• Pycnic

    Oh god how I loved that, the ending confused me just a little though. So did the little girl, who’s now older, hear voices… or was this from the mothers perspective the whole time? Besides that it was excellent. XD

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  • Freaky Fred

    BUT WHO WAS TIME TRAVELLING??!?

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    • Amaryllis

      Your ass.

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  • Frosty

    Clever. Well done

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  • StoneH

    Perfect.

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  • thatgirl

    What?!

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  • WhatisthisWinter

    HOLY CRAP THAT WAS GOOD! My gosh, that was a good ending… Bricks were shat, and I gave you 10 out of 10 stars. Damned good pasta.

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  • The Reader

    I did NOT see that coming. Nice job.

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  • Geb

    I am so thoroughly confused

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    • Stitches

      The little girl is the narrator, and she hears voices of some “ghost” girl, and they torment her, we are to understand that the “ghost” says “its only me” to the little girl, but when she runs to her mothers room again, and repeats the phrase, we find out the mother had the same experiances and was tormented by the “ghost” but it may have been passed to her daughter. Hope that clears things up
      Ps. I diddnt write it, thats just my understanding.

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  • Anon

    wat

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  • Lowat?

    I love the connection between mother and daughter, and the fact that it made the whole thing so much creepier. Very well executed in my opinion 9/10.

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    • Lolwat?

      Wrote ma name wrong .-.

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  • pheonix

    that gave me chills

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  • http://www.youtube/cockneypasta cockney pasta

    10/10. nice one mate

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  • Anonymous

    Seems to me an abundance of people not understanding this story means you should probably write more clearly next time.

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    • PanthEd

      It’s not difficult to comprehend, it’s well written. It’s not the author’s fault that some people need everything spelled out for them.

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      • Anonymous

        rude

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  • “It’s only me”

    Very nice pasta love how it ends as well

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  • That Sarcastic Cow

    I don’t get that ending.
    Like, what.
    Someone elaborate.

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  • Lab

    That ending was really well done. It was nice to read this after reading stories that you knew what was going to happen after the 1st sentence. Now to find a story with a creature that doesn’t have “eyes like the abyss”

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  • Ismael Zuniga

    Ohhhhhh I think I get it. The woman who woke up at the end was actually the little girl, but older right? The title is “My haunting past” and she was actually just having a dream about her past. Right? I don’t even know if I made sense.

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  • WriterWolf

    I don’t really get it tbh.

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    • Miss.Blake

      it meant that the woman was real. The one who whispers in the boys ear. The mother used to hear her too. But she left her alone and tormented the kid. When the kid came to the mother to feel safe and whispered to her what the creature lady whispered to him “It’s only me,” the mother reacted thinking that the woman she was convinced was in her head was back

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      • Ziaheart

        “It was difficult for a GIRL as young as me to deal with this.”

        Pretty sure the narrator isn’t a boy.

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  • TheRadHatter

    Wait……..what?? Lol
    Great pasta!!

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  • Kenzie

    Ahh, schizophrenia… it is a nuisance, isn’t it?

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  • ekaj9000

    To be honest, it made no sense…You went full Shyamalan, never go full Shyamalan. Better luck next time.

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  • Anonymous

    Lol @ “full Shyamalan.” That’s the perfect way to describe it.

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  • alfo

    I saw this as being haunted by a loving kid you will have in the future. who is also being haunted… if that makes sense

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  • Thiesli Marc

    Crap, that was soo good. :O
    I want more like this. ;)

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  • ThatGirlNamedSuzy

    IT’S LIKE A STORY WITHIN A STORY ^o^
    10/10 <3

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