Scary Paranormal Stories & Short Horror Microfiction

Creepypasta

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Television always depicted older siblings to be a guardian, a protector, even a hero to their kin. I wish that was the case with Angie, my sister.

I’ve always been the one to take care of and more importantly listen to my sister. Our mother always assumed she just wasn’t as mentally caught up with her age. It’s why mom took her to get tested, but they proved the opposite, which is what makes me credit what she’s only kept between us as truth.

Being seven years older than I was, she suffered a slight panphobia, a medically unregistered fear of everything, or at least that’s what it resembled. So, I awkwardly played the role of big brother, despite our difference in age.

She often crawled into my bed in the middle of the night trembling and murmuring to herself that she knew something was there, she just couldn’t see it… ,but she said she could hear it. I tried to always reassure her it was the house settling, stretching it’s imaginary legs.

“It’s older than both of us. It’s going to make some noise,” I said warmly.

That repeated excuse always seemed to comfort her no matter how much I overused it.

“It’s just taking a breath. It’s older than us AND mom put together!”

A light faint giggle, then she was fast asleep.

I’ve never been comfortable telling anyone this because I thought it was weird to sleep next to my older sister in the same bed, clinging to me almost pulling my arm from it’s socket. It became routine, but I was just glad I was helping in some way.

Whatever she heard must’ve really scared her.

She committed suicide two weeks ago today and I’ve never understood why.

Until tonight, when I swear I heard her voice say sobbingly,

“I’m so sorry… I made myself a promise to always look after you… …to protect you.. …and I broke it…”

My preconceived notions of our relationship were false, she really was my older sister because I’ve heard now what it has to say…

…and I’m slowly starting to understand why she did it.

Credit To: Timothy Benson

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  • Bj Castillo

    Im sorry for what happened to your sister, a big sister will always love, protect her younger brother I have 3 sisters and I know how it works feels

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  • http://www.youtube/cockneypasta cockney pasta

    Within a very short story, you managed to get me invested in the two characters and then realy creep the flip out of me. Hope to read more of your work mate. Nice one.

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  • jamie

    …..what….?

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  • AssHat

    What the hell?

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  • sadie

    what the hell did i just read? that made no sense

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    • Jhe

      Neither does your face.

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      • Red Blood Red Neck

        nice

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  • Alicia

    Nice ending!

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  • Andrew

    That was awesome =D

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  • Alyssa

    What the hell was that!!! Someone explain please.

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  • brittney

    Nice…. n sorry for ur loss

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  • nothing

    this is sad, you know. i feel so sorry for your sister

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  • SJ

    Short pasta, but delicious.

    Keep it up.

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  • http://www.creepypasta.com/hope/ Dirjel

    Cockney is on it. This was really well done, and I tip my hat to you sir.

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  • Desirae

    Good pasta but I a bit lost on what the guy means, is his sister the voice now or is he being tormented now because the voice doesn’t have his sister anymore?

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  • The Knight of Arcana

    … All of my feelings were just ripped from my chest and stuffed back in. Two main characters, both the guardian of the other, and you manage to make it very gripping for such a short story. Loved it.

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  • Dalick

    I thought this was very cool and that i understand how you feel dude noce job

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  • Joel

    Can someone please explain this, I feel stupid that people are saying nice pasta when I don’t get it at all.

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  • CharliChaz

    What……….?

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  • Anonymous

    How old were you anyways when that happened? Was your sister already a full grown woman?

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  • Anonymous

    Your sister is probably a dimension traveler.

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  • Digi

    For a while I thought this was going in an incest direction…Thank god it didn’t lol.

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  • Anonymous

    i dont get it at all what did it say

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  • Lemmilam

    I think it means that the sister was probably pretending to be delinquent to protect her brother (the writer), but other than that i am completely lost :/

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  • k_e

    took me a second to get the end, but I think he’s saying that even though he felt like the older sibling, she really was the elder because as he grew older he was beginning to experience the same things she did – the fear, hearing the noises. Thus the in in “I’ve now heard what it has to say” is the house or whatever’s in it.
    So yes, after a moment’s thought, I like.

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  • Anonymous

    What I think he’s saying is that there really is something in the house. The being was always after the sister, but now that she’s gone it’s after him.

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  • Anonymous

    For those of you who don’t get it- the boy’s sister seemed to be afraid of the house for no reason, and clung to her brother to feel safe. After she killed herself, the boy realized that his sister was sacrificing herself the whole time to keep the entity away from the boy. Now that she’s dead, he’s experiencing what she experienced, and he realizes that she was actually protecting him this whole time, not the other way around.

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    • Rage_Quitter

      … I think this is probly the writer xD

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