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My Sister’s Promise



Estimated reading time — 2 minutes

Television always depicted older siblings to be a guardian, a protector, even a hero to their kin. I wish that was the case with Angie, my sister.

I’ve always been the one to take care of and more importantly listen to my sister. Our mother always assumed she just wasn’t as mentally caught up with her age. It’s why mom took her to get tested, but they proved the opposite, which is what makes me credit what she’s only kept between us as truth.

Being seven years older than I was, she suffered a slight panphobia, a medically unregistered fear of everything, or at least that’s what it resembled. So, I awkwardly played the role of big brother, despite our difference in age.

She often crawled into my bed in the middle of the night trembling and murmuring to herself that she knew something was there, she just couldn’t see it… ,but she said she could hear it. I tried to always reassure her it was the house settling, stretching it’s imaginary legs.

“It’s older than both of us. It’s going to make some noise,” I said warmly.

That repeated excuse always seemed to comfort her no matter how much I overused it.

“It’s just taking a breath. It’s older than us AND mom put together!”

A light faint giggle, then she was fast asleep.

I’ve never been comfortable telling anyone this because I thought it was weird to sleep next to my older sister in the same bed, clinging to me almost pulling my arm from it’s socket. It became routine, but I was just glad I was helping in some way.

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Whatever she heard must’ve really scared her.

She committed suicide two weeks ago today and I’ve never understood why.

Until tonight, when I swear I heard her voice say sobbingly,

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“I’m so sorry… I made myself a promise to always look after you… …to protect you.. …and I broke it…”

My preconceived notions of our relationship were false, she really was my older sister because I’ve heard now what it has to say…

…and I’m slowly starting to understand why she did it.

Credit To: Timothy Benson

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39 thoughts on “My Sister’s Promise”

  1. I think it has the promise to become a great short horror story. But, it would be nice if the “it” in “what it has to say” and what it said was emphasized or went into some detail so there would be more of a horror aspect to it.

  2. It’s a story people. Funny how many readers actually believe this shit happened in real life. Seems to be a reoccurring theme on this site.

  3. Everyone commenting “that doesn’t make sense rar rar rar” the whole idea is that the entity itself, the monster, while it is hinted at everything about it is kept a secret, that makes the whole thing a lot more creepy by leaving it to the imagination.

    This is a technique I’ve used for a creature’s aesthetics IE let the reader imagine what it looks like but don’t give full details, that way, they imagine a creature that they themselves might fear. I’ve never seen it taken as far as to keep the entire creature uncertain, though. I must say, that has worked quite well.

  4. little miss black cat

    I understand and all of us on the creepypasta site are probably very sorry for your sister I know how it feels I am a big sister to two kids a girl and a boy and it would probably kill them to hear that I was dead

  5. For those of you who don’t get it- the boy’s sister seemed to be afraid of the house for no reason, and clung to her brother to feel safe. After she killed herself, the boy realized that his sister was sacrificing herself the whole time to keep the entity away from the boy. Now that she’s dead, he’s experiencing what she experienced, and he realizes that she was actually protecting him this whole time, not the other way around.

  6. What I think he’s saying is that there really is something in the house. The being was always after the sister, but now that she’s gone it’s after him.

  7. took me a second to get the end, but I think he’s saying that even though he felt like the older sibling, she really was the elder because as he grew older he was beginning to experience the same things she did – the fear, hearing the noises. Thus the in in “I’ve now heard what it has to say” is the house or whatever’s in it.
    So yes, after a moment’s thought, I like.

  8. I think it means that the sister was probably pretending to be delinquent to protect her brother (the writer), but other than that i am completely lost :/

  9. The Knight of Arcana

    … All of my feelings were just ripped from my chest and stuffed back in. Two main characters, both the guardian of the other, and you manage to make it very gripping for such a short story. Loved it.

  10. Good pasta but I a bit lost on what the guy means, is his sister the voice now or is he being tormented now because the voice doesn’t have his sister anymore?

  11. Im sorry for what happened to your sister, a big sister will always love, protect her younger brother I have 3 sisters and I know how it works feels

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