Scary Paranormal Stories & Short Horror Microfiction

Creepypasta

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As I write, my life is dwindling to nothing, but I need to share what I know. You ever read those stupid ritual pastas? The ones where if you light a candle and sacrifice a toddler at 12:02am then your soul will be torn away but you’ll live forever? This is kind of like that, but less pathetic – less unreal.

It was midnight, and I’d stumbled in after a drunken night on the town. The stairs had presented a challenge, and by the time I’d desperately reached my bathroom, I was throwing up all over the place. Groggy and made tearful by my own state, I lifted my head, examining myself in the mirror and wiping away flecks of vomit. The light was off, but I could still see; had I not been so drunk, maybe that would’ve told me that something was wrong? I don’t think it matters, in any case. I think I’d still be dying even if I had run. There, in the mirror, was my shower. I’m dirt poor (only just graduated from university), so it was a filthy cubicle rather than a bath. And I noticed this mat – this thick black streak laying over the plug hole. I crept closer, still drunk, and pulled it.

A handful of dark brown hair came away in my hand, strewn with reddish brown blood. From the plughole, an eye stared up at me.

I fled, drunkenness forgotten, and hid in my bed, covers over my face and weeping bitter tears, as silent as I could manage. I heard something moving in the corridor and began to pray, but no god heard. My door creaked open, and I heard something crawl in, limbs clicking like some horrible insect. It grunted and snuffled to itself, and occasionally, just occasionally, it laughed in a high, mad, cold voice I can only compare to a hyena. I almost went mad that night, just waiting for it to get me – for it to rip me limb from limb and end it all. But, apparently, it likes to play with its food.

After I finally rose the next day, there was no trace that anything had been there on the carpet. I put it down to drunken hallucinations and moved on. But I kept seeing that eye – that hair. Hearing the laughter, the awful snuffling noise, like something devouring rotten meat. A week later, I broke out into painful sores – like measles, or chickenpox.

Now I’m bedridden. My eyes are sunken, my hair is falling out, and my skin is a mass of blotched and broken sores. But that’s not the worst thing. I can hear it getting closer, limbs clicking, laughing as it comes to get me. And it keeps… It keeps whispering quietly to itself, maybe to me. Sometimes I can hear what it says; sometimes just barely audibly, sometimes as though it’s right next to me. It’s advice.

That’s why I’m writing this. It keeps telling me that if someone else reads this, if someone else knows what has happened, it’ll leave me alone and find them. Find you.

I’m sorry.


Credited to bez00mny.

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  • person

    It’s like a second-rate La Muerta Blanca (WITNESS).

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  • Someone

    FFFFFFFUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU

    … great. Now I’ll be paranoid as Hell the next time I’m in my bathroom. I tip my hat at you, bez00mny.
    But for some reason, this reminded me of ‘Lullaby’ by The Cure?
    Still, delicious pasta.

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  • JVP

    I love the description of the thing in the bathroom… It gives me the chills… Nice job! 5 stars.

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  • Dirjel

    Awesome ending.

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  • Tezmara

    Oooo, I like this pasta.
    It’s somewhat creative but it still gives me the chills

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  • caitlin

    holy shit im not going to be able to sleep now

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  • LINDARRAGNAR

    Not creepy, but still good
    !

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  • http://dawdlblog.blogspot.com greed

    Hey, I like this. Not paranoia-inducing but still pretty ooky. But it reminds me of La Muerta Blanca.

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  • Rais

    Im not going to be able to sleep tonight. Thanks a lot.

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  • WHARRGARBL

    Nicely done.

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  • The Person Formerly known as ‘Noneya’

    Win.

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  • fhgas drtaert

    DUDE
    NO
    AHHHH
    REWIND REWIND REWIND
    PLEASE GOD IF YOU’RE OUT THERE DON’T LET IT GET ME
    ;-;
    i’m not gonna be able to sleep.
    at all.

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  • Allie

    Auw, shit. Thanks a lot. Now I won’t be able to get to sleep tonight. =[

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  • Mr. Psuedonym

    Ehh it coulda been better but it was still ok.

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  • ScaryLarry

    THEN WHO WAS TALKING HYENA SPIDER?

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  • Carolina

    Ah, Crap.

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  • Anonymous

    Oh no! Will it fly into my kitchen and make a mess of my pots and pans!?

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  • VDV

    Hold on. I gotta go take a shower.

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  • Viex

    this shit will make me more paranoid.
    fuck.

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  • Shuriken

    That definitely makes YOU a TOTAL DEUCHEBAG!!!

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  • pastalover

    the creature’s description and sounds are significantly creepy, grudge inspired, but somehow the ending doesn’t creep me out. Good writing, though.

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  • Spunk

    It was genuinely creepy with the way everything was described and the whole atmosphere was dangerous and spooky. Now I’m a little more paranoid about cleaning the hair out of my drain…X)

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  • Midnightgirl

    oh that was my dog…
    i like this pasta…just pass it on to another person, how nice. The guy probably got eaten anyway so i do’nt think it makes much difference.

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  • Repoman

    Cool pasta! It was well-written and definitely creepy! I sort of said to myself at the end “oh.. another one where the reader is involved in the story by having read it” but it was still VERY good!

    One thing that made me laugh though – if you saw a bunch of bloody hair and an eyeball staring up at you from your bathtub you wouldn’t just run under your covers and hang out all night. You would run OUTSIDE and maybe call the police.

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  • Yep

    Haven’t read a good one like this in a long time. When i first saw it making fun of other pastas, I thought, “hey you better perform”. While the concept was not new, it was a LOT better than that La whatever blanka. Shorter, and more to the point. You keep wondering what’s going to happen to the author and suddenly he/she curveballs the reader by offloading the nightmare to you.

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    • johnny

      Yay I’m tucked lol

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