Photoslash
Sean’s house was covered from head to toe in family photographs. Some from family retreats to Ireland, others showing lost family relatives. Most of these photographs would include Sean in them, so it was only natural that he would look at them from time to time. However, one day he noticed something rather strange about the pictures: His mother seemed to have a red face in all of the photos. Rather shocked by this, he immediately ran downstairs to ask if anyone had done something to the pictures. They all answered no; even his mother, whom was quite worried. Later that day Sean’s mother went to the hospital due to horrific 3rd degree burns caused by a grill catching fire for an unknown reason.
Sean’s father decided to stay at the hospital that night and thought it best to send Sean home with his big brother Thomas and little sister Maria. As Sean walked into the house he caught glance of the family photograph in which he noticed the change to his mother’s face, and found that Maria was not in the picture.
He ran upstairs to her bedroom only to find that she was nowhere to be seen. Alarmed by these strange events Sean called the police. Sean informed them that his sister had been kidnapped and that someone was in his house, possibly vandalising his family’s belongings. The phone immediately went dead, and as Sean went to put the phone down he caught a glimpse of an animal in the corner of his eye. He rushed out of the safety of his room to go and find the beast, but what he found was far worse.
The mangled bodies of his family lie in the corridor in front of his room, their faces frozen in a state that almost makes him vomit. And then it struck him. All the photographs had been removed from the walls, except for one which was a picture of Sean, with his face scribbled out.
The next day his two best friends went to visit him, because he was not answering his phone and was not at school all week. As they arrived, they noticed that the door had been left open. So they let themselves in, and were never seen again.
Photoslash,
Kinda fell flat at the end, Mild shock value + Emotionless ending = Average pasta.
BUT WHO WAS PHONE?
BUT WHO WAS PHOTO
Me.
lol wut
it was me!… i wnat to play….
you can tell exactly what will happen in the rest of the story as soon as you read the bit about the mom. Not very entertaining.
Holy shit someone fix the grammar the syntax the tenses…everything
I liked this one, sent nice shivers down my back. I don’t get how the parents transported home from the hospital.
Holy shit that was creepy
…Wat
The ending on this one seems like kind of a cop-out.
Reminds me of something and I can’t put my finger on it. Good pasta says I. :]
Kind of an old one that I’ve seen floating around, but okay.
The story could’ve been made -much- creepier if the author had put in some real effort.
3.5/10
BUT WHO WAS PHOTO?
It started with a lot of potential, in built up very well toward the end, but the finale itself was sort of spoiled.
I wish the animal was brought to light, or what caused the death of his siblings.
It’s implied that it’s murder, or some psychopath, or maybe ghosts… but the animal throws things off by being unable to plot out schemes. It’s hard to be afraid of a golden retriever in the corner who was in the room with you when your family died.
Hmm well It was good till the sister went missing cause the story was going too fast..
Besides that it was pretty good.. Cept at the end?
Dont really understand what happened to his friends,
They wouldnt be in any of the ‘family photos’
So yeah :/
Not too bad though..
Haha, I remember reading this somewhere X3
I don’t think this is creepy at all, mostly because it reminds me of all those silly ‘horror’-stories me and my friends used to tell each other when we were kids.
I am still hungry >__> (nice to see a new one in ‘rituals’, though)
Erm…
Would have been good, but the last line, nay, paragraph felt unnecessary. It took away from the rest of the product, if you will.
Another reason to be paranoid of pictures. e_o
Personally, I think this needs some editing before it’s front page material. It shifts from past to present in the second to bottom paragraph.
Other than that, photographs have been done before before, but it’s not bad.
I remember reading this one on /x/ a while ago. I dont really like it that much, it seems so…unfinished-ish. o_o OOOHHH NOOOEEEES HIS FRIENDS WUZ NEVER SEEN AGAIN OH GOD OH NOOO.
A promising start, but the ending didn’t make much sense. Could have been far creepier if the family was wiped out one by one, with the manner of death foretold by the photo, with Sean being the last to go. Then his friends find him under the photo. A big scary beast coming and killing everyone at the end was a bit of an anti-climax and doesn’t really tie in with the photo thing.
Im Oh So Very Photogenic(:
Nice, short and to the point.
This pasta is like the hot chick that sucks in bed. It starts off tantilizing and then kills your creepy-boner. Disappointment.
WTF? So anyone that goes in the house disappears? It went from a burnt face, to grisly murder and now people just disappear?
Hmmm. I’d give it a 2.5 out of 5.
But who was police?
Finally, a halfway competent pasta! Still could be much better though.