• Anonymous

    And my light is…on. Fantastic story, nice one mate.

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  • Freaky Fred

    This was really cool until the dogs got the ability to phase in and out, then it became TOO implausible. The story about the insane bulletproof zombie test dogs in the end was great, but you took it a little too far for me to accept it. Better would be if they were released by some crazy researcher or something and started terrorizing the populace as bulletproof demon dogs. And they had to break through your door instead of just teleporting.

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  • Anonymous

    One of the best stories I’ve read on here. Love the amount of research and ethological appeal this has. 10 stars for me.

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  • https://www.facebook.com/imwatchingyouasyoureadthis?fref=ts SnoringFrog

    Amazing story, except for near the end, when he seems to imply that he is stuck in his house and only safe as long as he has power.

    Couldn’t he just leave during the day? Run away in hopes of the dogs giving up on him or losing him (for a while) because they can’t follow in the daytime?

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  • Dauntless

    This is the most detailed pasta I’ve read or heard to date. This by far surpasses any major ones like BEN drowned or of mainstream knowledge. Incredible. Keep up the good work, and write another one soon!

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  • ILoveGir

    I didn’t need to sleep tonight x/

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  • MuffunZ

    Seriously good! Loved everything about it, and the level of detail is amazing. Government experiments gone wrong are a favorite of mine.

    @Freaky Fred – It made pretty good sense given the events and context; he even directly explained it. Moving in between life and death so many times turned the dogs into creatures of both.

    @SnoringFrog – Since they can also move freely on the other side of the veil of death, I’d assume they can follow him from that side and then just switch sides when it’s safe for them.

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    • Freaky Fred

      It’s explained within the story, yes, but that does not make it more plausible. I just prefer heavily scientific pastas like this–this is so well thought-out and well-detailed that it IS scientific enough to be (maybe) real– to stay within realms of believable science.
      When it left that for the “creature of life and death” stuff, it lost something for me, because I could no longer buy it.

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      • Wolfen

        I totally respect and appreciate your opinion. Everyone has their own tastes and I can completely understand why you feel how you do. So thank you for sharing that.

        Maybe I’ll work on something from that perspective the next time I write. I do tend to agree that the more believable it is, the more powerful it can potentially be.

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    • Wolfen

      Pretty much those things, MuffunZ.

      I wrote it 3 years ago when the website was young and after my Julia Legare pasta went over well, even though it was terribly written. At the time it was ‘too long,’ so it was sitting in a draft file for an eternity before I decided to re-submit it.

      I like fantasy to tempered by reality, hence I tried to balance out the fantastical with factual.

      Background info: It was inspired by things I love and things that interest me. Military tech, Dogs, H.P. Lovecraft, The Hounds of Tindalos (very loosely), the Experiments in the Revival of Living Organisms video and my fascination with ghost dogs/black shuck/barghests and shadow people.

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      • Anonymous

        I think I understand where FreakyFred is coming from. You went in to a lot of detail with the creation of the dogs and putting the whole bulletproof part together, then gave them the ability to appear and disappear at will, making the bulletproof kinda redundant.

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        • Wolfen

          It isn’t directly said, but they can only come from darkened roughly right-angled corners, plus it wasn’t as if they were designed with that future in mind.

          It was pretty much the only feasible reason I could come up with for them repeating the real life experiment on the dogs anyhow. The dogs were supposed to be a stepping stone to doing this to humans.

          Maybe it would be interesting to follow this up with a story about just such a scenario. The government isn’t known for always learning from its mistakes. Bulletproof shadowmen, though… I just dunno.

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  • Coolz

    Really good story and ya who needs sleep?

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  • Coolz

    I think I might go weewee like when micheal Jackson went heehee shamona

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  • Ziaheart

    I liked the governmental part, but the personal account part was a bit slow for me.

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    • Wolfen

      Yeaaah. I actually wrote that before anything else as a kind of outline.

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  • Arancaytar

    Like a black smoke it poured through one of the darkened corners of my room

    Ooh, a bit Hounds of Tindalos; loved that story. :D

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  • Barry

    Very good job. I always like it when a little reality gets thrown in the mix to throw the reader off. Everyone googled the doctors name, and the name of the project. Everyone came up with interesting results. You made the story sound plausible. As far as the ability of the animals to “appear” without entering the homes; that’s a little like catching spongebob without a helmet on dry land and calling it mistake, while never questioning the reality of a talking sponge. Good job, and I look forward to reading more from you.

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  • FertheredSerpent

    I actually feel kinda sorry for the poor wolf-dogs ):

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    • Anonymous

      i’ve expirenced the same

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  • Cows

    Ah screw you man. As soon as I read “South Carolina” I started getting paranoid. It was great though, 8/10

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  • CANDLEJACK

    OH NO! Teleporting immortal dogs with shadow tendrils?! *Cough SLENDERDOGS cough cough*

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  • jklomu

    Why not do the same things to humans to combat the keboros? The keboros would be werewolves and the newer us would be vampiric beings… Ku ku ku… I’ve already tasted blood.

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  • ChiliSauce

    Fascinating…
    A government failed experiment, or maybe rather a too successful experiment.
    Failed to create bulletproof dogs but yet successful in making shadow dogs.
    About the behaviour of the dogs itself is probably explainable as even though science can bring back life to the dead body, but the revival of the dead brain remains as to now a mystery, because as we know the brain is strongly related to the so called “soul”.
    The medical world call it brain dead, the death of the brain, even though the body still breathes and have a heart beat (through life support), but yet the person is considered to be legaly dead.
    If science do can bring a dead organism back to life, would it also ressurect its “soul”?
    If it can ressurect the “soul”, will it remain the same “soul” or would it be another “soul”?
    Would it retain the same ammount of “soul” or will it have lesser “soul”?

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  • DUde

    Why a Makarov rip-off? Why not a Colt .45 or a USP?

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  • Wolfen

    DUde:
    Why a Makarov rip-off? Why not a Colt .45 or a USP?

    Because it’s a freaking short AK round that hits like a freight train.

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  • ThatGuy

    Reminds me of the COD World at War zombie dogs.

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  • Anonymous

    FertheredSerpent:
    I actually feel kinda sorry for the poor wolf-dogs ):

    So do I…

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