The story could’ve been made -much- creepier if the author had put in some real effort.

    3.5/10

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    Rating: +1 (from 3 votes)
  • Anonymous

    BUT WHO WAS PHOTO?

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    Rating: -3 (from 3 votes)
  • Jack

    It started with a lot of potential, in built up very well toward the end, but the finale itself was sort of spoiled.

    I wish the animal was brought to light, or what caused the death of his siblings.

    It’s implied that it’s murder, or some psychopath, or maybe ghosts… but the animal throws things off by being unable to plot out schemes. It’s hard to be afraid of a golden retriever in the corner who was in the room with you when your family died.

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    Rating: +3 (from 3 votes)
  • http://myspace.com/stuffedanimalmurderscene_ Abbey

    Hmm well It was good till the sister went missing cause the story was going too fast..
    Besides that it was pretty good.. Cept at the end?
    Dont really understand what happened to his friends,
    They wouldnt be in any of the ‘family photos’
    So yeah :/
    Not too bad though..

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    Rating: +2 (from 2 votes)
  • Someone

    Haha, I remember reading this somewhere X3
    I don’t think this is creepy at all, mostly because it reminds me of all those silly ‘horror’-stories me and my friends used to tell each other when we were kids.
    I am still hungry >__> (nice to see a new one in ‘rituals’, though)

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  • MetalGearBidoof

    Erm…
    Would have been good, but the last line, nay, paragraph felt unnecessary. It took away from the rest of the product, if you will.

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  • http://myspace.com/darkwolf4ever Father Crow

    Another reason to be paranoid of pictures. e_o

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  • foreverandever

    Personally, I think this needs some editing before it’s front page material. It shifts from past to present in the second to bottom paragraph.

    Other than that, photographs have been done before before, but it’s not bad.

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  • Moar

    I remember reading this one on /x/ a while ago. I dont really like it that much, it seems so…unfinished-ish. o_o OOOHHH NOOOEEEES HIS FRIENDS WUZ NEVER SEEN AGAIN OH GOD OH NOOO.

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  • apple juice

    A promising start, but the ending didn’t make much sense. Could have been far creepier if the family was wiped out one by one, with the manner of death foretold by the photo, with Sean being the last to go. Then his friends find him under the photo. A big scary beast coming and killing everyone at the end was a bit of an anti-climax and doesn’t really tie in with the photo thing.

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  • Hhaaa;

    Im Oh So Very Photogenic(:

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  • TMM

    Nice, short and to the point.

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  • Hunterotica

    This pasta is like the hot chick that sucks in bed. It starts off tantilizing and then kills your creepy-boner. Disappointment.

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  • Repoman

    WTF? So anyone that goes in the house disappears? It went from a burnt face, to grisly murder and now people just disappear?

    Hmmm. I’d give it a 2.5 out of 5.

    But who was police?

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  • VDV

    Finally, a halfway competent pasta! Still could be much better though.

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    Rating: -1 (from 1 vote)
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